FF: Rishtey(MP-NA)- new prt updtd 12/25 new thread - Page 75

Originally posted by: zcbcc34

but seriously i am trying to get this fic over with by May end.

😕 😭

Originally posted by: dipsyworld

Awesome!! This is a great update 👏 Absoultely loved it.

JC, first of all i like that you have included both Neesha and Michi equally in the parts...so all readers will be happy. 😃 thankyou hun. That was really an effort. See how long the chapter got.😆😆

Neev is so good in your ff..just like Ayesha. Ayesha has a very terrible past. Poor girl! It would be really tough for her to come out of the trauma. I hope Neev gives her the support she needs and makes her come out of it. Neesha is just a fabulous jodi....very made for each other. oh don't worry. No more hurdles for Neesha. It'll be smooth sailing for them from now.

Now about Michi. Chotti Chashmish 😆😆😆..what a nickname! haha...i coudln't think of something more creative.😆😆 but it sounds cute from Milind's mouth😳 my doll loves it too..tho she told him not say it.😆😆 And Milind has started talking like a friend to Prachi and joking with her. Thats a great improvement.😳 yes its an improvement. like the time in the show when she stiched up his buttons and he joked with her. what a suprise that was.😆😆😆 and a marked improvement. So now things are falling in place about why Milind felt he had seen Prachi somewhere before. That was a surprise that they were classmates. They were not classmates. If you remember i mentioned that when Anjali was introduced...Prachi said that Anjali was junior to Milind in college and Prachi and Anjali are the same age. So Prachi was in her first year and Milind was a senior student when they first met.
BTW Asha tai is funny.😆 lolz. ya sometimes.

Waiting for the next update. 😳 oo..don't know when hun...and i am not gonna make promises this time. It'll come within a week i guess.

Originally posted by: jinc118

Coming to my detailed comments, I am afraid these will not be in order but will at random, keeping pace with my thoughts. JC while most days I have wished for this, today I really wished for it strongly - that we were in the same time zones, that is! You see you mosly post your chapters in the evening/night when I am already asleep. So I get to see it only in the morning of a week day when I am at work. Luckily for me we have a holiday here today so I managed to read your marathon chapter (even before I brushed my teeth!) in peace and savour every line. In fact I must have taken ages to finish it because I had to stop at several places. I was overwhelmed by the emotions running through me as I went through it. This is simply the best chapter of your FF so far and I am sure the ones to come will only outdo it in excellence given your talent. So I am eagerly waiting for more treat.

I have also read most of the comments by others. So I'll avoid saying the same things. About the chapterisation, when you said that this is the longest chapter,(I resisted the urge to scroll down to see how long it is) I thought why did you not break it into two. When I finished with it I realised why you did not. While both the Michi and Neesha tracks dealt with past memories, the contrast between them was stark - one being recollection of more pleasant ones and the other, really painful ones. If they were broken in two chapters, this contrast would have been lost.

In the Neesha track the suspense was well built and though I guessed that the card her lawyer gave her was to do with Ayesha wanting to stop her divorce, I would have never imagined it to be to a marriage counsellor maybe because I always thought Ayesha would be up to some under handed tactic to stop the divorce. Now I know that I could not have been more wrong in figuring out your Ayesha. When you mentioned that the counsillor told Neev that she was not a coward but was only hurt badly that she could not talk about it herself, I knew it was something to do with physical abuse (in fact your disclaimer at the start made sure of that). But I never guessed it was to do with child molestation. I should have known that the visits to that man's house (what was his name, Fernando?) had more significance in the story than just about dance lessons. I think this guy is the molestor, is n't he? It explains why Ayesha ended up the way she did and her infatile reaction (biting) when confronted or when brought physically close against her wishes. The depth of her wounds is so vivid and palpable in her tears, her recoil, her curling into a bundle, all of which were done unconsiously that even she is not aware of them. Victims of child abuse mostly end up shutting the world out. They bury their thoughts so deep within them to escape the hurt. Ayesha has turned up remarkably well and her social work during her free time was a great way to take her mind off the harshness of the world while at the same time contribute to reducing it for others. It also explains the other side of her, her need to always be in control of situations and people inorder to overcome what she felt was her shortcoming as a child.

Neev's handling of her pain was commendable. Although at the time he was not aware of her background he could sense and see her pain and did not press on. Even after he came to know of her past the way he responded was so moving. It helped Ayesha to handle her emotions better. And yes, you did the right thing in getting the councillor in between to sort out Ayesha's past. A Neesha confrontation would have been turmulous. From your comments it appears there will soon be a Neesha consummation and I bet it will be a passionate one, indeed. Neev better be geared to handle a passionate Ayesha. Noticed the subtle way you made known Ayesha's physical attraction towards her husband in the comment the counsillor made about his smile and how Ayesha had told her it was infectious. Shows the extent of her attraction to him when she can say such things to a perfect stranger. Surely it would have been an inconsequential thing compared to the huge burden she was offloading and would not have had a direct bearing on the advices she was to get but still the fact she mentioned it gives an insight to her feelings for her husband. Wonder how this girl reigned in her feelings for him for so long. Looking forward to the dam breaking open and flooding him completely. Neev I'm sure would have no qualms about it nor would we!😉 By the way I'm glad you decided on this course correction for the Neesha track. In retrospect this is far better than what you had planned for them earlier.

Coming to Michi, I love these two. Both had secretely appreciated the goodness in the other. Loved the old memories. I can just visualise it. How come Milsi did not know that Anjali had left the college after one year? If he had, he would not have asked Ayesha for the graduation photo, would he? Or did he forget it and had asked for this photo many years later? Your comments that we may not like your Prachi later makes me wonder whether she deliberately misled Milsi into believing that Anjali loved him, maybe because she did not want to hurt him and maybe she thought that she can get Anjali to love him some day. I get this feeling because in an earlier chapter you had mentioned that when she saw him tossing in the bed she felt guilty for being the reason for his disturbed state. But then again she does n't seem to be aware that Milsi felt betrayed by Anjali. Your MAP puzzle is a real big puzzle indeed!!! Anyway there is not much I can do but wait for you to take pity on us and let us into your big secret some time soon. Milsi is definitely getting drawn to her and I guess that will do for now for I want to see the whole Michi romance playing out. By the way when things dont work out for them somewhere down the line and they have this big misunderstanding because of the Anjali issue which may get Milsi to believe Prachi is cold hearted I want him to recollect her kindness to even a stray dog out on the road for whom she even risked her life.

Originally posted by: optimist

Opti...i didn't read this before the pm. So i didn't expect that you had commented here. But i am so glad you didn't wait for my reply and commented anyway. Please don't ever stop yourself from saying what you truly feel.🤗I won't get offended unless its a personal attack and i know you enough to know that you would never do that.😊

Coming to my detailed comments, I am afraid these will not be in order but will at random, Thats ok keeping pace with my thoughts. JC while most days I have wished for this, today I really wished for it strongly - that we were in the same time zones, that is! You see you mosly post your chapters in the evening/night when I am already asleep. sorry hun. I will try to make the updates on Saturdays from now on. But the thing is Saturday is the day i have some free time to start writing and by the time i finish and then have to proof read and make sure everything is fine...but i'll try to do it on Saturdays. So I get to see it only in the morning of a week day when I am at work. Luckily for me we have a holiday here today so I managed to read your marathon chapter (even before I brushed my teeth!) lolz..omg🤣 That reminds me one time i needed to take a shower and i sat in front of the computer for 2 hours waiting for Pragu to update her FF.😆😆😆 so ur not alone hun.in peace and savour every line. In fact I must have taken ages to finish it because I had to stop at several places. I was overwhelmed by the emotions running through me as I went through it.*sniffles* i am sorry but i did want to make you cry.😆😆😆 This is simply the best chapter of your FF so far and I am sure the ones to come will only outdo it in excellence given your talent. So I am eagerly waiting for more treat. oi...so much expectation...I definitely will try. But the high emotional quotient wont' be maintained...things will be much lighter until the next confrontation scn between the main characters.😃

I have also read most of the comments by others. So I'll avoid saying the same things. About the chapterisation, when you said that this is the longest chapter,(I resisted the urge to scroll down to see how long it is) I thought why did you not break it into two. When I finished with it I realised why you did not. While both the Michi and Neesha tracks dealt with past memories, the contrast between them was stark - one being recollection of more pleasant ones and the other, really painful ones. If they were broken in two chapters, this contrast would have been lost. yes..i really was tempted to break them in two with Michi scns being another chapter...but then the things were happening in the same day and like you said about the contrast...as i was writing i was getting emotional myself so taking a break from Neesha and writing Michi parts was a welcome relief for me too.

In the Neesha track the suspense was well built and though I guessed that the card her lawyer gave her was to do with Ayesha wanting to stop her divorce, I would have never imagined it to be to a marriage counsellor maybe because I always thought Ayesha would be up to some under handed tactic to stop the divorce. Now I know that I could not have been more wrong in figuring out your Ayesha. yup. I was surprised why you wouldn't think she would do something wrong. But its cleared now. 😃When you mentioned that the counsillor told Neev that she was not a coward but was only hurt badly that she could not talk about it herself, I knew it was something to do with physical abuse (in fact your disclaimer at the start made sure of that). But I never guessed it was to do with child molestation. I should have known that the visits to that man's house (what was his name, Fernando?) had more significance in the story than just about dance lessons. I think this guy is the molestor, is n't he? I am not sure if i want to give the molestor a face. I don't think he will show up ever again in the story. So you can imagine him to be whoever. But if i feel the need for redemption...or for whatever reason if i decide give him a face...i'll think of this comment.😃 It explains why Ayesha ended up the way she did and her infatile reaction (biting) when confronted or when brought physically close against her wishes. I am glad you made that connection. it does make sense. The depth of her wounds is so vivid and palpable in her tears, her recoil, her curling into a bundle, all of which were done unconsiously that even she is not aware of them. Victims of child abuse mostly end up shutting the world out. They bury their thoughts so deep within them to escape the hurt.yup. I've unfortunately seen too much of that. Ayesha has turned up remarkably well and her social work during her free time was a great way to take her mind off the harshness of the world while at the same time contribute to reducing it for others. yup thats whats admirable about her. She has a very strong will power and that really has been instrumental in keeping her mind of the hurt and pain. It also explains the other side of her, her need to always be in control of situations and people inorder to overcome what she felt was her shortcoming as a child. Oh my Opti. Thankyou for noticing all the subtleties of my Ayesha. I don't think i have done this for any other character in the FF. Because she was the first one i sketched up and thought of because i was so upset with what they did to such a beautiful character in the show. I am so happy all this was evident.😃

Neev's handling of her pain was commendable. Although at the time he was not aware of her background he could sense and see her pain and did not press on. Even after he came to know of her past the way he responded was so moving. It helped Ayesha to handle her emotions better. And yes, you did the right thing in getting the councillor in between to sort out Ayesha's past. A Neesha confrontation would have been turmulous. yes it really would have been explosive and i couldn't write that much emotional stuff tho i tried. I have no idea how i will handle the rest of the emotional drama in my FF.😆😆😆 and i can't tone them down because that will not have the desired impact.😕 ooo i am in trouble.😆😆😆 From your comments it appears there will soon be a Neesha consummation 😳yup and I bet it will be a passionate one, indeed.hehehe you know it will be...but actually you might find it a bit funny too.😆 don't ask...just wait for it. Neev better be geared to handle a passionate Ayesha. lolz...poor guy. Noticed the subtle way you made known Ayesha's physical attraction towards her husband in the comment the counsillor made about his smile and how Ayesha had told her it was infectious. Shows the extent of her attraction to him when she can say such things to a perfect stranger. ummhmm..she surely is attracted to him...more so because she loves him..rather than the physical qualities. Like you tend to find the object of your affection to be the most beautiful thing in the world. But Neevu does have an infectious smile.😳😳😳 Surely it would have been an inconsequential thing compared to the huge burden she was offloading and would not have had a direct bearing on the advices she was to get but still the fact she mentioned it gives an insight to her feelings for her husband. Wonder how this girl reigned in her feelings for him for so long. shes a hitler i tell you.😆 Looking forward to the dam breaking open and flooding him completely. just make sure the flood gates of your eyes don't break open too.😆😆😆 Neev I'm sure would have no qualms about it nor would we!😉 By the way I'm glad you decided on this course correction for the Neesha track. In retrospect this is far better than what you had planned for them earlier. Thankyou. Actually this part was always on the cards but i wanted to Ayesha to feel a bit more comfortable with him first. But i really was high on something when i wrote that wedding part...that would really not have led up to this in the same way that it has now.

Coming to Michi, I love these two. Both had secretely appreciated the goodness in the other.lolz...i know our duffers. Inspired by the SS engagement scn in the show when both of them kept looking at each other from across the room and thinking up whatever they wanted in their heads. Loved the old memories. I can just visualise it. How come Milsi did not know that Anjali had left the college after one year? If he had, he would not have asked Ayesha for the graduation photo, would he? Or did he forget it and had asked for this photo many years later? No he didn't know she left after a year...why because like i mentioned in this part...this was Prachi's first year in college...and i said in one of the comments that Milind's senior year (possibly his last year)...so after that year he wasn't in college with them...so he didn't know she left. Things will make more sense when all the past is revealed. Your comments that we may not like your Prachi later makes me wonder whether she deliberately misled Milsi into believing that Anjali loved him, maybe because she did not want to hurt him and maybe she thought that she can get Anjali to love him some day. I get this feeling because in an earlier chapter you had mentioned that when she saw him tossing in the bed she felt guilty for being the reason for his disturbed state. But then again she does n't seem to be aware that Milsi felt betrayed by Anjali. you are right. She doesn't know what Milsi is feeling towards Anjali and she doesn't have much to do with that..tho she does actually. (ok don't bother...cause i can't clear the confusion without telling you the secret.)😆😆😆Your MAP puzzle is a real big puzzle indeed!!! not that big. Like i said earlier...you were on the right track before...but now you are going off tangent. Anyway there is not much I can do but wait for you to take pity on us and let us into your big secret some time soon. lolz...i wish to get to that part soon too...but there is things that happen in between and you don't want to miss that either.😳 Milsi is definitely getting drawn to her and I guess that will do for now for I want to see the whole Michi romance playing out. By the way when things dont work out for them somewhere down the line and they have this big misunderstanding because of the Anjali issue which may get Milsi to believe Prachi is cold hearted I want him to recollect her kindness to even a stray dog out on the road for whom she even risked her life. he will remember...i just hope my readers remember too. Thats the purpose of this little detail now.

Originally posted by: tweety_me14

JC you have no clue as to how much I enjoyed reading this bit...hmm i can guess.😆😆For me this was the best so far! hats off to you! thank you Be it Neev and Ayesha's story or the way Michi's reletionship is developing- I enjoyed every bit of it...Loved this update to the T! I feel very bad for Ayesha..No wonder she was so reclusive and never opened up...But im also glad that she has Neev by her side to give her the love and comfort that she deserves...Lets hope she gets all the happiness now! She will.
But Im waiting for Milind to fall in love with his 'chashmish chhoti'!! lolz..i still have to think up the scns for them.😊
Lovely update JC! Waiting to read the next part!!!