FF Completed: Hurdles and Hesitation (Index: Pg 1)

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vasanthi16

@vasanthi16

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#191

Mish...a very good ending...though like AF said am greedy for more...need to read it once more time in silence. Will give u a review after that.

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Mimoha

@Mimoha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#192

Hi there. 👍🏼 for the update. Quite a dense part. Need to process it a bit more before commenting.

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RRANAMIKA

@RRANAMIKA

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#193

yaar wel written . nidhi's answer was really amazing . i felt as i'm watching a movie.
tooo goood
but very sad coz it ended.

hoping for anothr ff sooon...

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Bhanu

@Cherishh

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#194

Hi Mish, very well written.

Ashu and Baba's conversation was decently done...

How you handled the house issue was real peaceful...it potrayed Ashu's maturity real good...

The way Nidhi explained how she loved Ashu was heart touching...

Overall, it was superb...but am sad and not able to digest that it has ended...I would have loved if you would have shown a little more togetherness of AshNi, their marriage and life after it...you know just like all I am also too greedy...

Well considering everything, you have achieved the task you have taken up to make us all happy...Eagerly waiting for ur next FF and would definitely try to comment after reading it again... if i come back from my dreamland of ur FF soon...keep writing...

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ApoorvaFan

@ApoorvaFan

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#195

Sharmistha,

This is the key part and you have dealt with it very well. Baba and Ashu convo was good. Baba was straight and Ashu also showed maturity required for his age...

Especially we expect a great maturity from Doctors because they keep seeing births and deaths so closely... Your Ashu could stand up to the expectations of readers in that aspect.

I liked the way Nidhi understood the whole situation also...

you have handled the house issue in a more mature way . Congrats for that ...

All together this FF has left a very good impression on mind. A little improved version than DK...

Not like the crap they are cooking in the show...

Please tell us what you will be writing next? You made us get habituated to your beautiful writing so please think of another FF and come to us ASAP...

Otherwise we may start sending Missing You PMs to you every day...

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Shari30

@Shari30

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#196

Finally am sitting down for a proper read now... as u said before all good things must come to an end

first impression first is that we have reached the end of a wonderful voyage... we saw the discovery process... the hurdles from the self and others , the hesitations inner as well as circumstances made and untimately the union the acceptance of two souls meant to be...

detailed view to follow

👍🏼❤️🤗
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Mimoha

@Mimoha

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#197

Hey Sharmishtha. Felling happy as well as sad. Sad that this FF has ended but happy to read the pleasant end. I love 'and they lived happily ever after' endings.

Nose ring was a cute gift. Your A has an observant eye. Who says one can not be romantic at 42!

In DK, Baba assumed that N's Nana wanted to bring his family closer or rather bring Ahmer and Zoya closer and, this alongwith his guilt was also one of the reasons that he willed the house to Zoya. I thought that was a big assumption since there was no evidence. Perhaps this assumption was necessary as the series was small and, they did not have time to explore Baba's objections. I like that in this FF Baba did not take that view and, felt that the age gap as well the hatred that A was carrying for N make this relationship a non starter. This sounds more rational.

Absolutely loved this - "Jitni baar use khud se door kiya, uske hothon ki hansi hi gayab ho gayi. Uski khushi ke liye usse door rahna chahta tha, lekin uski khushiyan hi gayab ho gayi." You have expressed it so beautifully. Loved Baba's response and A's counter response too.

Dr. A coming to know about the owner of the house first was an interesting deviation from DK, KTLK and your earlier FF. His conversation with Baba was touching. Loved the hopelessly in love A nodding his head asking N not to cry, looking at her lovingly and thinking that she is a doll. Beautifull.

Loved N's description of how she fell in love with A.

To summarise, mazaa a gaya. You did an absolutely brilliant job of all the deviations you took from the original DK.

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ruchi21

@ruchi21

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#198

Hey Great update yaar, the end was awesome, finaly baba accept ashni relation, u r very good writer.

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sharmishtha02

@sharmishtha02

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Posted: 13 years ago

#199

Thanks a lot everyone. Really glad that you all liked the ending. 🤗

Unable to reply individually right away. But will do so soon 😊 Till then everyone who has postponed the detailed reviews, please do write them. 😛

I know many of you would have wanted it to continue, but 1) All good things come to an end 2) I didn't have any different story to tell than what I have already told in my earlier FF DK (Adaptation). If you haven't read that one, you might want to. The links is in the first post of this thread.

Love you all

Mish

And hey - a little bit of self promotion once again. 😃 If you liked my FFs and you like reading even beyond FFs, you might want to have a look at my recently released novel "Moving On". As it happens, in the novel also we have the love story of an older man with his much younger employee. But age difference is not the focal point of the story. The links for purchase are in my signature.

The facebook page is at http://facebook.com/MovingOnTheBook

The book is under my real name. But hush... Don't mention this identity/name of mine there. This is FF specific identity 😆

Edited by sharmishtha02 - 13 years ago

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Cathy25

@Cathy25

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Posted: 13 years ago

#200

Part 7 :

Oh, so Ashu was ready to take a step forward, and this time Nidhi was the one who wanted out, considering what all happened at the wedding. How sad for Ashu when he heard that, but then again, I understand Nidhi's POV too.

Love how Arman is always around and gives solid advice to Ashu to help him clear his head.

Part 8:

Very touchy scene at the hospital where Nidhi was so worried and Ashu comes up with the Jannat dialogue. 😳 Also, liked how Ashu came about his realization at the time of accident, that this is it, and his only wish was to have Nidhi by his side.

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