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Posted: 11 years ago
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I'm sure you guys must be in shock by now...😆Priya and OS..how odd combination.. now dont look outside to check from which side sun is up today..😛 let me tell you..i have checked it..it is from est only..🤣now if you wonder what happnd to me😛,well, there is a long story behind this story.😈 i actually write this 2 years back..🤔 for vrushu's birthday on 2012.😳.since this was such a mess, i didnt feel like posting so tried siggy..😛and that was the starting of my siggy making . 🤓
Unfortunately i revealed this to giya during FB chat a few months back and from that day she was literally spamming my inbox to post this..😡 so if u feel like throwing tomatoes and chappals pls throw them to her..😛 complete blame for the torture goes to giya😛😛
so here it is..

Just fall

6 year old heer was standing in front long swing of the public park, looking the swing like it was a snake ready to bite her. How badly she want to sit on it and enjoy swinging, but she is always afraid of falling. What if she fall from it? She will directly land on the gravel on ground and she knows that it won't be a good experience.

"Why are you standing here? Come and sit on swing. I will push it"

She looked back to face 8 year old prem, her lalit chahu's son, smiling widely at her.

"na..I don't like swings"

She replied shaking her heads.

"You don't like swing? But you always like it when dad swings you up and down with his hands" he frowned

ofcourse she love it. her lalit chauchu is such a sweet "Chachu won't let me fall. But this swing will" she said as a matter of fact

"What?" little prem asked confusingly

"I will fall duffer..And if I fall I will hit on that big stones" little heer finally said it rolling her eyes. How come his intelligent chachu's son becomes so dumb?

"You won't..." he said in calm voice

"What if I?" She questioned

"then..." prem said after thinking a moment "then..I will catch you.."

"Really?? promise??" little heer asked all excited, extending her little palm

"Promise heer..Whenever you fall...I will catch you..." placing his hands on herr's little prem promised in a determined voice.

...

Little heer is now grown up to a gorgeous 22 year old, young lawyer. Looking at the full moon she leaned on the rails of her balcony. It is her 23rd birthday today. And the birthday party was on full swing on down stairs. The party was a pleasant surprise from her family as well as his family. Prem and family had returned back just 2 months back. Entire juneja family were shifted to Canada when she was 7 and after spending their 15 years abroad, now they are back to their motherland permanently. Of course to take her as their elder daughter in law. Heer is well aware about her alliance with prem since childhood. And somewhere she was comfortable the idea till she saw the Canada returned prem. The prem was no more the little dump as he used to be in childhood. He turned out as an intelligent young business man who reached the heights of glory even in this age of 25. He is smart, he is handsome and deep inside he is still that innocent boy. In these two months he proved how caring he is, how gentle he is...In a way he proved he is tooo perfect for her. She knows she started to feel something for him from the moment their eyes met. But after knowing how perfect he is, she is afraid of falling for him. From childhood days she is afraid of falling. What if he didn't feel the same way about her? What if she is not the one he wants? What if he has some high expectations and dreams and she is unable to meet it? She knew that he deserves the best and that's what she is afraid of. What if she falls for him and get hurt?

"Enjoying the night?"

Someone asked from behind and she turned to face the man of her dream.

"Hmm... I'm just...taking break" she mumbled in low voice looking everywhere but him

"Taking break?" prem raised an eyebrow " It your birthday heer.. Party is for you and you are standing her enjoying the night..Not fair" prem said with a playful voice

"hmm..I just..ya you are right..the party is for me..i should go back...so..bye" heer mumbled again and hurried to pass him to downstairs..

A soft hand on her wrist stopped her. She turned to face prem who is looking intensely at her eyes.

"Prem let me go...they must be looking for me" she said softly.

"You are here for half an hour heer... a few more minutes wont make any difference" prem said still looking at her eyes.

Heer let out a small sigh and moved back to her previous position making prem to take his hand from her wrist.

"You still like the swing?" prem asked looking at the small coir swing on her balcony

Heer nodded smilingly looking at it fondly.

"Heer...you remember the time when we used to play in park, you used to swing on the long swing in park and i used to push it for you?" prem asked all of sudden with a small smile playing on his face.

Heer nodded positively again but with bigger smile on her face." I was so scared of it...i was scared of falling from it" she laughed as she recollected those days.

"And you remember what I said to you when you were scared of falling?" he asked quietly

Heer looked to his face with a questioning expression.

Looking at her eyes deeply he continued "Heer I told that whenever you fall, I will catch you...and you used to trust me"

"I still trust you prem... "Heer said softly.

"Then why can't you let yourself fall in love heer? Why are you holding yourself back..? "Heer looked at prem shockingly. How come he knows that she is trying hard not to fall for him? How come he knows her heart?

Prem slowly took her hands in his and held it close to his heart.

"Heer...every time you look at me your eyes says what your heart wants... dont be afraid heer... let yourself fall in love...and i promise..I will catch you" The sincerity in his voice brought a single tear on her eyes...and it made her realise...

"Now I can't fall prem...Because I realised that i have already fallen for you"

...

Thats all guys.. 😳i know this is very short. but i didnt feel like editing the one after 2 years as i completely forgot on the way i wanted it at that time. and also i have exam time..Regarding the theme, it was the theme "fall and catch" which we were supposed to give to a valentines day special story writing competition in our college which didnt happend due to some reason. so i developed one from it. sorry for the mistakes 😳



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Posted: 11 years ago
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hugs* ... welcome to the genre of writing .. trust me its addicting .. and wow .. it was short and sweet . i can really imagine kids on swings . haye rabba .. my adorable two .. and well i don't like heer falling for prem .. but .. hehehe ... claps*
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow V'day competition story. This is fab. Tittle & theme are v. creative. I always love PH in small avatar. They're super cute. Heer's so cute in the way she expresses her fear as a child. I could imagine that. Prem's dialogue is excellent in the way he made Heer realise her feelings and make her admit it. Beautifully sketched story. Ty Priya. I always knew you're v. creative and have a beautiful flow with words.🤗 You're awesome. ❤️
It's ok I forgive you for not editing the grammar. 😆 I understood everything.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Priya OS is really cute and Fablous 🤗 aftr reading i fall for you 😊

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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMG.Priya. This is really sweet. i can imagine the real premeer in it heer is afraid of falling and prem is asking her to fall. cute cute cute. ❤️
i really hate you for keeping this hide for 2 years😡 Giya, you did the best job.now i want a new OS from you ..pls pls⭐️
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Fab-u-lous Priya 👏
Since I'm a writer myself...this is no small compliment. 😎
Wonderful OS...especially since this is your first attempt at writing.
I love the title and the concept...hope you write more.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMG ... Priya & OS ??? That was my 1st reaction ... lol ... I'm glad that Giya spammed ur inbox to post this ... She is not to be blamed ,rather we should thank her 👏

It's Rocking Priya ... & congratulation on ur debut as a writer ... I totally loved it ...I could literally imagine the chota version of Prem & Heer ... It was short but sweet ... It was nice even at ur 1st attempt ... Hope to see more of this writer in the near future
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Posted: 11 years ago
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ok wait...first of all..Priya wrote an OS!!!!
(like ekta kapoor daily soap style)
kya 😲 kya 😲 kya 😲

And second- She wrote such a wonderful OS!!!!
Kya 😲 kya 😲 kya 😲
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Beautiful OS priya...i m glad u started writing...pls do write more...will be waiting for your more sweet and interesting stories
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Posted: 11 years ago
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what a lovely OS ... loved reading it 🤗
all the dialogues were beautiful n description was lovely... 😃
waiting for you to write something else too you can really be a great writer


pls do write...
With love,
Haajuuu❤️


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Posted: 11 years ago
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M like omgeesss. Priya di and an os ??????????? :O :O Even though you didnt post it 2 years ago i still take this one for me. Pulease ?? Giya can take half the credit :-P congo congo writerji its really really really cute. Thanks to your college ka competition.. You actually wrote an os ?? M still itty bitty shocked.. It was amazing. I loved the concept of falling one. :-D little heer and little prem. And then grown up heer and prem. It was really sweet especially how prem asks her to fall in love. Its awesome. My birthday is two months away. You can write one more. {m totally shameless} priya di :-*:-* i loved it.

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