FF: Rishtey(MP-NA)- new prt updtd 12/25 new thread - Page 58

Originally posted by: optimist

Sorry JC, I did not like Part II as much. Looks like you were not too involved in it (got the feeling it was a bit hurried). The emotions were not dealt with as much and the narration was a bit staccatoed. I am sure you would have done better with a little more time. I guess we really hurried you into giving us Michi scenes. Sorry. Take your time with the next Chapter and give it your best as you always do.

Originally posted by: Ryka

Jaan, finally caught up with this lovely story… thanks to the long weekend. Simply LOVED IT! All feels so perfect for a Kayamat fan.😃
hehe thanx Ryks. Finally , i thought you forgot that you promised to read.

The best I liked was Ritwik was in the center of the story…he has to be. I love him so much only wish that was the case in the original as well😭. I loved the fact that all characters have been given equal importance and I am not cribbing that Michi are sharing the limelight with Neesha and Kavya Anjali.Thanks. Otherwise one person asks for Neesh and another asks for Michi and i am torn. Yaar, yeh Prachi kuch ajeeb hai nahi😕😆? lolz...she definitely is. She is so unpredictable… umhmmm it took some time for me to adjust to this Prachi…lolz I mean we are all used Milind thowing a tantrum and getting annoyed with Prachi… which actually is because of Prachi's 70s heroine act… and here Prachi actually does outrageous things(compared to the standards of the Prachi we know) lolz I was on the floor laughing at she running in the chawl in Milind's shirt…. Must have been quite a scene🤣. hahaa...it took me a while to write that as i kept imagining it and was laughing my own head off.

And btw when I began reading… bahut galliyon derahi ti…*so sad*when Milind made such a late entry… 😆😆Imagine ppl who had to wait for it.😆😆 they must have sent me to my grave with curses and the entire suspense around him was making me impatient…and there is still a mystery around him with regard to Anjali. Chakkar kya hai? He was in love with her? May be the actual person he was in love with is Prachi but he has Anjali's face to it.😕

We'll see.😃

Haven't followed Kavya-Anjali…just know the very basic story… and I am loving the chulbuli Anjali in this story… there is so much of life when she is around. Thats exactly how she was in Kavyanjali The other characters aswell are beautifully sketched and in the case of Pl, the epitome of motherhood is presented so beautifully.Thank my mom for it. PL is just like her. Loved the scene Bobby calls Ayesha 'Di' for the 1^st time.👏👏👏 thanks😳 That was important. You noticed.😃 you always do.

I love Michi…but I loved Neesha that bit more in this story… may be because it was refreshing or it is just the arrogant confidence of Michians… we know Michi will find there way to eachother…i know and thats possibly also why i am having a hard time with Michi rather than Neesha. I don't want my Michi to be like the Michi on the show or in other FFs that i have read whereas its easy to come up with a Neesha track cause there hasn't been a predecessor for it. all they need is to look into each other's eyes and they will find eachother…. So I am enjoying Neesha the most. Ayesha is so sweet and wonderful in the story… Thanks dear for her characterization… this is the way I always wanted her… and may be someday she will be a reality. Waiting to see how Neesha's story shapes up and how Neev will get Ayesha to admit her affection toward him and the family.

mee too...i am waiting to figure that out.😆

Ok, now for some doubts… since I read it in a full stretch… may be I missed some things.. or the plot is yet to be revealed…

1. How does Ritwik address Prachi? Ma? I don't remember coming across him calling her Ma… that struck me when she referred to Milind as Ritwik's Mamaji… so will she be Mami or Milind will be Papa?
1. well i don't know if you read the last chapter or the last part of the last chapter. Ritwik clearly says she is his mummy though he may call her a variety of things according to my mood. But Milind is Maama ji because thats how Prachi introduced him. We'll see if there is any change to that.
   
2. What promise has Prachi made to Inder.. that she said sorry to him for breaking her promise by agreeing to marry Milind?
1. ahhaaa...again you notice the subtlest things don't you. Thats a secret...and we shall have to wait.😉😆😆 *runs*
   
3. and what is the connection between Neev and Prachi? Prachi was in love with Milind and Neev knew that she was in love with someone… so how did they get engaged? Family pressure? And did Neev love Prachi and was heartbroken of sorts?
1. Yes Neev knew she was in love with someone but after they got engaged. They got engaged due to family pressure but when he found out Prachi loves someone else he supported her in her decision to break the relationship. He wasn't too heartbroken because he didn't have feelings for Prachi. She was and is and will be a friend. Nothing more, nothing less.
   

Sorry dear for being so late… now I am hooked on to the story… and I am going to bug you away to glory…be prepared for that😈. And thank you once again for a lovely story. Keep it going, Jaan…

You can pressure me all you want..but i'll update when i am sure its ready. I have learned my lesson from the last part.

Lots of Luv & Hugs🤗Thankx for ready Ryka. Luv you🤗

Originally posted by: panache

JC...i really have to say this....
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The way you had written Neev and Ayesha's part was brilliant 👏 but there was something definitely lacking with Michi. 😕 ..Maybe it was the flow or may it was the sudden switch from Neev/Ayesha to Michi..but it definitely lacked something..i can't put my fingers on it...but i missed soemthing there... 😳

@ sorry for postin my comments..just finished reading the update..... 😳

Originally posted by: zcbcc34

Okay...read the new re-done version and I must say you know what's best for your story. I do have to admit, the revised version for the Michi scenes work better this time as you given them time to develop...I liked the background where Milind spoke to her about Asha Tai...(she seems like a sneaky one to me... 😆 )
lolz. Asha tai is someone to watch for. See now i am having fun writing again and that make the difference.😆😆
Are you planning on including the Ritwik scenes in another Chpt? I thought that was very interesting where Milind was "subtly" trying to disengage him from Prachi and why that is necessary....
Oh yes, Ritwik scn will be coming...there is a part 2 you know...but it may be silghtly different or maybe a different Ritwik scn all together and the earlier one will end up in another chapter maybe.
Also the marriage dance? I really hope so...😳
I am not sure about that. Might not actually...since i am taking Neesha on a different course. But whatever it is...won't be a dissapointment.
I really dont mean this as a criticism...but just finding it difficult to imagine Milind with an iPod, listening to Jee Le😆
lolz...haha...remember ch 8😆😆 Its not that hard to imagine. A guy who is in love with a car (well atleast one particular one) would also be tech savvy...why not ipod. And whats wrong with Jee le...maybe he listens to all new songs and then deletes them if he doesn't like it...and i never said that he liked the song...he played it to distract himself.😆😆 There is more to it but i won't reveal so soon.
Thanks a bunch🤗

Originally posted by: jinc118

Originally posted by: Grateful Dead

OOhhh jesss 👏 👏 👏 ok i love jess too but hun i think i am ready to give you a solid whack with a saucepan for referring to the wrong person....love the way you are playing with Each Chracter 😊 ...i wish BT had the brains to do the same. 🤢 I wish they had brains.

Love Michi's car ride and inner passion building slowly...prachi trying to wear the saarii was soooo cuteeee.. 😳 😳 😳 Thanx.
Loved Neesha's tango.. 😛

Waiting for the next update..love you..GD 🤗Now is that hug for Jess or me.