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parmarA

@parmarA

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

Ashutosh aaj puri tarah se bechain tha.Aaj usne nidhi ke diary ke aise panne padhe the jisne uske dil me hulchul paida kar di thi.Ab woh us diary ko pura padhna chahta tha taki nidhi ke haal-e-dilka andaja laga sake. Mallika ka aana: Aaj dr ashutosh ka accident hua hai.kitni bechain hui thi main.Sab meri galti thi.Kya jaroorat thi muze unhe ice-cream lane bhejneki?Lekin ab woh theek hai.Bhagwan ka shukriya karna chahti hoo,jinhone meri zindagi muze wapis kar di. Aaj muze pata chala ki dr Ashutosh ka accident kaise hua?unhone muze bataya ki dr mallika unhe dikhi thi joh puri tarah fute haal thi.Uska pichha karte hue yeh wahaa tak pahuche aur accident karwa baithe.Main bhi kitni pagal hu na?dr ashutohs ne muze mallika ko dhundne ki responsbility di aur maine woh utha bhi li.Kyon maine apne pairo par kuhadi mar li?lekin unki khushi me toh meri khushi thi.Socha tha ki unki dost hai.Use jaroorat hogi sahare ki?lekin usne toh aake mera dil hi tod diya. Dr Ashutosh aajkal meri taraf beparwaah ho gaye hai.Unka pura dhyan bus dr mallika par reheta hai.Main bistar par akeli karwate badalti reheti hoo aur woh dr Mallika ke kamareme sote hai.Puri raat uske liye jagte hai.Uskee choti kar dete hai aur main dur khadi dekhti reheti hoo.Kabhi kabhi woh muze paraye lagne lagte hai.woh mallika unka peechha hi nahi chhodti hai.Shayad dr ashutosh ke dil me guilt hai abhi.Lekin in sabme meri galti kya hai?yahi ki maine dr ashutosh se pyaar kiya?unke har jajbaat ka,har dard ko batneki koshish ki?ya fir yeh ki mera pyaar unki 12 saal ki dosti ke aage haar gaya? Raat ke andhere me unhone muze ghar se chale jate nahi roka.Unhone yeh janane ki koshish bhi nahi ki ki mera kahi accident toh nahi hua?main ghar theek se pahuchee ya nahi?Main use shadi karke pure saat vachano me bandhkar laya tha,kya .shayad tab unke dost ke aage meri jaroorat nahi thi unhe.Lucknow ke sadako pe akeli bhatakti rahi thi main.Jaise main anath hoo,duniya me mera koi nahi hai.Yeh kya kam tha ki unhone khud Dadi bua se kahaa ki aap le jaiye apni bachi ko.Muze dard nahi hota kya?shadi ke baad beti baap ke liye parai ho jati hai.Lekin kya sasural uska apna hota hai?pati jab keheta hai ki tum ghar se nikal jao toh uske dil pe kya gujarati hai yeh toh pati kabhi nahi sochta.Kyon?humara asli ghar kaun sa reh jata hai?Aur fir jab main jane lagi toh unhone muze rok liya ki woh ghar chhodkar janeki choice mere pas nahi hai.Muze khushi hui.Lekin meri khushi jyada din teeki nahi.Subah hote hi unhone muzse rudely behave karna shuru kiya,jaise maine koi jurm kar diya ho.Unhone muze ghar chhodneko kahaa tha,lekin sari galti meri thi. Maine unke dost ko ghar pe rehene diya.Lekin dr mallika ne kya kiya?lekin mallika ke liye main koi mayne nahi rakhti thi lekin dr ashutosh ki toh main biwi thi na?Wheel chair par bhi mallika uske gale lagti thi aur woh apne dono haath uske gale me daalke use tasalli dete the.Kya woh muze maaf kar dete agar maine kisi aur ke sath aisa kiya hota toh? Mallika ne jaanbuzkar humare shadi ke photograph tod diya.Lekin tab bhi inhone muze samazaneki koshish ki ki woh bimaar hai.Lekin un bikhare hue kagaj ke tukadone mera dil tod diya.Aaj bhi woh yaad aata hai toh dil anjaan aashankao se ghir jata hai.Mallika kaise haq se unhe le jati thi,aur woh chale bhi jate the.Unhone ek baar bhi mere bareme nahi socha ki main kya chahti hoo.Mallika ne muze marne ke liye mere khaneme zeher milaya tha yeh baat maine kahi thi tab bhi unhone mallika ki baat pe bharosa kiya meri nahi.Kya unko kabhi bhi meri baat pe bharosa hoga?ya main aise hi har baar pariksha deti rahoongi? Ha,mallika ke jane ke baad bhi jab unhe pata chala ki mallika pregnanat hai.Woh uska dhyan rakhne lage.Usse milne bhi lage.Aur fir wohi hua.Hum juda ho gaye.Lekin unhone tab bhi mallika ki care karna nahi chhoda.Muze manane ke liye unka ego bichme aa jata thalekin unki dost ki madad karne nahi? Haan,yeh baat hai ki unhone muze bahoot pyaar diya.Aajkal woh muze bahoot pamper karte hai,pyaar karte hai.lekin woh bhuli yade kabhi kabhi yad aati hai toh dil ro padta hai.Zindagi ke kuchh panne hume kitne bebus banate hai?apne apne nahi rehete paraye ho jate hai. Hope you like it

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@ariyadasa

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

Sorry alka for late reply dear visit the IF but for a short period read ur os but thought to reply little later once again a big big sorry so busy alka how ever manage my time to come for trending and visit the IF 😳

First of all i should say i cant digest this Malika i dont hope this malika will not be there for season2 😡

Any way ur os made me to think about the memories of KTLK 😛

really some time i feel some of the KTLK concepts were presence there 😛

really love to see so many os of u 😛

I like ur OS specilly the charming writing and light romantic gesture 😳

love it so much alka go a head dear love to see a long ff from u as i know u can do that take ur time 👏

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rayafan17

@rayafan17

Stunner

Posted: 12 years ago

Great work alkaben - the worst track mallu returns but u have written it so well from Nidhi pov.

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mudraswathi

@mudraswathi

Stunner

Posted: 12 years ago

Kitna acha likha Alka...👏 main waapas ek aur baar padhungi...

bilkul scene mein chali gayi hoon...😳

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Aardhan

@aardhan

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

Once again very nicely expressed Alka. The show and KPji were very unfair with Nidhi's character during adn after this track... they never showed Nidhi's feelings properly, her doubts, fears, lack of confidence, nothing. She could have died and no one bothered about it. How being humiliated again and again and made to feel as if she was useless at doing anything simply because she was young has affected her...

Ashu never said even a single sorry and Nidhi simply forgave him. It would have been really good for the show if they had dealt with the after effects of MAllika as a separate track. Then the viewers would have understood why Nidhi wanted time to have a baby, why she needed time to be able to trust Ashu to the extent to start a family with him... I am so happy you are expressing all what the show failed to do...

KPji was so obsessed with Mallika that he failed to think logically about the other characters. And then he showed Ashu's yearning for a baby so everyone understood and feltt bad but he did not show the other side of the coin, that is Nidhi.

Love this OS series Alka...Nidhi ki Diary seies...😊👏

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ttrocks

@ttrocks

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

Once again an awesome chapter Alkaben... too good!! Have no words to express how heartwrenching it was to read what nidhi felt during mallu bhootni track... Each and every line that u have written, I wanted to see in ktlk show as well but all that we got was Ashu cribbing about his own biological child and then pregnant mallika and alsosome ppl came up with stories of satisfying Ashu's fatherhood desires in vicarious ways if Nidhi wasnt ready to give him his biological child etc.etc.😡😡😡 The story lost its original beauty at that point and then it never returned back... only SK-KK's charm pulled the show till its end.

How I wish, they should have explored Nidhi's psyche over mallika's gestures and Ashu's support to her... the same Ashu always trusted mallu but never trusted her despite he knew that Nidhi is the girl who selflessly gave him everything that she had in life and he lacked in his life... 😭😭😭😭 Agreed that Mallika instigated him but he too had lost his senses when he drove Nidhi out of his house in the middle of the night and when he combed mallika's hair... U have depicted Nidhi's emotions very very perfectly here... 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Ashu gave so much emotional pain to Nidhi but never officially apologized to her and still she never resented him. But when it was the time to start a family, she firstly decided to become independent in her career and asked for 2 years. The ppl who bashed Nidhi at that time, never bothered to think how she must have felt when Ashu believed mallika & didnt stop Nidhi from leaving the house in the middle of the night. How I wished to see the mallu bhootni track from Nidhi's angle also... what she wanted, what she got and how she felt then... How could have she trusted her husband for her child when she herself was not feeling secure in her marriage... And then KPji flung preggy mallu to us and then all those stupid tracks... AshNi separation, amar-aahna-bajrangi etc. etc. Nidhi's character was the most beautiful and had a lot of potential to evolve further but sigh... the writer never did justice to her character... after preggy mallu came khushi and that was it... the last straw on camel's back...

Hope with season2, they explore these things + Baba's ka makaan track. Please write about BKM issue - what nidhi felt as a motherless girl when she saw her father struggling for his life then... Ashu ko jab saati baatein pata chal hi rahi hai toh phir ghar bechte waqt Nidhi ke dil per kya beeti thi woh bhi toh pata chale... Please continue next part asap... am in love with ur OS... Cannot wait for next part.😃

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suku_07

@suku_07

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

It was superb Alkaben.. Really you potrayed Nidhi's thought so well.. Each and every line showed Nidhi's pain now want to see Ashu's reaction on this too..

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achiever

@achiever

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

Nidhi's state of mind during Mallika's incidents very well put..

thnk god Ashu read this and hopefully undrstood ke chahe hum aage badh jaaye.. shayad.. ghav pe sorry bhi bol de.. lekin kuch ghav itne gehre hote hai ki.. shayad un kamzor palon mein vo ubhar kar aa jaate hai.. dil ko rula jaate hai.. a grave mistake is grave mistake.. if it has hurt deeply, it cannot b undone.. vo kehte hai na crack reh jaati hai..

Ashu-Nidhi have moved on from Mallika's incident bt still Nidhi's insecurities and fears and distrust is based on solid facts tht Ashu failed to reassure her from.. till he does tht.. Nidhi's cringing on Mallu's name will remain..

**sigh.**.KPji ki sakhi!

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parmarA

@parmarA

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ariyadasa
Sorry alka for late reply dear visit the IF but for a short period read ur os but thought to reply little later once again a big big sorry so busy alka how ever manage my time to come for trending and visit the IF 😳

First of all i should say i cant digest this Malika i dont hope this malika will not be there for season2 😡

Any way ur os made me to think about the memories of KTLK 😛
really some time i feel some of the KTLK concepts were presence there 😛
really love to see so many os of u 😛
I like ur OS specilly the charming writing and light romantic gesture 😳
love it so much alka go a head dear love to see a long ff from u as i know u can do that take ur time 👏

thanks ariya.As you know me i am very imptient person.So don't think that i can write long ff.So happy with os.But will try to go with long ff