SS || The One With The Plot (part 5, page 9)

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so I wrote this last year, while waiting for Bhav on a Wednesday afternoon, but I never got around to typing it out or posting it. But because I'm stuck on MHT and BB, I thought I'd post this in the meantime! It's set during the Geet era of Kis Desh, and Geet has just gotten engaged to Prem. It's a little experimental in the writing style, because I wrote in the present tense, which I am so not used to writing. So bear with me? Let me know what you think!

Part 1 - Page 1
Part 2 - Page 3
Part 3 - Page 5
Part 4 - Page 7
Part 5 - Page 9

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part one of my new short story. It's all of four parts long. :) title taken from Friends, or at least the style of it. :) enjoy!

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Geet bites her lip. Things were not going as planned. If she was not careful, she could really end up Mrs Prem Juneja. She winces at the thought. Making sure that her room door is locked, she picks up her phone and dials a familiar number.

"Khanna," a curt voice intones.

"Ullu ke phatey," she beginds, overriding the stunned "Geet?" that she hears. "Bohut badey baatein kar rahe thay na tu? Ke Heer kabhi bhi Prem ko kissi aur ke hotey huey nahi dekh sakti, ke unhe milaney ke liye mujhe Prem ke kareeb jaana padega. Aur nateeja kya hua? Doh haftoon mein meri Prem Juneja sey shaadi ho rahi hai!"

"Kya?" He sounds utterly shocked. "Heer's not doing anything?"

"No," Geet replies forcefully. "She tried to get me to call off the wedding by badmouthing Prem initially, but that wasn't the plan." She pauses. "Maybe we should tell her what we know."

"What proof do we have Geet?" he answers, just like she knows he would. They have had this discussion many times, and he always wins. Because he is right, they have no proof.

"I hate lying to her," she says softly.

"Jaanta hoon," he is equally as soft.

"Haan, par tu toh Delhi se bhaag ke gaya," she pouts, forgetting for a second that he cannot see her. His chuckle only serves to infuriate her more. "Tumhe pata bhi hai ke mujhe kitni takleef hoti hai ke main Heer se jhoot bol rahi hoon? Pata hai? Woh meri behen ki tarah hai aur main – main itni badi baat use chuppa rahi hoon. Aur yeh tumhara flop plan kuch kar bhi nai raha."

"Give it time – " she cuts him off. "Hume sirf doh haftey hain. Agar kuch karna hai, toh abhi karna hai. Warna main agli Mrs Prem Juneja banungi."

"Yeh main honay nahi dunga."

"Toh phir Rajveer Khanna, tu hi mujhe raasta dikha. Ab main kya karoon?"

There is a pause on the other end. "Preet aur Meher ko sab kuch sach-sach bata. Tab tak main Delhi paunch jaata hoon."

Geet nods distractedly. "I'll tell them tomorrow." He makes a sound of assent. "And Rajveer," she hesitates. "jaldi aana."

Geet has no way of knowing that he is beaming at her comment. "I will. Take care."

"Bye," she ends the call and places the phone next to her. Flopping backwards onto the bed, she stares vacantly at the ceiling as she fiddles with the edge of her dupatta.

No matter what, she decided, she will not marry Prem Juneja. She will not marry Chahat's Papa. She will not marry Heer's Prem.

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So, let me know what you think! And if you want to be PMed for this SS. :) I won't update till those of you who enjoy reserving unreserve, just FYI. 😆

Love,
Radz

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Posted: 15 years ago
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The last line is my favvvv 😳 😃😃 That so sounds perfectttt 😛 Hard to imagine Geet saying it, but meh it works 😛

And ohhh I like the present tense, it works pretty welll 😃😳 And look I never reserved 😲

You know you love me 😉

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Radzie, 🤗

what happened to MHT? Update that soon.

Now this SS - a very sweet beginning. Rajveer and Geet - all of us wanted that when Geet first entered, didnt we? or maybe Geet - Nihaal too 😆

Oye - are these two a couple? or doesn't geet have a inkling that rajveer khanna is totally fida over her?

I like the present tense too. Its got a different impact on the readers.

And I totally loved the last line.

Love,
Ash
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Radz!!! *waves*
how are you?
A new SS?...ooo me likes it....Geet aur itni smart?......wonderful do pm whenever you update.......I will love to read more 😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey great starting
please add me to your pm list
and update soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
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This is good
Please PM me when you update
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey.....
the first part was fab.....⭐️...
do add me to ur pm list...........

~Yaz~

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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey Radz
it seems really intresting.
do continue soon
add me in urs pm list
luv
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Posted: 15 years ago
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YAY! your are writing an SS!

Okay so first of all I love the title....It makes me think of friends *sigh* I love friends!

Now to the story! Okay I love the banter between geet and rajveer- i think it so couply and cute! I am glad she doesn't like prem in this.

So rajveer is coming back and geet is going to enlist meet's help...this should be fun!

what about prem....is he in on the plan? or is he as aloof as heer?

thanks!

and please add me to your pm list!

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