Forever This Way Pt-11 Pg-22 - Page 10

hey it is good



good yaar pl continue

The lyrics and the flashbacks were all very nicely spun out. I really liked the literary feel of your work!
Please clear the mystery soon! Is raj really dead!

Keep it going!

Originally posted by: devilangel

ohh! 😛😃 im more of a sci-fi and thriller person.. this is my first ..well.. third attempt at romantic novels. (the others are in the remix forum)..

is it good enough?

I love thrillers & Romantic ones.

As for ur writing,I told u earlier also I luuuuuuuuuuuuv ur writing style.Its just amazing.U hve retained d char bt changed their charachterisation.Somewhere down d line Naina,Raj & Huda on d show are just diametrically diff frm d ones in ur story.Dat acc to me is d best thing abt ur fan-fic.Keep up d good job but yaar Raj cant die woh bhi SUICIDE!!!!!!!!!!Ne-ways post ur nxt part soon.I cant handle suspense for long!!!!!!!U kno something.....even while reading novels I read d end part first.........I dont hve d patience to reach d last part properly!!!Bt I kno for sure dats really silly.

Originally posted by: coolgirl_13

plz put up d next part shreyasi! 😳
n i luved tell me ur dreams sanya!! 😃 😃 it was awesum!! 😃
n shreyasi...in sci-fi..wat do u read?
n btw..ne1 read d artemis fowl series? n luv story by erik sehgal?

Oh God U hve read Tell me ur Dreams.Tell Swathi,she wont ever call u a chota bachcha then😉.Bt it was awesome!!!N for Artemis Fowl,I had a copy till a month back bt time nhin mila padhne ka.Xms the & I was unwell.Dont ask me wich one bcoz I dont remember!!!!It belonged to my cousin.Bt yes maine Love Story padhi hai.Try it bt only if u hve to.Mujhe to bilkul pasand nhin hai.Hve u seen Khwahish,that Mallika Sherawat movie???????????Khwahish is d frame to frame copy of Luv Story.

BTW My fav romantic novel till date is Wild Crocus.It was frm MB.Dont remember d author aur abhi mere paas hai bhi nhin,bt if u want I can get u d author's name.Apart frm dat The Midnite Club by Christopher Pike is also nice.And If 2mrw comes By Sydney Sheldon,do read dat once.Its d only novel I hve read many times.Must read......BTW any1 over here reads Harry Potter!!!!!!!!!

👏 👏 👏 awesum shreyasi!! PLZZ CONTINUE!!
its 22 gud!!
n NOOOO..raj CANT commit suicide..he cant die.. 😭

Shreyasi.....u sometimes sound unsure abt ur fanfic.Dont ever think of discontinuing it.Its really goood.Replies will keep pouring in........Dont worry.😊

HEY SHREYASI...I THINK I NEED 2 TAKE STORY WRITING CLASSES FROM U........EXCELLENT YAAR......ABSOLUTELY SUPERB!!!!!! 👏 👏 👏

The next few moments were a blur to him. He could feel someone's strong hands around his neck trying to retch out the poison he had swallowed. But he couldn't. The pain was unbearable. His whole body seemed to convulse with every time he gasped for air. In what he thought were his last moments, he wondered whether he did the right thing by doing something which hurt so much. But, well, there was no going back now. What was done was done.

Slowly he felt someone massaging his throat. The soft action forced him to retch out some of the poison. It was horribly disgusting and the bitterest thing he had ever experienced. He heard the distant voice of an ambulance siren as the person holding him told to keep up. He viciously tried to answer back but couldn't. He was losing his strength. He knew it was time and he had to go. He silently left a message to Naina hoping that one day she will understand everything he had done.

So hold me when I'm here
Right me when I'm wrong
Hold me when I'm scared
And love me when I'm gone
Everything I am
And everything in me
Wants to be the one
You wanted me to be
I'll never let you down
Even if I could
I'd give up everything
If only for your good
So hold me when I'm here
Right me when I'm wrong
You can hold me when I'm scared
You won't always be there
So love me when I'm gone

His legs felt weaker than he had ever felt in a long time. Was this how you die, he thought. That's what my friends and colleagues must have felt, he thought, that's what Navin might have felt. And that's what he was feeling today. Everything seemed so far away and dizzy. Something was pushed down his mouth as he parted his lips forcing himself to drink it. It had a honey colored taste and he instantly felt a bit better. Still horrible, but still a bit better. But as soon as the feeling came, it disappeared. His last moments were here, he could count on it. The strong and encouraging arms engulfing him encouraged him to go on, to just keep it up for a few seconds till the ambulance came. But he couldn't. 'Naina, forgive me,' he thought to himself, as a drop of rain fell on him. The cloudy sky confirmed that it was going to rain. It somehow made him feel reassured that he was doing the right thing. His upper lips twitched and started to curve upwards when he suddenly felt an agonizing spasm of pain.

The last flame was over. It was time for the candle to die down.

Then he closed his eyes.

ok i was going to continue the next part but then i thought 'hey you guys love suspense right?' so ill just leave it here to let you guess what will happen and the strong arms belong to whom?? 😉 😳

and i have a deal!! 😃 the faster you reply, the faster i put up the next part.. my christmas vacations started today and i have already finished the story so woot woot!! please tell me how it was..
and the song was 'when i'm gone' by three doors down

happy reading!
shreyasi