SS-Song of the Lark...(Part 17 Uptd) - Page 8

Originally posted by: panache

Reserving space..for my comment 😳
will come back and comment on part 1 😳

**** MY Comment******* (Read the part but had to run for a meeting as usual!!!My days have been filled with endless meetings and nothing else...)

I like this one for some reason...I guess may be it starts with hope or should i say tender feelings between the man and the woman of this story..For some reason whenever I read yours i can picture so many characters experiencing those emotions not just M&P..... Bingo! Thanks! Its really humbling to know that you are able to relate the emotions in the story to not jus the characters to many in general ! That is indeed humbling! 😳

I liked the fact that this story shows him in a tender moment/light when he stares at her.. talks to himself saying that she sleeps like a child...I liked that fact a lot for some reason... My fav bit! I jus wanted the character to notice things, but may be not react too overtly to things, but nevertheless someone who does notice things... and has a side to his persona that is softer, and more gentle...

Awesome...! I think there is a difference in your style this time around....Am I right??? Yeppie..! Nothing really misses your eye.. does it now?! 😆

Beautiful as usual....Post the second part for me to read and comment...😳 Thanks!

Originally posted by: madhu_vasireddy

Sareeta darling,this is not fair.You have promised me that you would post the entire SS all at a time to save me the pain of refreshing the page.What is this now? 😉 .I was just kidding,take your time honey.

Madhavi.

Originally posted by: apapap

hurray hurray...its a new story today... Is that a jingle darlin; sure sounds like your attempt at it! *pats on the back...* Good attempt , I am loving it! 😆

damn i just amaze myself with all that i come up with ! im just too brilliant !!! Oh sure , no denying that, you jus amaze everytime you come up with such brilliantly creative stuff! 😆

moving on to you....yayyy....nayi kahani. and started off so dhinchakly... Arre apun ki entry ishtyle tho tum jaanti ho! Dhinchak hi hai hamesha! Jus kiddin' glad you liked it man! 😊 cuckoo woke him up...i laughed for 10 mins reading this cos all i could rem was angel of cuckooness... 😆 Cmawn now, that our pretty little secret! Hush!Hush!
he reads....acha hai acha hai...i like intellectual men. whts he doing on the couch ??? Ofcourse he reads.... anpad nahin hai re! Oh sure do I , I like intellectual men too, there is something absolutely irresistable abt them , especially if they are men of less words and more grey matter!
And what is he doing on the couch, ofcourse darlin' so raha tha! Kya sawaal hai! 😆

aiyyoooo...shes so cute...sleeps like a baby..she has fingers curled up like a baby too.had she not been asleep i would hv pinched cheeks... Oh there you go on the pinching cheeks spree again! but im big worshipper of sleep god and generally dont disturb ppl when they are being visited by him Oh I worship sleep god too and dont disturb and yeah dont like being disturbed too! 😆
..im just in love with the description of her sleeping and him looking on..and so sweet...he puts her haath uppar.. Awwwwwwww

now continue sooon...im waiting...*taps her foot impatiently* Hamesha karti hai ye foot tapping... kya naya hai bol... mere ko dar bhi nahin lagta ab ! 😆

Originally posted by: candyfloss

cant w8 to read more.

Originally posted by: mahimn

Beautiful start for a story but make it a full fledged story rather than a short one. Its always a pleasure to read what you write and I am waiting for the next update.

Originally posted by: kubare

Sareeta darling,

It was a fantastic beginning👏....but...tooo short and what a place to end.....now that was not good of you dear.😆😆

Now be a good girl and post another part soon dear...and the next part better be a long part dear😃

Love

Krishna

Originally posted by: marigold16

Wow, sareeta that was awesome like. You are a fab writer. 😃

Originally posted by: kubare

Sareeta darling,

That was quick...good girl.😆

Now for my comments😉...dear what can I say that every part of yours leaves me wanting for more..as the one we read is not enough.

It was just fantastic, mindblowing, superb, awesome...am running out of adjectives dear..so will only say this👏

You do have a way with words and, that is whats so great about your writing dear. 😃👏

The way you go about expression the emotions and feeling of your character that one can feel them ...see them for oneself...it truly is like being there..

From....the bedroom....... the moonlight falling on her...... to her sleeping...him watching her...to him in the washroom splashing water on his face and in deep contemplation to his feelings, emotions and expression...in the party ...on seeing her and Neev.

Just tooo good dear....loved it all and update soon

Eggarly awaiting the next part dear.😃

Love

Krishna

Originally posted by: shananubis

Sareeta dear,

I knew it. Once you start you will be on a roll. you started a second ff already. 😊 Aww, thanks Shan! Yeah meri thodi starting prob hai... mood bhi tho hona chahiye! hai na?! But once I do... yeah I jus let the thoughts flow! 😊

I loved it. I am using the same word to describe this creation of yours as all others "beautiful".. The words in your fanfic make you actually see those scenes in front of your eyes while reading. I especially liked the way you described Milinds feeling, his trepedition and emotions while seeing Prachi with Neev. I could actually feel those. 👏 👏 Awww, that was so kind of you to say so! Thank you sooooooo much!

Pls continue soon. Sure!

Love Shan.

Originally posted by: panache

It was great part!

I understand where you are going with this.. you are talking about each of them having feelings for each other but acting as friends towards each other esp. Milind....(Am I getting it?)

I understand the pang of regret he feels seeing the close friendship btw Neev and Prachi. He is a man in love which he doesn't know yet.

And the regret he feels for friendship is may be b'cos he doesn't know how to cross the threshold from friendship to love with his wife...

I like the way you line of thinking is moving with this one....Looking forward to reading the next part.