FF: Bittersweet Allusions [Pt 13 pg.57]

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Priyadarshini Basu

@munam_13

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Posted: 16 years ago

#11

hey ravz... glad you started another ff..😃... I love to read your updates...loved the characterization... aww Heer is such a cutie pie... loved her all chulbuli and hyper active... and I guess the guy was our Prem😳... just loved how it all started... I was visualizing the yellow sarso khet and green filed all through your update..loved it a lot... post soon will wait...😃

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Nikita

@HCDeewani

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Posted: 16 years ago

#12

hey great 1st part..

the characters im lovin..

cant wait for the next

take care till then..

~nikki

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Afreen

@asyasahil928

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Posted: 16 years ago

#13

awwww....so cute. nice start....loved it. cant wait to see what happens next...continue soon. 😃

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Aradhna

@Anhdara13

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Posted: 16 years ago

#14

Ai hai! New story? That too with Shabz, Meeru and you? Now I cannot wait for the next part!

I love the way you have characterised Heer, so innocent and child-like. Very cute. But I am not liking this Kaki so much, though so far, she doesn't seem evil, which is a good thing. But Heer, so sweet. *pinches cheeks* And I can so imagine Shabz getting annoyed with someone for what Heer did. 😆 Such a Shabz reaction, expected. 😉 And then you and Meeru, can so totally see you guys roll your eyes at Heer trying to come up with an excuse! 😆

So Heer has collided with ... sada Prem by any chance? Cannot wait to read the next part Ravzie!

Love,

Radz

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sugii

@sugii

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Posted: 16 years ago

#15

ff is superb👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼.i enjoyed the first pt vry much.i luvvvvvvvvvvvvvved the heer character in this ff.plz continue soon

-sugi

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@flowers4u

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Posted: 16 years ago

#16

wah kya takar hui hai cant w8 to read more do continue n gud luk

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Kiran

@kimmu

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Posted: 16 years ago

#17

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

*edited*

You know, sometimes I really wonder where I use all the time I have. I mean just a minute ago it was like 3 pm, and now its 10:16. 😲

Right so after a very long time, I'm writing a long comment. Feel special, or unspecial. 😈 Usually its to make the person feel miserable because its taking them to long to comment back, but hey, it makes me feel better. 🤣 You can ask Shabz, I've tortured her with long - comments so much. 😆😆

Anyway, loved how you started off with the village. Have i ever told you how much I wish I lived in a village? But i know I wouldn't last too long in a village. Cuz the last time I went to Pakistan, I almost died of complaining too much. 🤣🤣 I already told you about my sleeping schedules, so don't need to bring those up. But it does make me think about how much you and Heer are alike. Which makes me think about your and Sati's love story. OMG! What if you and Sati end up like that? Think about it, you know you want to. 😉😆😆

I don't like Kaki. She's like one of those aunties that want you to be all lady-like. They don't understand that the more they try to make you lady-like the more you want to rebel. I mean phrebel. 😆 -- or would it be rebel. I think it would be rebel. But its a ph fanfic, then phrebel? *shakes head cofuzzled* Anyway, where was I? Yea, Kaki's a meanie. Thank God for Shabz, or Heer would have to go through more of Kaki's lecture. Go SHABOO!!

I love how when she reaches the field and she becomes all pouty and not having time, but then Shabz lets her play. Its like Heer's the kid, and Shabz is the mommy. 🤣 Oh are we all like Heer's mommys? I wanna be the mommy-in-choef-to-be-assisitant. I have no clue what its supposed to mean, but it sounds so cool.

The gang has a nakhra. But then again, i would do the same. 😛😆 I like the friendship you showed between everyone. And omg, they bumped into eachother. What a great start to a friendship, eh? 😆😆 Maybe Heer could give Prem chocolate and make it all better... or would it have to be the other way around. 🤔 Ummm.... chocolate?

Okay... thats all I could do... Still big eh? I feel proudish of myself.

Edited by kimmu - 16 years ago

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Jwalamukhi

@-Jwalamukhi-

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Posted: 16 years ago

#18

Updated my comment on Pg 1

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Ravjot

@rainydays.

Sparkler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: indiandoll89
mine! 😳 Will edit tonight sorry!

*edited*

I've told you before how much I love the idea/concept of this story/ff!😃 village ones are so much more fun!😳 Yes you have😃 Really? I wanna go to a village now🤔 Me+You=trip to a village in India?😃

Awww getting lectures about waking up late? no fun!😆😆 I get them in the summer all the time! 😔 But aww her dad's on her side! 😃 Mine's always opposite!😆😆 I get em every weekend Even in the summer. Apperently weekends/days off are for doing chores and cleaning the house

Yay! we're all there!😳 I'm super excited about this!😉😆😆

Yay! She bumped into someone! 😃 You already know I have a thing with ppl bumping into each other!😉😆😆 Can't wait to see/read what happens next!😃😃 Yes yes I know all about you and bumping into people😆 I'll post the next one soon. By that I mean maybe in a week or two😆

Love you loads,

Meera!😳

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Ravjot

@rainydays.

Sparkler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: *Shifali*

Me ish here now!😆 Yay!!!😃

First of all, 😆, LOVELY FF. I know I know, I am saying that because I already know the storyline but seriously AWSOME!👏 Aww thanks Shifali🤗 Just to let you know, I'll probably end up changing the story by accident😆

The part about naughty Heer reminded me so of yourself Ravz. Tu bhi aaise hi hai😆 *Statement*😆 What do you mean by that? *looks innocent* Actually I tried to make her seem like a bit of everyone (bit of you, Kimz, Shabz, Meera)

Anways, I loved the part and when you said she bumped into a certain 'someone'....*Pretends to wonder who that person is*😆😆😆 I think it's the dood wala😆

Ab chal, show me who that person is..😆 and what kinda heated convo they will have unless, Heer like usual, gives him time to speak that is!😆😆 From her character in this part, I don't think she is someone who will let someone else speak...🥱😆 which is nice but itna bhi nahin...she'll get into trouble either ways. I already told you, it's the dood wala😆 Ok I joke. I just drank milk so I keep saying dood wala😆 I'm not sure what to say now without giving it away😆

Waiting for Part 2!😉😆 I shall post it soon times =)

~Shifu

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