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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi everyone 😊
This is the next part its quite short 😕
Im not so sure about it please tell me what you think- explain more at bottom of post

Chapter 7B - Dil ke armaan aansoon mein behgaye

"Jaldi karo Kasturi, film start ho jaayenga'"

"Acchha baba, mein aa rahi hoon"

"Kitna waqt lagati ho"

"Aap nahi samjenge sir. Hum kaun si film dekhnewale hain?"

"Ajnabee."

***

Kasturi nestled into Robbie's shoulder, munching on her popcorn.

She tensed as, on-screen, Akshay Kumar's character prepared to murder his wife. He struck her head with a wine bottle, and she fell to the floor. Nauseous and dismayed, Kasturi ran out of the cinema.

She reached behind her, her hand closing on something hard as he rammed her into the floor. As his fist swung towards her again, she pulled the bottle from behind her and smashed'

"Kasturi, kya hua?"

She jumped at his concerned touch. "Yeh aansoon'what's wrong, Kasturi, tell me. Cinema se is tarah kyun chalengayi?" His voice was anxious, his tone gentle, but she flinched away, unable to shake off the terrifying memory.

"Chalo, hum ghar chalenge" He led her slowly to the car, where she sat, silent, as they drove home.

She got out of the car and turned to him, at last.

"Sir'main theek hoon. Sirf'mujhe kisi ki yaad aagayi'" She managed a weak smile. "Chinta mat karo. Ab sab theek hain." She managed a weak smile.

"Sure?"

"Jee Robbie sir. I'm sorry"

"Tum maafi kyun mangrahi ho? Aaram kar. Hum kal milenge."

He waved goodbye and drove off.

She managed to run indoors before she collapsed, her eyes overflowing with silent tears as the terrible memories overwhelmed her once again.

I wasn't so sure about what to put in the flashback - re-eedited it a few times, hope i made the right choice, hope you nejoy this part 😊 love TJ

Edited by missindia26 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#52

woooowwww, its really getting very interesting..... The suspence is killing me...... pl update soon.... as the show is ending the fan fics are the only hope.... it was a short n sweet update.....

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: nehaaa nawab

woooowwww, its really getting very interesting..... The suspence is killing me.....lol 😛. pl update soon.... as the show is ending 😭the fan fics are the only hope.... it was a short n sweet update.....thanks for your comment😊

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi everyone hope you're still enjoying the FF 😛
Heres the next part, lots revealed, lots more to come😲
Hope you like it, tell me what you think 😉
Thanks for reading, 😊 Love TJ
Chapter 8 - Bhoolna nahin
"Raunak, yeh aap kya kar rahe? Dard ho raha hain…"

He ignored her pleas; without relinquishing his tight grip on her wrist, he continued to drag her upstairs.

"Par aisa kya hua? Aap itne naaraz kyun hain?"

Finally he turned to look at her. She cowered from his furious gaze. "Tum Sanjay se kyun baat kar rahi thi?"

"Aap gaye the…main akeli thi…toh Sanjay mujhe company dehte te.Hum s..sirf kaam ki baat…"

She sobbed in pain as his hand struck her cheek twice. Abruptly he stormed out of the house, slamming the front door. She cradled her face as her tears flowed out.

***

"Tum kal se kaam chordongi."

Terrified as she was, Kasturi couldn't bring herself to simply agree. This was her first job after finishing her Accountancy degree, and she loved it. Working as an actuary was stimulating and fun; at work, with her colleagues, she was herself again. She didn't want to lose her independence and waste her life.

"Raunak, aap aisa kyun chahte hain? Mujhe kaam karna pasand hain, main…"

"Par mujhe pasand nahi hain. Mein koi behas nahi karna cahata. Tum kal apna resignation dongi, bas."

Kasturi had had enough. Was she going to live her life, cowed, under her husband's shadow. His tempers had gone too far. Neither would she be ordered by him, neither would she be beaten.

"Bas, Raunak. Bahut hogaya. Main tumhari biwi hoon, ek maamooli cheez nahi, jiske saath tum jo chahe karsakte ho. Mein resign nahi karoongi," she stipulated.

Raunak seized her arm and twisted it behind her. She cried out in pain, as he bent it further, whispering sinisterly in her ear.

"Ek baat samaj jao. Mein kuch bhi karsakta. Kuch bhi." He leered menacingly at her, before suddenly pushing her away. Swiftly, he strode outside, shut the door and locked it. Half in disbelief, Kasturi hurried to the door, pulling in earnest at the handle, pounding her fists against the wall. How could he do this?

***

It was early morning before he returned to liberate her. Eyes bloodshot and wet from crying, she…

"Kasturi, darwasa kholo" Robbie rapped loudly on her door.

She jerked, wrenched back into the present by his voice. She tried her best to wipe away the streaks of tears on her face, but knew she was unsuccessful as Robbie entered and his face wrenched in misery as he looked at her.

"Tum abhi bhi Maa ki baat se naaraz ho?" Robbie assumed wrongly.

She nodded, berating herself for not telling him the truth.
She knew in her heart, that he loved her, that he'd accepted her, that he would support her against all odds. But, she wondered, would he go this far? Could he disregard the fact that she was a married woman?
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Posted: 16 years ago
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just caught up with chapters 6-8......have to say this again.....i love ur writing style....👏......the story is getting more & more intriguing.

loved how you introduced the past by taking the premise of the movie....well done.....👏

so raunak used to beat his wife......😡......is he still alive...........eagerly waiting to know what happens next.

great going......keep it up......😊

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Posted: 16 years ago
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amazingggg...... this part was too gud..... m in luv with ur fanfic, pls dont stop updating...... hope robbie will support kasturi even after knowing her past........ when will u update next, pls update soooooooon.......
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: nehaaa nawab

amazingggg...... this part was too gud..... m in luv with ur fanfic, pls dont stop updating...... hope robbie will support kasturi even after knowing her past........ when will u update next, pls update soooooooon.......

thanks for your comment keep reading and enjoying, will update asap

Originally posted by: swan20

just caught up with chapters 6-8......have to say this again.....i love ur writing style....👏......the story is getting more & more intriguing. thanks glad its interesting 😛

loved how you introduced the past by taking the premise of the movie....well done.....👏im glad wasnt sure if it made sense
so raunak used to beat his wife......😡......is he still alive...........eagerly waiting to know what happens next. keep reading 😉

great going......keep it up......😊 thanks for commenting 😊

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Posted: 16 years ago
#58

Parts 7 and 8 were great

Keep up the good work
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thanks for your comment Aaliyah and thanks everyone who read 😊
Ive been asked to do English translation but I dont think it works well side by side so i will post each chapter twice and you can read hindi or english if you prefer or you cant understand my hindi 😳
Please tell me if this idea is fine with you all
Thanks for reading 😊
Hope you enjoy this part
love TJ
Chapter 9 - Keemat

"Kasturi, Devika ma'am tumhe ghar par bolaiyaan hai. Saat baje," Kiran informed her.

"Magar…kyun…"

"Sorry Kasturi, mein nahi jaanti"

Confused, Kasturi mused over the news. Why would devika ma'am want to see her; what was so important that it couldn't be discussed in the office? Could it be…Robbie? Could have something have happened to him. She hadn't seen him today, but preoccupied by her recurring nightmares, she had hardly noticed. Her face blanched and she rushed outside.

"Sabharwal mansion, please, bhaiyya, jaldi!"

The ten minute taxi ride passed in fear; she jumped out, paid ten rupees, and hurried through the iron gates. Devika greeted her at the door.

"Tum thoda jaldi aagayi, Kasturi," she pointed out with a small smile. "Koi baat nahi hain, beto."

"Magar Robbie sir…"

"Robbie toh Delhi gaya hai, concert ke liye." She ushered Kasturi into the grand living room, and gestured towards a mahogany armchair. Kasturi sat, knitting her fingers together. Her heartbeat slowed as she realized Robbie was fine, only to be replaced by a heightened sense of trepidation and puzzlement at Devika's purpose. The last time they had met, she had been furious. Why, all of a sudden, was she being so civil and polite?

"Baat yeh hain, Kasturi, ke mujhe tumhare liye ek offer hain. Ek sodha. Ek deal. Mein tumhari baare mein jaan chuki hoon. Mrs Kasturi Singhania."

Kasturi let out a choked gasp.

"Jee, Kasturi, mein jaanti hoon ke tum shaadi shooda ho. Par…gabrao mat. Mein kisi ko nahi bataoongi. Robbie ko bhi nahi. Magar ek shart hain. Tum apni pati ke saath nahi rehna chahti, theek hain – mein tumhe ek crore doonghi. Kisi bhi sheher mein jaake, tum khushi khushi zindagi gusar sakti ho. Magar… tum Robbie ki zindagi se door chali jaaongi. Na usse milengi, naa baat karengi, nahi sochengi.."

Kasturi gaped at her, shocked, her mind frantically trying to absorb what had been said. She stood up in anger.

"Aap ne yeh kaise soch liya, ke mein apna pyar bech doongi? Aap dyan se soonlijye, mein…"

"Ek minute, Kasturi. Tum ek baat bhool rahi ho. It's you, not me, who is treading a dangerous path. Don't forget that, the minute I tell Robbie your asliyat, you'll be finished. It should be you paying me money. Par…gabrao mat. Mein aapki madat karna chahti hoon. Isme sirf teri balai hain."

"Nahi, ma'am. Isme sirf nuksan hain, siwa aapke. Mein chalti hoon."

"Rukja, Kasturi. Theek hain, tumhe abhi decide karne ki zarrorat nahi hain. Main tumhe dus din ki moolat dehti hoon. Nau din me Robbie ka janam din hain. Uske baat, sab tumhare haath mein hain…"

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Posted: 16 years ago
#60
Thank you!
Wow great chapter
Devika wont stop until she get's what she wants
Hope Katsuri tells Robbie about her past instead of letting misunderstandings being created.
Waiting for the next part now!

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