AvNeil FF: Afeemi Hai Tera Mera Pyaar(Part 18,Pg 46//Oct 17) - Page 3

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Amirashah

Hey read both the parts together loved it.

Nice story aww Neil is so adorable the way he said mein Bebe ke saamne kis ko tang karu gaa was just so cute and adorable.
PLEASE iss Shweta aur rhea ki koi maar daalo yaar.
Please continue soon

Thanks for reading and liking the story.
Shweta or Rhea ko tadpaenge yaar. Jab AvNeil ka bond strong ho jaega tab.
And will update soon..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Mitron!!!!😆
Khush ho jao sab update aa gya...
Thank you very much to all the readers( even silent readers)...
I think I will convert this three shots into four shots coz AvNeil ka romance pending h. And that is a must.
So not in this update but in next update I will definitely write a romantic scene.
Ab ye sun k yahan se hi mat gaayab ho jana sab. Do read this chapter.

Part 3


Avni and Neil were looking at each other, as exactly from where to start.

But as we all know Shweta just can't keep her mouth shut and has to open it to spit useless things.

Shweta: Kya hua? Silents q ho? Haan haan ab speaks bhi kya kregi afterall apni maa k types hi daughter bhi hogi. Achhe ghar k ladko ko traps krne ki to habits hi h. Characterless..

Avni: Bas Aunty! Aaj tak main apni mumma k against bas isliye sunte aayi qki aap badi hain or meri mumma ne humesha mujhe bado ki respect krna sikhaya h.. But ab or nai..

Shweta: Toh batao na Bebe ko ki who are you? Apna real name batao..
Avni: Bebe mera naam Ananya nai hai.. Main Avni Ayesha hoon. Ashish Mehta ki... (She was not able to say)

Shweta: Ashish Mehta ki Nazayaj aulad.. Dayawanti Mehta ki Nazayaj Granddaughter..

Avni closed her eyes tightly as she heard this line and tears were streaming down.

Bebe got the shock of her life. She wasn't able to form even a single word. She wasn't even able to think properly. So how can she comment on the whole situation. She has seen a lot of things in her life and she can't just take decision without thinking and analysing.

Bebe: Neil mujhe ghar le chal. Or iss ladki ko bhi saath la, Ananya - Avni jo bhi naam h iska.

Avni shattered hearing this from Bebe. She thought atleast Bebe will accept her but she is also behaving weird.

Shweta: Lekin Bebe, iss ladki ko ghar le chalne ki kya needs h. Ab toh iski truths saamne aa gyi h na..

Bebe: Oye! Tu chup kr. Khabardar jo ek vari or muh khola tune. Jaisa maine kaha h waisa hi hoga. Ab chalo sab yahan se.

All this time Neil and Prakash were standing silently by the side. They let Bebe decide about the whole situation because they knew that Bebe will never take the wrong decision.

Neil called Amol and they all went to Khanna house.
Bebe silently sat on the sofa and called Ananya near her.

Bebe: Ananya bahu ithhe aa..

Everyone was confused at Bebe's behaviour. Few minutes ago she acted rudely with Avni and now she is acting so calmly.

Avni went and sat on her knees infront of Bebe. Taking Bebe's hand in hers she started,

Avni: Bebe, Avni toh 15 saal pehle hi mar chuki h. Avni usi din mar gyi thi jis din Dayawanti Mehta ne Ayesha Haider ki jaan li, jis din Dayawanti Mehta ne 12 saal ki Avni se uska chhota bhai chheena, jis din Dayawanti Mehta ne use yahan (pointing towards her heart which was not on left side) goli maari thi. Wo chhoti si bachhi usi din mar gyi thi Bebe.

Bebe was listening to her intently. She didn't realise when tears started to flow while hearing such painful story of a child. How could a grandmother do such evil things to her own blood.

Prakash was too shocked. He respected Dayawanti Mehta and had seen her as his ideal. But now he felt disguted about her.

And Neil, he was just standing by the side and was breaking from inside with each confession of Avni. She has to remember all those moments once again just for his family. He has promised Avni that he will never let her remember all those nightmares but here she is remembering it all over again.

Neil(thought): Ye aakhiri baar h jab tum apna past yaad kr rhi ho Avni. Main aaj khud se ye promise krta hoon ki aaj k baad main aisi situation hi nai aane dunga ki tumhe wo sab phir se yaad krna pade. I promise Avni, I promise.

Amol was now able to connect more with Avni's pain as she described those nightmares. The respect for his sister was increasing more by the passing seconds. He knew that his sister is strong but now he was confirmed.

And Shweta, that women was still not feeling anything for Avni. The venom inside her heart (if she had one) was so strong that it can't be removed so easily.

Avni: Meri Maa bhale hi mere saath nai thi par mere paas Neela maa thi. Unhone mujhe kabhi ye ehsaas nai hone diya ki main unki apni beti nai hoon. Unhone mujhe humesha bado ki respect krna sikhaya and humesha dusron k dukh ko samjhna sikhaya.
Main sirf or sirf Dayawanti Mehta se badla lena chahti thi. Mere zindagi ka ek hi maksad tha. Lekin Neil ne mujhe zindagi k or mayne bataye. Usne mujhe iss family mein jagah di, ye jante hue ki main kaun hoon. Uske karan mujhe Papa ka pyaar mila jiske liye main aaj tak tadapti thi. Itni achhi Dadi mili, jinhone mera har pal saath diya. Mujhe ek aisa parivar mila jiski mujhe humesha se khwahish thi.

Avni said the last line and looked at Neil with thankful eyes.

Bebe: Avni beta!
As Avni heard this from Bebe's mouth she turned towards her fastly. She was too happy to hear her name from Bebe.

Bebe: Avni, Main ye nai kahungi ki main tere se khush hoon. Main tumse or Tillu dono se naaraz hoon. Tum dono ne itti vadi baat hum sabse chhupayi. Lekin main tumhari duvidha samjh sakti hoon. Mujhe tere ateet se koi dikkat nai. Tere ateet k karan hi tu aaj itni himmati h. Tujhse soni ladki maine aaj tak nai dekhi. Mere Tillu k liye tujhse achhi ladki mujhe diya leke khojne pe bhi nai milti.

Neil was just stupidly smiling at Bebe's comment.
And Avni profusely blushed.
Prakash and Amol were also happy that Bebe accepted Avni
And we all know Shweta. She can't be happy with anything. She was still pissed with Avni and now more pissed because Bebe accepted her after knowing her truth.

Shweta: Lekin Bebe...
Bebe: Bas... Ab tu Avni bahu k khilaaf kuchh nai bolegi.. Or chal maafi maang iss bachhi se..

Shweta: Main koi maafi waafi nai maangne wali iss ladki se..
Bebe: Shweta!! (Bebe spoke a little loudly and rudely)
Shweta immediately said sorry to Avni.

Avni: Aunty iski koi zaroorat nai h.. Main bas aapse ye kehna chahti hoon ki meri mumma k baare mein aap jaisa sochti h wo aisi bilkul bhi nai h. Unki bas itni si galti thi ki unhone Ashish Mehta se pyaar kiya. Or Ashish Mehta meri mumma k liye apni Maa k saamne stand bhi nai le paye. Par unki bhi koi galti nai thi. Dayawanti Mehta aisi aurat h jisne sirf do pyaar krne waalo ko alag hi nai kiya balki usne apne bete ko hi maar daala..
Maine bas ye shaadi aapko or aapki family ko Dayawanti Mehta se bachane k liye ki thi. Or main thankful hoon ki mujhe iss shadi se itni achhi Family mili..

Shweta was a lil bit shocked by Avni's confession but still not satisfied. She needed time to trust Avni. As she was manipulated by Rhea. She just smiled at Avni (her usual fake smile).

Avni then went to Prakash.
Avni: Papa, I m sorry. Maine aap sab se itni badi baat chhupayi.. Apne humesha mera saath diya or maine aapko adhere mein rakha.. Mujhe maaf kr dijiye..
Prakash: Are Beta iski koi jaroorat nai h. Main tumhari majboori samjh sakta hoon. Or main bhagwan ka lakh lakh shukriya ada krta hoon ki mujhe tujh jaisi bahu mili. Or tu meri bahu nai beti h. So betiyan papa k gale lgti h.. Ithhe aa tu..

Prakash hugged Avni. Avni was so overwhelmed and happy, she finally found a father in Prakash which she never got.
Prakash: Ab tum jaao or araam kro. Thak gyi hogi tum. Chalo bhai sab apne kamre vich chalo or araam kr lo...

Avni looked towards Neil and then moved to the staircase. Neil noticed Avni going towards their room. He immediately followed Avni.
Both were ascending the stairs.

Neil: Avni! Avni! Suno na.. I m sorry yaar. I m really sorry ki maine uss time tmhara support nai kiya or tumhari baat nai suni.
Avni: It's OK Neil.
Neil: Really!! You are not angry with me?
Avni didn't say anything. She was just ascending the stairs and was lost somewhere else.
She didn't noticed and skipped a step, resulting in stumbling and was just about to fall.
But our SuperCop Tillu kabhi aisa hone de sakta h bhala?
He immediately caught Avni and carried her in his arms.

Avni: Neil, I m ok. I can walk. Let me down.
Neil: Nai utarunga neeche. Pehle ye batao ki tmhare iss dimaag mein aakhir chal kya raha h?
Neil was in full mood to tease his wifey and to make her laugh after lot of melodrama.
They reached their room. Avni was still in Neil's arm and again lost in her thought.
Neil: Wifey, batao na kya hua h? I am sorry na. Aaj k baad kabhi tumhara call nai cut karunga. Always tumhari baat sununga pehle. Or agar koi bhi misunderstanding hui toh sabse pehle tumse baat kr k use solve karunga. Ab toh bata do kya hua?

Avni: Neil I m fine. Main bas thoda thak gyi hoon. Mujhe neeche utaro.

Neil: Nai pehle batao kya hua. Or waise bhi tumhe kaun sa chalna h. Tired toh main ho rha hoon tumhe uthaye rakhne se. Tum bahot moti ho gyi ho yaar. Dieting shieting kiya kro. Deepika ko nai dekha? Kitni slim and sexy h. Kuchh sikha kro usse.
This was it.
Neil knew that he has just started a war and now he will not be forgiven.

To be continued...




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Posted: 8 years ago
#23
Haaye Shailu.. Kitna bolti ho tum..
But i just love you my chatterbox...
You handled Bebe's emotion, actions and reactions so well..
Upar se tumhara super different style of narration..
Bebe is very tactful and sensible..
Koi Shweta ko bhi thodi si akal de do...
If Tillu is goals as a husband then surely Prakash ji is goals as a dad and as a father in law..
Just loved his whole dialogue.
OMG!! Tillu ne Avni na sirf sambhala... Balki baahon me utha liya.. La la la.. Lala..
Waiting for their love fights...
Update soonish..
Lots of love..
Vihu..
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Posted: 8 years ago
#24

Originally posted by: vu1998

Haaye Shailu.. Kitna bolti ho tum..

But i just love you my chatterbox...
You handled Bebe's emotion, actions and reactions so well..
Upar se tumhara super different style of narration..
Bebe is very tactful and sensible..
Koi Shweta ko bhi thodi si akal de do...
If Tillu is goals as a husband then surely Prakash ji is goals as a dad and as a father in law..
Just loved his whole dialogue.
OMG!! Tillu ne Avni na sirf sambhala... Balki baahon me utha liya.. La la la.. Lala..
Waiting for their love fights...
Update soonish..
Lots of love..
Vihu..


Thank you.. Thank you..
Abhi toh tu apne story pe comment dekh.. Puri Raam katha likhi h maine...
Bas likh dala maine..
Idea nai tha ki achha likha jaega..
Romantic scene k saath justice krne ka koshish krenge..
Will update soon but pehle idea aa jaye..
Love you too..



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Posted: 8 years ago
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Naiceee one...hope the same maturity bebe handles when she comes to know the reality in serial
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Shailja u r writing this story beautifully . Loved it
I loved Bebe here...She is so mature and understanding...I hope bebe takes stand for her onscreen too :)
Prakash ji is the best FIL in the world..
.Shweta *no comments* 😆
Neil picked up her in arms and commented that she is fat...
Yeh war world war 3 se kam nhi hogi...
Waiting for next one
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Superb update
Finally everyone knows Avni's truth and has accepted her the way she is
Neil is trying to manofying his wifey but got struck in mess
Update soon please
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: shikhsk

Naiceee one...hope the same maturity bebe handles when she comes to know the reality in serial

Thanx again.
And we can just hope about it all.. Let's see what will happen in the show. And whatever gonna happen is just amazing..
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Posted: 8 years ago
#29

Originally posted by: pri12

Shailja u r writing this story beautifully . Loved it

I loved Bebe here...She is so mature and understanding...I hope bebe takes stand for her onscreen too :)
Prakash ji is the best FIL in the world..
.Shweta *no comments* 😆
Neil picked up her in arms and commented that she is fat...
Yeh war world war 3 se kam nhi hogi...
Waiting for next one

Thank you so much.
And i love Bebe yaar, she supports Avni every time..
And yup Prakash ji is the best dad and FIL..
These two are my favourite supporting actors in the show..
Will update soon..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Gurveen

Superb update
Finally everyone knows Avni's truth and has accepted her the way she is
Neil is trying to manofying his wifey but got struck in mess
Update soon please

Thank you yaar..
And abhi toh romance baki h..
Wait for it..
I will update soon..

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