*Teri Aankhein* - FF pt4pg5 P searches H

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hello all😊
I m starting a fanfic and below is the small description of the characters.
Please do forgive my mistakes since this is just my second FF and the first over here.😊

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Heer : She is a sweet, simple yet beautiful girl who lives with her parents. She is very talented and is excellent in different fields like painting, music,stitching etc... Heer is a music teacher who takes classes every day for a small grp of children. But still her parents are tensed for her future since Heer is a blind girl.



Prem : He is a smart, handsome and a dashing guy. He is a matured guy and helps his father in his business.



Meher : She is Heer's caretaker but is like a younger sister to Heer. She has been living with Heer since almost chidhood and nw she shares every small thing with her.



Preet : He is Prem's only best friend.


** remaining characters will be added as the story progress.


So what is in store for Heer and Prem?

Will they both ever meet each other?

Even if yes, will Prem accept Heer?

To know more, read the updates😉


I ll continue with the story only if i get good response.

Thanks.😊


Updates

Part1 > Page1
Part2 > Page2
Part3 > Page3
Part4 > Page5

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miggi2 thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Looks interesting.Plzz post it soon. 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
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yes seems interesting please continue we are waiting 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
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ohh...sounds excitingggggggg!!!!!!!!!! 😃 😳..contine soon!!!!!!! 😉 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
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^^^^ oh thanks a lot everyone .. i ll post the first part soon 🤗
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Part 1

At Heers' house:

It is the main room and there r 3 ppl who have visited heer's house.Heer was sitting besides Meher and her parents were sitting in front. Suddenly the lady got angry and burst out..

Lady: yeh kaisa mazak kar rahe ho tum hamare saath? aap ko kya lagta hai ki ham aapki beti ko apne bete ke liye swikar(accept) kar denge?

Her husband : balraj bhai sahab ... hamein aapse yeh umeed nahi thi ...

lady : aapne hamein sirf heer ki tasveer dikhai par yeh nahi bataya ki aapki beti to dekh nahi sakti ..woh to andhi hai!

heer gets lil upset listening this .... meher takes her inside.... and heers parents r all in tears ....

teji : aisa mat kaho behanji .... hamari heer me saare acche gun (talents) hai .... mujhe yakeen hai aapke bete ko pasand aayegi ... aap Sunil se hi pooch lijiye ... hai na Sunil beta (asking her with expectations)

Sunil : (cudnt say anything at first but lking at her mom) nahi maa sach keh rahi hai ... har insaan ko chahiye ki uski life partner har kadam par uska saath de magar aapki beti khud ka saath nahi de sakti to mera saath kya de payegi....

lady : chalo bete ... (she graps her sons hand and leaves)

Teji cries in front of balraj ..

teji : hey bhagwan ... yeh kya ho gaya ....

suddenly they heard some voice of a vase breaking in heers room ..they rush over there....

Balraj : meher bete kya hua .... (meher was tieing a band aid to heer on her hand)

heer : kuch nahi papa bas yeh vase tut gaya to lag gaya ..meher patti laga rahi hai na .. fikr na karo ....

teji : meher dhyaan rakha karo heer ka ...

heer : bas bas maa ab tum chillana shuru nahi karna tumhari sehat kharab ho jayegi ...

teji : ab tu meri sehat ko chod ..apna khayal rakh ... ham dono to thode hi dino me bhagwan ke paas chale jayenge ..pataa nahi teri shadi dekhna naseeb hogi ya nahi ....(she had tears in her eyes, she comes near heer and hugs her)

heer : aise kaise chod de ..ab to aapko meri aur meher ki shadi bhi dekhni hai aur hamare bacche bhi aapko sambhalna hai (she tries to console her mom) dekhna ek din ek rajkumar aapki beti ko aapse bohat door lekar jayega

teji : najane woh rajkumar kahan hai (she kisses her forehead)

***
Scene switches:

its a very big field where a guy covered in a helmet is shown on a bike ... he lks besides him where there is another rider and with a bit of anger on his face starts the bike with superspeed ... vrooommmmmmmm.....
all the public strt shouting PREM! PREM! PREM! PREM!
atlast Prem wins the race and removes the helmet, dressed in black jeans and T shirt with a black blazer jacket he starts walking bkwards ..... girls start running behind him and few even asks for his autograph...

Prem comes near his mother, whom he is very closed to and takes her blessing ....his mother hugs him and gives him a small kiss on his forehead..... his father is nowhere to be found.

Preet: (standing just beside prems mom) hey dost .... congratulations once again (hugs him tightly) whats ur plan today??

Prem : kuch nahi bas .... dad ke saath kaam par jana hai ....

prems mom : chalo ghar chalein ? warna tumhare dad sawaal karne lagenge...

prem : haan chalo .. lets move ... preet i ll meet u in the office .. ok ... bye ..

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Ok so i have started with a small part. hope it was nt too bad. please feel free to comment or criticize so tht i may knw where i m wrong ....

thanks!
Edited by talkativetaurus - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Awww Heer in ur ff cant seee =(
Her eyes are her best feature tho..
But ur ff is different...interesting first part and Prem ka intro seemed nice too..
Would like to see how u shape up this story... Seems like a touching one!👏
Posted: 17 years ago
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very interesting!!do contine..dying to read more!!

shabz
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Faith-

Awww Heer in ur ff cant seee =( yes she cant see
Her eyes are her best feature tho.. well thts true but she has eyes only she cant see the world ...who knows she will get them bk :)) dont worry :))
But ur ff is different...interesting first part and Prem ka intro seemed nice too..i m used to make such kinds of ff only ....
Would like to see how u shape up this story... Seems like a touching one!👏 thanks a lot faith!

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: shabo24

very interesting!!do contine..dying to read more!!

shabz



thanks .... will continue soon .... i m just waiting for good response ... if no body reads then whats the use of writing ?!

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