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Posted: 6 years ago
Chapter 13

So this is the treat that Bella had planned 😳

Mahir . I am so glad at least Bella was able to express herself. This was a beautiful confession!

Andy and Sumi walking in at the end 🤣. This is the highlight of the chapter for me. Again, I need those GIFs 🤣

It's Bella's turn to teach Mahir a few things.

Amazing chapter 👏
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Posted: 6 years ago
Epilogue

You finished it 😭

This was a beautiful ending. It was perfectly written. I have no words

Wow Ash! You wrote another amazing story. Thank you so much for writing this

I'm so proud of you. You entered a competition and even went to the second round. I can't wait to hear how far you go in the competition. But I just want to say that you are already a winner for me

You get a clap for this update too 👏

Please create an index for all your stories.
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Posted: 6 years ago
I am done with my updates 😆. I hope that the wait was worth it. I know I have been asking you to be prepared for many days 🤣. But I am finally done 😃
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: The.Wanderer

I am all set. Although you will have to wait for replies as I am super behind on replying to all the comments.😆



You can now read the reviews. I have done my part. It is now your turn 😛

Edit: Sorry for posting so many comments 😃
Edited by fortitudeoth - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Entertaining review as usual Claire ji 👏
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: sonie32

Chapter 12

Ash I have no words that how beautifully you described about Bela ki identity in front of andy😳...I thought ki tum kuch dramatic likhogi that he will start hating her..or will not allow Bela to enter his house...but you wrote it soo beautifully...even you made him also behir shipper😆
Chalo achha hai Yuvi ka siyappa bhi nipta diya...and yes Anu is good for him🤣
My poor bela realised finally...that she loves him☺️
Awesome awesome dear👏👏👏

Chapter 13

So madam ne summi ki sari pehni wo bhi maahirg ne gift ki wo wali😆😆
And she cooked food for his nerd but hottie maahir ke liye😳

And she confessed her feeling ...he shaked🤣 ash this one is epic🤣

Aah awesome👏👏
sorry for replying so late ash



Nahi yaar, agar wors hote bhi toh bhi kuch dramatoc nahi lijkhati main. I always wanted Andy to be a decent guy. See, initially I described Andy as what Mahir see him as. But in reality Andy is just worried about his simple son. That is why when Andy's real character came out, it was a surprise. He is s bully, but he is also capable of caring and that is what Bella made Mahir realise.


Yes everyone seems to agree, Anu is perfect for Yuvi. 😉

Thanks dear.


Yes that was the first sign that Sumi has completely accepted her. And Mahir should hvae realised that but... Khair bande ko dimaag hai lekin inn cheejo main nahi chalata woh.



He was bound to shake. Itana hot hot ladki aagar I love you bole toh kaun nahi shake karega? 😉


Thanks. I am so happy that you liked it.
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: sarahgul

Omg Ash story khatam bhi HOGAYI !! 😭 😭

This story is so beautiful 👏

The way mahir falls in love with bela and seeing the other side of her was So beautiful !!

Being with mahir .. Bela gets a New family and her bond with sumi and Andy was Perfect !! Poor girl she needed that !! I am still angry on belas mother 😡

Mahir is such a cutiepie the way he got jealous to see bela bond with sumi and Andy But somewhere he also like it..

Oh god Ash we need more stories from you 😆 😆

But amazing job Ash the way you focus on characters backstory is amazing .. specially bela and mahir .. 👏



I somehow love back stories. I have them at the back of my mind while writing every scene. It helps to NOT have any loop holes in the narrative. I think our CVs should work on that. 😆

It's a theatre thing I guess. While doing a character, knowing his/her back story helps. It helps an actor react to certain things. Each charactre's reaction is different based his/her back story. That is how I developed the back story concept.


Thanks. But right now I am looking forward to YOUR story and its regular updates. 😉






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Posted: 6 years ago
chapter 13

all good things are coming to an end whats happening in my life😭😭

Aww baby don't say that. 🤗 Tharki gang ki frinedship will always remain.

oh behir all alone in such a big house and bella is preparing for the night i mean proposal night nothing else. A girl is calling him in her room and he thinks she has lost it like seriously.😲😲 uff what will happen later will they ever have sneaking around wala romance because mahir will think that bella is playing hide and seek with him.

You are giving me ideas and I get it. 😉 But no seriously Bell will really have to teach him a lot. LIKE A LOT!! Remember the photo I sent about Yudy? That will be them😉


she is asking him how she is looking oh boy what will happen with this guy he is speechless but not complimenting imagine bella coming in negligee he will be like bella is this you childhood dress are you comfortable in this😆😆😆

Bella might just end tearing up that negligee in frustration. 😆


bella is having such a cool sasuma they exchanging clothes even my mom and my SIL does that this is so good 👏👏 this guy is not getting slightest of hint that its a date she planned dude this girl roaming in shorts is wearing a 5mts saree and you are telling why all this?????? this is completely a role exchange of usual dates.

That is so cool you know. That guy in question is dumb. But he is so cute that you can't but help fall in love with him. 😳

he can eat himself oh yes yes he is manchild na he knows how to eat his mommy taught him😡😡 he is more interested in gobbling down the pizza not even offering her

Nervousness baby. See Bella in a backless blouse, showing off her kamariya trying to feed him... Imagine his condition. ☺️

bella this girl is going to have a task of life making mahir do things he is trembling and sweating and here she is loosing patience she actually should have caught him tied him to chair and expressed her love that would have been an effective way to get this in his thick head.

Nope that would made him faint. 😉

such a deep poetic lines and he is not getting a word of it is he totally dumb or was taking revenge for kissing him. see now she did the right thing pin him and threaten him to love her its well said lato k bhoot bato se nahi mante😆😆😆 she herself is not romantic did all these to hear that she has lost it completely.

Yeah she has. Completely, totally and fully lost her mind and hear to this dumb idiot nerd.


she should have made him walk on knees as well for killing her mood completely. and then this punishment hayye can he commit some very grave mistakes in future and get much much better and harsher punishment😳😳

I knew you would like this punishment. 😉 In fact the whole Tharki gange will like this punishment. 😆


mahir is all breathing heavily this boy i am just imagining his morning after reaction he might walk at all out of room and even if he does he will be so blushing that he will cover himself in pallu😆😆😆 and he is in complete mess now she is jsut waiting for his one look then she will unleash real bella on mahir. Hath pakdaya to pura kandha pakad liya. poor guy must be scandalized.

☺️

SUDY and BEHIR can go to many romantic trips together and they will have more fun😆😆 well mahir have overall guidance of bella sudy

There are going to be a lot of Ma he is so dumb kind of complaints in future. 😆


the confession lines were beautiful neither to fancy nor too lame just a right mixture of a totally non romantic person trying to use words to express feelings where all her life she believed in action although in the end it was the action which helped but still.

That was totally me. Unromantic person trying to do something romantic. I am going to keep them safe and use them on my hubby when I find him. 😉This is the best I can do.

nice chapter dear i like it

Thanks.

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Guys another round cleared. We are now in Round 3 of the contest!!! Wooohooo!!! So happy!! Thank you all for your support! 😳
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'Tis a season to be jolly la la la la la la la la la 🥳

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