BeHir Memory Loss Part 4 UPDATED.

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

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Posted: 6 years ago

#81

Originally posted by: humtumsalman
your write your new ff
and m nt aware of it
bohat nainsafi hai ya

Sorry Rehan. It was just an OS that I turned into a SS for now. But next time I will pukka PM you. 😃

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

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Posted: 6 years ago

#82

Originally posted by: _nakshi_
Hayee ash
You should take place of mukku really
Hope this kind of scenes were shown for kiddo mahir in serial
And first time second time Teri tarkipan 😆
Powers will increase ha
All scenes of Bela with kiddo mahir were beautifully written
My ash 🤗
Update soon

Haye 🤗 Thanks Pranu. I am so glad that you liked my version of baby Mahir.

Ab kya karu? I was born to be tharki. 😉

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

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Posted: 6 years ago

#83

Originally posted by: humtumsalman
beautiful... as always

Thank you Rehan. 😃

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Bhat Rehan Hassan

@Preciousevil

Voyager

Posted: 6 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: The.Wanderer

Sorry Rehan. It was just an OS that I turned into a SS for now. But next time I will pukka PM you. 😃

Thanks alot😊

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Maria

@Maria.Jewel

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+ 4

Posted: 6 years ago

#85

i decided to come back to my senses today and complete the rest of the chapters :)

Ash first of all HOW are you able to write such long long chapters? And not to forget each and every single line has the wit and charm❤️ I am forever going to be a fan of your writing skills.

Okay so the long long chapters are really hard to review, sooo you will have to settle for short feedback on my behalf😳

The best thing you did was showing how the mani does have powers! For some reason its appearance reminded me of Ron's deluminator because of the way Mahir just knew what to do. It was soo soo satisfying to discover that yes the mani does behold powers and its not just a stone. Thankyou for including this in your story Ash🤗

other than that i am just going to mention the things that i really like or found funny: chomu scenes with both Mahir and Bela, hooded death eaters driving bikes🤣, plot of badly written EK serial (this was just epic🤣), the need ka kadha face...and so many more things. Ash you have a brilliant sense of humour yaar Every single line was a treat to read.

Oh and thankyou so much for sensing Andy, Kuhu, bultu abd baby Ruhi abroad!!! Finally! Because Mukku ki world mein the world is limited entirely inside sehgal house, haveli and jungle, thats it.

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