AvNeil FF: Afeemi Hai Tera Mera Pyaar(Part 18,Pg 46//Oct 17) - Page 6

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Posted: 8 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: AgnesFan

I never realized you updated so soon.

train part was my favorite . mere sath kisi ki zindgi Kush nahi hoti💔 mere ateet ka saya hota hai
bebe is so forward thinking and she accepted her 👏 I always loved her character . I wish she does the same in show
Prakash is gonna be the best FIL . his bonding with Avni is so special n beautiful . I loved this line betiyan Gale lagti hai . he said it on screen right😳
Avni ko upar tak bahon mei 😳 n he started hi usual nautaunki followed by Tom n Jerry fight .
I thought Avni would mention that why she called him bewkoof.
ek pagal ko hi doosra pagal samaj ata hai . tillu n his dialogues🤪

Thank you so much...
I am glad you liked the scenes and the dialogues..
I will update soon once I get new ideas..
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Posted: 8 years ago
#52
Hello guys,
Here's another chapter of the story and it is short.
Please bear with it.. I am also lil busy and am not getting new ideas..
Bas new ideas aane do fir lamba sa update karoongi..
Enjoy the chapter..

Part 5

AvNeil were lost in each others chocolate brown orbs.. They didn't realise when they came so close to each other. Avni's warm breath fanned on Neil's lips.. Their heart were racing with speed more than Formula F1 car...

Avni was the first one to realise their compromising position.. She extended her hand and brought a pillow b/w them and pushed it on Neil's face and ran from there..
She was no less in teasing Neil..
Neil fell backward on the bed with silly smile on his face.
Avni went to sleep on the sofa..

Neil: Avni tum bed pe so jao, main sofey pe so jaunga.

Avni: Nai Neil, Humne decide kiya tha ki exchange krte rahenge.. But tm humesha sofa pe so jate ho. Now it's my turn.

Neil: Hum dono bed share kr sakte h. I don't have any problem.

Avni: Nai rehne do.. Main sofa pe so jaungi.

Neil: Mana ki main handsome hoon, dashing hoon.. Lekin aaj pata chal gya mere charm k karan meri wifey se control nai hota. Isliye wo bed pe mere saath sone se mana kr rhi h.

Avni: Aisa kuchh nai h.. Tum itne bhi handsome nai ho ki main control na kar paoon..

Neil: Thik hai toh dekh lete h.. Hum yahan bed k beech mein partition krenge and next day jo jiski side aaega, uss a/c proof ho jaega ki kisne control khoya...

Avni: Neil! Tm sahi mein paagal ho..

Neil(to himself): Haan tumhare liye..
And this is how Our hero finally confessed to himself that he is falling hard for his wifey..

Avni: Kuchh kaha tumne??

Neil: Haan kaha na.. Sone k liye..

Avni: Main nai so rhi bed pe..

Neil: Ok, that means you don't have self-control and you loose...

Avni: Aisa bilkul bhi nai h.

Neil: Maine bhi toh wahi kaha tumme control nai h..

Avni: Ok, I will sleep on bed and will prove you wrong..

Both made a pillow line in the middle of the bed.

Neil: Good Night wifey.. And have self-control. Kahin raat ko main apna izzat na kho doon..

Avni: Neil! Shut up and so jao.. Bahot bakwas krte ho tm. Good Night..

Both smiled at each other's antiques. And finally slept, most probably thinking about each other.

In the morning :

The scene was something like this.

Both of them have came in the middle crushing the pillow in such a way that the pillows were over them. No one has crossed the line but both of them were literally upon each other. Neil's leg were on Avni's leg and one hand was on her waist and the other hand was Avni's pillow.. While Avni's one hand was on his neck and other one was holding Neil's t-shirt tightly..

They were sound sleeping and soft snores were heard.

Bebe was unaware of all this and without even knocking marched into their room shouting "Tillu! Bahu!!"
But as she entered and saw the scene infront of her eyes she immediately turned around.

Bebe(to herself): Hey bhagwan! Main toh bhool hi gyi thi ki ye dono so rhe honge. Or upar se inn dono ko kaun samjahye ki room lock kr k sona chahiye..
AvNeil were still sound asleep.

Bebe: Tillu puttar uth ja..Avni Bahu utho.. She said while facing the gate.

Both of them stired in sleep and realised heavy weight upon each other. Neil slowly opened his eyes and saw Avni's beautiful shining face. She was still asleep.
Neil took his time to admire his wife unaware of Bebe's presence.

Neil: Good Morning Wifey!

Avni: Good Morning.. Avni said with closed eyes.

Neil smiled upon this.

Avni: Neil utho na.. Bebe bula rhi h.. Jaa k dekho na kya hua h..

Neil: Bebe ainvy awaaz de rhi hongi.. Rehne do unhe..

Bebe heard this and replied immediately: Haan ab biwi aa gyi h toh Bebe ko rehne hi de tu.

As both of them heard Bebe's voice so clearly, they jerked from sleep and sat on the bed.
They saw Bebe's back and realised how Bebe has seen both of them. And then only they realised in which position they were sleeping.. Both were embarrassed like hell.

Bebe: Kya main ab mud jaoon? Tm logo ka romance ho gya?

Neil: Haan Bebe.. Romance ho gya..

This further embarrassed Avni..
She was all red.. And Neil was just enjoying her condition..

Bebe: Tillu puttar, darawaza band kr k sona chahiye.. Ab tu bachha nai rha.. Ab toh tere bachhe hone k umar ho gyi h.. Or tm dono ko dekh k lagta h wo khush khabri bhi hume jald hi mil jaegi..

Now both Neil and Avni were red as tomato...

To be continued...



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Posted: 8 years ago
#53
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Yayy I am first
Such a cute update it was
Neil teasing Avni and asking her to sleep with him...😳
The way he described him handsome( which he actually is)😆
And AvNeil on one bed and upon each other... Too good
And Bebe toh hai star
Update soon...
Edited by Deepti_98 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#54
Hahahahah nice one...hope you us more cute romance
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Posted: 8 years ago
#55
Oh Shailja.. AvNeil se zyada toh I am blushing ☺️😆
Sacchi mein!
Cutest update.. their nok-jhok and challenge was awesome. Could imagine everything.
Now I want to know what they think about their positions lol.
And the way they both were unaware of Bebe's presence and Neil said to ignore her I could imagine all their faces. 🤣
Update soon 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#56
Haye bechara Tillu sab utha dete Hai
Loved their cute nok jhok
I can imagine Bebe after listening what Neil said ki aysehi rahi hongi
Lovely update dear
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Posted: 8 years ago
#57

Originally posted by: Deepti_98

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Yayy I am first
Such a cute update it was
Neil teasing Avni and asking her to sleep with him...😳
The way he described him handsome( which he actually is)😆
And AvNeil on one bed and upon each other... Too good
And Bebe toh hai star
Update soon...

Thanx yaar...
Bebe is really a star..
She is cupid for AvNeil..
And yup Neil is love yaar.. Uske kya hi kehne..
Will update soon...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#58

Originally posted by: shikhsk

Hahahahah nice one...hope you us more cute romance

Thanx...
And ab toh romance hi romance h jab tak romance ka declaration nai ho jata..

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Posted: 8 years ago
#59

Originally posted by: Electro.Cutie

Oh Shailja.. AvNeil se zyada toh I am blushing ☺️😆

Sacchi mein!
Cutest update.. their nok-jhok and challenge was awesome. Could imagine everything.
Now I want to know what they think about their positions lol.
And the way they both were unaware of Bebe's presence and Neil said to ignore her I could imagine all their faces. 🤣
Update soon 😳

Thank you so much...
Unke nok jhok mein hi toh main romance chhupa h..
And Bebe toh awesome h.. She will only make them realise about their love..
Will update soon..


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Posted: 8 years ago
#60

Originally posted by: Zenab78

Haye bechara Tillu sab utha dete Hai
Loved their cute nok jhok
I can imagine Bebe after listening what Neil said ki aysehi rahi hongi
Lovely update dear

Bechara Tillu... Hahahaha..
And Bebe k facial expressions toh show mein bhi mast hote h..
Thank you so much..

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