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Posted: 16 years ago
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Before I say anything, you have GOT to hear the song while you are reading this shot. You will LOVE it. The song is Kaun Tha (Kapkapli) by Atif Aslam from his 2008 album 'Meri Kahani'
And I want HONEST comments!
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Ik andheri si raat
Aur kuch kadmo ki chach
Aalam ki thi kya hi baat
Jese andhekhi si ghaat
It was a nice summer night with the moon high up in the sky and the stars shining bright. A walk in the park wasn't a bad idea for Meher. Ever since she had moved in the same house as him, Meher couldn't help but be on the 9th cloud. He was tall, handsome, masculine, smart, humourous and her friend. Preet Juneja. No one knew that Meher had cherished a crush on him for almost the day she had seen him at the airport. Meher had done everything to be noticed by him, go on morning walks, bring tea to his bedroom, help him with his work. She had done everything to be noticed but little did she know, that all it took was for her to introduce her to him. And now, before Meher knew it, her and Preet had turned into thick friends.
"Hi Meher" Preet called, jogging over to Meher and her cousin Ashlesha.
"Hi Preet!" Meher says, her face brightening up then usual. She didn't know but whenever she saw Preet, her face would automatically start to brighten up and if not that, then start to turn red.
"So, kya kar rahi ho?" he asks her, playfully. Preet walks alongside Meher and Ashlesha
"Hawa mein swimming kar rahi hoon, karoge?" Meher replies, giving him a sarcastic smile.
"Oh really? Just hope that gravity doesn't full you down." Preet says, laughing while Meher smacks him on the shoulder.
"Preet! Tum bhi na!" Meher says, sticking her tongue out at him. Preet just laughs while Ashlesha smiles. To him, Ashlesha was one pretty girl with loads of attitude.
~*~
Kaun tha
Kahan gaya
Mujhe mila
Armaan jagee
Soya mera naseeb
"Meher! No! Don't come. There is water on the floor." Preet warns as Meher enters his room.
Unable to act fast, Meher walks in his room and slips on his wet floor and is about to fall, when 2 strong arms come and tightly grip Meher. Meher closes her eyes, afraid that she might fall if she opened them.
"Hmm, you are safe now." he wispers in her ears. She slowly opens her eyes to see that Preet was tightly griping her so she wouldn't fall. She never wanted him to let go. Never ever. She just wanted to stay like this. In his arms. Forever and ever.
Preet just stares into her eyes while Meher is unable to do anything else. Lost, she stares back into his eyes. It wasn't her destiny, but fate. It was her fate that she had met a guy like Preet. Who was her best friend and would maybe turn into something more.
"Meher...koi ajayega." Preet says, taking Meher out of her dream-mode.
Meher quickly straightens herself and walks out of Preet's room, embarrassed.
Dhalta sooraj dekhe
Aur hawa chuke guzre
Jalwa woh naayaab tha
Asal tha ya ke khwaab tha
~*~
Meher couldn't believe that she had met someone like Preet. He was everything that she dreamed out. He was everything that she ever wanted. He was her best friend. He was someone who she could share her secrets with. He was someone who's shoulder she could rest her head on. He was a someone, who she didn't know how to describe in words. He was more of a feeling for her. A feeling more then friendship. He was a feeling. A feeling that she was confused about. A feeling that she didn't know how to state. He was just a feeling and she didn't want this to be a dream. He was real and this was happening.
Kaun tha
Kahan gaya
Mujhe mila
Armaan jagee
Soya mera naseeb
~*~
"Di! Mujhe lagta hai...mujhe lagta hai ki woh ho gaya hai." Meher happily told her sister, Heer, while she tried to sort out her feelings for him.
"Tumhe lagta hai ki tumhe kya hogaya hai?" Heer questions, with a confused expression on her face.
Meher holds Heer's hands as they both sit on her bed.
"Wohi toh di. Mujhe nahin pata mujhe kya hua hai, lekin mujhe lagta hai ki mujhe woh ho gaya hai. Din raat, main sirf usi ki yadoon mein kohi rehti hoon. Jo ho raha hai mere aas paas, mujhe koi khabar nahin hai. Bas, wohi mere dil aur dimaak mein hai." Meher says, getting up from her bed and turning her back towards Heer.
"Tujhe pyaar hogaya hai Meher!" Heer states, getting up and walking towards her sister.
"Pyaar?" Meher questions, turning to face Heer, her face growing pink.
"Haan, Pyaar." Heer says, lighting rubbing Meher's chin. "Lekin, woh ladka hai kaun?" Heer asks
Just then, Preet calls Heer from the hallway, making Meher's cheeks go pink. Heer smiles at Meher and says "Mujhe jawaab mil gaya"
Kaun tha
Kahan gaya
Mujhe mila
Armaan jagee
Soya mera naseeb
~*~
"Preet! Mujhe tumse koi baat karni hai!" Meher states, as she pulls open the door to Preet's bedroom. Her voice, more brighter, more vibrant then usual.
"Mujhe bhi!" Preet says, the happiness in his voice as he walks over to Meher.
He gives Meher a tight hug with a huge smile on his face while Meher just smiles back, returning the hug.
Lagta hai Preet bhi mujhse wohi kehna chahta hai jo main usse kehna chahti hoon. Meher wonders, her smile widening as well as her happiness. At the present if the line 'Jumpy as a jellybean' was true, Meher's heart would have conquered it.
Meher will be really happy when I tell her that I love her. Preet wonders, smiling.
Kaun tha
Kahan gaya
Mujhe mila
Armaan jagee
Soya mera naseeb
Preet pulls Meher apart from his hug and stands up, still smiling. Meher smiles back.
"Meher, I am in love!" Preet says, finally spitting it out.
"I am aswell!" Meher says, smiling. I love you Preet...and I know you do as well. Meher wonders.
"Yes Meher, I love Ashlesha." Preet says, smiling while Meher's smile fades away.
'Ashlesha' Meher wonders, all her happiness coming to an abrupt end. Preet loves Ashlesha? Meher questions herself, trying to stop her tears from storming down her face.
Preet turns his back towards Meher, giving her a relief from putting up a fake act of being strong infront of him.
"Haan Meher. I love her. I love her like damn! Pata nahin ye kab hua, per ussne finally accept kar liya ki woh mujhse pyaar karti hai. And the credit goes to you Meher. Agar tum nahin hoti toh main Ashlesha ke kabhi itna kareeb aa hi nahin pata. Thanks yaar. You are my bestest friend." Preet says, turning around to smile at Meher who, quickly attaches a quick smile.
"Tum dono ek dosre ke saath bahut aache lagte ho." was all Meher was able to say, before her voice broke.
Preet gives Meher a tight hug, with Meher returns, but in a more disheartned manner. Preet didn't love her. She was all under a misunderstanding that he loved her. He didn't. He had just used her to get closer to Ashlesha. To make her jealous. She knew it all along. It was just tooo good. It was just tooo good to be true. It was a dream. Her and Preet were a dream and would always stay a dream.
"Thanks. Aur tum kuch keh rahi thi?" Preet says, finally getting out of his happiness and focusing on Meher's.
Meher smiles. "It's okay. It doesn't matter anymore." she states, turning her back towards him. She starts to walk away from his room, hiding her tears.
"Meher, tum ja rahi ho?" he asks.
"Haan, mujhe Heer didi se kuch baat karni hai." Meher states, and quickly walks away before Preet had a chance to say anything else.
Kuch bhi jo acha lage aur mile bhi
Zaroori to nahi
Sach hai par hai ajeeb
~*~
"Didi, woh mera nahin tha." Meher cries to Heer who tried her best to conclose her.
"Meher, ye zaroori nahin hai ki jise tum pyaar karo, woh tumhe pyaar kare." Heer states, hugging her sister.
"Didi, Preet. He doesn't love me." Meher states, her eyes moist.
"He doesn't love you but he still cares for you. He still loves you as a friend. What else do you need? It is not a must that you must get everything you like. He has his own dreams. He loves someone else. Tumhare paas uski frienship hai. Aur tumhe iss friendship ko bahut samhalna padega." Heer states, while Meher looks up and smiles at her.
"Haan didi. Aur ye hamesha todhi hota hai ki har frienship pyaar per hi aake rukhe." Meher says, wiping her tears away from her face. She was happy for Preet because she knew she had not lost everything. She still had her trust and her frienship and that was all she needed.
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I found the Meher-Heer talk at the end quite Blah...no sequels please!😆 So please press the LIKE button and wow! 2 Tragicy shots in one day, not bad! *pats back*😆
Love,
Shifu

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indiandoll89 thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
#2
My spot! 😛 I'll either edit this in like an hour..or tom! 😳

*edited*

I loved the ending! 😃 I'm glad Meher refused to let go of her friendship with Preet just because he was in love with someone else. It reminded me of SRK on Mohabbatein and what he says, "Zaroori to nahin ke jise aap pyar karo woh aapse pyar kare," 😳😳😳 (Yes when he says it, it's awesome!😛)

You know I loved the idea itself, cus it's SO real! 😃😳

Write More! 😛

Love you,

Meera😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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WAIT!!! whatttt... but he loves her, come on you jhave to write the bit where he goes and clears everything, tells her that he was joking and that he loves her!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Rajji-

WAIT!!! whatttt... but he loves her, come on you jhave to write the bit where he goes and clears everything, tells her that he was joking and that he loves her!

No, he doesn't love her. 'He says, that he has to tell 'Meher' that he loves her.
Her meaning Ashlesha😆
Dark Love thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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pa raaaaaaaaaaaaa raaaaaaaaaaaaa.

you guys are making me cry with your tragedies 😭
just cuz there aren't any meet scenes in the past few episodes, there's all depressive meet stuff? not fair!

but i liked it. esp the convo btw heer and meher. 😳
Edited by Dark Love - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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well thats even worse 😭 Lovely storywriting, but the tragedy of it all just makes me sad now! It's like SRK and Kajol in KKHH, so sad!
Edited by -Rajji- - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Rajji-

well thats even worse 😭 Lovely storywriting, but the tragedy of it all just makes me sad now!

Don't be sad!🤗
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Posted: 16 years ago
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well the fact that thyre married in the serial cheers me up! 😃 But we need to see some more of the loveeee and less of gungun wanting to go pee!

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Posted: 16 years ago
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reserved.

*edited*

I love the way you portrayed Meher's emotions, so realistic, the growth from friendship to love. And I love that it was tragic (I'm in a mood, don't ask. I think it's 'cos I didn't have coffee despite sitting in Coffee Bean.) The way you wrote it makes it all the more poignant, and bittersweet, with her holding onto their friendship.

And I'm not making much sense. Sorry.

Love,
Radz

Edited by Anhdara13 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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that was very nice... but why is everyone pairing ash with preet.. i know hwen she comes back everyone is gonna hate her to death...lol ut i loved how u empathized that even tho there is no love, atleast their is friendship to hold on to.. i believe in that strongly...

very nice "tragedy" as you put it.. in once sense(PREET-ASH) it is but on the other hand(MEET FRIENDSHIP equals unbreakable) is not..lol


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