AvNeil FF: Afeemi Hai Tera Mera Pyaar(Part 18,Pg 46//Oct 17) - Page 10

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Posted: 8 years ago
#91
Lovely update
Ali toh jal ke rakh ho Gaya maza Aya
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Posted: 8 years ago
#92
Fantastic update
Neil Avni are talking like husband and wife
Really loved Neil's filmy dialogues
Jalkukda Ali
Chalo at least bebe cleared Shweta' misunderstanding
Update soon please
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Posted: 8 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: Deepti_98

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Yayyy I am first again
Once again a fantastic update
Avni and Neil's dialogues were very cute and touching...
Proudy Hubby...Avni pulling Neil's cheeks and Neil...Neil pulling her towards herself and complimenting her... Awww😳
And the way Neil kept his hand on her waist to make Ali jealous🤣
Ali ka poppat once again😆
And wait Avni just confessed her love?😲 Woowww
Waiting for the next part eagerly

Thank you my first commentor..
I am so happy ki mere update pe comment k liye res kiya jaa rha h.. Really believe nai hota...
Ali ko realise karwana padega ki he is better off Avni.. Coz Avni loves Neil..
Will update soon..
Lots of love..


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: shikhsk

Year I love you...U were like our voice n love every bit.i had 1000 watt smile reading this.epecially Ali ki jali.mast popat wooww n specially the last part where juhi is mentioned

Thank you so much...
And love you too...
I m glad you are liking the story...
Will update soon...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#95

Originally posted by: pri12

Shailjaaa this is amazing...

I love you for making Avni realize that she loves Neil 🤗
Ali ki to achi band bajayi 🤣
plz continue soon :)

Thank you so much...
And jab pyaar kiya toh darna kya... Hehe...
Will update soon...
Lots of love...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Zenab78

Lovely update
Ali toh jal ke rakh ho Gaya maza Aya

Hahahaha... I'm happy you liked the update...
Thank you so much...
Will update soon...
Lots of love...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Gurveen

Fantastic update
Neil Avni are talking like husband and wife
Really loved Neil's filmy dialogues
Jalkukda Ali
Chalo at least bebe cleared Shweta' misunderstanding
Update soon please

Thank you so much...
Ab husband -Wife ki tarah nok jhok krenge toh unki tarah baat krna bhi banta h..
Ali toh aajkal jal k raakh hi ho rha h... Hahaha..
And Shweta ko sudharna thoda mushkil h.. Tillu hi kuchh kr sakta h ab...
Will update soon...
Lots of love...

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Part 8
As Neil went out, Avni went to talk to Bebe.. She found Bebe and Shweta together.

Avni: Bebe, Shweta aunty, mujhe aap dono se kuchh baat krni h..

Bebe: Haan bol puttar..

Avni: Bebe maine shaadi se pehle ek news channel mein job k liye apply kiya tha and mujhe wahan se interview call aaya h.. Isliye main aapse permission lena chahti thi..

Shweta: Oye ladki.. Tumhe job karne ki kya needs h.. Humare paas money ki kami thode hi h.. Prakash ji ka apna business h and humara Tillu ACP h.. Fir q job shob??

Avni: Aunty wo...

Bebe cut her in between..

Bebe: Shweta!! (In warning tone).. Avni, tu jaroor jaa interview k liye.. Mujhe pata h job sirf paise k liye hi nai ki jaati.. Tujhe bhi apna career banane ka haq h.. Ek aurat ko bhi independent hona chahiye.. Tune bas humse poochha wahi humare liye kaafi h.. Tu araam se jaa or ye saari pehen k mat jaana.. Interview k hisab se kapde pehen le.. Mera aashirwad tere saath h..

Avni hugged Bebe.. She was so lucky to get Bebe..
Avni(to herself): Maine jaroor kuchh achha kaam kiya hoga apne peechhle janm mein tabhi mujhe itni achhi Dadi mili.. Meri apni Dadi ne toh mujhe maarna chaha par Bebe ne mujhe Dadi ka pyaar diya jo mujhe bachpan mein nai mila.. Or ye sab sirf Neil ki wajah se ho paya h.. Neil ko thank you krne k liye meri ye zindagi bhi kam par jaegi.. Wo meri zindagi mein real wala Prince Charming ban k aaya.. Lekin kya wo mujhe apni princess maanega??

Bebe: Puttar, kya ho gya?

Avni: Kuchh nai Bebe.. Bas Ayesha Maa ki yaad aa gyi..

Bebe: Koi na puttar.. Hum hai na.. Or tu chahe toh apni Neela maa se milne jaa sakti h or unhe bhi ye khush khabri de de..

Avni: Thank you Bebe.. Thank you Aunty..

Bebe gave her blessing to Avni and Shweta just smiled fakely..

Avni then went to Amol to tell him about this..

Avni: Amol, kahan h tu??
Amol: Di main yahi hoon.. Kya baat h??

Avni: Tu kaisa h?? Tere admission ka kya hua??

Amol: Wo actually di, itne kam marks mein kahin admission nai mil rhi..

Avni: Tum tension mat lo.. Main baat krti hoon college k principal se.. Mere ek friend k relative h wo.. Main unhe mana lungi.. Mujhe pata h tum apni life mein kuchh achha krna chahte ho.. Or agar tumhara past iss beech aa rha toh hum use tackle krenge ek saath mil k.. Maine Mumma ko promise kiya tha ki main humesha tumhara khayal rakhungi.. Or main apne Amol ka har point pe saath dungi.. But tumhe bhi mujhe promise krna hoga ki tum wapas uss galat track pe nai jaoge??

Amol: I promise di.. Main aapko or Mumma ko dissapoint nai karunga.. I will make both of you proud..

Avni: Ye hui na baat.. Or ek khush khabri h.. Maine ek news channel mein job k liye apply kiya tha and mujhe wahan se interview call aa gya h..

Amol: Congrats di.. Aap jao or achhe se interview do.. I know wo aapko accept kr lenge.. Aap ho hi itne achhe...

Both brother and sister shared a hug.. That long lost relationship was now blooming and Avni was happy to see the transformation of Amol to her Aman... She has succeeded to make her Mumma proud..

Avni: Main Neela maa k paas jaa rhi hoon.. Tum bhi chalo...

Amol: Di, kya Neela maa mujhe maaf krengi??

Avni: Amol, wo humari maa h.. Or maa apne bachho se kabhi jyada der naaraz nai reh sakti.. Tum chalo toh sahi..

Amol: Ok di.. ( He was finally excited to meet Neela.. He was happy to get such a wonderful sister and mother.. He was blinded by Dayawanti's teachings and has done a lot of misdeeds.. But now he knows what's right and what's wrong... And he will become a good person.. And will make her Mumma and di proud..)

Rhea heard all this.. She was getting jealous of their bonding.. She always wanted a happy family but never got.. She was jealous of Avni because she got what was her(Rhea) dream.. She vowed to destroy Avni's happiness.. And get her Neil back..

Avni and Amol went to Neela Maa..

Avni: Maa kahan ho?? Maadhvi Tayi kahan ho?? Kahan chale gye sab log? Aise darawaza khula chhod k koi jata h kya??

Amol: Di, Maa yahi hongi.. Let's go to kitchen..

Avni was happy to hear Amol calling Neela Maa as Maa..

Both went to kitchen.. Neela maa was preparing something..

Avni: Maa, aap yahan ho.. Darawaza aise koi khula rakhta h kya?? Koi chor aa jata toh??

Neela: Bachha, main abhi turant kitchen mein aayi hoon.. Tum khamakha itna tension le rhi ho.
Neela saw Amol standing near the door..

Neela: Amol.. Beta yahan aao wahan q khade ho..
Neela was so happy to see Amol.. She was finally happy to see Avni and Amol together..

Amol: Maa.. Kya main aapko maa bula sakta hoon??

Neela got emotional hearing Maa from Amol.. Tears brimmed in her eyes..

Amol: Haan bachha... Tum mujhe Maa bula sakte ho.. Yahan aao.. Finally hume humara Aman wapas mil gya.. 15 saal tapasya kiya humne tumhare liye beta.. Ab kahin nai jaane denge tumhe..

Neela hugged Amol.. Amol also felt emotional.. He has never thought in his lifetime that he will get love of mother.. But seeing Neela, he understood what is mothers love.. And was angry of Dayawanti Mehta who snatched him from his father and mother both...

Amol: Maa.. Bahot bhookh lagi h.. Kya h khane mein.. ( Amol said while hugging)

Neela: Hey bhagwan, main bhi Kaisi hoon bachho se khane k liye nai poochha.. Tm dono dinning table pe jao main khana leke aati hoon..

Avni was extremely happy to see Neela and Amol bonding together.. Finally her dream of a happy family was becoming true.. She missed her Ayesha Maa and Papa at the moment.. But why to dwell about past when present is beautiful..

Avni: Maa, main aapki madad krti hoon..
Neela: Bachha jao or Aman k saath baitho.. Main khana leke aati hoon..

Three of them had their lunch and reminisced about Avni's some happy childhood moment and told Aman about Ayesha Maa.. They were looking so happy and contented...

Neela: Amol beta, tum aaj yahin ruk jao.. Mujhe abhi apne bete se dher saari baatein krni h..

Avni: Haan ab beta aa gya toh aap beti ko bhool jao..

Amol: Di, don't be jealous.. Maa ne aapko itne saal pyaar diya ab meri baari h.. Aap jao Jiju k paas. Waise bhi wo aapse ek pal k liye bhi dur nai reh sakte.. Pata h maa, agar di kuchh der k liye bhi kahin jati h toh Jiju poore ghar mein unhe khojte firte h.. Jab dekho tab Avni Avni hi unke muh pe rehta h aajkal...

Neela was extremely happy to hear this.. Finally her daughter was getting all the love which she was devoid from.. She made the right decision to force Avni to marry Neil..

Avni: Bas kar Amol... Aisa kuchh nai hai maa.. Wo Neil apna saaman yahan wahan rakh k bhool jata h.. Isliye mujhe dhoondh rha hoga..

Neela: Haan haan mujhe sab pata h.. Tum rehne do..

Avni: Maa!! Ab aap bhi..

Neela and Amol shared a hearty laugh.. They talked for some more time and then Avni went to Chmko Cafe.. She has to clear all the misunderstanding with Ali...

At Chamko Cafe-
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Avni: Ali, I m sorry yaar.. Maine uss time tujhse baat nai ki.. Mujhe tujhse akele mein baat krni thi..

Ali: Yaar Avni, I m sorry... But yaar tu kyun abhi tak Neil k saath h?? Tera badla bhi pura ho gya or tu bhi janti h ki Shweta aunty tujhe bilkul bhi pasand nai krti.. Kitna kuchh galat kaha unhone tujhe... Or tu abhi tak wahan ruki h...

Avni: Ali, tujhe Shweta aunty dikh rhi h.. But Bebe, Papa and Neil nai dikh rhe... Mujhe jo pyaar khud ki Dadi se nai mila wo mujhe Bebe se mil gya.. Aaj tak main Papa k pyaar k liye tarasti rahi par Prakash uncle se mujhe wo pyaar mila.. Wo mujhe apni beti maante h.. Or tujhe bhi pata h ki meri zindagi mein aajtak pyaar ki koi jagah nai thi.. Lekin Neil ne mujhe ye ehsaas dilaya h ki main bhi ek normal ladki ki tarah pyaar kr sakti hoon..Mujhe bhi mera Prince Charming mil sakta h..

Ali: Avni, Main hoon na tere liye.. Maine tera 15 saal tak intezaar kiya.. Yahan(pointing towards his heart) yahan basa k rakha.. Sab kehte the ki Avni mar chuki h par mujhe pata tha Meri Avni jaroor aaegi... Wo mujhe akela chhod k nai jaa sakti...

Avni cut him from continuing..
Avni: Ali! Ali! Meri baat toh sun yaar... Main humesha se tujhe sirf apna best friend mana h... Maine kabhi tujhe uss nazariye se nai dekha.. Tu samjh rha h na meri baat??

Ali: Avni aisa mat bol yaar.. Ek mauka to de mujhe... Bahot khush rakhunga main tujhe...
(Ali was on verge of crying. He.could see his long lost love going far away from him.. He can't let this happen again..)

Avni: Ali, I m so sorry yaar.. Ab meri shadi ho chuki h.. And main kabhi tujhe wo pyaar nai de paungi yaar.. Tujhe mere se bhi achhi ladki mil jaegi.. Tu itna achha h ki tujhe toh koi bhi mil jaegi.. Jaisa tu chahega...
Ali: Par tu toh nai milegi na? Main toh bas tujhe chahta hoon...

Avni: Ali, tu shaant dimaag se soch... Tu uss 12 saal ki Avni se pyaar krta h... Or wo Avni Dayawanti Mehta k haatho mar chuki h... Main wo Avni nai hoon..

Ali: Lekin Avni...

Avni: Lekin wekin kuchh nai.. Tu ye aansu pochh or smile kar.. Rota hua Bandar lagta h tu.. Or we r BFF for life.. Hum dono tere liye Avni se bhi best ladki khojenge..

Ali wiped his tears and smiled at Avni.. He now knew that Avni was never his... She will always hold that special place in his heart but can never be his... And hence he has to let it go and move on.. And he is happy in Avni's happiness...

Ali: Tu Neil se pyaar krne lagi h na??

First Avni was shocked then she blushed..

Ali: Tune use bataya??

Avni: Aisa kuchh nai h yaar.. Neil is just a friend and my husband..

Ali: Avni, tujhe bhi pata h tu mujhse jhooth nai bol sakti.. Shakal dekh tu apni... Neil ka naam sunte hi laal ho gyi.. Ye pyaar nai toh or kya h?? Tere chehre se saaf pata chal rha h.. Koi anjaan bhi ye bata dega ki tu pyaar kr baithi h..

Avni checked her face and touched her cheeks..
Avni: Itna obvious h kya??

Ali: Haan, itna obvious h.. Chal tune mana toh sahi ki tu pyaar krti h Neil ko... Ab ye bata ki ye baat use kab bata rhi??

Avni blushed on hearing that she loves Neil but then frowned.
Avni: Lekin mujhe ye nai na pata ki wo bhi mujhse pyaar krta h ya nai? Agar usne mujhe reject kr diya toh??

Ali: Pehli baat agar usne tujhe reject kiya toh wo duniya ka sabse dumb insaan hoga.. And dusri baat, uski chehre pe likha h ki tere pyaar mein paagal h.. Aaj subah uski shakl pe dikh rha tha jab main wahan aaya tha...

Avni: Sachhi??
Ali: Muchhi...

Avni: I really missed you yaar Ali... Or ab tu meri help krega Neil ko propose krne mein..

Ali: Tu kya mujhe maarna chahti h? Main apne pyaar ko kisi or ko propose krne mein help karoon.. Ise kehte h torture...

Avni: Aree yaar Ali.. Tujhe abhi na maine kaha ye sab bhool ja... Tu fir se wahi baat leke baith gya... Nai baat krni mujhe tere se..

Ali: Sorry yaar Avni... S.O.R.R.E... Sorry... Main bas majak kr rha tha.. Chal plan banate h...

Avni: Are main toh ek baat batana bhool hi gyi..
Avni told him about her interview and her family members reaction...

Ali was happy for Avni and congratulated her... Then they both sat their and discussed about how Avni will propose Neil...

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To be continued...

P.s- I just wanted to focus on every relation of Avni in this chapter... Plus I can't see Ali's character being butchered in the show.. He is a nice guy.. And i want to do justice with him...
So here's the new chapter... Give your reviews guys that helps and motivate me to write more...😊



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Posted: 8 years ago
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YAY first 🥳
Shailja even before I read the part where you said you wanted to focus on every relation of Avni.. I felt it already while I was reading.
This was really beautiful. I loved it. I am getting an inexplicable feeling after reading this because it is all about love and care in every relation. Beautifully written.
All the dialogues are so apt that I can hear them saying it.. especially Avni and Ali convo. Superb!
I am so glad to see this side of Ali.. thanks to you. Seriously, I prefer this Ali!!
Lots of love
Zuu

Edited by Electro.Cutie - 8 years ago
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Woooe such a nice chapter
Loved how yu showed neela and amols relation .
Update soon

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