Surprise One-Shot: || 'Change' ||

-Jwalamukhi- thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Another one of my Surprise One-shots which I don't think is up to my standards😭 but wait a minute, I have no standards😆😆 So yea, I don't like this shot as much as I like my others, but then again, who am I to judge..honestly guys, TELL ME if you hate this shot. I tell you guys when yours is bad, don't I? *puppy face* I hope the person who this is for likes it!😳
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"Would you like something to drink sir?" she asked him with a polite voice. Her beautiful bold eyes just staring at him, with a hint of sparkles in them. She had amazing eyes, which forced him to just stare at her.
"Er ya, I'd have a French Vanilla please." Mayank replies, coming out of his dream mode.
"Sure sir. That would be $3.45 please." she replies, placing him a sweet smile.
Mayank checks his wallet and comes with with $10 and looks up at the .45 that he still owed this girl. He looks up her, taking a deep breath. Mayank hated carrying change around in his pocket. He preferred bills to a high extent better.
"Here..." Mayank says, placing his $10 bill on her soft palms. Aradhna places a glance on this poor dude's face. He always used to come here everytime and as much as she could see standing around here, while not at the cash register, that this guy, Mayank Sharma his was, hated carrying change. Radz smiles and before she could even assume that Mayank would say anything, Radz hands back $7 just to see Mayank look up to her, confused.
"$7 is your change sir." Radz says, smiling.
"But I thought I was supposed to get change?" Mayank questions, forgetting about his math equations to come up with the exact amount that he would get back.
"Yes sir, but I have noticed that you were sulking over the fact that you would get change back, so the change is on me. and you get 7 dollars back." Radz says, reasoning it all out.
Mayank's cheeks turn red as Radz shoves towards him his favourite French Vanilla. As Mayank is about to leave, he turns around and faces Radz. "Hey look, I owe you one. Coffee tomorrow, I am paying." Mayank says, winking at Radz, who tries to maintain a stand outside but inside, she is only wishing for someone to fan her."
~*~
"Hey Radz, you came!" Mayank says, glancing up from his reading book and looking at the most beautiful girl that he thought never exsisted in a world like this. Radz smiles back.
"I am getting free coffee, why wouldn't I come?" Radz says, giggling. Mayank laughs.
"Nice way to put it all." Mayank replies. "Come sit."
"Well thank you. I thought you'd never ask." Radz says, pulling up a chair so she was straight across from Mayank
"So, I never got to know you well. I saw you working here though." Mayank states, trying to strike up a conversation.
"Oh yes, well, I work here to support my university funds. Actually, mom and dad wanted me to get married and so, I am here right now to show them that girls can also do something...and I swore not to plead for any money from them...so here I am, working and studying." Radz replies, proud of what she had done.
Mayank could do nothing more but be awe'd by her. "Very well. What is your name? Mine is..."
Radz cuts Mayank off. "Mayank Sharma. Jaanti hoon. I am Aradhna."
"Really? You know me?" Mayank questions, surprised.
"Yes, it was you who came first right? Everyone knows you...and my friend...she won't stop talking about you. So you can technically say I have heard a lot about you." Radz says, giggling.
"Your friend?" Mayank asks, confused. Mayank had interacted with no other girl, his age, except for Radz, so how can she say that her friend talked about him?, he wondered.
"Yes, Ria. Remember, 13 year old...the one at the orphanage." Radz replies, enlightening Mayank.
"Oh. You know her?" How did Radz know he visited the orphange every single day? Had she been stalking him? he wondered, from the worst possible reasons possible.
"Yea, actually I also visit the orphange. Me and her are best friends now." Radz says, giggling. "And she won't stop talking about her Mayank bhaiyaa being the bestest ever. Bringing her chocolates, toys and everything."
"That is great news actually. Good to see her interacting with other people." Mayank says, giving his best smile that was enough to make Radz go on cloud 9, not that she already wasn't.
"By the way, just out of curiosity, you like music? Radz asks out of the blue.
"Actually yes. I like to listen to slow songs. Music that touches the soul..."
"Same!" Radz says, her eyes litting up. She was proud that her and Mayank had some similarities and Mayank also had the same feelings aswell.
~*~
After hours and hours of discussion on each other's likes and dislikes and that too in one day, Radz finally took some time and made a statement that had bothered her for so long. Mayank and her both had so much in common, like coming to the same cafe, going to the same orphange and liking the same music and even liking the same food to even having the same company cellphone.
"You know Mayank, isn't it kind of a coincidence that me and you have soo much in common but yet, we never met each other till now?" Radz asks, wondering if what she had said, had even made sense.
Mayank smiles. "Well then, we should be thankful to that .45 for bringing such a major change in our lives." he replies, winking at Radz.
"I guess we should." Radz replies back.
Mayank and Radz giggle. No matter how weird it sounded, the 'change' had brought a change in thier lives. A sweet change that is.
~*~
Days passed just like that. From coffee to lunch dates and then to evening dinners beside the lake. Mayank and Aradhna did it all. That one 'change' had brought a change to the lives of two similar people who never knew that the other exsisted until that one 'change.'
Zindagi deti hai
bahut sitam
aur gham
lekin jab deti hai
khushi to aisa
lagta hai ki
woh do din ke
gham, chale
jayenge, jab mileja
kisiko, uska
hum dum
-(c)*Shifali*
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I hope everyone liked it and if you didn't then DO TELL ME!😊 I won't be angry...like honestly, am I THAT scary? I personally don't think this One-shot has any meaning at all!🤣 cus seriously, it's either that I have gone crazy or I have lost my touch...or it can be both and no Shabo, Radz, Ravz, Maddy and Meera, you CANNOT defend me on this one😆
Do reply!
Love,
Shifu

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Posted: 16 years ago
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I'm SUPPOSED to be working on an essay, but screw that, this is so much better! :)

Oh shush Shifali - this was not bad. I think it might seem like that to you because its different from your usual writing style. 😆 So yea its different from how you usually write but its NOT bad. *threatening muh*

I like the aspect of how just a lil change made such a huge change in both their lives. (🤣Yea I know that's bad - I'm losing my mind.)

Great poem as well, kinda reminded me of the line "jab upar waala detha, chapar PHAR KE deetha." 😆

--shabz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: shabo24

I'm SUPPOSED to be working on an essay, but screw that, this is so much better! :) Go work on that essay! Seriously!😆

Oh shush Shifali - this was not bad. I think it might seem like that to you because its different from your usual writing style. 😆 So yea its different from how you usually write but its NOT bad. *threatening muh* I know, it is not bad but yea, it's different. Haven't written anything for Radz OR Mayank serperately before😆 That is practically why

I like the aspect of how just a lil change made such a huge change in both their lives. (🤣Yea I know that's bad - I'm losing my mind.) Haha, 🤣That was the whole point of the shot anyways!😆😆😆

Great poem as well, kinda reminded me of the line "jab upar waala detha, chapar PHAR KE deetha." 😆Yea, I know eh, I was like HUH? It was not meant that way but anyways!😆

--shabz

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Reserved.
I read the last bit about me defending you and I'm going to ignore what you said =)
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: shabo24

I'm SUPPOSED to be working on an essay, but screw that, this is so much better! :)

Oh shush Shifali - this was not bad. I think it might seem like that to you because its different from your usual writing style. 😆 So yea its different from how you usually write but its NOT bad. *threatening muh*

I like the aspect of how just a lil change made such a huge change in both their lives. (🤣Yea I know that's bad - I'm losing my mind.)

Great poem as well, kinda reminded me of the line "jab upar waala detha, chapar PHAR KE deetha." 😆

--shabz

agree with you
indiandoll89 thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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I agree completely with Ravs! 😃

And I also reserve this spot! 😛

*edited*

How totally adorable was that? I loved the concept Shifu! 😛 I agree with Shabz though, because you haven't written one like this, you hated it...even though I still loved it! 😛

This type of change is nice, I want this type of change from now on! 😆 The way she knew who he was and everything that whole background info part was sweet! 😳😛

I also have to add that I'm slightly jealous...no not that Radz gets a one shot....just Mayank does that to me!😳 I hate Nupur a lot of the time, and then I go back to loving her! 😆

Can't wait for more! 😃

Love you loads,

Meera😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
blackdaughter thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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salsa!! Sush Shifu!! You talk............. well write too much!!! lol, Mine!! =D
*Hands on my hips tapping my feet* What all this about!?!? *Mock glare* Do you need us to get the cheese grater out or somthing!!! It was so fluffy and cute!!! 😳 I really liked it! Like Shabz and everyone else said, it was different from your usual style but does NOT mean that it wasn't nice!! It was adorable!!! 😃
I liked how it was so philosophicval with the whole change bringing change and all that!! *thumbs up* Really like how you portrayed how the smallest things can make all the difference!! 👏
I like the whole angle of them being so similar but meeting the first time!! It was really sweet Shifu!!! *hugs* I'm sure Radz loved it, for gods sake it's Mayank!! Who doesn't like him!?!? 😳 Thank god for chillar!!! 😆
Nice one Shifu and i can't wait till your next one!!! 😃
Love you!! *hug*
Edited by blackdaughter - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#8

😆great shot👏.normally i hate change but i love this 'change'

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Posted: 16 years ago
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what a change shif
loved it
awesum.
i don't know why but i always love ur ff title names
Anhdara13 thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
#10
MY SPOT.

Let me get breathing properly again.

*edited*

Shifu, I love you! Seriously, I love you so so so much for this! 😳 Mayank, and me! *squees* (Bhav, they include coffee, because they have realised that I LOVE coffee. 😆 And Mayank. 😳)

This was not meaningless at all Shifu! (I'm ignoring your comment about us defending you, because frankly it's not called defending if we speak the truth!) It was so cute and fluffy, and so so sweet. I love how I know Mayank so well, and how he thinks I'm pretty! 😳 Aw, and the mutual love for coffee and music, and everything!

Thank you so so so so much!

*edit add*

Oh, that poem! So sweet. Shifs you have a flair for poetry. An awesome talent that is.

*edit end*

Love,
Radz

Edited by Anhdara13 - 16 years ago

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