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Whoa whoa whoa what's happening?? 😲 Not sure I understand that last scene at all, which means you must must must put me out of my confusion by posting the next part asap 😉
More of last scene will continue in the next part.😊
Very powerful opening scene. I could just perfectly visualize Abhi on the balcony and Pragya at the dresser, because you gave all the right establishing details. I could feel the tension between them as Abhi approaches, and I love how you convey the inner tumult they each have due to their attraction. The almost-kiss was just oooh beyond words !!!
Aww thanks, I am glad it came out well. I wanted to convey just that.
...and the jerk-back-to-reality with Abhi's harsh line was also wow, but in the opposite way So intrigued to see how Abhi comes out of his tortured state. He sounds like he's in agonies of attraction combined with jealousy...which has to be an explosive combination at some point!
This is the part that I am finding so hard to write.. how do you get Abhi out of this?
I also like how you convey Pragya's attraction to Abhi; I'm convinced that she feels strongly about him too, even though in this part we don't get to know as much about her inner struggles as Abhi's.
Pragya is attracted too, will clarify her further in the next update.
So glad to see more of your fic!! Thanks for posting, hoping for more soon 😊Thank you, Mina.
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