FF:Broken Dreams&...Part 18C Pg 147 06/07 - Page 80

u said short...but itna short...shuru hote hi khatam😆

but nice ...her paintings said it all...n good Jai noticed...nahin if it was JW of KS i am sure he wud not😆😆 n then you made him 'Snoopy'😃 he is into her cupboard...chalo lets see what he finds there...mughe daar lag raha hai😆 i hope he finds a clue as to where she cud be.

Originally posted by: banijai19_life

me first! 😃 wow gr8 update!!!!! 👏 at last jai will be able to know bani's feelings for him! 😳

Originally posted by: shahni4

Lovely update but know you have left us dangling, yearning for more...Can't wait for the next update .... to see his reactions to reading her diary and hopefully Bani will be found soon!!! i know... but that day... i had some time... i know i wrote only one page 😛

Don't make us wait too long pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaasssssssseeeeeeeeee!!! today will update hopefully...

Nina

Originally posted by: harshi21

Awesome update!!!!!! 👏

Originally posted by: tam2

Lovely update!!! 👏 ... wonder what's written on that paper... do Continue soon !!!!! 👏 ...

Originally posted by: swathi

Hi Abhi, I missed commenting on the last part. Possibly will come back to edit this one. its okay 😊

But I had to write on the last part. The part where Jai opens Bani's folder and understands her paintings was just superlative. I especially loved Jai's realization of how Bani felt. But there was also some hope in terms of those last 2 complete pictures. One was of the lovers possibly depicting the future them and next was the riot of colors which for me indicated their happiness (coming up ?!). do u think so? 😉 but u know why and when bani drew this I believe you also mentioned an incomplete photograph of Bani. (for me it meant that she still considers herself as incomplete or maybe it was just an unfinished painting of hers).yep... its something like that... actually its only the back pose of a girl... it comes in one of the earlier chapters... Not sure what you thought when you mentioned those paintings but this is what came to my mind in my 1st read (ya I do plan to read a couple of times till you post the next part :). hahaha 😆

Swathi

Originally posted by: Pooja_fren

That was short not just short but too short. i know 😛
U know when I scrolled down and found Happy reading there I was shocked, My mouth was open. Happy reading...!!??!! i dont write Happy reading... I write only Thanks for reading 😕
Now to ammend ur such a huge blunder u need to update fast too fast 😆 😆 yep... today is weekend...

Update was tooooooooooooooooo goooooooooooood.
U like to torture we reader ya? I know it u do 😆 nope... u know when i started writing this... i thot it will be small... but... this is becoming so long... 🤓 i dont believe it.... i thot i will finish the whole ff in one month and will create a record in IF... 😆 but i missed it a long ago 😆
I love everything in ur FF

I want to request u something.
When Jai and Bani become together plz dont end it ya. At least gice 3,4 or 5 (I want to say more but cant 😆 ) happy chapters too more and more JB chapters will come... of course both together... 😉 all sorts of chapters..
Plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

Bye bye

Originally posted by: niruba

very touching part.....I have no words to say.....almost had tears in my eyes..... only almost 😳 😆 amazing update....going to reread it again! then okay... now will come deffo... i mean the tears... 😳 😆

and Abhilasha I only cry for Jai in FFs, not the KS one.....I'm more attached to FF characters, thanks to awesome writers.... thanks 😳

please continue soon......can't wait to read the next part....

Originally posted by: janu_2006

hey
gr8 part...
cont.sooon

Originally posted by: nishiraju

very well written Abi......... 👏 pls cont soooooooon

Originally posted by: kpatel123

havent commented for a long time! that was brilliant and so were the previous parts! waiting to see what these papers and the diary reveal!

Originally posted by: ragamthalam0

Come on no sign of bani in this update either,, he doesn't have to find ,, just let us know where she is 😆 ,, dont worry... i will let you ppl know where Bani is much before Jai comes to know 😉 great update jai deserves what he is going thru pls continue soon

Originally posted by: nema123

Wonderful updates... very well written emotions... 👏

Originally posted by: moonlitnight

👏 👏 👏 -for ur writing
😭 - for Jai
😭 😭 -for Bani
😭 😭 😭 -for short update
😭 -for stopping there

please cont soon. or else- 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 sorry Tropa.. my screen is so wet... dont worry... i will continue today with an extra long part... 😳

Originally posted by: lovelyreddyrose

thanks for ur update 😆 😆
i was missing it . 😉
jai aur paintings , that wa s fab .bani neh bina aapna muh khole aapne sare batein baya karde 😭 😭 😭 actually that is bani right?
jai and papers, i hope he finds her love to him in that as well 😕 do u think so... ? 😉


at the end good work 👏 thanks
waiting for next update

Originally posted by: divan

That was a sad update...going through and discovering her life with the occupants of the house. 😭 at first i dint understand what u wrote... now i like the phrase... occupants of the house... nicely put dii 😳

Originally posted by: Miss_Diey

First the diary 😉 😉 😉 dont worry everything was come...
I want more please update soon.
It's so interesting, this suspence and waiting is killing me 😆 wait... is this a sarcastic laugh 😕 i hope no 😃
Where is Bani, i'm sure AD is taking care of her but
i can't wait the day when she will learn her pregnancy 😉 what do u guess will happen..

Originally posted by: Nimmie1'2

Hi Abhi,

Wonderful update; Jai is going to read B's dairy is he? He finally getting to terms of what he should have done long time ago! yep... as sammy says they are duffers.... 😆 Do bring back Bani soon, missing her already ;( he needs to find naa

Again superb writing and do update soon.

Have a great weekend!

Nimmie

Originally posted by: coolgurl_2005

hey Abhi,

in this very small update,you etched out so many deep emotions.brought tears in my eyes at work. 😆 😆 loved how you etched out Jai's reaction to all her drawings was just beautiful,now with diary he is going maybe understand what he really was for her.will be eagerly waiting. 👏
thanks preet 😳
preet 😳

Originally posted by: pooks

They say that a person never really values something till he loses it and the same case is with Jai. 😭 its true with everybody... He never really valued Bani's presence in his life 😡 but now that she has gone, he is realizing what mistakes he did to lose her. Her paintings, though beautiful truely depict her loneliness cause she was not even present in the majority of the paintings herself. 😭 majority? I thought nearly all

Originally posted by: nadia.s

Sad Update 😭 😭
hope jai reads her diary and he will finally know how bani felt about him 😉 he needs to... otherwise he is a hopeless case
continue soon


nadia 😛

Originally posted by: koolgal

great part............
hope jai will finally know that even bani loves him 😛 ..................when r we gonna see bani's entry yaar 😃 .............. i think may be... next week... plz ab unka milan karva do nah 😉 ........... ek baar milan ho jaane do... jai dekhte hai kya karta hai 😉 cant wait for the next part
plzzz cont.soon

Originally posted by: JAN_SA

Hey Abhi,

Read last few parts, sorry for not posting, busy with exams. its okay Great parts, 👏 so Jai finally realises how alone bani felt, good, now comes the part where he has to make up 😳 😃 , very difficult job hai yaar manana looking forwrd to the next part, pm if possible when you update, thanks will pm if i remember... but will try to remember... pakka 😃

Lotsa luv thanku 😳

Jani

Originally posted by: ofcourse

Again an emotional and heart-breaking part Abhi..My eyes were moist when I was reading the painting part. her loneliness was so evident in those paintings. Jai has a lot of work to do once he finds her. Mmmm... here comes the correct point 👍🏼
He is starting to realise the amount of pain n hurt he has given her by ignoring her.
Lookign forward to the next part dear...I am sure I will have more tears now as he is going to read her diary 😭 😭 u right again 😆
Rama

Originally posted by: culgal86

hey ...........

lovely part

update soon

Originally posted by: jeenal20

hey abhilasha
wonderful update
plzz cont soon

Originally posted by: sanam84

u said short...but itna short...shuru hote hi khatam😆 i know.. i realised it only after i posted 😆

but nice ...her paintings said it all...n good Jai noticed...nahin if it was JW of KS i am sure he wud not😆😆 n then you made him 'Snoopy'😃 arey... itna toh haq banta hai use 😉 he is into her cupboard...chalo lets see what he finds there...mughe daar lag raha hai😆 i hope he finds a clue as to where she cud be. do u think so? 😉

Originally posted by: khushboo2006

Abhi finally I am here......... 😭 .....you are just making me cry all the time......poor Jai 😭 😭 ......discovered Bnai's trreasure one by one and felt what a loser he is 😉 .....hope bani's diary is going to give him a roller-coaster ride 😛 ......wonderful read dear...please update soon 👏 👏 👏
what a timing... I am gonna do the next update... 😆 sorry for making you cry so much... but promise that i will give you JB scenes later... 😃

PS: BTW, the part was wayyyyyyyyyyyyy tooooooo shorttttttt

Journey into Bani's thoughts - 2

Jai pulled the papers out of the cover carefully. The colour of the papers said that they were years old. He looked at the side of the set of papers. He found that not all were papers but there was a notebook too without its hardcover. He separated the notebook from the set of papers and placed the papers down below the diary. He looked at the notebook and turned both the sides. On one side of the notebook, he found something written in the corner. He turned in proper direction and saw "Bani" written in the top right corner of the notebook. He turned the first page.

It was a drawing, very amateurish sketch. The page was rubbed so many times before the drawing was completed. He looked at it – he found looking at a lady washing clothes… in the backyard of her house…. The house was visible… there were many plants in the backyard… there was a tap and a washing stone… there were even ropes tied between trees to dry the clothes… It reminded him his house in Aligarh. He smiled absent-mindedly. Then, suddenly it struck him… that it was backyard of his home in Aligarh. The lady was… He looked at the picture carefully again… His mother and his masi were the two persons who used to wash clothes at their house… Then who was it? He looked at the lady keenly. The lady was wearing a 'bindi' on her forehead. His Masi doesn't wear any 'bindi'. Then it was… It was his mother… Suddenly, for Jai, the drawing looked perfect. He could clearly visualize his home in the drawing… He missed his home a lot… but now, even if he goes there, it would be the same… Many things have changed now…

He turned the page. There was nothing. He turned to next page. There was a coloured drawing. It gave a happy feeling to him. The drawing was made in the background of blue-black, with some… some stars!!!! Yes… stars on the dark sky… and the bottom of the picture… there was a man… Man? 'From where did he come?' Jai thought. He was facing him in the drawing. The man was wearing white dress… Suddenly, Jai laughed slightly at the drawing… In the dark moonless night, where there is darkness everyone, the man was looking bright. He laughed at Bani's innocence. He suddenly remembered the fairy tale stories that he had heard in his childhood about angels coming to the earth at night to fulfill the wishes. He wondered if Bani was also thinking in the same way when she painted it. Alas! He failed to understand that it was him and that's how they saw each other in a moonless night – new moon day was approaching… The fact was Bani was just trying to draw him, having no other thoughts in her mind. But atlast, the drawing came out so… She still considered the man was Jai… and Jai considered the man as some angel… But the fact was… They both were right on their stands, but they failed to guess the other's point of view.

Jai turned the page. There was nothing. He turned the page till the next drawing arrived. It was an incomplete drawing and it was crossed. Jai turned the page. Jai's jaw dropped at the drawing. He was looking at… at his cycle… His cycle because… there were two spokes broken in the front wheel of his cycle and three spokes broken in the back wheel of the cycle. Looking at the page, it was clear that she had drawn and redrawn the picture till the final product formed. He was surprised and shocked at the same time that Bani observed things so keenly to reproduce it into a drawing. He traced his cycle on the paper and tried to relive the day when he used to roam around in the cycle carefree.

He turned the page to arrive at the next drawing. It was a sunrise… coloured well… actually from a viewer's point of view, a nice improvement. She had even drawn a lonely bird flying against the reddish orange sky. (But Bani did not know that birds generally never fly alone, unless it was adult or carnivore. Otherwise, the birds always flew in pairs or in groups. But, it was she who was depicted in the drawing, not a normal bird.) But Jai failed to understand that it was she, who was flying in the free sky like a free bird.

Jai turned the page. Two pages later, there was a drawing – a parrot in a cage. It would be found only if observed keenly that the caged parrot was fluttering its wings. But Jai was far away to understand it.

He turned the page to next drawing. Jai's eyes widened. It was a man sitting on the swing. He could make up that it was the same swing in their house looking at the arrangement of the bars at the top and at the sides. 'Who was the man?' Jai wondered. He noticed a cup placed near the person in the swing. Jai shook his head and turned to the next drawing. Suddenly, as if remembering something, he looked back at the drawing. Then, it struck that it was actually him sitting on the swing with a cup of tea. Jai froze at the drawing. Bani was becoming a puzzle to him. He fell into a dilemma whether to continue with viewing the drawings or not. Then his mind told that he had begun exploring Bani, he needed to finish it.

Jai went through all the drawings. Nearly all the drawings were related to him or his family in some or other way.

There was a drawing of some strange design of colours.

There was a drawing of a dress design.

There was a drawing of rainy day.

The last drawing was a girl sitting on the steps of the entrance of the house as if expecting something. The girl was sitting with her elbows placed on her knees and her palms cupping her face. It affected Jai somewhere in his mind. This was exactly how he had seen Bani in his dreams. He touched Bani in the drawing as if to reach her. After few minutes, he wiped two drops of tears which had fallen from his eyes.

He turned the pages to find more drawing, but it was the last. He closed the notebook and kept it beside him.

Originally posted by: khushboo2006

😉 😉 .....wow!! what a balance sheet I have....last time last this time first😃

very well described 👏

but again shorty

anyway. where is Bani? i m worried for her😕

plz cont soon