FF: Rishtey(MP-NA)- new prt updtd 12/25 new thread - Page 74

Originally posted by: zcbcc34

JC!! 😃 *Okay DONE! Thanks Rima. I guess the long chapter deserves the long comment.😆😆😆

Part 1...Neesha...👏JC...I like call myself the self proclaimed queen of romance😆😉 but from this moment, right now...Its yours hun!!! TOTALLY AND UTTERLY yours because you deserve it and I've not even read the other bits yet....😳
Ok thats too much. You are still the queen of romance darling. Because i read you and go into a whole other world. Don't quit that title. And i am not taking it.😆😆
god...this line just got me...But my silence should only convey that three words are not enough to say what I feel.
PERFECT, perfect and just perfect...I just cant believe how well you understand Ayesha and can write about her...👏 JC...Ayesha is someone who has emotions running really deep...so deep that she can't merely say it in words. Therefore her silence. But at the same time she feels the need to protect her heart and feelings because they run so deep...also another reason why she doesn't always tell people how she feels.

I just loved it...I dont know what other word to use besides perfect but another one that comes to mind is BEAUTIFUL...I just loved the fact that they didn't have to make love but everything about their actions was perhaps more intimate and romantic and amazing than anything...😃Thankyou. I am glad you felt that way.

Okay...I'm gona stop gushing and start reading the rest....plus..Mini prediction...Can Ayesha not have children? and I promise I haven't read the other bits or posts....lolz...now you know what her problem was.

Part 2 Milind-Asha Tai

😆Asha Tai: "Aye hai, tujhe toh badi fikr ho rahi apni biwi ki. Aur meri bhoodi haddiyon ka kya?

How do you think of these things hun??? LOL...you have old ladies all fifured out man!! haha...i have enough oldies in my household. I hear them bickering all day.😆 Especially after their young son gets married and sharts to shower his wife with attention...😆😆😆Natural process of things. But Asha tai was only joking.😊

OOo did he see Prachi in the picture???😳 lolz...what else

Part 3 Neev-Doc

Okay not too sure about my prediction now...so will refrain from saying anything regarding what is bothering Ayesha but one things that struck me during this part was....
"If she has something to tell me, then she can do so herself," he said without turning back. "I am not asking her for any explanations. She is the one who wants to tell me something. Then she should also have the courage to say it to me. I don't want a third person between us."

Because I do not yet know what the secret is...I cant comment on whether she should or shouldn't have told him herself but when Neev says this I both feel for him and also am wondering whether he knows Ayesha yet... I dont know whether that was your intention but I could just be reading into it, but I quite liked it...I kind of want her to be the one to tell her and I think I understand Neev's anger....but on the other hand...he should have understood that it must be something that she cannot...but I think the a greater part of me wanted her to tell him...Originally i was going to have Neev walk out of the office without listening to the doc and then yelling at Ayesha and she very emotionally tells him whats up. But that really got too much of emotion for me and i couldn't write that part. And if i couldn't write it, then i could imagine what the readers would feel. So i opted for it this way. It really is something very hard to say, especially to your loved ones. Its sometimes easier to say to a stranger.

Part 4 Milind-Prachi

AWWWWWWWWW😳 How cute is Prachi...I LOVE her more now so than ever...OO he remembers her atleast thats something i know. Tho there is more to their story.😉...and gosh this girl...visiting Baba...😊, just adorable, the puppy as well...just lovely...this part...Prachi gulped and said "I didn't want you to remember me as the chashmish chotti. I went to the trouble of looking different. I never want to revisit that phase of my life."

Really felt for her, whatever the reasons for her transformation might be...The transformation was really for a change. And her mother and Anjali really got her into it. Thats all...no other reasons.
This part for me was all about Prachi and why I love her😳😊...though we did get to see a different side to Milind, more playful and easy going...Liked that too
Thankyou for loving my Prachi. There might be a point when people are not really going to like my doll.😭 But its imperative. So i am building love for her.😃 Plus i really haven't explained her like i have Ayesha or Anjali. So now its her time. And so is Milsi...he needs more dimensions to him.

Part 5 Neesha

JC...I really dont know what to say...because I dont think my words can justify what that part made me feel...but I have to say your writing in that last part was truly commendable...
Thankyou.
I have to point out a couple things that stood out for me and really just broke my heart reading...I'll never be whole again Neev and Ayesha: "Neev, do you still love me…the same"
😃 now also tell me why that stood out from the rest.
JC...I'm just full of admiration about how you handled it and I really hope you realise how absolutely stunning this was.👏
Thankyou darling. I appreciate that you commented in such detail. Always love reading your comments.
Both of them were just beautiful and just....like I said, I really dont have words...

Only thing I stand by...is probably that she should have told him, but I can also appreciate how hard that would have been...and this is only my opinion...
I already mentioned why she couldn't. But she did talk to him about it afterwards. I guess knowing that he already knew and the initial shock, surprise and all were already over with...probably made it easier for her to talk about it.
THANK YOU JC...😊 that was just amazing and I think as of now, my personal favourite chpt... I am glad you liked it so much. I think this was one of the two most intense chapters of my FF>>but you can be assured there is more to come when my Michi take the center stage.😳

Originally posted by: pragalbha

JC.........I am gonna give honest comments! 😊 Thankyou for that.

I was really really waiting for the Neesha part!! The moment you introduced the twist, where he asks her if she is ok and asks her to sleep, I immediately knew that she had some unspeakable issues from her childhood!! 😕 and I was upset!!! Sorry I felt upset with the intrusion I know hun. But promise i'll make up for it when Neesha do consumate...and yes that will happen.😉.......I still am but I give it to you that you wanted to extend their interaction with each other, make their love really grow and so this was a very realistic way of stalling the passion for the time being. 👏 👏 👏 The passion is not stalling. Don't worry. But Ayesha needed to be justified for her reservations. Her difficult childhood and this experience would really explain why she can't trust people even though she desperately tries to reach out for love.
I am not sure what your plan is about how Ayesha is going to recover but my humble request would be that she not dwell too much in her past she won't...i am not streaching Neesha part anymore.........because she has already suffered a lot and if she is going to stop herself (read that as you, the writer 😆) everytime from opening out then it will become a stretch!! I hope you understand what I am trying to say 😊 yes i do...and don't worry the writer does not plan on stopping her from moving on. I still have to figure out how fast i am gonna have that happen.😆😆 She has already started on the way to moving on. If you read carefully you'd see that telling Neev everything was a big part of moving on. And immediately after she was walking holding his hand😃 unlike the time when he had held her hand and she removed it.
Ofcourse later in the FF if you need to vindicate Ayesha then maybe you can bring that lowly character back for redemption, but as of now I just want her to completely, unconditionally fall in love with him and tell him how much she cared and move on!!!! 😳
lolz Pragu. she does love him dearly and i promise you'll get that grand declaration of love from Ayesha and its gonna make up big time for all the silence and reluctance on her part.
Eventhough you interpersed them, I read all the Neesha parts together and then I read all the Michi parts together 😛 lolz. thats ok I liked the Michi part this time! But I have a huge doubt!!!! I thought Milind had a partial memory loss........... then how did he remember those past situations of his with Prachi??? Did the photo jog his memory?? That was not clear, atleast for me. hahhaaaa. Pragu are you reading my FF. Milind has Partial amnesia in the show not in my FF. lolz. He hasn't lost his memory. You are confusing the two hun. He didn't remember Prachi all this time because she looks completely different from what she looked like when he met her. And even back then he had only seen her a few times tho he did notice her. But as the problems in his life took priority its natural that he wouldn't remember. Yet when he saw her he did feel that he had met her before.
But their scenes were awesome!!! He was soo caring today (ofcourse in his own rough way), that it shocked me pleasantly!!! 😃 lolz Pragu. I am sure by the end of the FF...you'll like him too.

Awesome awesome job and thanks for the pm!!! no probs.
And thanks a lot for spending so much of your time and energy to make this a wonderful reading for us!!! 🤗 Thanks for reading.😃 and commenting. luv ya.

Originally posted by: jinc118

Originally posted by: jinc118

JC....sorry if I offended you, but some of your previous statements made me draw the conclusion that you had started the story at the same point at where the serial was, which was the partial memory loss track. Here are those statements, I went back searching for them 😆

From Chapter 8 : He glanced at the file sitting next to him on the passenger seat. He opened it and took out the photograph. He stared hard at the enlarged photograph. She was pretty. Beautiful actually. Her smile was contagious. It lit up her eyes. And even though the flash from the camera made a glaring reflection in her eyes, the green specks in between the hazel of her iris was clearly visible, or was it that Milind was just staring at her eyes for too long............. But the picture had turned upside down and there it was written on the back the name of the owner of those bewitching eyes, Prachi Inder Shah.

From Chapter 11 : And if it hadn't, now she knew that he was back. And that was all he wanted to accomplish tonight. "Sweet dreams Prachi", he had muttered as he hung up the phone because he knew if she had a drop of sleep tonight, she'll only have nightmares. He looked up at the sky and said, "Tomorrow Prachi Inder Shah, Tomorrow you will meet Milind Mishra."

From Chapter 12 : Ayesha quickly realized her folly and said, "Tum log kabhi mile nahi ho na? Milind yeh Prachi hai, aur Prachi yeh hai Milind, mera sab se achcha dost. But I shouldn't have to introduce you guys, you know about each other so well. But its so funny that even after so much has conspired, you two have never met before."

Milind took a few steps towards Prachi while Prachi remained rooted. "Ayesha ne kaafi kuch bataya hai tumhare bare mein, lekin aaj pheli baar milna hua hai." Prachi winced as she recollected some old memories and thought how ironic it was that he didn't remember her. "Lekin mujhe aisa kyun lag raha hai ki hum pehle bhi mil chuke hain?". Prachi looked up at his puzzled eyes and tried to find a glimmer of recognition for her in them. But she was disappointed again. Finally she said, "Nahi, hum pehle kabhi nahi mile".

There are a couple of other statments but don't have the time to search for them now. These above statements made me conclude that he suffered memory loss, because I felt that you seemed to stress a lot on the fact that he did not remember her. I hope you understand.

Thanks!

Originally posted by: zcbcc34

Part 1...Neesha...👏JC...I like call myself the self proclaimed queen of romance😆😉 but from this moment, right now...Its yours hun!!! TOTALLY AND UTTERLY yours because you deserve it and I've not even read the other bits yet....😳
Ok thats too much. You are still the queen of romance darling. Because i read you and go into a whole other world. Don't quit that title. And i am not taking it.😆😆JC! I am SHOCKED!!😆 Too bad...it's yours now...you cant give it back...you have no reciept OH shucks. I need to remember to keep the receipt.😆😆 Ok so we can ping pong the title back and forth.

I just loved it...I dont know what other word to use besides perfect but another one that comes to mind is BEAUTIFUL...I just loved the fact that they didn't have to make love but everything about their actions was perhaps more intimate and romantic and amazing than anything...😃Thankyou. I am glad you felt that way.Honestly I just loved it...really, reading it over I can see the subtle things that you included in her behaviour that is later explained by what happened to her and knowing that now just makes it even more beautiful...I just love the way Neev did not question or Protest and went to sleep beside her...I dont know if she was still wearing her gown in bed, but if she wasn't and she woke up to put her Pjs on then that was also lovely and very subtle.. yes she did wear the gown to bed and then later got up and changed. And i could only see Neev doing that. Because he was very confused by her. But at the same time he saw that there was something wrong and possibly this was not the right time to ask her about it. See he does understand her silence a lot more now...that was implied...if you remember in the previous part there was a small line that said he would bite his tounge to stop from making jokes and try to listen to her silence. That has really helped him in how he behaves with her now. He understands her to a great deal without her having to say anything. But he is not psychic so some things still surprise him.😃

Okay...I'm gona stop gushing and start reading the rest....plus..Mini prediction...Can Ayesha not have children? and I promise I haven't read the other bits or posts....lolz...now you know what her problem was.Yeh lol and I guess I just couldn't comprehend soemthing like that...actually am feeling quite foolish by that now...😳 lolz thats not so silly hun.

Originally i was going to have Neev walk out of the office without listening to the doc and then yelling at Ayesha and she very emotionally tells him whats up. But that really got too much of emotion for me and i couldn't write that part. And if i couldn't write it, then i could imagine what the readers would feel. So i opted for it this way. It really is something very hard to say, especially to your loved ones. Its sometimes easier to say to a stranger.I can totally understand and either way it's an amazing thing you've done here...it's just a personal thing about me, I find it difficult to do that and maybe thats why...i understand. No probs.

Part 4 Milind-Prachi

AWWWWWWWWW😳 How cute is Prachi...I LOVE her more now so than ever...OO he remembers her atleast thats something i know. Tho there is more to their storyeven more?? bloody hell girl, you've got this fic planned to a T....😉...haha lolz. You have no idea. Actually i have the basic plot thought out...especially how the drama will culminate. But the little scns that will lead up to things...still working on the details. like the next part...i have no clue whats coming up.😆😆😆

Really felt for her, whatever the reasons for her transformation might be...The transformation was really for a change. And her mother and Anjali really got her into it. Thats all...no other reasons.lol JC no no...I knew the reasons I just meant that somewhere deep down, it must have affected her as she doesn't want him to remember her as CC so she must associate it with bad memories or something...actually no. I know what you mean. That she used to get made fun of and Milind also used to call her chotti (tho she loved that)...but surprisingly my Prachi was not affected by it. If she wanted a makeover she could have done it in college itself when appearances were important. But she did so after her graduation...i guess i do have a scenerio where it would make sense why Prachi might have agreed to this. I'll try to fit that in somewhere...but i'll have to reveal a lot of things before that.😳 so you won't get an explanation soon. But it really doesn't hold that much importance...it was simply so that Milind doesn't remember her initially.

This part for me was all about Prachi and why I love her😳😊...though we did get to see a different side to Milind, more playful and easy going...Liked that too
Thankyou for loving my Prachi. There might be a point when people are not really going to like my doll.😭 But its imperative. So i am building love for her.😃 Plus i really haven't explained her like i have Ayesha or Anjali. So now its her time. And so is Milsi...he needs more dimensions to him.I think you're right about Prachi but I cannot imagine hating her...if this has anything to do with her attachment to Ritwik and the possible seperation...I can udnerstand that also..in fact it would be totally jusitifiable if she's selfish in that matter...but I dont know what you have in store and may well change my opinion once I read on...well what i have in store will def..come as a shocker.😃 oo i can't wait. but will have to.😕

I have to point out a couple things that stood out for me and really just broke my heart reading...I'll never be whole again Neev even reading that again, makes my heart ache a little...she is so badly affected by it, she doesn't think she can recover...and Ayesha: "Neev, do you still love me…the same"I could well be wrong, but I see this as Ayesha thinking that there is soemthign wrong with her due to what has happened, she isn't whole or pure as one would put it anymore and for any woman to feel like that is just heartbreaking...Thanx I just wanted to know what you thought of the lines...and that is really what i was trying to say.😊

Thankyou darling. I appreciate that you commented in such detail. Always love reading your comments.Thats because I love this fic...😊 awww *wiping tears* i am so touched.
Both of them were just beautiful and just....like I said, I really dont have words...

JC...as much as I like Michi, I cannot think what could be better than this and am so intrigued...i just hope i do justice to all the build up i am giving for Michi.😆😆😆 But no matter how much i love Neev and Ayesha...Michi hold a very special place. And i am not gonna make them less that Neesha...thats for sure. for me this fic has been a revelation into how beautiful the Neesha track could have been had the creatives had brains like yours and I think my very first comment on this fic was regarding them (Neesha) too...ok now i am really up on chane ke jhaad. I don't think i am coming down anytime soon.😆😆😆 But seriously, even now i so with Neesha could have been a couple. These two had such immense potential.

Originally posted by: pragalbha

JC....sorry if I offended you,no way hun. I was just wondering how i managed to completely confuse you. but some of your previous statements made me draw the conclusion that you had started the story at the same point at where the serial was, which was the partial memory loss track. Here are those statements, I went back searching for them 😆lolz omg.😆😆

From Chapter 8 : He glanced at the file sitting next to him on the passenger seat. He opened it and took out the photograph. He stared hard at the enlarged photograph. She was pretty. Beautiful actually. Her smile was contagious. It lit up her eyes. And even though the flash from the camera made a glaring reflection in her eyes, the green specks in between the hazel of her iris was clearly visible, or was it that Milind was just staring at her eyes for too long............. But the picture had turned upside down and there it was written on the back the name of the owner of those bewitching eyes, Prachi Inder Shah. This was when Milind had tried to collect some info on Prachi and he had a picture of her. Because...well i never quite revealed the reason he was doing that...but whatever it was after he decided to marry her...that reason sort of went out the window. I might reveal what his intentions were maybe in his thoughts sometime.

From Chapter 11 : And if it hadn't, now she knew that he was back. And that was all he wanted to accomplish tonight. "Sweet dreams Prachi", he had muttered as he hung up the phone because he knew if she had a drop of sleep tonight, she'll only have nightmares. He looked up at the sky and said, "Tomorrow Prachi Inder Shah, Tomorrow you will meet Milind Mishra." See in Milind's head he was meeting Prachi for the first time...and its not because of memory loss...he just didn't know that he had met Prachi before...because when he had met her...he didn't know her name.

From Chapter 12 : Ayesha quickly realized her folly and said, "Tum log kabhi mile nahi ho na? Milind yeh Prachi hai, aur Prachi yeh hai Milind, mera sab se achcha dost. But I shouldn't have to introduce you guys, you know about each other so well. But its so funny that even after so much has conspired, you two have never met before." Even Ayesha didn't think that Milind had met Prachi before. She has no clue about Prachi's love and that Milind had met Prachi without knowing her name. And at this point Milind didn't remember either. What she meant by "transpired" was that the problems between Sukriti and Alaap and the whole big reason why things got messed up...Milind would have gone to Shah mansion so many times and like i mentioned in the latest part Prachi too had visited the chawl but they just seemed to have missed seeing each other. What a coincidence huh?😆😆😆

Milind took a few steps towards Prachi while Prachi remained rooted. "Ayesha ne kaafi kuch bataya hai tumhare bare mein, lekin aaj pheli baar milna hua hai." Prachi winced as she recollected some old memories and thought how ironic it was that he didn't remember her. "Lekin mujhe aisa kyun lag raha hai ki hum pehle bhi mil chuke hain?". Prachi looked up at his puzzled eyes and tried to find a glimmer of recognition for her in them. But she was disappointed again. Finally she said, "Nahi, hum pehle kabhi nahi mile". This part really shows that Prachi expected him to recollect her. Why? that was partly revealed in ch 35. But he didn't because she looked completely different and he would have never guessed that the girl he saw that day and fought for and Prachi Shah could be the same. So no memory loss.😃

There are a couple of other statments but don't have the time to search for them now. These above statements made me conclude that he suffered memory loss, because I felt that you seemed to stress a lot on the fact that he did not remember her. I hope you understand. I understand that in my attempt to create suspense i have managed to confuse a lot of people.😆 No darling Milind doesn't have memory loss. Any other instances that you think i suggested that he has memory loss...there is a reason for that..and if there is any ambiguous sentence...its intentional.😃 All will make sense once everyone's secrets are revealed. And if you read the same parts again...then it will make sense. Please feel free to question me when things dont ring right. I'll let you know if its an intentional or a by mistake kind of thing.😊

Thanks!

Originally posted by: kim02

JC! great part! i am a hardcore michi fan 😆 so i get extra excited when you include michi in your part 😛 when i first read the word "chotti" i was actually shocked 😆 i was like who is he calling 😕 , then read the next sentence only to realize that he was refering to prachi. beautiful part!