New SS: Tanhai Part 9 pg69 Dec 27 - Page 12

Originally posted by: *Guli*

So me 1st!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😳 Yay!!!!😳😳😳 ya...but duh...who else if not you...😃

Anyways... oh wow!! so i finally come here and read the update which wasnt long at all!!!! i didnt find this long! shouldve been longer!!!😆😆😆 (Guli run's to india now!😆) but like next time make it a little longer!! just a little!! not asking for too much now!!!😳 teri toh 🤬...that was long...looooong...dont u complain...*hmph*

aww the flashbacks were soo cute when they were little..... little premeer!!!!... soo cute!😳😳😳 nice little relationship they got going here!!! at this rate... will heer get the happiness that she needs?! god knows... cuz only u have the answer to that!!!..... the kids are really cute..... love them and these husbands... man so scared of their wives.... its the rule of marriage... wife is always right!!! even if she's wrong she's still always right..... 😆😆 gotta love that rule!!!....😆😆 i know right...they are adorable as kiddies...so sweet...yup...rule #1 of marriage...wife is always right...rule #2...saali's r next in line...😛😛😛


see there's a reason why i always take time in reading ur update cuz when i can read it in peace.... i enjoy it more that way cuz there's nothing distracting me thats why!!!!!!!!😛 but i enjoyed it! please cont soon!! i know things will get good!!!!.......... hopefully if nothing else happens tonight...will update...btw...nice talk time today...he he...cant wait for next week...PARTY 🥳

p.s. *moorpeech dance!!!* *bobbs head*

Originally posted by: Cess-

*reserved*.... will be back..... =]

*edited*

hey jaz.... hey yaar...whats up 😃

haye yaar, you can really create magic... honestly, no kidding.... in heer's secret, prem was soo.... rude... but here omg, prem is such an adorable person.... the "eek, mujhe 'aap' maat bulao'.... that was so cute... he was so acting like a typical 7 year old, hating respect that wasnt for his age... and heer - the 'haila, app mujhse bohooooot bade ho' was so 🤣.... that was classic... and when she announced she liked the name prem it was chooo chweet!! it's like she's analysing him through his name.... i thought that kiddy versions of Prem and Heer would be really different...since we only saw Heer as a child..now we have prem too 😃😃😃

jaz, 🤣, bhaia.... 🤣.... that cracked me up.... heer is so inncent nah? she is adorable, and prem, i just loved his reactions there.... 'eww! chi! bhaia?' that was so an indication of the upcoming relationship these two will share...*imagining if he let her**puking*🤣 i just wanted to kiss both their cheeks... it was as if this scene was happening right infront of my eyes... it was expressed and written so well... really, fabulous is an understatement! yup...it would be an awkward relationship to date your 'bhaia'...trust me...long story...and it doesnt end well......and thank u so much...you are too sweet 😳

ouch.... ooh, that hurts.... when maya came and told her about her mom's b'day.... omg, i totally forgot about that and so did heer.... 7 years ago, everyone forgot their mother's b'day except for heer, now she's the one lost her thoughts... i am loving the way you connect past and present... it's always the same, yet the opposite... oh, and i can totally relate to heer... she doest beleive in god? i wouldnt if i was her... after all that she went through and is still going through? god has been pretty unfair to her.... firstly, she lost her husband, in a mere second... prem and her marriage's moment wasnt even over, when the same moment, in front of her own eyes, she saw blood spilling on the ground... her husband, who she loved almost her whole life, lost his life before their moment was even completed.... she loved, and still loves him more than herself, and she saw him lose life to the person who gave her life?? how can anyone tolerate the pain of that? ya...you will see lots of past-present connections in this ff...that is how you will see prem...as for god...i agree with you...after all Heer suffered...how could she still believe in God...i dont think i would either...id be like "hello!! what did i ever do to deserve this?" 😡😡😡...

and now, she has to live with the murderers of not only her husband but her happiness as well? who she loved her whole life, she now has to live with the pain that they were the one to kill her prem? i would have lost all there is to lose including faith in god if i was heer.... she is absolutely understandable... and yes, i totally agree with her feeling at peace seeing her family suffer like this, they undoubtedly deserve everything they get from that day on.... and if i was her, there'd be one thing i'd ask god, to take my life as well.... it's just so difficult to live, with her family, and without prem! i had thought about where Heer would be post leap...if Prems mom was alive i'd have her there...but since she was already dead...that didnt work...😭...and ya...let tme suffer i say...they have it coming!!! 😡😡

omg, jaz, the boy-friend was soo cute.... and kulraj... 😆... that was so typical of a reaction.... and, and, the 'tumne banayi hain?' ... and that 'haan'....🤣.... omg, heer 🤣.... i was totally rolfing at that... and the next line 'it wasnt a total lie' that made even 🤣 more..... but she does have a point... she did something!! lol...what can i say...Heer was a sweet innocent child...a bit clueless as well 😆

haye, and that hug.... omg, *pinching cheeks*.... that was so adorable, i was 😍 on premeer as kids... haye... that would be something.... 😆.... and the kiss.... dunno why i feel this but me ☺️ when i read that... it was so innocent, yet so mature.... they are just the cutest kid couple in the universe... i know right! even as young kids...they are just dreamy!!! 😳😳

preeti - she is adorable... and her relationship with heer, is just marvellous... biut what i love is she calls her maasi... that touched my heart! i like veera as well... she's bubbly and cute, unlike the real one... the way she was in awe when her bhabis told her to stay in the kitchen, i was 🤣.... and the kids... *piching their cheeks as well!* ha ha...u are on a cheek pinching roll...😆😆 chalo....aacha hai...glad that you like my characters...Preeti is the cutest...😛😛 Veera is positive all the way..actually everyone is...sort of...it will make sense later 😛😛

as for what happened in the last part... i can totally feel a deja vu myself... yet i really have a feeling this may be a reverse phsychology.... just guessing, they may want heer to come back as to being herself, and they are trying it this way if nothing is to work... hmm, very wild guess there... but if not, then i have never seen a bunch of more idiotic, psycho, and mentally diabled men, who are blind enough to repeat the same mistake they did exactly 7 years ago, same time, same place.... they are sick, yet real... ... i hope veera doesnt get stuck in this pool of craziness... maybe this time heer will be the hero 🤣.... okie, but still me not giving up on convincing u to bring back the real hero, 🤣.... we may start a 'bring back prem in 'tanhai' andolan'.... 🤣... he'd be the only one to wipe out heer's dried up tears.... nice guess...very good one actually...but not quite what i have in mind...next update will explain a bit more...stay tuned 😉😉😉...lmao...andolan of my own...hmm...would be nice...im guessing you'd be the head of the group 😃

eagerly waiting for the update.... hoping it's atleast this long 😉... mabe longer? 😛 hmm...its long...not sure if its longer...but i tend to add things here and there before i post...so...lets see what happens 😃😃😃

love,

cess

Originally posted by: indiandoll89

my spot!

*edited* yay!! i was so waiting for u 😳😳😳

I had to go find my spot before I started reading it 😉 Just to make sure the comments were the kind you like 😊 😃comment is perfect...just like always 😃😃😃

2nd Part! 😃 (you really are on a roll, I expect part 3 before the week is out *nods solemnly*) well...paaka for today...as long as people dont show up for iftar at my place...AGAIN 😕

Oh and before I actually get started, lemme tell you I REFUSE to believe my Prem's dead *hmph* You CAN NOT kill him...*shakes head* So no..he's not dead 😊 Anyways I shall get back to the part now! 😳oh...u go ahead and be in denial...no one is stopping you...😉😉😉...😆😆

Heer's like me! 😃 I used to sit with a book in school CONSTANTLY, except my friends would try to get me to play and I'd be swinging on the tire swings with the book 😳😃 Prem is the sweetest child EVER! *pinches cheesk * When I have kids, I want mine to be all shweet like him 😳 (yes I plan early apparently 😊) man i couldnt read at school...you were only allowed to be sitting if you were sick or in trouble...or else u have to be up on your feet playing...i hated it!!! 😡...and do tell me when im a massi...i cant wait!! 😉😉

I love their conversation about their ages and if she shud call him aap or tum! 😃 *squeals* You honestly wrote it perfectly, I could imagine my nephews talking like this completely! 😛 You rock Jaz! 😉 awww he rather sit and talk wth Heer? how shweet! 😃 i know right...how dreamy is Prem...i mean really...even at a small age...he has me swooning 😍

Awww she was upset cus he didn't ask before declaring them as friends? 😛 This is undoubtedly the cutest little Premeer thing I've seen! 😃 OMG! bhaiya? lmao! that would not have gone well later down the road! 😛 Thank god Prem has some aakal! 😃 *nods* And honestly speaking....no one can say no when Prem smiles all cute like that! 😃😳 well can u blame the girl...the brothers just do as they please...😡...and haye...Prems smile...*drool* 😳😳😳 i hate older brothers...pain in the ass i tell ya...i speak from experience...ive got 3 plus one younger one who swears he is older than i am

Awww Is Veera gonna be good too? Chutki...I don't see it with her! 😆OH?? Why did Heer get so cold? I'm curious now! 😳yup...she is the baby hense Chutki...and she is good...trust me...no evil people except the obvious ones 😃
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Jaz....that whole thing about not believeing in god since he took away someone so dear to her, was really well written! *claps* and the feelings were TOTALLY true....😳thanks babe...glad u liked it 😃

Ahhh Prem! *sighs* I love what she remembered he had said...and oh god, I already forgt that it was the same day! *hides away* That takes tons of courage on her side to be able to do this, but Prem's with her, so it makes sense 😊 he he...ya...its the same day...its a slow moving ff for the most part...lots of memories will come up...u will see 😉

Awww she lives as his window? 😔 I wanna say it saddens me, but it shows how much love and respect they had for each other! 😳 yes...as sad as it is...it only fits the character 😃😃😃

Awwww I love the relation you made between Preeti and Heer, she really needs that one spark of happiness in her life 😊 and Aww Massi? My mom makes me do that too! 😆 Call the ones massi who she's closer to instead of something else! 😛 ya...we do that too...my friends kids call me massi...the best!! love them to pieces!!! vaise bhi...massi sounds better than aunty...🤢🤢...aunty makes u feel like u are 40+ 😭

Would you believe I've made every halwa possible except this one? no one except me eats it...and if I make it....I'll eat it all 😳 not good! 😆😆lol...make some...ill eat it...i love it!!

Awww Heer was SOOO concerned, someone was harboring a very cute crush already! 😛 And Prem...*shakes head* kitna sweet hain! 😃 Whoa...she lied? 😲 This is gonna be interesting! 😛he he...she fibbed a little...nothing major...pyaar mein toh aaisa chalta hi hai 😉😉😉

lmao! the convo between Kulraj and Heer about "uska dost" was awesome! 😛 And Heer's immediate yes at him being her boyfriend! 😆 too cute! 😳 ya...thought i'd throw that in there...she was so innocent..hai naa 😃

OMG! AWESOME Way to foreshadow kinda with the story! 😳 Veera in Heer's position? 😲 I'm glad Heer's gonna be there to stop it from happening to her though! 😃 You'd think those idiotic brothers learned the lesson once...*rolls eyes* nope...idiotic people arent easily taught...😆😆😆 but aage aage dekho...hota hai kya 😃

Can't wait for more Jaz! *hugs*

Love you, love u too!! *muah* 🤗

Meera😳

Originally posted by: fungrl

awesome update as usual, but I was surprised at Heer, how can she be in the same room as Mann men, has she forgiven them???? I don't think so, but if Heer is angry at God than she should be flaming ballistic mad at Mann men. They all need to be punished b/c how can they live happy lives when they snatched happiness away from their sister.....but I 'm glad that Heer will stand up against her family for her younger sister. Will she be able to do it, would Veera appreciate the help, would Mann women for once support Heer of speak against this injustice......or would they all bend under the dominating Mann men???? oh no no no...just cuz she is living there...doesnt mean that she has forgiven them...you may notice...but ill point it out now...there is no dialogue between Heer and her brothers/father...they are non-existent to her😃😃😃...aage aage dekho...hota hai kya 😉😉😉

Last question. when is Prem marring an entry, I hope soon, Heers been without the guy too long. who says Prem is coming back...remember...he is dead 😉

Thanks Jaz for the update, I hope you write a long, long update soon, so I can read more about Heer's misery. next part will be up something tonight...😃😃😃

btw, i was thinking about punishment for Mann men, so what if we hang them up side down and put slow fire under them.....that would hurt right....hmmmm......how else can they be punished????? you work on update and I'll work on the punishment😉 hmm...deal...ill work on my updates...u work on punishing the Maan men...let me know what u come up with...my dying to hear 😛

Originally posted by: Anhdara13

Jaz, OMG, how can Heer stay with the family? After what they did to her? Don't they feel guilty? That they're the reason Heer's a widow? They don't care, and Heer, Heer is still with them. I understand Heer staying for her mom, her sister and Bhabhis, but for her to interact with her brothers and her father, it must be tough. Poor Heer. radzzie!!! sup yaar...hows life 😃😃😃...Heer really didnt have anywhere else to go...of course i could send her off to live by herself...but that doesnt fit my story line...i need the family there...aage aage dekho...main kya kya kaarti hoon!! 😉...

I love that she doesn't hold it against her Bhabhis, her sister and her mother though. And the relation she has with the kids is sweet as well. But how can her brothers do this again? What they did to Heer, now they're doing to Veera? I hope Veera does not get hurt like Heer. I hope Heer talks to her. ya...the ladies are there for her...always...its the men that have no sense what so ever 😡😡😡...

The flashbacks were sweet. Prem and Heer are perfect together, since childhood. So innocent, and simple was their love. yup....baachanpan ka saath hai inn dono ka 😳😳😳

What are you going to do now I wonder... that is for me to know...and you all to find out 😛

Waiting... next part up soon 😳😳

Love,
Radz

Originally posted by: yoyojazzy

the best part ever i wonder wat heer will do i cant wait for ur update.................if u can could u pm me

ravina

Originally posted by: purplestar22

Reserved

Originally posted by: Additi...

BEAUTIFULL SS

I JUST LOVED IT but i miss prem alot poor heer ab aur kitna royege please prem ko jaldi wapas le awoo

Originally posted by: stunninstar

wonderful update....u are the best yaar... u write in a special style... wowww... those flashbacks were wonderful...i loved them.. and gajar ka halwa.. so sweet of heer to do that for prem... thanks...glad u enjoyed the flash backs 😃

your story is truely eternal one..i wish ekta makes a serial with you as its creative head...i bet it will be superhit.. try sending this story to her,...u will be make the next sensational writer...pakka,,,😊 you are too sweet...haye haye...im totally blushing 😳

and i loved the way the story is going.. but those brothers..i know they did it without thinking mmuch...due to the uconditional love for there sissie..but they killed prem!!! i can never forgive them.. you and me both yaar...oh and Heer two...those four men will burn in hell!!! 😈

how can they live so "shamelessly"???!!!.. after killing their brother in law..killing their sisters dreamz...and they all are living a happy life with their wives and children in front of her... i think this suffering is not enough for them... heer shouldnot even talk to or smile with them... if you notice...she hasnt said one word to anyone but her bhabi's, mother and sister...and of course...the kids in the house... 😉😉😉

i cant wait to read the next part...thanks fr the pm dear...tc...and keep rocking! next part up later today 😃😃

Originally posted by: sanju_veni

hey first of all a very long part indeed n a fabulous one too..............i wonder wat will heer do now..........plz update soon ..........i am dying to knw wat happens next...thanks for pm

Originally posted by: maha_k

edit later😊

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amazing dear really fantastic part.flashbacks were tooooo gd

what will heer do now?confused😕

and i want to tell you one thing😳

i will kill you if you dont bring prem back😆

but again just love this part

update soon and pm me

maha

Originally posted by: sourpuss

Ahh Di, don't worry about not replying to the comment! :D it is so frustrating when IF doesnt cooperate 😡😡😡

Ahh, so instead of Preet we get Preeti? Ingenious, Di! *applauds* 🤣 But anyway, the relationship between Heer and Preeti is adorable. So I'm guessing that Heer still gets along well with her bhabhis and mum, but not so much with her brothers? hmm....there is a twist...trust me...you wont see it coming 😉😉😉 but that is all im saying...vaise...Preet is cute naa 😛😛😛....ya...u guess absolutely right 😃

OMG the flashbacks were so cute!! I wish there would be more of Prem though...*pouts* And not just kid-Prem, but older, hunkier Prem...😍 Hinthint, Di? 😆 tauba...hunkier Prem...tauba...let me drool for a minute...............................ok..me back...lol...Prem is dead remember...do dead people come back from the dead? 😉😉😉

Can't wait for the next part! its coming...trust me 😃

Love,

Bhav (:

Originally posted by: Suhana Ahmed

hey jaz, what up yaar 😃

wow... amazing amazing update!!!

too good.... very very well written.... thanks yaar...glad you liked it 😃

this FF of yours has come upto number 1 of my favorite list... and this just in only two parts.... 😳😳😳

the flashbacks were fabulous...thanks 😊

i cried again after reading this part... when you described Heer... how she only wears white sari... aww...dont cry...there are some happy moments...you'll see 😉😉😉

oh no... those Mann monsters are upto ruining another life now...

i really really wish Heer is able to do something for her sis... Maan men are just plain stupid...what can we do..men will be men 😆😆😆

plz plz update soon... i am very much eager to read more of it... next update will be posted soon 😊😊

and yes, thanx for the pm.... no worries 😳

take care,

regards,

Suhana.

Originally posted by: shabo24

WHY IS SHE NOT LIVING WITH PREM'S MOTHER??????!?! I would have loved to see her brothers come to a little hut to come tell her to come home and her to be like "this is my home..." shabbo...calm down...🤣🤣🤣...how can Heer live with Prems mother...if she is dead...lol...😉 remember...prem ki mummy maar gayi

Gosh, her relationship with the woman of the household is so untainted. :) I love it!! And the children are so cute! :D Love them as well, and the sweet fights they were getting into! Heer and Prem as kids were so *insert another way to say adorable here* Especially the "bhaiya" thing. 😆 yes...the women never did anything to Heer...it was all the men 😡😡😡...lol...glad u enjoyed the flashbacks 😳😳😳

The NERVE of her brothers!?!?! Holy crap, that's disgusting. One the same day, the same lines. Urg. Continue soon di! next part will be up soon...just let me finish replying to comments...😃😃😃

Again, Ramdan starts tomorrow, so probably not going to be leaving comments for a while, but will drop one whenever possiable. :D omg...tell me about it...the days are soooo loooong...*sigh*...and here in cali...its so hot...like 100+ degrees....😭😭😭 i get so thirsty...but cant do anything...Ramadan Mubarak luv...cant wait for Eid...and all the Eidi 😉😉😉

--shabz

Originally posted by: --Sarah--

Awesome part as usual from you Jaz...
beautifully written... 👏 thank u😃
Jaz you are making me cry...i'm feeling so pain for Heer...she is wearing White and has become emotionless and does not believe in god any more...and childhood FB's 😭 aww...dont cry...im glad that you liked the flashbacks 😃😃😃
you have described a beautiful relation between Heer and her female family members...
Hope she will never ever talk to his brothers....
and Prem and you have to bring him back...heer is just incomplete without him
BRING PREM BACK BRING PREM BACK BRING PREM BACK
and now these monster brother up to Veera....now Veera and Heer should stand up together and teach these men a lesson which they will never forget...
can't wait to read the next update she will talk to her brothers...but not until later...and its not what u think...just wait and watch 😳...omg...i get the point...u miss prem...haye ram!! maybe u want to repeat it once more before i forget 😆...next part up soon 😃😃😃

and to answer your question..yeah my name is Sarah same as your niece 😊kool...niece is older than me (its weird..i know)...but she just got married 😉😉😉

Originally posted by: *I Heena I*

Awww ...poor Heer...i feel her pain she has lived with all this for 7 years...and reliving all her memories....awesome update as usual...

Originally posted by: 9rpatel

awesome update
*SPEECHLESS*
i wonder what heer will do to stop this sagai!!!!
anyways great update
continue asap
thanks for the pm
pm me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Originally posted by: cute_bear

i loved it

how heer wont let her siser vera bbecome another heer

havent the brothers learned enough already

and i love preeti

i just hope prem makes his entry soon enough

and im glad to see that they havent gt heer married off yet

and you *points finger* dont even think about it

do update soon

Originally posted by: Garima93

I am here! 😎 oh oh...coolness...*woot woot* 😉

*Edit*

Jaz Di! *Squishy Hug* So how have you been? *ahem* as you can probably tell, im in a hyper mood right now, and I have know idea why?! 😆 But anyways, I'll get to the comment ASAP! oh oh...huggy for u too 🤗....love your hyper comments...they are always fun....😳😳😳

This update was phenomenal! As always Jaz Di you have the most amazing talent in writing FF's! I love reading them! 😳 The way you showed the flashbacks of little Premeer was so C-U-T-E! *pinches cheeks* Prem is such a sweetie pie! And Heer is adorable! Now I REALLY wish Prem is alive, and he better be! 😉 😆 Right Jaz Di?!?! Hehehe. glad u enjoyed the kiddy stages of Premeer..watch for more flashbacks...which is what the whole ff is based on...lol...and omg...Prem is dead naa...see what i do 😛

My poor Heer, she's been depressed all these 7 years! I feel so bad for her man! *Gives her a Jadoo Ki Jhappi* I hope some chamatkaar happens quickly so we can have our old Heer back! 😃 yes...sadly...she has been alone all of these years...but then again...none of you would want Heer to be with anyone else 😉😉😉

OMG! The stupid brothers and bauji are making Veera's life miserable now? 😲 How dare they?! I hope Heer does something fast! So Veera's life doesn't get ruined! Can't wait to read what's next Di! Update soon! 😃 men never learn...they are just as stupid as ever......but aage aage dekho...hota hai kya 😉...you know me naa...never know what to expect 😛😛

Luv,
Garima 😳

Originally posted by: yasu09

love ur ff.............👍🏼

a wonderful update..............👏

can't wait to c prem back though..............😍

plz update sooooooooooooon..................................