SS-Song of the Lark...(Part 17 Uptd) - Page 5

Sareeta, This is bonus...total bonus....I get to read all the parts in one go...

After reading the 4 parts together, i just feel like asking Milind to open up and express his love....but i understand his hesistancy too...I just want the guy to get his nerve and tell her....Which i think will be a while with the way he is goin......(I am rambling ...)

His feelings for prachi are so aptly described esp when he sees her sleeping, he goes and pulls the drapes closed so that her sleep is not disturbed...That's the essence of the man! if i were young i would fall for this guy like a ton of bricks...lol (Me, rambling again 😉 )

Him putting all his accessories all over the bedroom and prachi sweetly picking everything up for him as part of her daily routine is so chweet....(it reflects reality!! 😳 ). This is my favorite piece..

His longing for her to join him when he drinks his tea!! so natural and realistic.....I would think that both of them are on the verge of corssing the invisible line that they have drawn between them...

Brilliant...Waiting for the next part.... 👏

Brilliant work hun.. I juz luv both of ur ff

Part 10 has been updated ... 😊

I just finished reading part-10...

I could sense the hesistancy in Prachi, She wanted him to close the paper and have his breakfast but she couldn't do it...I loved that part, her hesistancy, not knowing whether she had the rights to tell him him to leave the paper alone...Wonderfiul...It clearly shows that she cares for him but still she could not cross the invisible line and tell him to leave the paper alone and have breakfast.....

When he talks on the phone and Neev is on the line. Him looking at prachi shows his feelings and insecurity of their relationship...With brilliant words you have captured the slight nuance of their characters...Splendid..

Waiting for the next part...The story you have weaved so far is marvelous.



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ooh..! loved it..! the part where he checks Prachi's reaction to the fact that it was Neev on the phone.. and the immediate guilt that followed when he realized that there wasn't one coming..! that was brilliantly done..!

and the way they both seem awkward and hesitant around each other and unable to say with they really feel..! it all seems so realistic.. i can't believe its just fiction..! marvelous job sareeta..!

wow... I got to read all the parts together... Loved it... the way Milind wants to spend his time with Prachi, the way she walks around clearing his mess... excellent.. Milind go ahead speak up tell ur wife how much you love her...

Prachi didnt know whether she could ask him to stop reading and concentrate on food.. Her hesitancy, confusion were brilliantly portrayed. And the reactions from both when Neev's phone came... Milind ur wife only cares for you.. please get that in to your mind...

Mindblowing 👏
Shan

Sareeta darling fantastic dear...just fantastic....briliant...excellent...mindblowing...etc etc....etc.👏

It was really a bonus to read all the parts that I missed in one go...Sareeta darling...you are a genius when it comes to words dear...and the way that you put them so beautifully convey to us the feeling adn aemotions of those two..its an art forum and you excel in it dear.👏

Aww......just love your Milli and Prachi dear....as I can so feel what they are feeling and......so see them and their expresions too.😃

And waiting for the next part...be quick😆

Love

Krishna

Excellent as usual.....I really admire the wonderful way that you play with the words and get all the right emotions in words.....fabulous work...keep it going.....

And you do a good job of leaving the reader on tenterhooks at the end of each part 😛 👏 👏 .

The first lines of this part are wonderful...the disappointment in her eyes!! Wow...i enjoyed the first line too much..!!


And his reaction, not understanding why she was disappointed...Wohoo! Madam...you caught it perfectly...

Prachi absentmindedly talking on the phone..Her thoughts are of milind and she is talking to Neev....Brilliant said in a few words...Awesome!


Prachi asking him..and him completing her request and giving her a reply...So tuned he is with her.... 👏



Walking over to him, who was now busy perusing his files, leaning onto the pillar… she paused a step away… momentarily unsure of herself, fiddling with the instrument, when he sensing her presence, turned around, folding the file…

"Arre haan… phone…" he gently held out his hand… when she handed it over… smiling…


Prachi trying not to stop him...reflects pure indian culture..where our elders always say not to call back people when they are leaving...Awesome!


And the ending line the reflection of the party!!! Now, i really want to read the next part soon... 😳

o.k..i just finished reading part 12...

This guy cannot accept or would not let himself accept his wife's love..He is filled with insecurities about her feelings but he is also longing for his wife...(You have portrayed how Milind feels currently in the serial!Good! Very Good!)

The Pain of not knowing her feelings for him... Fantabulous! Its etched in every line you have written.

He wants to get close to his wife. Spend time with her even a simple chore done together would have made him happy! Perfect!!!

You know something that i clearly noticed was that you have given Prachi the correct shade - For example, her being the kind of girl she is would not come forward and proclaim her love...her's is of the subtle variety.

Milind would need to take the step and voice it for the both of them...On the other hand, the signs that she also feels for him is there for all of us to see...

I can keep writing..but this part was awesome as always... 👏