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Posted: 16 years ago
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I wrote this entire one shot for the valentines contest last year for BMTD, so any members from there will remember it!😳😳I just felt like it suits Prem and Heer right now, so I wanted to post it!😃 Enjoy!

There is pin-drop silence, as Heer makes her way downstairs into the main hall, turning off each light as she passes.


She tried to think about why her mind wandered in such unknown directions. Ever since she came back from Delhi, she knew he was HER Prem, but if he was, why was he acting so estranged around her....what would it take for him to be with her again?


She walks in, expecting to see him at his usual spot by the desk, but to her surprise he isn't there, she dismisses the thought, knowing he could still be at work. As she leaves her foot trips on the stereo remote on the floor and she presses the "play" button; right then though Prem walks in, and so he quickly catches her from hitting the floor.


*Hulcul Hui, Zara Shor Hua, Dil Chor Hua, Teri Aor Hua*


She drops her dupatta, as she sees how close his face was to hers. She could almost feel his breath on her.


*Hulcul Hui, Zara Shor Hua, Dil Chor Hua, Teri Aor Hua*


Prem felt so at ease even being in such close proximity with Heer, he knew he shouldn't let his emotions rule over his mind, but with her, he couldn't help it. He tries to steady her and so he helps her up.


*Esi Chale Jab Hawa, Ishq Hua Hi Hua*


Right then a cold breeze bursts through their wide open window, and so Heer goes to it and tries to pull it shut in vain.


*Esi Chale Jab Hawa, Ishq Hua Hi Hua*


Prem smiles, seeing her struggle with the window, but then he feels bad so he goes towards her to help her.


*Hulcul Hui, Zara Shor Hua,?Dil Chor Hua, Teri Aor Hua*


As he stands behind her, he can feel the heat from her body being so close to his.


*Hulcul Hui, Zara Shor Hua,?Dil Chor Hua, Teri Aor Hua*


He stretches out his arms in front of her and puts his hands on hers, to pull in the two windows.


*Esi Chale Jab Hawa,?Ishq Hua Hi Hua*


He lets go from the window, and she smiles with gratitude and then she goes towards the door, but she could feel his eyes on her, slowly she turns back and sees him watching her intently, she stares back at him. He gives her a re-assuring smile, and so she turns and walks to the next room.


*Ishq Hua Haaye?Ishq Hua Haayaaaeeeein*


*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~


Heer stands in the garden, picking flowers for the centre table, while Prem looks at her from his study's balcony. He sees her pick the flowers and then go towards the hose to water the rest of the plants, at that moment he slips into dream land as to what could happen between them.


*Palko Se Hoton Tak Jo Raha Nikalti Hai*


He takes his finger and traces a wet drop down from the corner of her eye to the side of her bottom lip.


*Guzre Na Wahan Se Yeh Teri Galti Hai*


She blushes and pushes away his hand and turns around. He takes the hose and starts splashing her with water.


*Palko Se Hoton Tak Jo Raha Nikalti Hai*


He drops the hose and walks toward her, a certain glint in his eye, and then he suddenly snaps out of his dream, only to see Heer still watering the plants.


*Hooo Rehte Hain Abb Hum Wahan, Ishq Hua Hi Hua

Hoo

Esi Chale Jab Hawa, Ishq Hua Hi Hua*


At that same moment when he looks down at her, she looks up at the sky and sees him staring down at her.


*Hulcul Hui Zara Shor Hua*


He quickly looks away; she smiles and slowly shuts off the water.


*Dil Chor Hua Teri Aur Hua *


She looks up again, and sees him trying to concentrate on his work; she smiles and disappears inside the house again.


*Lalala.....lalala....lalala...


Prem looks around the whole garden, his eyes searching for the one thing they can never get tired of seeing, but unfortunately not able to quench that desire. He goes back to his study and tries to focus on work again.


*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~


Prem leaves a note for Heer on top of her pillow while she is out of her room, telling her to meet him at 7:00pm at a special location.


*Ishq Hua*


As the time approaches, Heer makes her way to the location and is surprised to see all the lights dimmed except for one on the far side of the hall. But in the faint light she can make out rose petals on the ground indicating a certain path for her to take.


All of a sudden one floor light comes on, directed on Prem , who starts walking towards her, not breaking his gaze once.


*Kadmo Ko Sambhale
Nazaro Ka Kya Karein*


She is shocked at first, at how romantic this whole setting is, but then she decides to go along with her true feelings and so she makes a step towards him as well. She could tell that he knew that she knew he was Prem, nothing could alter their heart to heart connection.


*Nazro Ko Sambhale
To Dil Ka Kya Karein*


Finally as they both reach each other, Prem puts out his hand, for her to accept and he leads her to a table.


*Kadmo Ko Sambhale
Nazaro Ka Kya Karein*


She puts her hand on the table, and he reaches across and puts his on top, squeezing her hand ever so slightly, as to say, "This isn't a dream..."


*Dil Ko Sambhale Zubaan,?Ishq Hua Hi Hua*


Heer gets a bit nervous and so she breaks away and walks towards the large full-size window there.


*Esi Chale Jab Hawa?Ishq Hua Hi Hua*


After a few seconds she can feel someone behind her, and isn't the least bit startled as Prem slides his hands around her waist, and puts his chin on her shoulder.


"I love you..." He whispered ever so lightly.


*Hulcul Hui*


She turned around and quickly just put her hands around his neck, burying her head in his neck, while he puts his arms around her waist, seizing her into a passionate hug.


*Zara Shor Hua*


They break away slowly....not wanting to let each other go.


*Dil Chor Hua*


He takes her hand and intertwines his fingers with hers.


*Teri Aor Hua*


She rests her head on his shoulder while they stand.


*Hulcul Hui*


Heer feels butterflies in her stomach as she feels Prem's other arm snake across to hold her by the waist.


*Zara Shor Hua*


At that precise moment, thunder roars, and Heer yelps and holds onto Prem for dear life.


*Dil Chor Hua*


Prem smiles as he puts his right index finger under Heer's trembling chin.


*Ishq Hua*


She turns her shy gaze up towards him, and right then she closes her eyes slowly knowing what was coming next.


*Ishq Hua*


Prem then puts his other arm on her face gently, as if it is the most fragile piece of glass. Then he kisses her ever so gently, giving her the most loving first kiss, anybody must have given to their loved one.


*sigh* Was it good? 😛 I didn't win for it! 😆😆😆 but I hope you guys all enjoyed it!

Love you all loads,

Meera😳

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Blah.

'kay, I am back! 😃 Is this your first song-fic? It was so well written, with all the actions matching what is sorta "happening" in the song and all! 😃 Really well written and then on top of that, the song selection was amazing, suits Prem and Heer, cuz you sorta think of Harshiti as well when you hear it no? 😆

Anyway, my fave, most best part had to be when Prem was imagining himself and Heer playing around in the water and all but then he blinks and BAM! It was all a daydream. 😆 I loved how you described that scene, with the simplicity of it but still a touch of the whole fllmyiness of it all as well! 😳

Ohh the best matching lyrics had to be when it was "Thoda shor hua" and then the lightning went off! 😆 I loved that part, didn't expect that and it was so out of the blue which just made it perfect!

I want to know why you didn't win!! It was so amamzingly written, deserved to win.....maybe I'm a tad biased? 😉 Do write more Meera!

--shabz



Edited by shabo24 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Pudding! < -I like the oreo flavoured one =)
This somewhat seems familiar. But then again I could be making up stuff, knowing how good my memory is😆
I love this song! And I love how each little scene you had went with the lyrics of the song. Like the part zara shor hua and there was thunder =) And I loved the day dreaming part too when Prem imagines all that and how when he snaps out of it, he pretends to do work when he sees Heer looking😆 Loved the one shot Meera. Hope to see more =)
Edited by -Ravjot- - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: shabo24

Blah.

'kay, I am back! 😃 Is this your first song-fic? It was so well written, with all the actions matching what is sorta "happening" in the song and all! 😃 Really well written and then on top of that, the song selection was amazing, suits Prem and Heer, cuz you sorta think of Harshiti as well when you hear it no? 😆 Indeed it is,😃 I was really bored in India back when I wrote it!😆 awww you think so? thanks!😃

Anyway, my fave, most best part had to be when Prem was imagining himself and Heer playing around in the water and all but then he blinks and BAM! It was all a daydream. 😆 I loved how you described that scene, with the simplicity of it but still a touch of the whole fllmyiness of it all as well! 😳 Awww really? 😊 Thank you sooo much Shabo!😳

Ohh the best matching lyrics had to be when it was "Thoda shor hua" and then the lightning went off! 😆 I loved that part, didn't expect that and it was so out of the blue which just made it perfect! Yup, I just thought it was a totally adorable part!😛😳 Teehee!😳
😳
I want to know why you didn't win!! It was so amamzingly written, deserved to win.....maybe I'm a tad biased? 😉 Do write more Meera! Well...here's a tidbit, I didn't win for this! 😛 I won for my Koffee With Karan one shot that I wrote for Sharad and Divyanka!😉😆😆

--shabz



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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ooooh this was so pretty! Now, I know that 'pretty' isn't exactly a word you use to describe a story, but 'pretty' makes me think of 'oooh' and 'awwww', so this was so pretty!

I love how there was pretty much no dialogue, and everything was just...non-verbal. (Uh, duh, Bhav, if there are no words then it is non-verbal, no? Sigh...) Eek all I can say about this is 'awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!'... 😳 I feel really silly, but yeah. Loved this!
On a side note, I don't know what it was about last night, but I feel so rested today! After a very long time!
Love,
Bhav :D
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: sourpuss

Ooooh this was so pretty! Now, I know that 'pretty' isn't exactly a word you use to describe a story, but 'pretty' makes me think of 'oooh' and 'awwww', so this was so pretty! Awwww thanks Bhav!😳 It still means a lot to me though!😃😳

I love how there was pretty much no dialogue, and everything was just...non-verbal. (Uh, duh, Bhav, if there are no words then it is non-verbal, no? Sigh...) Eek all I can say about this is 'awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!'... 😳 I feel really silly, but yeah. Loved this! Awww yeah it had no words....I just wanted all their eyes to do the talking!😃😳 Don't feel silly!
On a side note, I don't know what it was about last night, but I feel so rested today! After a very long time! That's good!😃😳 I'm glad you feel like that!😳
Love,
Bhav :D

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Posted: 16 years ago
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OMG Meeru, that was just absolutely beautiful. The way you've captured them was just stunning. I mean, Prem and Heer are one nah, so nothing can keep them apart. Not lies, not faking memory loss, not faking death, nothing. Absolutely nothing, and you wrote that so sweetly. How Prem knows that Heer knows, and how finally, he gives in to his heart and allows himself to be with her. It was so beautifully captured!

I want more song-fics from you now. Abhi! Move it! Find a song, and write. 😆 Or, or, you could make a VM? 😉 On the song from 'Ishq', 'Ishq Hua'? Pwease?

Love,
Radz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Anhdara13

OMG Meeru, that was just absolutely beautiful. The way you've captured them was just stunning. I mean, Prem and Heer are one nah, so nothing can keep them apart. Not lies, not faking memory loss, not faking death, nothing. Absolutely nothing, and you wrote that so sweetly. How Prem knows that Heer knows, and how finally, he gives in to his heart and allows himself to be with her. It was so beautifully captured! Teehee, you really think so?😳😳😳 Awww yeah that was my whole idea!😃😳😛 I'm glad you understood the way it worked!😳

I want more song-fics from you now. Abhi! Move it! Find a song, and write. 😆 Or, or, you could make a VM? 😉 On the song from 'Ishq', 'Ishq Hua'? Pwease? I shall try when I find a proper song!😉😛😳 I'll listen it and see!😃

Love,
Radz

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Posted: 16 years ago
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it was soooooooooooooooooo sweet so adorable omg cute
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: zaibun

it was soooooooooooooooooo sweet so adorable omg cute



Thanks a lot Zaibun! 😃

Thanks Asma! 😛 Can't wait to see what you think...

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