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Posted: 15 years ago
okie, so me is here, with my very very proud muh 😉.... i just commented on HS, and am doing so here too.... 😆 see how dediacted i am?? 😆....
actually, if you havent realised, it's my first comment on this FF....but to be honest, this is the one that has me hooked to it less than tanhai and HS.... i dunno why.... i love it too much... the story and characters, but it remind me somehow of hum aapke hai kaun, and then, i can only imagine salman and madhuri instead of premeer... but then that's the only reason.... and the bubbly heer doesnt go too well with me... i guess coz u write a lot of serious wali heer nah?? 😆... but none the less, i love it more than any other FF other than ek paal (obv... 😆) HS, tanhai and destiny.... how can i not when u wrote it? 😆....just wanted to tell you....
okie, so like HS, this is gonna be apparently short... 😆, since me is running out of time.... i hope u dont update it before i am done....
you know, i can totally relate to heer... she wanted to adopt a baby intead of force prem to sleep with someone else, atleast she didnt think like typical heroines do... i love that... coz no one ever shares their husband... ever....and i'm happy prem actually loved the idea... i think it was obvious though... 😆 prem is too lovable not to agree to what heer wants... i know my premu too well😆
"Prem Jhuneja, this is not funny. I'll kill you with my bare hands if this is a gag-gift!"...... oh jaz, what a beautiful reaction she had there.... just so unbeleivable everthing was that she couldnt take the pain of it not being real... i love her for that, and you for writing that.... and the way she craved for a family, omg, i just wanted to wipe away all her tears... she's an angel who god took away all previledges from... the right to be a mom, is like taking away her wings... i loved her courage, she's a woman and mother in real sense...
"Well, my boy is a genius!" omg, prem juneja is a sweetheart..... he's too cute yaar... adorable this line toh... i loved it.... 😃... every papa thinks his son is a genius, but the way he said it, i jjust wanted to feel sonny really is a genius.... akhir beta kiska hain?? 🤣....
you know, the way you end you chapter, i kinda changed my thoughts of not liking this FF as much... coz now that i think of it, i wanna read the next part more than HS!!! 😳.... but then that's the writer in you who makes me feel so... i am guessing, like i always do 🤣, that sonny would've died and heer would've turned crazy and went to a mental asylum... it a crazy wild guess but that's what i though randomly now... 😆.... i will kill you though if it;s right... and assure me it;s not warna, u know my capabilities... 🤣.... sorry for the absolutely lousy comment, was getting really exhaused!! but i promise it;s gonna be better (and longer 😆) in the next update... till then tc, and eagerly waiting for the next chapter...
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Edited by Cess- - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
hey guys...here is part 11...its kind of a filler part...so please bare with me 😳

Chapter 11

Present -

Prem remembers that ever since they had adopted Suraj, him and Heer had never been happier. The Jhuneja house was no longer the spotless, perfectly designed mansion that it had once had a reputation of being – it had turned into a complete mad house. Before one could see expensive art work and beautiful floral decorations in the halls and corridors of the mansion. After Suraj those pieces were replaced with Lego's and toy trucks. Where once stood a magnificent statue, was then replaced with an enclosed area for Suraj and Aayan to play in. The floor had been transformed from an exquisite ivory colored marble tiles, to a sea of neon colors – courtesy of the rampaging little boys, who always managed to throw their toys around. Prem still remembered how had Heer and Raaji had tried to keep the house clean but that didn't work out. They would always tidy up the house before he and Nihaal got home by stuffing the toys into the nursery or the play room. However, once the men of the family got home, all hell broke loose. Nearly every night Nihaal and Prem played with their boys. They had stopped talking on long meetings or long trips for business. Prem still remembered that at times both Heer and Raaji would both tease them about how they enjoyed playing with the toys more than the little boys. Prem chuckled as he thought about how one night Nihaal and he had been so engrossed in playing with the race track that they didn't even notice when Aayan and Suraj fell asleep on the mat.

With the two boys running around the house it had been hard on the couples, who rarely found any time to themselves. Whenever Prem and Heer managed to get a moment to be alone or the slightest bit romantic, they would hear baby Sonny wail through is baby monitor. Prem remembered one specific time that brought a weak smile to his face.

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Past –

Prem was in his room looking over a file for the next day because there was a meeting at Jhuneja Industries. Heer had finally managed to get Sonny to sleep in his crib in the nursery – which he shared with Aayan since the boys were still small. Heer came into the room and a gust of window came through the window at the same, causing her hail to blow all over her face. Heer moved towards the window to close it, not giving Prem a glance. Seeing this opportunity, Prem got up and moved towards her with the intention of fixing her hair. When Heer turned around she nearly ran into Prem because he was merely inches away from her. The moon light hitting her eyes made them sparkle – it melted Prem's heart.

Heer was trying to get away from him as she rambled on and on about how there was so much that need to be done around the house. Prem didn't pay any attention to what she was saying, instead his entire focus was on her rosy lips. He knew that Heer had every intention of walking away from him but she made one small mistake. Before she headed out of the room, she stretched up and placed a soft, innocent kiss on his lips – that was all it took. Just as she was about to step away Prem grabbed her by her arms. He then placed a kiss on her lips, but that kiss was nothing like that one Heer had given him just seconds ago. This kiss was filled with hunger and raw passion. Heer was caught off guard at first but it only took her a few moments before she deepened the kiss. Her arms went up around his neck and Prem's arms went around her waist, as they attempted to pull each other even closer. Prem was finally the one to come up for air and couldn't help but stare at Heer. She had an angelic smile on her face – a smile that soon broke into full on laughter.

"What are you laughing at?" asked Prem, who was standing there confused.

"What? Don't you mean 'who'?" she teased.

"Who? What do you mean?"

Heer wrapped her arms around him tighter as she said, "My darling, I am laughing at you!"

"Me? Why?"

"Well, because my deep red lipstick is all over your mouth. Just take a look. You look like a complete joker!" Heer said as she burst out laughing once again.

Prem stepped back and looked in the mirror off to the left of them. To his horror his entire mouth, and then some, was covered in red colored pigment. She was right; he did look like a joker.

"You called me a joker?" he said with a mischievous glint in his eyes, as he turned to face Heer. "Oh, that is going to cost you!"

Prem swiftly turned around and locked the door of their room. Heer, who at this point stopped teasing him, knows what he is planning to do so she tries to escape. Prem catches her in his arms and kisses her, almost senseless. He left her gasping for air when he finally stopped.

"Prem, what are you doing?" she said. "Let me go before someone comes looking for me."

"No way you're getting away from me now. You can't just tempt the lion and walk away," Prem said as he held her close. "You just wait and see what I do to you."

With that he lifted Heer into his arms. Heer knew that fighting him was useless so she put her hands around his neck and pulled him in for a kiss. Heer was dressed in a red sari, but her pallu was no longer spread across her body like it had been when she walked in – it was now dragging on the floor as Prem walked to the bed, where he sat her down. He turned her body slightly so that her back was to him. The blouse that Heer wore was quite literally backless, it was held together by a few strings only. Prem got to work right away. He gave his full attention to what he was doing. As he undid each dori, he placed a searing kiss on the flesh that lay below it. By the time he removed the blouse, Heer was squirming. She turned towards him and placed a passionate kiss on his lips.

Prem gently laid Heer on the bed, not once did their lips part. Heer was nearly melting into the mattress because Prem's weight was on top of her. By this time Heer's hands were working furiously at his shirt buttons – she nearly popped them off in her haste. Finally, with all the buttons undone, Heer let her hands roam freely over Prem's bare chest and abdomen. Prem broke the kiss for only a second and looked into Heer's eyes. In her eyes he could see the love and passion that they felt for one another. Prem leaned in again to kiss her, only to be interrupted by at shrill wail.

Prem and Heer both sprang apart suddenly at the sound of their beloved son. Sonny had apparently chosen that exact moment to cry out. Heer and Prem looked at each other. Heer began to laugh her head off as Prem was about ready to strangle someone. Heer got up quickly and began to fix herself.

"This boy! It's like he has a radar that senses when is Mamma and Papa are about to enjoy themselves!" Prem groaned in frustration and ran a hand through his hair.

Heer couldn't help but chuckle. "What can you say? He is your son."

Heer left to go check on Sonny as Prem managed to fix himself up. He grinned as he buttoned his shirt, because he noticed a good number of them were missing. His smile quickly vanished as he realized that all that heavy passion was going nowhere now.

"This boy I tell you," Prem said to himself. "One of these days, when he is all grown up and I'm an old grandpa, I'll torture him just like he is torturing me. I'll get even my boy. I'll get even!"

Prem was frustrated and angry, he knew it wasn't rational but he was angry nonetheless. Just then Heer walked back into the room with Sonny in her arms who was babbling relentlessly. Seeing Prem, Sonny suddenly became quiet but had a cheeky smile on his face.

"Of course you are happy," Prem said. "Spoiled all of Papa's fun but got yourself Mamma. Didn't you?"

At that very moment Sonny held out his hands out to Prem and said "Papa."

At that moment all of Prem's pent up frustration and anger evaporated. He couldn't be mad at that baby – it was his boy, his son. He took Sonny into his arms and had soon forgotten what had happened just minutes ago. He went from being in a world of raw passion and hunger, to being in a world of Lego's, toy cars and spit bubbles. It was a world he was pulled into easily and happily.

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Present –

Thinking about Sonny, Heer and that day made Prem chuckle out loud. He sure did love that boy with his whole heart and soul. One cheeky smile from Suraj and Prem was a goner. That smile had gotten through some very dark days in the past few years. But now, that smile was gone – just like Heer. Prem would give his life at the drop of a hat to see those smiles again. To see their eyes light up, to see them happy and full of life. He would give anything…anything…to just see his precious family once more.


JAZ


ps: cant wait for comments 😃


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Posted: 15 years ago
i will comment def

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sorry for not commenting earlier
but awwiee
this chapter was soo cute
and hot .....you should warn me next time if I need cold water or a fan ....ah the acha veh ke ami brang me pani!
😉 but lets just keep that between me and you ok? 😉 😛
sonny baby definitely knows when to trouble his parents doesn't he?...well done bachu! 🤣
PH-antabulous update jaz!

-aashifa-
Edited by curledup - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
mine 😛

*edited*

Aww Jaz, it was SOOOOOO short! 😲 That's like the shortest thing I've EVER read from you! 😛

But It was awesome nonetheless! 😛 Damn the whole flashback was brilliantly written Jaz! 😃

The passion that you wrote between them was perfect! 😛 And Suraj sounds SOOO cute! 😃😳 Both the kids actually! 😛

Can't wait for more! 😃

Love you,

Meera😳

P.S. My comments were matching the length of your post 😛

Edited by indiandoll89 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
Omg wot an amazing update!!! The flashback was very passionate 😉
But the suspense is killin me!!!!! I reallllly want to know wot happened to heer and sonny???
Plz continue sooon!!
Edited by Premeer_chahat - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago

wonderful update...loved the whole part and thank god i didnt 😭 this time...though the ending made me feel terribly bad for prem.....reading it , i have horrible feelings about what might have happened to his family....nah , must be just me..

loved the premeer scene...😳😳😳
and prem's scene with sunny.....you see all papas are like tht😉.....one smile from their sons and they are goners..and mommys can utilize this for their benefit😆
you have very beautifully brought out the atmosphere of Juneja mansion....
eagerly waiting for the next update...
Edited by angel82 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
come on.......i will eat someone brain if i don't get to know what happened to heer......i don't have patience.........anyways that said.......plsssssssssssssssssssssss update soon..................😭
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Posted: 15 years ago
Great update! Ya even I wonder what happened to Heer!
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Posted: 15 years ago
oh my goodness..............*fanning myself*
I'm seriously phrooling right now.........
that was HAWT..............☺️
all that passion, intensity, hunger, desire.......hai rabba.........
definetly .....i repeat definetly worth the wait...........
fantastic update Jaz.........loved it..........

Yaz
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dats right i'm still phrooling............




Edited by yasu09 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
hey just loved ebery bit of it.. it was amazing .. the way u showed the passion and then disturbed and how prem is effected and then his anger vanishing seeing his son.. just loved every bit of it

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