My Angel BeHir FF IF_NC_ENTRY Ch 13 on Pg 44

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

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Posted: 6 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: sonie32
ash awesome start👏👏👏
this role reversal thing is mind blowing😉

i can imagine bala(SJ) as brat look and for maahirji mo ka bb wala sree look(with glasses😆 ) came in my mind😳

update soon...waiting...

Thanks sonie!! Check out the chapter 1 when you have time. I hope you like it. 😳

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Vrishthi04

@Vrishthi04

Beginner

Posted: 6 years ago

#12

Awesome intro

The role swap is awesome

Looking forward to look SJ in such a stud role and never seen role before

U r just awesome Ash

Firstly u showed MAHIR in such an awesome friendship character then in such a spoilt brat character then too a lovely but shy husband character n now in such a positive momma's boy character, every girl yearns for..

Oh just can't get enough of ur reading, it's such a lovely introduction so how will be d story it would be mind blowing...

How will this story progress, can't wait 2 read.. .

Imagining from now only SJ in the character

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Vrishthi04

@Vrishthi04

Beginner

Posted: 6 years ago

#13

Wow yaar what a character u gave to bella

The first meet n a kiss it's cherry on cake 4 Behir fans, hope 2 see something like this more often

The character u described in intro it seems like it's going to be a blast to watch her portray this character on screen.

An amazing Behir story is going to unfold

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sonie singh shrivastava

@sonie32

Sparkler

Posted: 6 years ago

#14

ahahaha🤣🤣ash🤣

last line🤣🤣🤣 i'm loving it<3😳

rehaan babu ne yaha bhi peecha nahi choda hum readers ka🤣

and bultu as usual...fattu🤣

bela love you girl...poor maahir🤣

awesome again👏👏👏

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Maria

@Maria.Jewel

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 6 years ago

#15

Omg Ash! I think you convinced me of Bela's badass character as much as you did with Mahir last time. Very well written! 10/10👏

Also could you give an intro about the characters like you did last time or is it not allowed? Because i see that Kuhu, Rehan, Yuvi, Anu, Adi and Bultu are all on Bela's team of friends. Who are they and are they related somehow? That kind of knowledge would be interesting as well

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fortitudeoth

@fortitudeoth

Voyager

Posted: 6 years ago

#16

👏 🤣

This is a strong first chapter. But the word limit is going to work against you. I think the strongest part of your stories is all the details you write. Even with the limit you have written so well!

Does Mr. Thick Glasses have any friends? I can perfectly imagine Bela with this role reversal. Every character does not seem out of place so far. You have written their dialogues and roles perfectly.

Thank you for including Bultu 😆

Excellent update Ash! Looking forward to the rest of the story.

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Bhat Rehan Hassan

@Preciousevil

Voyager

Posted: 6 years ago

#17

wow
waiting for next update

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

Rocker

Posted: 6 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: Varsha001
Nice update 👏😃

Thanks Varsha!! 😆

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

Rocker

Posted: 6 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: Vrishthi04
Awesome intro
The role swap is awesome
Looking forward to look SJ in such a stud role and never seen role before
U r just awesome Ash
Firstly u showed MAHIR in such an awesome friendship character then in such a spoilt brat character then too a lovely but shy husband character n now in such a positive momma's boy character, every girl yearns for..
Oh just can't get enough of ur reading, it's such a lovely introduction so how will be d story it would be mind blowing...
How will this story progress, can't wait 2 read.. .
Imagining from now only SJ in the character

Thanks Vrishthi. I hope you like this story as much as you liked the previous ones. 😳

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

Rocker

Posted: 6 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: Vrishthi04
Wow yaar what a character u gave to bella
The first meet n a kiss it's cherry on cake 4 Behir fans, hope 2 see something like this more often
The character u described in intro it seems like it's going to be a blast to watch her portray this character on screen.
An amazing Behir story is going to unfold

Yes it would be a blast to see SJ portray such a character. Hopefully one of these days, we will get to see.

Thanks you for sticking by me. 😳