New SS: Tanhai Part 9 pg69 Dec 27 - Page 31

Awesomeeeeeee update................
loved the cute relationship between prem and veera................
but that Balraj Maan is a ...................🤬
gosh, i rely hope the Maan brothers are on heer's side this time.......
anyways can't wait 4 da next part so plz update soonnnnnnn.........

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I luvvvvvvvvvvvvvv itttttt.......but i dnt like Heer-Preet thing... its tooo weird... Heer is only Prems!! :P:D....

Hey Jaz!

hey
that was awesome...totally loved it...👏👏👏 veera and prem's bonding was really nice and their flashbacks were amazing...👍🏼 hope at least this time heer's brothers will help her...I am hating Balraj right now...he is so stupid...doesnt even care about his daughters feelings...he is disgusting...😡 hope preet will not marry heer...plz...plz...I want prem back...pretty plz...😳 😆 cant wait to see how the meeting of heer and preet goes...hopefully heer tells him that she doesnt want to marry him....and preet leaves her alone 😉 continue soon and thanks for the PM...😊


love
Afreen

Hi jaz I was waiting for your updates. Somewhere I had high hopes that prem entry is going to be soon. But I guess this is crushed now😭. But it was a great update.👏

Ok I had prepared myself to cry. I know there is no way I can avoid it while reading your SS. And I was not disappointed. Start was interesting…indeed very interesting. So preet is an overnight sensation—well there are high chances that he is prem. The character sketch preet had in mind for balraj, was soo right—man who have happily sell his soul to earn few extra bucks. Hey preet really is an intelligent man😉

Oh god I can't believe this balraj😡. God he is a b*****d.🤢 he can never change can he? Preet was soooooo right about him. he is using heer for some money. God I would love to strangle him. 'heer's brother almost seemed to look for their sister's interest', oh god my hatred for them is increasing day by day. That's why these cheap mann men were so annoyed when preet didn't show up. Can anything be worse than this? I know what, now you have confirmed preet is not prem. I don't how to react to this. does it mean this is the end of their love story.

I loved prem's and veera first conversation. The first jija saali ki baatein. Veera really cares for her elder sister, and she liked prem too.😊. At the scene where boya were teasing her, I rembered how prem also had saved heer when they had met for the first time. He is a saviour 👍🏼. God prem has become like another brother for her. He was soooooo protective about her. I truly loved their relationship. And the look prem taught veera to get things done from heer---awesome idea prem.😆---toh veera tumne prem se yehi sikha tha🤣

So her brothers are supporting heer this time. I don't know what to say about it. I just hate them. And I even this move of them, couldn't change what they did to heer. As far as preet is concerned, may be he will bring those happiness in heer's life which are long over due. And prem…I don't know if you can't bring him back then its fine. I was somewhere expecting him to back with the entry of preet. I really wanted him back with whole my heart. But now if this is not the case then its ok. I don't know yaar, I really don't know what to say about it. I guess I am getting accustomed to this idea that prem will never come back now. nice update though. I guess I am ready to accept preet in the life of heer.

Lovely update as usual.

Sia

Hmmm... im not sure abt Preets character...i like him and i don't like him ...hope he ends up doing some good in the end and saves the day ...awesome update...it was worth the wait ..hope you continue soon

Part 4

"Kyun ke unhe samaj mein nahin aa raha hai ke woh aaj raath ko kya pehne," Roshni answered. --- TAUBA! Jaz, yeh ladki bhi na! bekaar mein heer ki jaan ke peeche padi hain! hehe!

When darkness finally fell, the house was simply glowing. There were beautiful arrangements of exotic flowers everywhere. The house was highlighted by the twinkle of thousands of lights and candles. The guests were all mingling, laughing and chatting. – beautiful descriptions jaz! I don't know what it is..maybe it's the dim lights and the music in my room creating the effect…but these lines sound so pretty right now :-D

She refused to give up her white wardrobe, because engagement or no engagement, Heer was still Prem's widow – OMG! Heart wrenching! *sob*

The funny butterfly-like feeling in his stomach was expressed with the slight fidgeting of his hands – mwah! Fabuloso! Who would ever thinking of writing about butterflies like that! This is so real! I can almost envision manmeet doing that!

Aaj mere liyeh saree pehnoge?" aye haye! Kisi ki nazar na lage *ufff, too late! Those stupid maan brothers ki tho lag gayi nazar already, but hey, never too late no? *giggle*

"Aab teri boyfriend ko saree pasand hai toh itna toh tujhe karni hi hogi," Maya teased. "Aagar tune nahin siki, kya paata shayad Prem ko hi tujhe saree pehenna naa hoga." Oh hoooo! Maya is outright besharam! Hehe! P.S – I love the nanand-bhabhi relationship :-D

Awwiie, jaz, that saree is BEAUTIFUL!!! Heer must have looked STUNNING in it :-D

He looked utterly dashing in a black suit, which he paired with a black shirt and violet tie. He stood with his arms behind his back and a smile on his face. – ahh! Killer combo! U nailed it jaz! *SIGH* Prem is hotness personified! *PHEW*

The look in his eyes changed from a man who cared about her, to one of a man who would cherish her – Jaz, I absolutely adore how you brought this line back in here! so tender *faints*

UF! The pendant! And Prem giving it to heer! What a beautiful thought! *goodness, I am going to HAVE to find other adjectives soon*… this is so pretty! Im almost choking up! But no no, calming down! I'll make it through! I just keep thinking of her hideous brothers! Ufff! And lifehouse, jaz! I LOVE them! They have the greatest songs ever! The lyrics to that song are so powerful! Fabulous choice! It's such a peaceful song no?

Tumhe khone ka daar," he said in a low whisper. – no prem! NO! touchwood! Prem shub shub bola karon!! *sigh* have I mentioned I HATE heer's brothers? I despise them! UGHHH!!!! Gosh jaz, ur going to make us cry all over again! Cutty with u! yes, this silsila goes on! I promise u MANY more cutties throughout this SS/FF!

Ah! *FAINT* the confession was beautiful! Simple, but so heartwarming! The kiss was just as amazing! It was written perfectly! Not overly done! LOVED IT!

Nahin! Bilkul nahin! Tum kya soochte ho? Aagar tum mere bina nahin jee sakte, phir main tumhare bina kaise jee sakti hoo?" Heer asked. - *SIGH* she'll keep loving, till she is sure she has won him! *tear*

"You don't love her because she is beautiful. She is beautiful because you love her." AYE HAYEE!! *SIGH* *collapse* paani! Jaldi! That just makes me so happy inside :-D

Heer smiled at the irony. "Main vidva lagti hoon, kyun ke main vidva hoon." – ahh! Jaaz! Dil pe khanjar chala di! That is so painful to hear! I love how you don't forget to add heer's pain in all of this… even though she is happy for Veera, she has never forgotten! And you add them in the most unexpected places!

Her broken faith, her shattered dreams, her tortured soul – they all sent out pain filled curses. – *sob* the descriptions are perfect! U do this so well jaz!

She cried that night, like so many other nights. She cried for the ceremonies that she would never have with Prem. She cried for all the secret moments she would never have with Prem. She cried for all of the laughs she wouldn't be able to share. She cried for the man who was her world. She cried for the love that was her life. She cried for the world and life she had lost in the blink of an eye. – u did it! U finally did it! I was holding up SO well throughout this entire update! And now I'm almost swollen and teary eyed! Thank you VERY MUCH! Cuttyyyy! This was brilliant! I cant imagine what heer is going through!! Just give me a one –way ticket into ur FF~ I need to go smack those slimy brothers of hers! And heer needs a hug!

And PREET!! WHOO? WHAT?! WHERE? WHEN?! Whats up in ur mind missy? I want to know what preet is upto.. and most importantly, who he is! If u haven't noticed, we're in complete denial that our prem is dead! So we have all hopes from you! Don't let it die ! pweaseee! Haat jhodke bheek mangoing! Pweaaseeee

phew!one down, two to go! hehe! i tell you jaz, your going to be SO proud of us!

Part 5

Their memories, their laughter, their tears, their hearts and their souls all resided in that one room. – you have the greatest lines in the beginning and the end! Ofcourse, the middle is no less…but u have the most heart wrenching, beautiful lines out here :-D

"I'm sorry that I'm happy," Veera said. – OMG!! POOR CHUTKI! Ufff, I feel so bad for her!

*SIGH* Heer's dialogue about Prem! She lives with his many memories, and that's all she has left.

Heer had to admit, in the atmosphere of Veera's wedding, she caught herself smiling more and more often than she had in the past seven years. It felt good to smile and be merry with her family after such a long time ' well most of the anyway – FINALLY! Heer deserves some happiness no? what after what her stupid brothers did! AHHH!!! Everytime I think of it, I want to scream! I can't believe Heer hasn't smacked her darn father yet! Ughh!!

While everyone else laughed, they shared a knowing glance. They shared a split second of pain, they shared a moment, they shared a weak smile ' they shared a moment with Prem --- first of all, the transition from present to past is BRILLIANT! It flowed so well! And second "they shared a moment with Prem" WOW!!!!! That is beautiful! Only you could have thought of something like that! I had goosebumps! Totally! I don't think I'll ever get over that line… I told you, we're such suckers for little things *SIGH*

Awwiii!! Prem scared the living day lights out of heer! How cuteee! Oh hooo! Chuhaa! TAUBA!!! Aisa chuha tho main bhi chahoon! *giggleeee* ."Inna bada chuha! LAUGH OUT LOUD! Kaash, ham sab ke paas prem jaisa chuha hota naaa?!?! gosh jaz, I am officially in love with Maya bhabhi! "Iss chuha ko tum nahin maar sakte Harman. Yeh chuha toh tumhari behen ki jaan hai – I LOVE HERRR!!! Theres only one person who understands her so well! Ahhh! PREM!! JAZZ!!! U did NOT kill PREM! We KNOW IT! He is still alive! I told you, we are in denial! I know you are going to bring him back! And u better missy! Varna you'll get tired hearing the number of cutties we have in store for you *hmphs at you*

Heer and Prem continued to fight until Prem put down the laddoos and grabbed her. He held her arms down and brought her body close. He started into her eyes for a while until he finally brought her in for a hug. "God, I have missed you," he said as he held her.

"I missed you too," Heer said. She pulled back only slightly and placed a quick kiss on his lips before hugging him again.

GOODNESS GRACIOUSS!! THIS IS SOO BEAUTIFUL! Its so simple, yet so amazingly lovely! I love the little interactions between them! I love this better than a passionate kiss! *SIGH* I think I've just lost my screws! Hehe!

Heer looked at her three brothers. They were all looking at her, and Heer could have sworn, just for a brief moment, there was a spark of hope in their eyes. – no no! don't give in heer! I still don't like your brothers! Aur tadpao unhe! VERY BAD boys! *STICK TONGUE OUT AT THEM*

Hearing the man who killed Prem take his name caused Heer to feel a sudden burst of fury that she had never felt before. "Maat lo mere Prem ka naam aapni zubaan se!" she yelled. She grabbed to the chair so tight that her knuckles were turning white and her breathing became labored. – Wow, it is weird if I say that I can actually feel her anger? Such powerful lines Jaz! WELL DONE! *bravo bravo*

OMGG!! You just GOT to love maya bhabi! The "P"! AYE HAYEEE!! Main mar jawaan! Maya bhabhi has the coolest little ideas up her mind!

One night he had been so tired that he had fallen asleep as Heer talked about her day. She didn't bother to wake him since he was sleeping peacefully. Instead she removed his shoes and covered him with a blanket before snuggling up next to him. Heer knew what could potentially arise with having Prem in her bed, but she didn't worry about that. She trusted Prem and she knew he would never do something like that with her. After all, if sex was what he wanted from her, he could have taken that advantage long ago --- GASP! Im out of breath! This is so beautiful! I don't know what it is about this! But just the fact that Prem is such an amazing human being ! uffff! And also that heer took his shoes off for him… such a "couple-like" thing to do~ I told you, we love little details :-D

And who the heck is Preet Mehtaa??! You have us impatient as heckk! And yes, mind you, we haven't read the next part yet! So *SIGH* the wait is killing us! I know you have something brilliant up your sleeve! Now its just a matter of waiting and see what ghul you khilao us! Haha! I think im going to say this in EVERY comment…. Prem is NOT dead! He cant beeee! Bring him bacckkkk! Pweaseeeeeeeeeeee! The more flashbacks I read of him, the more I find myself hoping and wishing for Heer that Prem would just be here! just hold her tight and have their little time!

*SIGH* heer's outburst with her brothers just made me cry! It was so beautifully written! Jazz! Heer deserves happiness! She deserves prem… its about time you bring him back in here! AHHHH!!! We are all eating our brains out ! pweaseeeeee! Varna we we'll be forever cutty with you *sob sob tear tear* The best part about this update was your writing of Heer's emotions! It's a mixture of pain and joy… and it makes such a great ensemble! You have such brilliant skill! Ufff, how do you manage to make us tear up with each update? FABULOSO!! *clap clap*

Okay, before this bak bak goes on, we better get to the next update :-D

Cya soon!

Love tons,

AnnJan!

Part 6

Heya Again Jaz *waves at you*

WHOPIEE!! Aakhir parda fash ho gaya :-D Finally, preet is introduced! And wow, what an introduction! You just have to accept it now, you have the greatest beginnings! Am I beginning to sound redundant now? Lol! Soowiie! Its just that I cant get enough of your beginnings! From what I can tell, this guy is quite mysterious! He is going to be really hard to predict! Hmmm'.

No one knew Preet Mehta the man; of course, not for lack of trying. No one knew that he had no family. No one knew how he had busted his ass to get to where he was sacrificing not only his time, but his life, personal and social, in the process --- oh hoo! There is a lot more to Preet Mehta than meets the eye! There's much that lies beneath the surface! This guy is going to be one heck of an interesting read! Ooiiii, you have us all excited now jaz.. but *SIGH* from the looks of it, this could not be our Prem no? *makes sad face*

WOAH! The will! That is one heck of a twist in the tail! Who would have thought? UFF! I can't wait to see what happens next!

It wasn't that they didn't do a good job or that they didn't have good ideas; what bothered Preet was the old man, Balraj. He just seemed like a shady character who put the value of money above all else. He seemed like the kind of person who would sell his soul to make a few extra bucks. ' HECK YES! That old, sada hua man is one heck of a creation! The man is just NOT right in his head! Darned loon he is! AHHH!! I hate the man more and more! Again, that just goes to show how well you write! You are BRILLIANT!!!

Matlab ke main ek aaisi ladki ko janta hoon, joh aapke liyeh prefect hai." ' NA AH!! He did NOT just say that! That freaking jerkkkk!!! Sorry excuse for a human being! I knew what was up his slimy mind before I went any further! AHHH!!! This part makes me sooo mad! I HATE this man! Ufff!

Woh ladki Heer hai." Balraj didn't even bat an eyelash when taking her name ' GASP!!! *censored bleep censored* what a hideous man! The jerk didn't even bat an eyelash! UFFFF!! Kill him! Somebody kill him! UFFF!!!

Preet was so shocked he had no words for Balraj Maan. Preet had clearly been wrong about this man from the beginning. He wouldn't sell his soul to make a few extra bucks, but he sure as hell would sell his daughter ' jaz, this makes me soo mad! I honestly want to curse his face out! He has NO shame! That shameless, filthy ahh! I don't even have words for that man! UFF! But alteast her brothers have enough sense to know that what their father is doing is wrong! Thank GOODNESS for some common sense! UGHH!

Maargaya," Blaraj said with a smile on his face. "Heer ek vidva hai WHAT THE ****!!!!!!! The more I read this, the madder it makes me! That man better wipe that darned smile OFF his face or I PROMISE ill smack him! What a money-minded, ignorant, disgusting, dispicable man! Gosh, he repulses me! Sickening! HORRIBLE man! Okay okay, yes, calming down! Phew! Deep breaths! Breathe in, breathe out' *FAINT*' *ACHUU* sneeze! *rubs nose* I have a freaking allergy to that man! UMPH!!!!!

*SIGH* I am also disappointed with Preet! This is the last character sketch I would expect of him! I better believe it missy, you are full of surprises! Haha!

AWW! The feeding ceremony is the cutest! There is such a beautiful ring to it' I have never heard of that' did you come up with that? *SIGH* very very pretty :-D

"Kyun ke yeh wohi set hai naa joh Jiju ne aapko aapni 17^th birthday pe diya tha?" she asked before she could think about what she was saying ' HAWWW!! How did she knowww?! Okay, now that I read ur update I know.. but before I go on, can I just say, the rest of this update had us BAWLING our eyes out! Prem and veera's interactions were the sweetest! You wrote about it so perfectly! Umphhh! Again, u managed to make us cry with this update too! *Sob tear tear*

"Aacha," Prem said. His saali was a strong minded girl. She could clearly grow up to be an independent, beautiful and vivacious woman. Men had better watch out, she could easily give them a run for all they were worth. "Aap kissiko batayenge toh nahin ke main aaj yahaan aaya tha?" he asked. ' oh man, prem is the NICEST human being ever! *SIGH* if only there was a prem in real! He has the sweetest thoughts :-D

"Kyun naa mangoon? Saali hoon aapki, mangna mera haq hai."' oh hooo! Veera tho choti dadi amma nikli! HOW CUTEE!! I LOVE their interactions! Soo lovely!

"By Jiju," Veera Called "Bye Chulbuli," Prem called as he left. AYE HAYE! Main sad ke jawaan! This is soo cute! I love that they formed such a beautiful relationship already! Aww man! I LOVE PREM! Which is more reason why you HAVE to bring him back! So we can read more of his interactions with chulbuli! Oh ho! Jaz! Itna bhi na tadpao! Pweaseee!!!!! *making prem's puppy face ' pweaseeee?!?/*

Woh'chi'those stupid, hormone fueled, ugly boys are going to hit on you, and flirt with you," Prem said. Just the thought made him sick to his stomach. He'd be damned if he let some sleeze bag come and sweep his innocent Chulbuli off her feet --- awiiieeeee!!! Seeee, I love prem! Soo cutee! He's already so protective about veera! Socho socho, if they had more chances to interact what his halath would be! Oh hoo! Prem is such a chand ka tukda! TAUBA! Kisi ki nazar na lage! *Blush*

Veera is absolutely the best sister ever! Ufff, you definetly pulled at a lot of my hearts strings when Veera asked Heer to wear the earings Prem gave her *SIGH* and aww, prem taught her the "puppy dog face" OMG! How entirely cute!

UGHH! That old man again! Poor heer! I can't imagine what she is going through! I almost cried again when she asked her three brothers to never talk about her getting married! UFF! Poor thing must be in such a dilemma! That old man just won't leave her alone will her? BESHARAM!!!

Preet --- I can't make up my mind about him.. I am disappointed that he would still even consider the prospect of getting married to heer' but I can also tell that he has somewhat of a conscience ' so we just have to wait and see now L TAUBAA!! Jaz, itna atyachaar! Aye hayeee! And her brothers, I liked them in this part.. atleast they have the freaking sense their father apparently doesn't have!

Shoot, GASP look at the length of this comment! Okay okay, we better stop! Hehe!