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Posted: 13 years ago
Ashutosh realized what she did.

loves the way he can read her knowingly ya unknowing he is attuned to all the changes in her no matter how minute it is.

"Nidhi. Ye umra ka faasle sirf ek number nahin hai. Ye insaanon ko bahut alag bana deta hai. Aur ye aisa faasla hai jo ki samay ke saath aur badhta hi jaata hai. Main aur boodha hi hone waala hoon samay ke saath," he laughed slightly.

"Aur main to Nidhi Button Verma hoon na. Meri umra to samay ke saath kam hone waali hai. Kyon Dr. Ashutosh?"
humor yet so meaningful, their doubts so visible behind the attempts at humor.

They located a slightly empty corner in the ballroom. They found one as more people were interested in the disco than in the ball dance. But once they were ready to dance, it became awkward. They had to hold each other close. Ashutosh hesitated. Nidhi smiled nervously, but finally they did start dancing. Or rather trying to dance!

Ashutosh slowly tried to show her the steps, but she found it difficult to coordinate and once almost tripped because she moved in the opposite direction than what was expected. Ashutosh had to hold her tight to stop her from falling. She giggled at her mistake.

"I think it was a bad idea," she said still laughing slightly. Somehow their awkwardness was washed away in her giggle.

highlight for me, stepping in their own world, almost saying to hell with others, you can see ashu throwing caution to the wind, yet as ever reality comes back running.

Ashutosh didn't know what to say. She was too young, too naive to know what people assumed about the lifestyle of a single man of his age.

so typically ashu, his protective instincts up to the maximum when it concerns her, his pain at what he sees his inability to protect her and in explaining what happened he would be hurting her, that is doing what he just does not want to

"I am sorry. I am sorry for putting you through this."
you have to love the girl here, as always he comes first... her first reaction is for him, how he must have felt... thats whats called love... the other before the self

Ashutosh looked on helplessly and sadly. He hoped and prayed that she would be all right.
awww that one i so could see MB reminded me of the party scene when he saw nids crying in anji's arms

But she concluded that he was right about their relationship. They were not meant to be together. At least he wasn't meant to be in her life. There was nothing she could do about her feelings. But she could at least ensure that he did not have to be in difficult or awkward situation because of that.

painful yet powerful, i love it...

And as usual 👍🏼 looking forward for next installment from my fav writer🤗


she was feeling guilty towards Ashutosh. Because of her, his reputation in his social circle could also be ruined.
echo... both having the feeling that the other would suffer from an association wid each other...

And everytime, it had been in his hands to bring the smile back on her face.
Don't you love the guy for that the cause yet the solution

He had wanted her to stay away from him for the sake of her well-being and future. Not due to the feelings of shame or guilt. No. It wouldn't do for him to leave her to her means. But what would he do?

awww dont you feel like giving him a hug bless the man... his feelings yet so much pain

Tumhare patients ko tumhari zaroorat hai Nidhi
reminds me of ahmeer comments about the kids on the wards when baba was sick and zoya wanting time off

😛


Edited by oaz30 - 13 years ago
Shari30 thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
Nidhi's respect for Ashutosh grew by leaps and bounds after this. But she concluded that he was right about their relationship. They were not meant to be together. At least he wasn't meant to be in her life. There was nothing she could do about her feelings. But she could at least ensure that he did not have to be in difficult or awkward situation because of that.(to me this is the fighter back... they cannot be together but from afar she will make sure he is safe )

painful yet powerful. Love the way the love is presented... she may have bowed down for now but there is hope

great work as usual👍🏼
😍 dreaming of ashu till the next update

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Posted: 13 years ago
Hello Sharmishtha, as usual nice work.

When even Nidhi thought that, "They were not meant to be together" just was an unexpected turn at least for me, never thought of this aspect of the story and am looking forward that where this would all lead to. I would say great going, keep coming...
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Posted: 13 years ago
I expected you to bring a twist where N would reconsider this relationship for A's sake but this is amazing stuff. Love the way this FF is developing. Real action is in the forum, show is just a distraction.

Sharmishtha, apologies for my over enthusiasm but have you considered posting a link of this FF on Nitesh Pandey's FB page? MB's page is a mess but comments on NP's page have better visibility plus he goes through all of them. He may be just a supporting actor but from his posts it appears that he has MB's ears and, MB may not have a say in storyline but he has access to the right people. Waiting for the next update.


Edited by Mimoha - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
A bit shocked to see nidhi's conclusion that they were not meant to be together... are u planning to separate them or something else? 😲
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: vasanthi16

Mish this update was marvelous ...no words to describe my feelings after i read this...it was 👍🏼👏 raised to a thousand...


The problems what they will face was so fantastically written by u...this is what is needed for Nidz who thinks they can conquer all just becoz they r in love. This has made her think and i think she will emerge stronger from this lesson.

Ashu of course was aware that this would happen if they step out together.
But he too being in love forgot it in the flow and went along with Nidz.

Beautiful...eagerly waiting how they will come out of this difficult situation and realize that they cannot stay away from each other.

PS ...this was the jhatka u were talking abt...good one Mish...so realistic !! 🤗


Thanks Vasanthi 😊 You have summarized what is happening here more clearly than I had thought while writing. It is very satisfying as a writer!
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: RRANAMIKA

i felt so sad abt nidhi and ashu.

u have written the scene really well.

last part where nidhi's answer to mallika 's very good.
i liked it.

continue soon




Thanks dear. 😊 If you feel sad about N & A, purpose achieved 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: apurvafan

Sharmistha,

This is the best part till now in this FF. You have picked up a very genuine point to high light the age difference and social circumstances... Which our CVs are not able to do . They have to learn from you. Hair dye and spects are not the issues.. These are the kind of issues...
I also have another experience. When my skip level boss was moving around so close with a fresher, I never gave any meaning to that relation because they had 12 years age difference. I could never sense they are in a relation because we will never think people with such age gap can be in a relation. Though I see them together in office canteen or helping each other in work, my brain never read it ... When they announced they are getting married I was taken aback... If such close interaction exists between colleagues, we will surely feel the vibes... But here because they both are having huge age difference, my soft cultured brain never analyzed it ...They used to end up in funny situations because no body was seeing them with doubt, including their parents...
I rambled all this because it may be useful for you in creating any scene or situation...


Thanks AF 😊 And the incident you have narrated is interesting and even funny. Probably I can use this premise in my next FF whenever it is written. Where family refuses to believe her when she tells them that Ashu is the man in her life. 😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
good going, second FF with different aspect great.
Liked it very much. now looking forward how both resist themselves further.
eagerly waiting for the next update.
In this chapter i liked the way ashu proceeded further by reaching to nidhi when needed and supporting her infront of mallika.
great going.😊
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: oaz30

Nidhi's respect for Ashutosh grew by leaps and bounds after this. But she concluded that he was right about their relationship. They were not meant to be together. At least he wasn't meant to be in her life. There was nothing she could do about her feelings. But she could at least ensure that he did not have to be in difficult or awkward situation because of that.(to me this is the fighter back... they cannot be together but from afar she will make sure he is safe )

painful yet powerful. Love the way the love is presented... she may have bowed down for now but there is hope

great work as usual👍🏼
😍 dreaming of ashu till the next update


A big 🤗 to my most detailed, prompt and faithful reader. 😊 Thanks a lot Sharifa. Love how you have noticed all those minute details! 😳

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