AvNeil FF: Afeemi Hai Tera Mera Pyaar(Part 18,Pg 46//Oct 17) - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello peeps...
Thank you each and every person who take out their time to read this story..
I am really overwhelmed to know that people read my story.
Mujhe toh lga tha ki chappal juton ki barsaat hogi comments mein...
Aap logon ka pyaar paa k main prasann ho gyi..😆
Chalo jyada bakwas nai karungi. I will update the next part..


PART 2

Avni was sitting on the bench on platform. Amol came back with the ticket. Avni was lost in her inner turmoil. She was thinking whether she is doing the right thing or wrong. Coz she has promised Bebe to not leave her. And here she is leaving everyone behind.

Amol: Di?? Aap thik ho na? Abhi bhi time h hum wapas ja sakte h.

Avni: Nahi Amol. Maine faisla kar liya h. Main Neil pe bojh nai ban sakti. Tumhe bhi pata h na ki usne humare liye kya kuchh nai kiya. Main nai chahti ki wo mere chalte apni life barbad kre. Wo bahot achha h use meri jaisi tooti hui ladki ki jaroorat nai h. Use ek achhi ladki mil jaegi jo use humesha khush rakhegi.

Amol: Di, aap apne baare mein aisa q soch rhi h. Maine aapse achha insaan nai dekha. Maine aapki aankhon mein Jiju or unke parivar k liye pyaar or care dekha h.

Avni: Nai Amol, meri wajah se hi unke aankhon mein aansoo bhi aaye h. Or Shweta aunty toh mujhe bilkul bhi pasand nai krti. Aree, chhodo inn sab baton ko. Hume train mein baithna bhi h.

Amol just nodded and both moved towards the train.
Avni once again turned back just to see if Neil has come to stop her or not. But unfortunately he was nowhere to be seen.
Avni and Amol boarded Mumbai - Delhi express.. She has decided to move to Delhi for now.

Neil and family reached Railway station. All of them scattered to find Avni. Neil was shouting Avni! Avni!
But she could not hear him.

Neil was breaking from inside as seconds were passing. He was loosing hope. He can't bear to loose Avni. He was searching for her like if he will loose her he will loose his life.

Suddenly he heard the announcement.
"Announcement: Mumbai se Delhi jaane wali Mumbai-delhi Rajdhani Express platform no. 4 se khulne wali h."

DD: Sir, Bhabhi nai mil rahi. Ab bas platform no. 4 or 5 dekhna baki h.

Neil: DD tm platform no. 5 wali train ko check kro main no. 4 ko check krta hoon.
Neil ran towards the platform as fast as possible. He can't imagine Avni going away from him.

Avni felt the jerk as train started moving. She peeped out of the window but again can't find Neil anywhere. She turned her face around and wiped her tears.
Amol was witnessing all these but was helpless.

Neil reached platform 4 and train was just moving slowly. He went inside the train and pulled the chain. Few officers immediately came to him.

Police: Oye Mr., chain q pull kiya tumne? Ruko tumhara chalan katta hoon. Abhi jail mein jake chain pull krna.

Neil was being impatient. He immediately fished out his ID from his pocket and showed them.

Police: Sorry sir. Hume nai pata tha aap h. Batayiye sir hum aapki kaise madad kr sakte h.

Neil: Meri patni shayad iss train mein h. Mujhe usse dhoondhna h. Aap bas use khojne mein meri help kre.
Neil showed them Avni's pic.

Police: Aap chinta mat kijiye sir. Hum Bhabhi ko dhoondh lenge.

Neil just smiled hearing Bhabhi word from them. Now he liked if anyone refer Avni as their Bhabhi..

Everyone started searching Avni. Here Avni was thinking why the train has stopped.

One policeman came to Avni and tapped her on the shoulder.
Avni thought it is Neil and suddenly spoke out," Neil "..
When she turned, she automatically frowned.

Police: Mam! You are under arrest.

Avni: What? I have not done anything.

Police: Mam aap pe chori ka ilzaam lga h.

Avni: Maine kuchh nai churaya. Aap bina kisi proof k mujhe arrest nai kr sakte.
Neil: Kisne kaha ki tumne kuchh nai churaya h?

Avni turned around towards the voice and found Neil standing there with teary eyes.
Neil smiled at the police officer and dismissed him. Amol who was sitting there too got the idea and went to the next compartment.

That compartment was nearly empty. And announcement for late departure of the train has also made.

Avni: Neil!
Neil: Avni!

Neil came forward and embraced Avni in a bone crushing hug. But Avni did not reciprocated the hug this time.
Neil broke the hug and cupped her face.

Neil: I m sorry. I m really sorry. Tumhe Ali k saath dekh k pata nai mujhe kya ho gya tha. But jab mujhe realise hua I regretted that moment. I should have stood up for you. I m really sorry wifey.

Avni: Neil, tumhe sorry bolne ki koi jaroorat nai h. Tumne already meri bahot help kr di h. Mujhe apna stand khud lena chahiye tha. Kab tak main tumhare bharose rahungi. Waise bhi maine tumse promise kiya tha ki Dayawanti Mehta se badla lene k baad main tumhe iss jhoothe rishte se azaad kr dungi. Finally ab wo time aa gya h. Tum jao Neil. Apne liye ek achhi si ladki khojo or uske saath humesha khush raho. Mere saath koi kabhi khush nai reh sakta. Mera ateet humesha wapas aaega mujhe ye ehsaas dilane k liye ki meri zindagi mein Happy Family ki koi jagah nai h.

Neil felt that prick in his heart when he heard again about the fake marriage. And he became sad when he heard that Avni still think that she can't have a happy family. He has promised Neela Maa that he will give Avni that family love which she did not get in her childhood. But he can see it shatter after listening to Avni.

Neil: Avni, tm aisa soch bhi kaise sakti ho. Apne friend ko bina bataye jaa rhi ho. Ek baar bhi mere baare mein nai socha. Ye bhi nai socha ki tm chali jaogi toh main kiske saath pillow fight karunga, Kise Bebe k saamne tang karunga, Kisse apni problem share karunga, and above all Kise Wifey bulaunga? Kabhi socha tumne ye sab? Nahi na..
Mana ki maine galti ki iska ye mtlb nai na ki tm hume chhod k chali jao.
Iss Super Cop Tillu ko tumhari jaroorat h Avni.

Avni was about to say something when Bebe, Prakash and Shweta entered the train and Bebe hugged Avni.

Bebe: Puttar hume maaf kr de. Maine bhi teri baat nai suni. Aise hume chhod k mat ja Puttar.

Avni: Bebe, mujhe aapse sorry kehne chahiye, maine aapka promise toda h.
Avni decided that now she should not hide the truth of their marriage from Bebe. She will get more hurt if she get to know it from someone else.

Avni: Bebe mujhe aapse kuchh kehna h.
Avni looked at Neil for the support.
Neil was confused that whether she is about to tell about pregnancy or marriage or her real identity.

Avni: Bebe! Main pregnant nai hoon. Meri tabiyat bas yuhin kharab thi.
Bebe was disappointed to know this.
Avni: Or Bebe mujhe aapko mere and Neil ki shadi ka sach batana h.
Now it was Bebe's turn to get confused.
Bebe: Shadi ka sach?
Shweta (thought): Achha h ye ladki mera kaam aasan kr rhi h. Sach sunne k baad Bebe ise khud kicks maar k ghar se out krengi.

Avni narrated the whole fake marriage fiasco excluding the parts in which she is Avni and this marriage was one of the step to take revenge from Dayawanti Mehta.
Bebe was shocked and just sat on the nearby seat to stabilise herself.

Bebe: Hey bhagwan, ye aapne kya krwa diya mere parivar se. Ananya puttar mujhe maaf kr de. Tune Tillu ko iss jabardasti ki shadi se bachane k liye khud k baare mein nai socha. Mujhe lag hi rha tha ki itni achhi bahu Madam Madonna ki choice toh ho hi nai sakti. Iske choice toh wo Rhea hi hogi. Bilkul iski tarah. Ise khud ka toh pata nai rehta mere Tillu k liye ladki dekh rhi thi. Ise ye kaam dena hi nai chahiye tha.

Shweta was getting angry as Bebe was criticising her and appreciating Ananya. She could not loose this moment to insult Avni and to kick her out of their life.

Shweta: Bas Bebe. Aap toh humesha mujhpe hi ilzaam lagati h. Pehle apni ladli bahu se ye toh puchhiye ki uska asli naam kya h? Batao Ananya ya fir Avni bulaoon tumhe?

This thing further shocked Bebe, Prakash, Avni and even Neil.

Now AvNeil has to tell about Avni's secret to the family.


To be Continued...

Edited by ShailjaShan - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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OMG!! Tillu ne poori train rok dii..😲 really a supercop.😆.

awesome scene depiction Shailu..
neil happy at BHABHI.😳. he once scolded DD for calling Avni bhabhi😃
bebe will get two shocks together..
dialogues were nice...⭐️
now I want next part as fast as this one has arrived..😊😊😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vu1998

OMG!! Tillu ne poori train rok dii..😲

really a supercop.😆.
awesome scene depiction Shailu..
neil happy at BHABHI.😳. he once scolded DD for calling Avni bhabhi😃
bebe will get two shocks together..
dialogues were nice...⭐️
now I want next part as fast as this one has arrived..😊😊😊

Dhanyawad yaar...
Ab common log train rok sakte h toh ye toh humara Super Cop Tillu h..
Actually ye three shots h may be 4 ho jaye toh saare shock jaldi hi dene h.. Waise bhi Bebe ko sab pata chalna jaroori h nai toh Avni-Bebe or mu create ho jaenge..
Pehle next part soch le fir update kr denge..
Thanx once again yaar...
Love you dher sara for this beautiful comment..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Superb
Though Avni is right in her stand
But now it's depends on bebe's decision after hearing Avni's real identity
Update soon please
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wow its beautiful, i really loved it. Aww those dialouges where he said you will he fight with, who will he tease? Aww melted my heart, you made our supercop tillu sound so adorable. And now lets see what will bebe do... thank you for writing such lovely shots for us
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Somewhatwriter

Wow its beautiful, i really loved it. Aww those dialouges where he said you will he fight with, who will he tease? Aww melted my heart, you made our supercop tillu sound so adorable. And now lets see what will bebe do... thank you for writing such lovely shots for us

Thanks yaar..
I just hope Neil says these line to Avni in the show too when she will decide to go..
BTW the storyline is also going good.. Plus nowadays it's becoming more melodramatic..
Let's see what is I'm the store..
And i am thinking about the next part.. Bas idea aa jaye achha sa..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Zenab78

Superb dear
Loving it


Thank you so much for reading and liking this story..
Will try to not bore you..

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Gurveen

Superb
Though Avni is right in her stand
But now it's depends on bebe's decision after hearing Avni's real identity
Update soon please


Thanks for reading and liking..
Bebe is too good, she will take the right decision..
Will update soon once I get more ideas about next part..
Abhi ideas ki kami ho gyi h..😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: pri12

Awsome ..Loved it Shailja...


Thanks for taking out your time to read my story..😊

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey read both the parts together loved it.
Nice story aww Neil is so adorable the way he said mein Bebe ke saamne kis ko tang karu gaa was just so cute and adorable.
PLEASE iss Shweta aur rhea ki koi maar daalo yaar.
Please continue soon
Edited by Amirashah - 8 years ago

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