FF Dawn chapter 4 11th feb updated pg 4

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bccool

@bccool

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Posted: 17 years ago

Hey guys i am back dont ask about other ff i guess its stalled for now dont know where to head with it its the first time i havent been able to finish a ff sorry for that .....this SS i ihope its short is based on a famous pakistani drama i will just adapt and change a few things to suit j and b and will only go ahead if u guys like it.

; Dawn

&nb sp; &nb sp; &n bsp; Chapter 1

Jai looked time and again at the beautiful house before his eyes ...and it hurt him ....it hurt him like hell why did billo massi do this to him ...she was like his mother ...then why ????

Jai walked thru front garden lost in his thoughts remembering the past ...his fun days wwhen billo massi was alive ...how spoilt, funloving n care free he was but ever since billo massi died before his eyes leaving him with nothing ...yes nothing ....not even this house ...he was her adopted son ..she had disowned her daughter long time back ..then why did she chooose to give her last nishaani to her granddaughter and not jai ...she doesnt even care for it ...atleast it hasnt shown in the way the house is maintained from the outside any one like him could be tresspassing.

Jai's blood started to boil at the thought of that girl whoever she was but she had ruined his life ,she had broken his trust in people and he hated her for that. Jai's thoughts were broken by a call from office ...he needed to get back he gave one last look to the house where he was brought up...one last look at the memories that didnt seem to leave him..

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Rano dashed into bani's room it was 9 'o'clock in the morning and bani was to go for an interview but bani being bani was still sleeping..

Rano: bani wake up dont u have an interview today stupid u know walia industries ,jai walia 1 min late and consider your job interview is over even before it starts.

Bani: kya hai yaar rano what kind of a friend are u apne dost ke hi peeche padi rehti ho ...i have such a big nice house in panvel, papa has his business .. what do i need to work for ..yaar sone de.

2 minutes later bani was up and running trying to get ready as fast as possible to make up for the lost time her dads word was final for her and he had dropped in and asked her to wake up and get ready for the interview...so no question could arise after that .

bani:tayee(bani's maid who has looked after her ever since her mom expired when she was a kid)tayee jaldi breakfast do mein vaise hi late hoon.

tayee: first sleep till late then yell at tayee ...yahi aataaa hai ..lo ab karlo breakfast.

Bani had her food quickly and made a dash along with rano to Walia Industries.

Now hope u guys like it and let me know if i should contibue ??? Plus i hope even this part 1 doesnt let down the actual drama which is awesome.

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Edited by bccool - 17 years ago

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Posted: 17 years ago

Hey BC..an interesting start...
So Bani seems to be the grand daughter and Jai already hates her for taking away the house...but as luck would have it she is going to his office for an interview..

Pls do continue..Quite catchy..
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Rachna

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Posted: 17 years ago

intreesting pliz cont soon n pliz update the other one i loved that ff
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sukhjinder kaur

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Posted: 17 years ago

Hi bccool!!!!!!!!
Thanks for writing this story, it's a awesome start 👏 , I've seem the whole serial and I have it too 😃 😃 😃 , It's a beautiful drama, but why did you change the professional of Jai?? well it doesn't matter, I'm sooo happy to see you bac 😳 😛
Continue ASAP!!!!!!! 😊 😊

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bccool

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Posted: 17 years ago

Thanks everyone ...siumi glad u liked it yeah i had the temptation to keep jai's profession as in the original cos it would have been easier to write cos now ill have to think of situations in the business environment.

Ill update soon maybe today or by saturday for sure ..300+ views only 8 replies guess i am not doing a good job.

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Rachna

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Posted: 17 years ago

pliz update today prrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeettttttttttyyyyyyyyyyyyy ppppppppppppppplllllllllliiiiiiiiiiiiiiizzzzzzzzz
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Rachna
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Momtaj

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Posted: 17 years ago

hey dont worry about the replies ur ff has a great storyline it will pickup 😉 ur doing a fab job

please do update today 😃

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bccool

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Posted: 17 years ago

Chapter 2

Bani's interview went off well even though she on purpose tries to screw it at times.She was told they would inform her of their decision by the evening.

As bani made her way out the office rano flooded her with her questions

Rano: Bani how was it ,did u get the job ???

Bani: yaar kya hai it was ok maine to koshish ki accha na jaaye i hope i have been successful though i doubt it but ill know in the evening

Rano: nahin karni job to papa ko kehna tha aayi kyon accha woh chod ab kya plan hai

Bani: lets go shopping ....

And with that both of them were off for there shopping spree in mumbai

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As Jai was winding up his work in the office ,pushkar walked in with a sheet in his hand

Pushkar: Sir, list of new trainees who will be under you starting monday

Jai: Ok, thanks pushkar, i almost forgot we had interviews today how was the whole process and all.

Jai's conversation with pushkar lasted a while and after that he left for home no his house thats what he chose to call it home is when u have people u love living with u inside a house and this was really not the case as far as he was concerned .

As his car was leaving the office premises the driver asked where he wanted to go jai wanted to say panvel as much as seeing that house reminded him of massi 's betrayal and however hatred for that girl engulfed he liked going there because so many happy memories were associated with that place...his entire childhood to his young days were spent there .

jai : ghar chalo

Once back home jai's loniless engulfed rather surrounded him again actually he had gotten so used to it that loniless was a part of his very living ,it was a way of life for him .He sat down and started going through his childhood foto album it brought a rare smile on his face and he decided this sunday he would how ever much it hurt
him go to panvel once again as he made a quick call to the lawyer to check if the massi's granddaughter wanted to sell the house.

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Bani reached home to find a bad good news awaiting her as her dad told her she had got the job and that she had to start from coming monday...Bani was like what 2 days more of freedom thats it ...why me she thought ...and then decided she would enjoy these two days and decided this sunday she would go to panvel and see the house that her grandmother left for her.

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Jai was strolling in the backyard of his childhood home on this bright sunday afternoon and again was back into his world of gloomy memories which ended in pain deceit and which killed his trust in love and people and which transforemd him from a happy ,full of life person to a cold .lonely,harsh person ...whose best friend was his loneliness and his favourite pass time was to sit in a dark room and question his fate...despite his success and wealth he was bankrupt...all thanks to that girl ...his thoughts suddenly broken by sound of distant yet loud enough laughter .

Jai made his way to the front of the house and all he could manage to catch was a glimpse of two girls laughing and running towards their car and then they quickly sat inside and went away.

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Back home from panvel after a longdrive bani ,rano and tayee shared their experience with bani's dad ..with bani truly loving the place specially the greenery arnd and tayee she sweared she would never go out to such a spooky
empty place with bani again as bani kept scaring her .

nishikant: accha hua abhi ghar dekh aayi now ull nbe working time nahin milega

bani: reality hitting her ...oho kya papa ek min ke liye u cant let me enjoy ..can u ...pata hai i have to be at work tommorrow pata nahin how its going to be ...lets c

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Bani woke with tayee literally yelling in her ears to wake her up .

bani: kya tayee sone dijiye naa

nishikant: beta its yr first day at work get ready u dont want to be late do u ..

sulking bani came out of her bed and went to get ready..and then quickly had her breakfast and was abt to leave when rano arrived saying that she would go with her and drive back bani's car and may be later come to pick her ,

So bani and rano left for Walia industries .

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Pushkar showed all the new trainees arnd and then told them who would be working under whom .He took an immediate liking for bani and even bani found him to be sweet and fun .

pushkar: bani and pia u will work under jai sir and since u are gonna work under him i would say watch out.

pushkar : And all are invited to Jai sir's room for an informal introduction.

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Jai saw all the new trainees assemble in his room ,once all were there he introduced himself and roshni who was another senior in the company and jai's friend and then started the intro of the trainees one by one evryone introduced themselves and then jai started his talk on the ethics and work culture that the trainees need to follow bani found it hard n boring and most of all suffocating ...the man was dry ,strict ,no fun and he was her boss ..her mind drifted from what jai was saying and she started to scribble jai's cartoon .

Jai : ms dixit what r u upto.

bani trying to hide the piece of paper: nothing sir

jai:will u give that paper to me

bani gave it to him

jai: All of u can leave now and get strated with your work.Roshni u can see how they do.

Once everyone left jai opened the piece of paper to find his grumpy cartoon made on it ..he scrunched it and threw it in the bin.

I guess that was very long and bad ....i am ruining the actual thing i guess.tell me guys how is it ......
sorry for mistakes ididnt check the spelling n grammatical errors.

tc

Edited by bccool - 17 years ago