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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you for loving it 🤗

Originally posted by: Avneel07

Such an emotional one. Loved it.

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Posted: 4 years ago
#12

This is beautiful❤️.

I loved ...

The beginning, where you described Raghav's physical and emotional state. While growing through harsh circumstances he skipped the cheerful youth and aged prematurely in every aspect but in number. You depicted it aptly.


Secondly, his bond with his brother. Ten years younger sibling is more like a child to you than a friend. Losing your child is most painful thing and this pain is what made him more protective towards Kirti. I could feel his pain through your words.

You write awesome👏👏

Keep it up👍🏼

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you for this beautiful comment 🤗

Bold - Exactly what I wanted the readers to capture! He's the eldest and after losing his youngest brother, he naturally becomes overprotective towards the remaining sibling. Raghav loves his sister deeply, sadly it's not the same from her side because of what they've gone through. But he will not bat an eyelid if he is to give his life for her.


Originally posted by: psychoruchi

This is beautiful❤️.

I loved ...

The beginning, where you described Raghav's physical and emotional state. While growing through harsh circumstances he skipped the cheerful youth and aged prematurely in every aspect but in number. You depicted it aptly.


Secondly, his bond with his brother. Ten years younger sibling is more like a child to you than a friend. Losing your child is most painful thing and this pain is what made him more protective towards Kirti. I could feel his pain through your words.

You write awesome👏👏

Keep it up👍🏼

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Posted: 4 years ago
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This is beautiful. Thank you for sending me a PM or I might have missed this gem. Sibling bonds are personally one of my favourite dynamics to watch or read and I love that you've dedicated a one shot to this. Arjun and his Aaghav Anna have made me tear up in the middle of the day. My heart broke for Raghav. His pain, guilt and remorse was depicted so beautifully. I simply love your style of writing. Do keep writing❤️

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you 🤗 I’m glad you enjoyed the read.

I’ll keep writing coz of awesome readers out here 😊


Originally posted by: hapc

This is beautiful. Thank you for sending me a PM or I might have missed this gem. Sibling bonds are personally one of my favourite dynamics to watch or read and I love that you've dedicated a one shot to this. Arjun and his Aaghav Anna have made me tear up in the middle of the day. My heart broke for Raghav. His pain, guilt and remorse was depicted so beautifully. I simply love your style of writing. Do keep writing❤️

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Posted: 4 years ago
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So emotional 😭❤️


Well done 👏

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Posted: 4 years ago
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thank you 😳

Originally posted by: I-Got-You

So emotional 😭❤️


Well done 👏

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you for sharing, this was such a heat touching story ❤️.

You have captured the sibling love so well.

The poem is a masterstroke👏👏. i can barely rhyme...but the poem makes so much sense for a creative person like Raghav. it almost feels like a page out of his black diary.

And i can totally imagine Pallavi soothing and coaxing him...just the way she did after the chilly incident.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Thank you 😳

I believe Raghav is a good writer I don’t know why but maybe because he has no one to share his life with. I wish he’s a good writer, again, I don’t know why I wish for this but maybe because there’s a certain depth to his character, a depth very few have access to. I hope his diary plays an important role in their story.

Yes, you’re right, the poems don’t rhyme. I personally prefer a free verse style over poems that rhyme.



Originally posted by: tiara_remixfan

Thank you for sharing, this was such a heat touching story ❤️.

You have captured the sibling love so well.

The poem is a masterstroke👏👏. i can barely rhyme...but the poem makes so much sense for a creative person like Raghav. it almost feels like a page out of his black diary.

And i can totally imagine Pallavi soothing and coaxing him...just the way she did after the chilly incident.

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