'Bas Ek Ghuzarish'chapter 21/p60 Conclude

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naina

@krishaa

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Posted: 14 years ago

#11

i will update it asap,but you also do it soon no matter whether it is heroic i will love to read it. 😊😊

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norey

@norey

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Posted: 14 years ago

#12

gosh you are soo good at this. so much truth and emotion in each character like i am watching this on screen, you have left this at mystery,will he marry her to be responsible for her or does something else happen? and i love the descriptive analysis of the story

waiting for the next chapter

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Iridescence

@Iridescence1

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Posted: 14 years ago

#13

Mein Aagai...and so late ...I will be back with comments asap :D

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Bas ek ghuzarish - let me start by saying amazing title...
i can see the FF becoming something quite
amazing ...very nice choice :D

loved the background bit too...
jags u sure noe how to get some excited to read lol

Ok i am thinking with ur FF i will read and comment at same time from now on...it seems to make it more exciting 😆

haha alright chalo lets get on with my lambi wala commenting ...

Chapter 1:
Omg she's already in his house ...aww she is living the unimaginable...I love the intro for her...its like exactly what she felt out in words and her relationship with her 'sahab' she knew there was something more...smoething that sparked the minute their eyes met...the similarity in endurance of pain...how life has treated both badly but only so they can find each other to conquer all odds...how is that for analysis lol ...mind u i have just woke up and am still half asleep...hence the random blabbing 😛...

our koyal is a maid...or is only there because of that but soon she will be so much more than that...well she already is...just needs to figure that out still :P That color is such a burden ...you know to think to live ur whole life in a shell because she has no choice but the hearts desire to hatch...to come out and live a life that can be what she deems normal...but there comes her fears, family, her courage...life is one interesting concept ...the games it plays with you...how every incident affects one's life...like her sister's one act came tumbling down on Naku...but must applaud her strength and will to move forward though her life isn't the way she would want it...keeping her faith in Bappa even through all the hurdles she faces...hoping that one day she will live that life she wanted ...where she will indeed be who exactly she is...

oh jags reading i am getting flashes of all the scenes from LTL between TaSha. When she would talk to him and then say too much...him getting angry and hurting her...him revealing his past...*sigh* missing this show re...

I always felt D's character is a soft one completely on the inside...because its that side of him, the sensitive side that got burnt...and thats what made him go into a shell...creating that hard outer surface for himself so he can no longer feel the pain ...to avoid getting burnt again...the difference between the two he put himself in the shell and she had no choice...but fate will make both see. she will need him to break it for her and he will need her...Naku can see what she feels through him...she can somehow seem to see that side of him that was once soft, happy, bus Dutta. She could sense this man's every feeling...that attraction, that connection had pulled her to him...drowning her in his thoughts...having his face come before her eyes always ...

love hows she's wondering why she dreams of him lol and that to him smiling when all she's ever really seen is his stern front...lekin she has the gift of seeing and feeling that side of him that he buried long back
love is in the air...or more like her dreams lol...but she's right there is no harm in dreaming...imagination is a beautiful thing ...she has fallen for him...

Naku in her room ...washing away her color...and voila hero ka entry...and of course Baaajiii!! chirpy sweet friend ...omg Dutta noticed the lights on at Naku's place...i so want him to walk over there...see her color...lekhin too soon for FR?

Ok so Dutta tells Baaji to go ahead and he goes and gets changed...OMG...he goes...and ahhhaha omg he sees LOL...mera wish poora hogaye ...wow did not expect soo soon jags...but loved it...ahh he heard it alll the past...good ! ...thats wat we want him to hear her pain...share her pain...omg he justs steps in ...and in his own way looks over her and then walks out in silence...to be honest if I was there not knowing what the hell he was thinking i'd be so annoyed that he didnt say anythin...and probably lose sleep thinking what he would think...lol

D's feeling remorse for her ...he can feel the pain...read the pain...strange feeling nahi re...pyaar ki effect lol...oh i love how he remembers her words and doesnt drink ...he is soo falling for her and doesnt even know it ! haha

Chapter 2:

Baaji's brain is working..thinking about the mood in D's room...his pensive-ness lol...but got interrupted..and love his clothing style such vibrant colors for his chirpy nature...Dutta called for them...hmmm...both scared but Naku also feels he'll give her the chance to explain...

so they are all in his room now...love how his actions speak so much...and everyone just leaves...haha even baaji was about to go...lekin he is special ...he gets to stay...loved how Dutta's eyes is on Naku...omg i love DSP's style of approaching this ...so much authority...loved his 'idhar aa' i felt there was not just authority but as if he had the right...lmao i love how he says 'aayi ka bewakoof faisla hai aur tu use bhi baadi bewakoof hai lolll...i can so imagine this scene very well...his style ...his ways...itz alll so endearing lol...he is so irritated with the idea ...haha omg naku not sure whether to defened her mother haha thats hilarious...caught btwn her lovers thoughts and her own mother...

hmmm what has Dutta got planned for punishment...i think maybe to take that soot off! oh jagz loved that the FR is out and done...honestly did not expect u to write it in the first chapter it self but hats off ...wonderfully done...loved every bit especially because everyone stayed true to character

Great Start ...I will defo be waiting for the next update as usual...will come and comment in my style that you have grown quite fond of😆😳...

jagz take care hun...will see ya soon...love you lots 🤗

Edited by daya0628 - 14 years ago

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kiran255

@kiran255

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Posted: 14 years ago

#14

wooo res !

man u nearly killed me k u end beraang

will read and update soon :D

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aamirkhanfan

@aamirkhanfan

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Posted: 14 years ago

#15

this is an awesome ff...loved both the parts...

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rahima a.k.a. pinks

@pinks86

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Posted: 14 years ago

#16

Jags wonderful start to the ff ... love how u take an instance from the sow and continue it in ur own style ... always comment coz of ma b****dy fone ... absolutely loved beranng zindagi ... it woz awesome ... update soon

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Yuvika

@Yuvika_15

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+ 9

Posted: 14 years ago

#17

thnx for the PM...still need 2 catch up with ur old ff bt thrt to read this 1 as u update so i dnt fall behind on this 1...

nice start...so tasha's marriage hasnt happened obviously n her FR has taken place...wel thnk god he heared the entire story unlike in the shw wer he called her a dhokebaaz simply becos she hid the truth for very long...😒

anyway nice update...i wonder wt the punishment wil b?? mayb jus tht she shudnt put the black make up on nemre...

btw is evrything else the sme in ur ff as it was in the shw...i mean at this point in time is supriya-dutta marriage talk on???????? wil supriya b a part of ur ff?

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Nakusha

@Nakusha

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Posted: 14 years ago

#18

loved the new ff ,i have read ur beraang zindagi knew you would come up with something new & interesting ,intigued by the story why does naku life is incomplete inspite of been married to dutta he doesn't love her ,waiting for the update & thanks for the new ff 😊