Originally posted by: blackberry7100g
Hey DD
i used to wonder that why did you name your OS - Waapis to aaogi na...the title always reflects the theme of the story and i couldn't get any hint in the previous parts as to why was it so titled 😕 But now i have got my answers and i can say that i have no more queries !!
[DD]...I am glad but I have to confess BB, when I decided on this title, I knew what I had to write till Part 5, but Part 6 wasnt clear...Infact I could only see till the part where Doctors have given hope on Naku and Dutta lies beside her in the hospital bed, crying....I culdnt see the story after tht and I wondered if I had to end it there....Till I published the 4 parts, the last part wasnt clear....but I knew that there wuld be serious mental and emotional boundaries between Tasha which culd separate them too but Dutta wuld still fight within himself because love wuld keep surging high.....and that is why I chose the dialogue he delivers in the real show when he holds her hand while she was leaving his room after cleaning it......and for poetic flow, I ended with "waapis aaogi na"....It was actually the other way round....😆😆...On emore eg of how things just went right in every way!! 😃😛
Now let's get back to my feedback 😆
1. Firstly, Thank God that she' in coma.....atleast she is alive (and for me, the eternal dreamer 😉😍 i hope you get my point inspite of this rambling !! 😳) I was hoping the worst and i got, somewhat, a better alternative. she will be back ....healthy and alive..you can guess my degree of wishful thinking from the fact that though the OS is over....i absolutely believe that she will come back to dutta and they will remain happily ever-after
[DD] BB, I am not hopeful but certain she wuld come back....u wuld have read my earlier replies that I sincerely believe that Universe does not leave any LS incomplete even if it has a sad ending....All its forces combine to make the LS a whole.....and Naku went into coma with a wrong picture in mind and hence, she has to get up....there are misunderstandings to be erased, new memories to be created, unsaid words to be told, unexpressed feelings to be felt.....Its time for only love and hence she wuld wake up.....and for an eternal dreamer like u, I hope my end justified the eternity.....I always keep the eternity in mind and hence this end came in my mind.....The fact that he wuld wait for her till his lase breadth, was eternity for me!!!
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Dutta gets angry at the last words, "Meri saansein chal rahi hai na? Toh Naku bhi zinda hai aur woh mere paas aayegi!", saying this he throws everyone out.[/quote]
Bang on....i expected dutta to react like this only and you ''meri ummeedoon par khari utri"..Thank you so much for making dutta remain true to 'my perceptions' and 'my expectations' of his character 🤗 Not only here but many times in the OS he behaves as i would have expected him to act in such a situation !! [DD] Oh!! thank god...This is what I have been scared of that Dutta shld not slip...I wuld have never forgiven myself for a heavy slippage!!!
"Tere bina mein kuch nahi Naku! Mere se achcha yeh tu jaanti hai! Yeh anjaam nahi ho saktaa humaare pyaar ka!"
"Humaara kahaani yahaan toh nahi khatam ho sakti na Naku..."
Jab jeene ki aadat hee tujhse hai, toh yeh Dutta akelaa maregaa bhi kaise? Bol Naku, Bol?"
"Aayi, Aur naatak nahi! Bus kar ab!" 👏"Taayi, Mein samajh saktaa hai ki Jhumri kahaan se aayi. Manaa math karnaa, Jhooth mujhse bardaasht nahi hai "........."Bus Taayi, aur kitnaa girogee?" ...... "Pyaar? Tu kyaa jaanti hai Pyaar Taayi? Tere paas Naku nahi hai na."
Kaash dutta apna yeh tubelight hone ka drawback jaldi se chod de...chaahe woh serial mein ho yaa kisi FF mein yaa phir kisi OS mein !! Uske dimaag ki batti thodi jaldi jag uthe 😉 😆 aur woh hamesha hi aise sensibly behave kare !! 😆
[DD] 😆😆😆...I swear BB!! But I guess its a normal human tendency, u behave sensibly or realize someone's importance when that person has gone away from u!!!!!....and in this case, Naku is still his companion but yet not with him...and yet, she is still the guiding factor....even in the comatose state, he is just gng by what she wuld have done if she was breathing, alive in front of him.....thats becomes his reference for his decisions because as he tells Kala, now, he knwos whats rigth and have accepted it, because he saw the truth in Naku's eyes, just the fraction before she fell!!!
I think i have explained what i meant by saying that dutta remains true to 'my perceptions' and 'my expectations' of his character. 👍🏼 👍🏼
2.[quote] "Theek hai, mein bhi nahi khayegaa!" He closes the box and keeps it on the table. He gives her an angry stare and then suddenly the tears start flowing from his eyes [/quote] ......brilliant 👏
Dutta makes up with DP for nakku's sake and calls him Baba !....awww...👍🏼 But it is equally sad to see dutta in so much pain 😲 😔
[DD] I know BB....I too was crying when these scenes used to come in front of me but in that state I think I used to write better!!!....
3. Dutta proceeds on to leave PN and start a new life with nakku.....Good one 👍🏼 ....and he also asks DP to come and stay with them 👍🏼 and baaji and roops too follow them ....wow....lovely .... 👍🏼
[DD] Glad, u liked all the decisions he takes on that scene...He basically fills his new life, atmosphere and house with positive ppl and love....He finally makes it a home!!!
4. And lastly,
[quote]He sighs deeply, leaves her hand and holds her face, "Waapis Aaogi na?"[/quote]
Beautiful !! 👏 ......yes she will, surely she has to come 😍
Thank you DD for such wonderful fictional stuff !! Looking forward for more such stuff 😊
[DD] She would come...I can see her waking up!! I just can! ❤️
P.S. 1. Wonderful VM shonaa.. 👏... loved it...the song was perfect ...the scene selection was also brilliant....they surely complemented each other and were perfect !! 👍🏼
2. @ DD the pictures were perfect this time too ! 👍🏼 [DD] Thanks....as I said, everthign went right! 😃
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