FF: Rishtey(MP-NA)- new prt updtd 12/25 new thread - Page 4

wow jc antoher beautiful yet again thank u babe 👏 👏but I am really confused with whatever is going on or that is gonna happen so please give something about Milind and Prachi please,were they in love or something?

JC great job. The story is intriguing to say the least. The relationships are still not clear. I had to go back and read Chapter 2 after reading Chapter 3 itself. Loved the way you are building the suspense. Have a feeling that the little boy is Ritwik, but I could be wrong.

JC your fan-fic is very intriguing and and extremely well written..Im not not sure about the relationship between the four characters, and im sure that you will develop them very beautifully!
It's a very interesting read! Do post the next bit soon!

lovely part😛...its nice to see a concern Ayesha
the curiosity is increasing... so i guess prachi's sole joy of love is the kid...
continue soon....

Originally posted by: panache

Just a suggestion, why don't you break it down into smaller paragraphs rather than a longer one... 😳

Agree with Sangs here. Shorter paras make it easier to read especially since the FFs are onscreen.

it was awesomw eager to know what is the happiness of prachi's life?
how would milind take that away from her?

Btw there's nothing in the new part that changes my mind about my prediction, JC. Maybe the next part will 😛.

Wonderful part!!! Very well-written.

Feels so good to read that Ayesha is respecting PL and also concerned about Prachi's happiness. But still why is Prachi unaware of Milind's whereabouts and only Ayesha knows about it

This part only increased the suspense and my curiousity.

Eager to read the next part. 😳 😊

CHAPTER 2 was edited: I needed to make a slight change in a line in Ch 2 due to the way i have built up the story. The change is merely that Neev is not the only Son-in-Law of the family currently. I had Neev say that in his thoughts and it would have turned out to be a blooper later. So i edited it. Everything else is the same. Sorry for this, I guess i'll be more careful next time and make sure i don't include unnecessary details that will come back to bite me 😆 😆

Thankyou everyone for the comments. The next part will be coming soon. Possibly tonight.

@Opti: I know longer paras are hard to read but was the latest chapter easier. Is that short enough paras. Or do i need to change the style of my FF to a more dialog oriented one.

@Magno: Hmm...so you still haven't changed your mind eh? I guess we'll just have to wait and watch if you change your mind.

it's intresting,
will be waiting for the next part.