SS-Song of the Lark...(Part 17 Uptd) - Page 9

Originally posted by: shananubis

Sareeta...

UPDATE NOW...

Please... pretty please 😳

Shan

Originally posted by: madhu_vasireddy

Hi Sareeta, Get better first and then you can start updating.Lately I have been busy at work and so haven't read the first 2 parts.Will comment after I am done reading.And you know that I don't write lengthy comments right. 😉 .
Take rest first,get better and then you can update.

Madhavi.

Originally posted by: panache

hey sareeta,

Get well soon! hun!. I have been checking to see if you have posted it but looks like you are sick..Get well first till then we will eagerly wait for you to update... 😳

Originally posted by: shananubis

Sareeta,

Get better hun. Take all the rest u need to take and then continue with the ff.

Just read the 3rd part.. poor Milind is not sure how his wife feels for him.. he cares so much for her..

cant wait to read more but only after you are well.

love

Shan

Originally posted by: kubare

Sareeta darling,

Fantatic adn brilliandt as always dear....adn complete agree with Sangeeta dear...each and every word written so beautifully protray his feelingd for Prachi...his love, his concern...etc.👏

Hope you get well soon dear.....so take care of yourself.😃

Love

Krishna

Originally posted by: panache

Wow...even though it was a short update.. for me to understand the essence of those few line i had to read it again.. Thank you Sangeeta! I jus like keeping something precise... coz detailing at times, does have the reverse effect !

The first part where you talk about his pain...I assume (Correct me if i am wrong here) he doesn't know what is the emotion that his wife has for him... Yep to some extent , and there is a haziness abt his understanding of the comfort zone between them! And how to cross the line... to let himself be comfortable!

The other part where he looks in the mirror and see longing and expectation in his eyes..That purely describes his feelings for his wife....Like how much he longs for her.. Yep... its like tu mere paas bhi hai.. but phir bhi intezaar hai!

The small smile that plays on his face when he looks at her sleeping form yet again reiterates the fact that he enjoys even the smallest quirks that she has....Neatly portrayed.... 👏 👏 👏 Thank you, its the little things in life, that give us the max happiness and make us smile from her the heart!

The last line where you said he slightly opens the balcony and closes the door so as not let the cold air in to disturb his wife!!! *Those lines are awesome! it reflects his concern for his wife* 👏 👏 👏 Aww, little gestures do say a lot dont they ? But to be honest, that was not what I intended...😆 But am glad that it came across this way too! It was more of action that seemed natural... and I jus penned it as it came to mind... when I imagined him walk out of the room onto the balcony! 😊

Waiting to read the next part....Awesome! 😳

Originally posted by: lvsgm

Sareeta,

Read that u r feeling unwell..Hope ur doing better now 😊 Yep, much better thank you so much for asking!

Read the FF..Sweetie the language is just mesmerising..Loved each and every word of it 👏 Thank you! Am really humbled! Glad you liked the way the story was penned! 😊

Milinds feelings for P is just so well written ..Each and every other emotion. Be it love ,or be the anxious feeling that he has for her or the lil bit of insecurity the creeps up on him. That was the specific intention to bring out his insecurities in a subtle way, jus as he feels them ... not too loud, but the undertone ... that exists!

and yes 'suniye' is reserved just for him ... 😊 Ofcourse it is... it couldnt be for anyone else but him, could it now?! 😆

Get well soon...

Originally posted by: apapap

saiyaan saiyaan seheri lage hai mohe sexy...chain mere dil ka chura gaya.. Chodo na chodo na, baahein marodona, hojaaongi main khafaaa! 😆

im singing only so as to make up for commenting late. And I joined in as well... as usual... couldnt resist! 😆

part two:
hes not dead lookin at himself in the mirroir ?? Pri, tu bhi na! That was the clincher yaar... ROTFL 😆 i would be...i like the line where u say tht the cold water rushing out gives him a sudden sense of familiarity...jhatka types...when ur lost in ur dreams..

moments of the previous night....for some inexplicable reason the word looms has always fascinated me. if there was a loom fan club..i'd be in it...back to serious business...his own soft laugh...haiii.. i can picture the scene perfectly..khush wala felllow....in felli's company. I know the word Loom has a very dreamy feel to it... fascinating is what it is... .. Join the club darlin'... am here already! 😉

"he couldn't help but feel a pang of resentment towards the word , surprised at his own mixed emotions towards it…"

i pyaar the way u've written this (love is becomin too cliched). I love your new ishtyle... pyaar this?! ! 😆 I pyaar your new ishtyle then mohtarma! 😆 his own surprise at feeling so. it brings out a tad bit of jealousy...a lil bit of insecurity...as if to say...why in the world do frnds have to exist. i mean kaam kya hai unka.

suniye...is jaan levaaaa aaaa jaan levaaaaaa....im surprised he didnt melt and flow away. Teri har ada, sitam hai jaan leva.. jaan levaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa, jaaaaaaaaaaan levaaaaa a a a a a ( remember the song?! 😆)

"Ever once in a while, glancing at her, an undeniable pang of longing tugged at his heart , as he watched her smile… the tingle of laughter, as she conversed with the other man, her best friend… "

pang of longing...this phrase is chooofying my dil. aiyyooo paapam...! Awwwwww u feel like consoling him...all is right...(sans pulling cheeks). the tingle of her laughter. boy this guy is just killing himself. !! He is sure... self mu\rder! 😆

unable to shake off the heavy feeling of disappointment :(...dont worry.

"he splashed the cold water, willing the simmer to fade, feeling the cold splash of water across his cheek, seep in deep inside his heart…"

willing the simmer to fade...jaise hes tellin the water...get it off me.....which eventually to an extent the water succeeds in doing. calming him. serene.. Yep , and simmer is another word I jus love... simmer simmer simmer... I love the way I sound when I say it! 😆

"the unmistakable glint of a longing evident … it seemed to only him… "

only he is seeing wht he wants...and he shuts his eyes and turns away from tht man in the mirror...*applause* *bows to applause, smiling*

"Sliding open the door to the balcony ever so little, so as to not let the cold seep in to the warm room."

now this is wht pyaar is...little gestures done unknowingly. says all the right things..i pyaar this too..this made me fall off.. It did ? Haila! I jus wrote it coz I jus pictured it that way yaar... natural reaction... but then it seemed to have chuoofied , kaafi dils of the readers yaar! 😆

i toh loved these parts..and im all geared up to fall off my chair yet again...take care babes...and continue soon Oh I know darlin' you are ever ready to trip off that chair of yours and your poor floor of the house is awaiting another thud! Thanks for the wishes babes! 😊

Originally posted by: panache

Sareeta, Looks like i am the first one to comment on Part - 4 😳 Yeppie you are!

you have described the insecurity he feels when Neev is around with such brilliant words that it does not move away from the character of Milind. I really enjoyed the fact that he is vulnerable too and not just Prachi... 😳 Thank you sooooo much! Well I didnt want to deviate from the character of Milind, but rather tap on that subtle aspect of his insecurities , which are so deep seated, yet cannot be undermined!

When he returns from him trip and they are looking at each other...Milind's feeling that he has come home is apt. She is his destiny and his hoome.. 😊 I jus wanted to have some normal scenes... rather than the typical bollywoodish stuff we get to see... and for me the way I see it , romance is there in everyday acts rather than the once in a bluemoon ... actions !

Prachi speaking to him with her eyes and asking about him and him understanding what she is asking is awesome!! It feels like they are so one with each other.... 😃 yep.. I liked it and I guess, from what I have seen, its how it is... most of the things are unspoken and yet understood and don't need explicit expression. Jus that we all fall for it, when we read it in books and some of us don't realize, how beautiful these lil gestures are in our lives and we are experiencing this romance everyday ... all the time!

But the insecurities and his feelings for her.. not yet understanding how to cross the threshold..That's the most beautiful part.... 😳 👏 👏 Thank you, that was the intention... of the story in the first place!

Their bedroom is their world.... That makes perfect sense as that were their private lives are held together.... Its their lil world... yeah it is! 😊.

Awesome! Sareeta, you take care of yourself.. and i will wait for you post...but please post it at leisure once you get well... 😳 Thank you Sangeeta.. sure will do! 😊 Am better now !

Originally posted by: apapap

arre oh samba... Kitne aadmi the re?! 😆

startin out on part 4... Shoot away darlin'! 😉

crimson streak of dawn breaking into the fading night sky...i love the dawn breaking out...its a beautiphul sight. mere mann mein etched rahe gaa yeh line...each time im up at dawn..i'll rem. Aww, bless my soul! Yeah... I jus love watching sunrise everyday , when I go for my jog... jus takes me to another world... no wonder its a everyday wonder, we dont acknowledge!

her eyes on no one else but him..and still this dude has insecurities...!
kaisi ho...(dead hoon...!) .... Main bhi! 😆
main bhi...these 4 words are like tingly^infinity..answering her unvoiced question. Tingly tingly , all the way hunny! 😆
her eyes searching his, with an unmistakable glint of concern....aiyyyo...this chic is too cute man ! Isnt she ?? Well we all are ... eventually will be, when we ask our husbands the same thing yaar! So chill! 😉

the one room , that had seemed to open a new world to him, a world , the belonged to him, to her… to them…. hamari duniya...so true...the room signifies somethin which no one else will be able to invade in. each corner will be filled with memories...of their world together. Hamaari choti si duniya ! Well somethings are never said out aloud,only felt and acknowledged in silent actions! Hai na?! 😉

khud he is marofying haan...dude...dont ! but i pyaar it tht hes so vulnerable...hes not brash and nothin affects him. hes THE man :D:D He sure is THE man... undoubtedly.. and he is real.. not one mahaan aadmi.... pati parmeshwar , pati... so cool hai! 😉😆

shimmer of hope the new mornin is bringing him...nicely put..its providing some relief to his aching hrt...aiyyyoo..im eagerly awaiting..next part It sure is giving him hope and I sense to you too now darlin'! 😆 Goodie Good! Hang in there now!

ive reached all time height of craziness where im actually talkin to ur char thru my comments !! Wo tho hai... mujhe pehle se pata tha! You were crazy... tabhi toh meri dost ho! Aur haan I heard ppl talk to themselves... but to talk to invisible fictional characters ... Oh dear me! Pri... Tainu ki hogaya! 😆

part 5...

tere posts se zyaada lambe mere comments hai.. Wo tho hai... par thatz what I love about your comments... I jus love reading them over and over again and feel good about myself! but koi baat nahi...u have to read them...no solace phar u. Arre tere comments mein hi solace hai meri amma! 😆

bachpana...hello...im also like this...tht doesnt mean im a kid ! she is so fascinated by the clock...and so cutely gets embarassed when he looks at her.Now dahlin , where do u think I got the idea from ? I am in love with cuckoo clocks! 😉 I actually wait till the cuckoo bird bids tata and only then move from the place!

him lying to her...haila...pehle bolta hai der hogi..the moment she asks...der hogi...immediately...nahi...meeting cancel hogayi...lattu fella ! and hes perplexed...mujhse mill...i'll tell u why ! Thodi der sabr kar amma, uski perplexion koi door karne waala... Tu itni utaavli mat ho! 😆 But dahlin, usne apne jhoot ko sach much jhat pat, sach mein badal diya re! Crazy kiya re! Ho crazy , crazy kiya re! 😆

"main bhi na"....ammma !! uffff....su line likhech !!...bahu saras. Arre amma tu toh lattu ho gayi! I know... saying that line, that smile on his face would have beena killer! he is so excited tht shes gonna wait for him...leaping hrt and all...Bechaare ki nayi nayi shaadi hui hai re, haq banta hai uska! aiyyo...sweethrt fellow he is yaar ! :D:D.. He sure is yaar! Jus like us! 😆 I am jus hopeless arent I?! I know I know.. dont say it now!

Originally posted by: critically-sane

sareeta.. hope you are feeling much better..! Am better thank you so much for asking Shwetha! well.. i'm loving the whole fan fic..Thank you soooooooo much! Milind's perspective is a refreshing change..yeah , it was something I felt impromptu to explore and delve into on spur of the moment! he's insecurities about Prachi and Neev's friendship is so realistic..! Thank you, and its humbing that what I penned came across as realistic , jus as I had intended and imagined! and the way he describes thir bedroom as their pprivate world..! ah.. maar dala..! Haila! can't wait to read more..! Thank you! 😳

Originally posted by: kubare

Sareeta darling,

How are you doing now dear??? Hope you are feeling much better dear and hope you get well soon😃.

My god...the play of words to describe Millis feelings....is just to good dear👏.....loved the description of dawn and the chirping of birds......too the cuckoo clock...the matching of the saree colur to the first rays of dawn...crimson....to his and Prachis.....bond...in which words are not necessary between these two at all.....and the way to describe their room as their own separate provate world ...where the outside ...doe snot intrude...it was just mindblowing dear....and wait to read what you have for us next.👏

Till then, take care & god bless.😃

Love

Krishna

Originally posted by: shananubis

Sareeta, How are you feeling now? Hope you are feeling much better. Yep, am doing better now, thank you so much Shan!

The words you used to describe Milind's POV was too good. I especially liked the way he said "humari duniya".. haiii..*sigh*.. Sach mein! Thank you so much!

cukoo bird.. I too love cukoo bird. 😃 So janab Milind will come home earlier coz his beautiful wife will wait for him... hmmm... so sweet.. Uski Nayi nayi shaadi ka asar hai yaar! 😆 Aur cuckoo clock ki tho main latto hoon!

Mindblowing dear... beautiful parts.. Please continue.. 👏 *bows to applause* Thank you soooooo much!