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skeptical

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Posted: 16 years ago

#11

I have written this after seeing your edited version. I haven't seen the first one. 😳

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skeptical

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Posted: 16 years ago

#12

The stars shone like little sparks

Mists like ribbons in the dark

The beaming moon touched the sea

See what Love can do to me?

The sea sends forth its whispering tide

As breezes on the waters glide

My love is like the ocean wide

Even the trees can't their blushes hide.

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Posted: 16 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: skeptical
I have written this after seeing your edited version. I haven't seen the first one. 😳

shukriya dear......as first had issues so sweet of u ghode mujhe bahut pasand hain😳..mera munda ghode pe kita acha lagta hai 😆😆 but my dear tumhare kya kehne.....😳 lafzon ko motiyon sa piro deti ho...

Edited by sami01 - 16 years ago

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skeptical

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Posted: 16 years ago

#14

Dont know why Sammy,

But I write poetry best at night in its wonderful silence. The more pictures you send me, the more lines will emerge.

Waise mujhe itna bhi na chadhana ki utarna mushkil ho jaye!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 😉

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Posted: 16 years ago

#15

skepy i need to hug u for such dear poems they r just tooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo gooooooooooooood both....

The stars shone like little sparks

Mists like ribbons in the dark

The beaming moon touched the sea

See what Love can do to me?

The sea sends forth its whispering tide

As breezes on the waters glide

My love is like the ocean wide

Even the trees can't their blushes hide.

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Posted: 16 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: skeptical
Dont know why Sammy,

But I write poetry best at night in its wonderful silence. The more pictures you send me, the more lines will emerge.

Waise mujhe itna bhi na chadhana ki utarna mushkil ho jaye!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 😉

na na utrne ka sawaal hi nahi... tum zameen pe reh ke hi aakaash ko choo leti ho...
i will sure more tasweerein for u .....tasweeron ko zubaan tum de dena...😳

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skeptical

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Posted: 16 years ago

#17

Aap ki taarif padhne ka jo mazaa aata hai, uski koi seema nahi

Jo likhne ka josh aata hai na, uski bhi koi seema nahi

Shabdon mein shabab kaise ghulana, uski koi seema nahi

Kavita jo bahaar laati hain, uski bhi koi seema nahi...................

pata nahi meri hindi kavita aap ko pasand ayi ki nahi, thodi kachchi hai......na?

Is the word shabab correctly used here?

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Posted: 16 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: skeptical
Aap ki taarif padhne ka jo mazaa aata hai, uski koi seema nahi
Jo likhne ka josh aata hai na, uski bhi koi seema nahi

Shabdon mein shabab kaise ghulana, uski koi seema nahi

Kavita jo bahaar laati hain, uski bhi koi seema nahi...................

aap ki taareef karne mein jo maza aata hai uski bhi koi seema nahi..
pyaar ke is samunder mein......jazbaat ki aandhi mein....dua hai ke tumhare man mein lafzon ka samandar ho..aur aisa sailaab aaye..ke kalam bus bhaage un lafzon ko pakadne ke liye..
yeh dua hai meri....
agar main tum ko inspire kar pati hoon to mujhe bahut khushi hoti hai...

pata nahi meri hindi kavita aap ko pasand ayi ki nahi, thodi kachchi hai......na?

Is the word shabab correctly used here?na kachi nahi hai apne ander ki bhawna ache se bat rahi hai...aur shabab pe aap ki kalm hai sahi kahaa aapne..i loved it