FF:MERI ADHURI KAHAANI last part pg-62& nt -64 - Page 44

My worst fear came true, finally you managed to deliver an update which has made me speechless, not that I won't blabber this time, may be blabber even more attempting to look for accurate words, but will I able to find? And this is just the beginning; many more are yet to come! Following this update, you're g only gonna be at your best, and this is not my expectation, this is what I believe! And I least care how must pressurize this statement is gonna make you! Beginning to write my comments, pardon me if I access anything wrongly, I've never felt so nervous, in fact never felt nervous before writing a comment!

I remember you not being quite convinced about whether dutta remained in character or not at couple of points, though I always believed him to be in character, anyways that's another story, what I want to imply is that just shoo away all those suspections ...look at the dutta of this update of yours, he's exactly the replica of the one on screen yet he seems to be the very much version of the dutta of this particular story! Poor guy is heart broken, but I loved the fact that his ego or pride had nothing do with it, it was his soul which was bruised! He went to the beech, and she knew he is there...soul mates they are! Loved the way he was trying to practice what he preached last time, and was unable to do so, a quite consistent and common trait of both the leads, they never practice what they preach. A small but crispy duji moment, loved when dutta holds baaji's collar and he appears to be surprised, scared and then calm, that's vinay as baaji, even in a single short he used to deliver rapid expressions! Your grasp on the character baaji is absolutely amazing! It's surprising actually shocking how in real life mere a thought of a person swaying and stumbling under the effect of alcohol cringes me and how I find this man sexiest when drunk! Aah! The whole drunk dutta part has been done brilliantly, and even when he kinds of manhandles naku, there was no pride or ego on stake it was only and only happiness which their lives lack and which is much needed, was at stake! And I am awestruck at the way you have managed to show case a drunk dutta and a sober dutta, at the same time, too good!

So she wore the saree, you certainly know how to surprise your readers, who could have imagined that she'll wear it at this point of time. When he asked "ye kya hai" I know nothing funny, still a lol moment for me, poor guy he's having tough time getting accustomed with this girl, who first embraces him in the rain then pushes him, rejects him and then suddenly in midnight decides to change her avatar! Okay when he came back with wet hairs and asked "ye kya hai" dryly and "sach"? through clenched jaw, god knows how many beats my heart skipped! But the most brilliant part of the update a very pleasant surprise a wow moment for me was his reaction followed by her confession, the way he remained unaffected, this is my dutta, so different from the cheeky romantic guys who I'm sure by this time would have been gone all teary weary! A small hug where more than the romantic essence, I loved the fact how she was trying to savior his proximity to the fullest, it was heart twisting!

Flash back:

Finally the pieces of puzzles gathered together and placed in the right sequence unveiling the mystery, you passed with flying colours while doing this part, the past is a shocker equal,wait a sec, may be more than the build up suspense! It has touched me, no, shooked me to the core, and the treatment you have given to the whole sequence! So, suresh the name is, tell me honestly from day one you were sure na that his name is going to be suresh! And then the worst part, what happened is definitely the worst but the way it was presented is definitely the best. The clinical prudence you have showed while penning down the rape sequence has made me so proud of you, what was it? merely three or four lines, yet they leave so deep effect. But what left me dumbfounded was the part after the rape and before the cigarette scars. When on screen, mostly rape sequences doesn't requires a closure, after all the screaming protesting a complete black out and scene ends, but here you have continued the sequence and you have done brilliantly, she lying lifelessly with suresh's turned back, is a shot conjoining the sequence yet they don't lessen the melancholy infact enhances the trauma! And what happened next was... please you're a writer find me an appropriate word. I swear I was badly chocked! Just like naku even to me it took a while to acknowledge his death, the grief of whatever happened and that it could be never taken back was so high! One question does subbu knows about all this? Okay, I don't know what exactly made you kill him right at that moment, but yes this excludes an option of dutta beating the crap out of him definitely and that's what is making me really curious, there's nothing concrete he can now do to comfort her the only way now left is actions and gestures, according to her it was test of her fears and his so claimed "love", for me it's a test of dutta as a whole, a guy so less spoken, so shy in expressing his gestures! But what makes me curious the most is how and what you have planned as dutta's reaction, more than the two characters it's now your test! All the best, it was a stupendous update rose! "ishq tera dard mera" is an absolutely apt title but the update way way too more brilliant I always wanted a molestation for naku in the show,at various points, but now I'm ashamed of myself that I desired so, no matter how much necessary it was to push the story, I guess that's why I was punished in the form of distasteful end the show met! Yes this was a sad update probably the saddest yet highly entertaining, isn't melancholy one of the nine forms of arts! Thank you for the update and haath jodti hun, update soon!

Waiting for the next!❤️

Chapter 19 : Lamhon Ki Guzarish

Slumping on the floor I cursed myself for trusting someone like suresh, who considered me just like his books. He was possessive about them and didn't share them with anybody similarly he was obsessed with me, something which my friends had noticed long time back but I turned a deaf ear to all their warnings. I wished I'd listened to them and stayed away from him then probably all that wouldn't have happened, I wouldn't have been bruised for life, no matter how many times I've washed myself but still I've always felt dirty and impure. Had subalaxmi tai not supported and understood me during that traumatic phase, I would have definitely ended my life.

Few days later I'd come to know that supriya tai's marriage had been fixed with none other than him. If at all there were any dreams left in my eyes, if at all any hope or aspiration resided within me, if at all my heart remembered to beat then with this news all my dreams, hope and aspiration came crashing down and my heart shattered into zillion pieces. But then I realized that a lifeless person like me couldn't illuminate his life, with tarnished mind body and soul I'd nothing to offer him. So it was better to see him happy with the person he'd chosen for himself even if it was not me but my sister, at least she would give him that love he desired and deserved, all that I could never give, I thought she would give it instead of me so I really had high hopes from her. On her wedding I'd wanted to gift her all my unfulfilled dreams along with my unshared feelings and love but she too let me down. That night she'd betrayed not only him but me too, she'd hurt the person who I loved immensely and broken that heart in which I wished to live, probably that's why it wasn't easy for me to forgive and forget what she'd done.

When we both had got married I was absolutely clear in my mind that I would keep my distance with him but with the passage of time I was finding it really hard to prevent him from entering into my domain and then there were times when I myself wanted to run into his arms and cry my heart out, I wished to rest my head on his chest and soak his kurta with my tears but didn't do so coz after knowing the reason behind my grief he would be left heartbroken, which I couldn't bear to see. Several times he lend his hand out to me which I desired to hold and move ahead with him ignoring my past but then that would amount to cheating on him which I couldn't do even in my dreams.

Looking over my shoulder I found him missing, turning around I saw him standing in the balcony with his back facing me. He'd left just as I'd expected, tears welled up in my eyes, I'd lost him once again and this time forever. I knew my past would destroy my present and my future but for how long could I hide it from him? How long could I ignore the love in his eyes and not tell him the reason why I couldn't give back what he wished for? Even if all my thoughts, feelings and dreams were conquered by him, even if every single pore of my being loved him to death still the truth couldn't be changed that I wasn't worthy of him, I was SCARRED

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I looked at my open palms and curled my fingers in rage, he died accidently but I so wished to kill him with my own hands. Looking back I found her slouched figure on the floor, he had hurt her really badly, sucked life out of her and infused bitterness in its place. Clenching my jaws I thought of the misery that he must have inflicted on her, how could anybody be so barbaric?

Turning my back to her I realized that not only he even I'd unknowingly hurt her, had I not stepped into her life she wouldn't have suffered so much and she not even once blamed me for anything. She paid the heaviest possible price for loving me and what did she get in return? a tarnished world because of him and a broken heart thanks to me who proposed to her sister instead of her and would've probably married her had she not eloped that night. I gripped the railing in my fists firmly and thought, how difficult it must have been for her to come down in that state to attend the marriage of someone who she loved immensely and then live with that same person under one roof with the illusion that he loves someone else and not you.

I was living a dark, aimless and empty life, it was she who pulled me out of darkness and showed me light while she on the other hand preferred to stay herself in that darkness. She brought a smile on my lips and wept silently alone in a corner. She healed each and every wound of mine but hid her scars from everyone including me. She breathed life into me but continued to live a lifeless life herself. She preferred to keep her pain to herself and not share it with me fearing that I might blame myself for her sorrows. Had I not confronted her today she would've continued to live this miserable life and even today when she finally broke her silence it was not because she couldn't endure more but because she couldn't see me suffering. Her love was and is selfless. People fall in love but she rose in love.

Sighing deeply I turned around once again and saw her standing with lowered head. If till minutes back what I felt for her was love then now my feelings were far more deep and strong, I didn't wish to name them just wanted to feel them with my soul. Walking in slowly I saw her holding on to my jacket, I wrapped my arms around her slender waist from behind, she got startled and clutched the jacket firmly, I tried to pull it from her hands as there was no need for her to hold on to her past, she resisted but I succeeded in taking it from her and dropped it aside. She attempted to wriggle out of my embrace but I held her firmly and closely she became teary and started weeping , soon her sobs became louder, she struggled to get out of my arms and then let out a loud cry. Closing my eyes I felt that I could never imagine the extent of physical, mental and emotional trauma she must have suffered. My heart burnt and eyes turned moist. Her sobs died out slowly as she vent out the anger, the frustration, the helplessness that she'd held within for months. I softly pressed my lips against each and every scar on her back, I knew what she'd gone through was tragic but I wished if possible to ease out her pain. She gasped with every touch and her body melted within my embrace. I stroked her arms with my hands and rested my chin on her shoulder, she relaxed and leaned against me for sometime controlling her breathing which had become heavy. She turned around slowly and encircled her arms around my neck. Hugging her back I pressed her to myself and buried my face in the crook of her neck ensuring that she was mine and nobody could ever separate us. Nothing could ever come between us. What happened in her past would never affect our present and future. We were each other's shadow and would never leave each other. We were destined to meet, love and be together forever no matter what path of life we followed. Our lives and our stories wouldn't remain unfinished, we'd complete them together.

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He picked me up in his arms, I placed my head on his shoulder and shut my swollen, tired eyes. I felt him putting me down on his bed, a place that belonged only to him. He laid next to me and brushed his fingers through my lose strands tucking them behind my ear. Opening my eyes I found him leaning on me, he was so close to me that I couldn't believe. I always dreamt of a moment when there would be no one between us, no misunderstandings in the air, only love breathed between us and this was the moment. With deep love in his eyes he gazed back at me, I raised my hand to touch him, to ensure that this was indeed true but stopped midway curling my fingers and wondered, did I have the right to feel him? He saw the hesitation in my eyes but didn't do anything to dispel it. He was mine yet I was holding myself back, the moment that I always longed for was just centimeters away from me. Opening my trembling fingers I brought them close to his face and placed them on his cheek, taking a deep breath I began caressing his face and he closed his eyes. I didn't know how to react when he held my hand and pressed it further, a smile crept my lips and my eyes turned moist. He came down on me and rested his head on my shoulder, bringing my arms around his back I inhaled his fragrance which was seeping inside me, there was certainly some magic in that moment. His touch was so tender that the more I felt it, the more I was losing myself to him. Turning my neck I moved my hand to switch off the bedside lamp, I wasn't scared of the darkness anymore, I'd my light in my arms. His love would be my guiding light not just for today but forever. There were no boundations between us and nothing could hold us back now. Lifting his head he glanced at me with a sweet smile playing on his lips, color rose to my cheeks when I thought that from now on my days will start by seeing the sun rising in his eyes and nights will end with engulfing him in my arms. My nights would no longer be moon less because the moon who I always admired would be close to me. I guess he heard what my heart was saying and cuddled against me. Words hardly found a place in our relationship, our eyes always managed to convey the unexpressed feelings to each other. His lips and his hands followed their own path on me but wherever they went they managed to heal the bruises on my soul and body. The warmth of his love was breathing life inside me and at the same time evoking such beautiful emotions whose existence I was oblivious to.

He entwined his fingers with mine and nuzzled my neck, squeezing my eyes shut a lone tear of joy dropped and a trembling smile danced on my lips when our lonely hearts began beating in the same rhythm , when our passionate souls became one and when my incomplete story combined with his and became our eternal love story. Resting his head on my heart he quietly listened to just the two lines which my heart wished to say.

" Meri Adhuri Kahaani , Lo Dastaan Ban Gayi.

Tune Chua Aaaj Aise, Main Kya Se Kya Ban Gayi."

Thanks a lot for showering your love on this and every story of mine. I hope you enjoyed reading it as much as I did writing it and now after more than two years, I seriously wish to put my pen down and rest. So please don't get emotional and teary, I hope you understand me this time and don't emotionally blackmail me. Trust me even I will miss reading your feedback but then I believe all things be good or bad have to come to an end one day.

Take care and will miss you all

Rose

"Lamhon ki guzarish"…………….trust me ye lamhe ye pal hum barsoon yaad karege! Yes, it's surprising that this one turned out to be the last update (I thought may be after one or two) but this doesn't mean that I was wrong that you will at your best this time, indeed you were! Will tell you why, in a while!

I liked the way how the update opened on a broken slouched nakusha, it was very important that this update continues from where the last one ended! What amazed me most is the proper reasoning behind the bitterness of naku towards supriya, due to my prejudice towards supriya it never crossed my mind previously that a bigger picture might be involved behind naku's treatment towards supriya, even babi's several "naku tu toh aisi nahin thi" didn't hit me……….but now I understand, even with slightest of the slight hope of having a love life crashed naku dreamed to see the kind of life she dreamed through supriya's happiness, and she crushed them too! So subbu tai knew! What naku is feeling is beyond cognition! All I can do is offer my sympathy, which I know she won't be needing anymore with dutta beside! What I loved the most in her monologue was the way she expressed her desire to lean on him for support and but always stepped back, only a single sequence was yet to fell in the right place even it too fell, the balm rubbing one, where he touched her face and her outburst in the bathroom, now I know why she said that she can't do this to him, and when she said "him" it was him! And liked (can't say love yaar no matter how much brilliant these sequences are it needs courage to love them) how she left hope that he'll accept her, it's only when we are left hopeless life showers it's blessings!

Dutta's narrative:

As expected he wished to kill him with his own hands, but will not say unexpected cuase I was secretly hoping that he blames himself too for her griefs, but you have jotted down it beautifully, not only he realized that she had payed a heavy price for loving him, but also understood her trauma in which she lived in right from the beginning of their marriage. And the way he comforted her, I won't say that's the only way a PERSON can comfort a victim of assault but it's the only way a HUSBAND can comfort his WIFE! And finally she broke! I loved how she tried to free from him, failed and gave in, loosing against him at this point was probably all she wanted and needed! And the way he kissed her scars, dutta passed his test with full points, being a strong headed guy he is, he managed to let aside the adrenaline rush, and concentrated on naku and only naku.

Naku's narrative: Now this is your master stroke!

I loved the fact that his story completed as soon as they engulfed and whatever rest happened was naku's narrative. It proved that she finally is out of her past life trauma happily accepting her days and nights*coughs* with her soul mate which must be a challenge for her since has been sexually abused earlier! Through out the update you have show cased you excellence in dealing with romance, it was exactly how I like it to be, tender, passionate, genuine, and DEVINE, and without the oomph factor, you were wondering that how many fantasies of mine you to fulfill this was surely one of them. It was a real encounter of what I was been deprived on the screen, and not to forget so pure just like dew drop! Only complain when she caressed his face and he closes his eyes…….don't know why bt it was funny. When she switched off the light, for once it crossed my mind that it would have been better if dutta would have done that but the very next line made me realize it's purpose. Brilliant incorporation. Absolutely brilliant!

Can't say I'm happy that the journey ended, but when it ended I was content, left with a feeling of fullness, not a single trace of regret and remorse about any of the expectations not being fulfilled could be found so that sums up that it was the right time to end it, one of the biggest responsibility writing brings along is to decide when to stop it, and you have managed to accomplish the task with success and prudence, by wrapping it when it was at the pinnacle……hmm calculative move *winks*..lol!

So, now that I'm biding adieu to this stupendously fantastic piece………all I want to say is THANK YOU for providing it to me. Indeed it was a journey! You invested your fullest effort in writing the updates but I could also sense the effort that you invested in creating happy moments in whatever little chance your story line provided. tasha is an iconic couple sparks flowed from the very first update yet when I look back I see two victims of life cajoled by destiny to come together only to become each other's destiny! Destiny made sure they fell in love and they made sure that they rose in love!Yes romance happened in the story but more than that life happened. Your story was no where near the fairy tale we all dream yet your story made me believe that fairly tales do occur! This was about their incomplete story getting complete that's why most of the updates were single narratives, though they rose my thrust to see them together, yet it was one of its own kind experience to witness dutta and nakusha individually through out and being tasha being the end! Your works always make me realize somethings are meant to that way only and this story was no exception! Since the beginning I have bashed naku leaving no means, yet when her journey ends, my heart is full with warm joy and satisfaction for this girl, isn't it quite a success?

I know you're tired and you were scared, but now I want you to, be proud, happy and satisfied. People are so much in love with your writing that even if you've continued your previous style, no body would have complained but you shed your comfort zone and explored a new domain and when you ended a cribbing feeling overpowers me, strong enough prove that you managed to captivate the reader in me to the fullest.

Woah! I wonder did I ever wrote so much in my exams..lol. three time I tried to update my comment and it got deleted thrice, thank god I decided to write my comments on word! Thanks once again, here I put rest on my words, my last comment, will never forget all the good time I had while being associated with this ff!❤️