FF SwargMNS,,,, ATHARWA BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Swarg Mila Nark Se

Intro pag1.
1st part pg1
2nd part pg 2


Story so far:

Story so far:

The story is exactly same till The part when Bani comes to Mumbai from Meerut and comes in face to face with Jai. Jai makes her do job and baani is compelled to work with JW.

Past:

Bani, Pia, Rano comes to jai walia for help after her father's death. Jai walia wanted to marry pia but pia loved pushkar. But for luxury she decided to marry jai, but on marriage day pia runs away and Bani is compleeled to marry Jai. Both fall in love slowly. And lead happy married life. After many ups and downs Jai and bani reunites with big family, consisting of Krishna, Atharwa. Life is smooth and happy in joint family till one day, Krishna and Atharwa are kidnapped, and killed. At same time jai's sister jigyasa creates misunderstadning in jai's mind about bani having affair with daksh and blaming her for kids death. Jai believes her and kicks bani out of the house blaming her for his children's death.

Now this daksh's part.

Daksh married anamika, Ananmika is Bani's twins, so with support of anamika's and Dakshs's scene Jigs created the mess. Anamika is declared dead.

Bani's meerut life:

Bani changed her name to maithili. Bani worked as cateror. But as thakurine did not like maithili because she was loved by everyone, and made plans to kick her out. One fine day she succeeds. Thakurine has one three sons. Two of them are already married, and their wives too dislike maithili.

Now present. The show took 5 years leap and baani is living with her and JW's daughter Ganga with massi in mumbai in one of the street as poor person.

After coming to mumbai, Jai sees ganga and he is for some reason attracted towards her, but he seems to be married. But he sees 2 in one Krishna and atharwa in ganga.

Here is character intro:

Krishna main lead of the Fanfic. Sweet innocent daughter of JW and BW was brutally killed but JB due to personal fights did not get up and catch the killer of this innocent angel.



Son of JB, same innocent stroy as Krishna.

Lets have some other importanat character who have lost the link from actual character.


Parents of Angels Jai and Bani. Know to be cutest couple in Mumbai, this couple had slow hate to love relationships. After many ups and downs due to 7 years secret, pia or aparajit Deb, fanily finally reunited but fate did not want this so they again seperated.


Ranno youngest of the three sisters. Her sisters are Bani and Pia. SHe loved reading books but lost the interst in it after comming to Mumbai somehow. She even lost her tongue to support the sister whenever she needs some support.


Pia. Middle sisters. Love to think herself beautiful, modeling and one more thing is she loves to break as many promises as possible. SHe destroyed the life of her elder sister baani. But hopefully she is now normal.

After Jai, Bani, Pia and Rano, we have Villan of the show.


Jigaya and Karuna
She loves to be called sister of Jai walia rather then having her own identity. For sake of that she will destroy as many people as possible, inculding Baani. Karuna, woman without top floor. Brainless woman supproting jigs and her chamchi.

Other side characters:
Aditya, Billo, Daadi, Nattu, Purva, Daksh, etc. Same as show.

Will be adding episode 1 by tommorow.



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Posted: 18 years ago
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1st😃

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww😳 the angels⭐️⭐️ of ❤️

JB..hayeee kya jodi❤️

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loved the intro

plz plz plz cont soon😳

-tropa

Edited by moonlitnight - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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hahhahah ahha.. omg cant wait for part 1. 😆 😆 😆 .. plzz continue soon..
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Yeah its almost ready, gonna put it up by tommorow
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Episode 1:
Knock knock on door of Walia mansion. Jigs, Aditya and Daadi are in hall. But no one gets up to open the door. Jigs is irritated and says yeh gharwale sab useless, aditya looks at daadi and smiles. Jigs open the dor and its postman out there, he hands letter to jigs and leaves. Jigs opens the letter and and smiles and gets happy and goes upstair. Aditya looks at daadi and is bit shocked he says to her, "jigyasa khush hokar gayi matlab koi nai mustibat." Daadi smiles in shock and Rano and Raashi comes there and sees them smiling and are confused. Daadi calls Vidhya who is by Raashi and calls her near aditya, she comes and aditya says "tumhe thodi jasoosi karogi". Rano and Raashi wonder the case and aditya tells Vidhya some plan.
Vidhya goes and finds jigs and she sees jigs keeping letter on dressing table and she sneaks in the room. Jigs looks back but there is no one and jigs moves out. Vidhya sighs the relief and gets out of the cupboard. She quietly takes the letter and run out of the room, She hands the letter to aditya and rano wonders from whose the letter is? Aditya says its from anand , Raashi asks who anand, some funny tune is in back. Aditya smiles and says Anand is place in gujurat. From anand punjabi munda of jigs, Vikram Makhaji is coming. Everyone smiles, Raashi smiles and says its good na?
Adiyta replies well let time say the same, Aane do usse. Jigs sees this and says "Kyun ho gayi Jasoosi, chalo aap sab apna kaam kijye". Everyone giggles and jigs turn and smiles and moves to kitchen.
Nattu is there in kitchen he sees Jigs there :
Nattu "Umm… Bua ji kya hua kuch chahiye?"
Jigs: "Nahin, aaj mein khana bana chati hoon"
Nattu (chocks): ?"Kyun kya b…bbaaa.. baat hai? Aaj ku…kuu..ch khkkh…khaas hai?"
Jigs smiles, nattu shcoked
Jigs: "Haan, aaj mera bhatija aa raha hai"
But nattu had already disappered. He tells the whole thing to aditya and everyone almost faint. Few seconds later, everyone is busy deciding from which should they order food.
Jigs is busy and full white in kitchen. She has flour on almost her head 😆.
Karuna comes there:
Karuna: Ae chal mere liye ek glass thanda juice bana de.
Jigs gets angry: Jaruba.
Karuna irritated: Tum do koti ki naukraani mujhse is tarah se baat kar rahi ho, besharm.
Jigs: Karuna mein
Karuna cuts in: Bakri ki tarah kya mein mein kiye jaa rahi ho.
Jigs slaps Karuna. Karuna is shocked and aback
Karuna: Jigyasa tu..tum is halat mein and she begans to laugh.😆😆
We see some airplane and some bag is thrown out of it..(Just like prem in Mein Prem ki deewani hoon.)
Some man jumps out and gets the baggage. He puts it on his shoulder and walk ahead. He takes some trawli and some other captain tries to put the bags in trawli but drops it down and is confused, Where did trawli go?😆. The man removes googles and asks taxi man to put the baggage in taxi Taxi man says this taxi is already reserved, Man says yeah so put my baggage in the taxi, Taxi man is like I can't, u know the meaning of saying no to me, Taxi driver is like are you some price or something. Man is like I am nephew of Jai walia, Taxi man is like so what? and there is big argument and crowd all around him.
Outside Walia Mansion there is taxi, and he is like wake up sir your destination is here, He wakes and his eyes are shown with camera zoomed and his yes moving back and forth walia mansion is focusedm, Man's lips are shown and says world may change but not Walia mansion, he gets out, and Jigs is ordering Rano to go out and arrange flowers proerly, Rano, moves out and she bumps into This guy he turns around and his face is shown and he is Vikram,



Baani is in house And ganga comes there nicely dressed she seems to be very happy and excited, Bani asks her the reason. Ganga just smiles and Bani remembers something… She is like yeah today is your some teacher's biirthday and you are expecting the treat. Ganga is like yeah, but today everything seems to go positive, I mean teacher's b'day and I also made few freiinds and today I will talk to Krish….
Bani shcoked and asks anaga to complete Was she gonna say Krishna.. Ganga gets nervois and Baani Gets angry, Ganga is like mumy Krishna , I really miss her. Bani shouts out at Ganga then why don't you you too love me all alone like her and go and stay with her and anku. Ganga is in tears. Are you going to talk to her, but how??? Ganga hesitates and she is like no, actually I m feeling like I want to talk to her, but only if you permit me… Bani is like no. You won't talk to her. Bani is really irritated. Ganga kneels down like broken person and she says I m sorry mama today I will not obey you cause I won't be able to stop myself.
Bani runs into the room, and gets echoes of some young girl sayin "some poor lady like you can't be my mother, so I will not leave my maami and come with you, see how happy can I stay here, infact I prefer Ganaga you too stay here, I m toh here only and athrva is also here with me" Some bot voic saying shouting and screaming "Please let me go with my mom I beg you" Bani is just crying and crying.
Ganga is in room and crying.
In walia mansion, Rano is saying to Vikram are you Blind, Viki says relax you have double power and you are asking me if I m blind how funny, Rano tells him to shut up and continues she has no interest in wasting time in talking to someone who seems useless like him. He says he is too not intersted in talking to gardner like her. Rano is irritated and leaves saying in mind i will have to teach you lesson how to speak to ladies.
Viki stands staring at her.

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Posted: 18 years ago
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awww the 2 cutest angelss!
love the intro!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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wow rano and vikram.. jodi achi hai.. heh eh.. great part.. plaa continue soon
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Part 2

Viki thinks he will have to teach her lesson, he removeshis skate from bag and places down on floor so that Rano slips.

He moves in and puts gogles and raashi is taking juice to rano, he bumps into her. Raashi scolds him. He asks her to relax it was not his fault but you were walking like you were in garden, Raashi is irrtated and takes out his gogles and says "Tumne toh aankho par patti bandh rakhi hai toh tumhe kya dikhega? Tum aandhe ho". She says Andhe again to im and goes ahead. Rano is coming and Raashi is moving out. Then Viki hears scream and sees outside he is surprised to see juice on Raano and and raashi and rano both on floor. He laughs and says "ek tir so do nishana" lols out loud. Rashi and rano are really irritated. Viki asks who actually slipped on skates, Rashi says "we don't feel its important to tell you everything. Viki just smiles and moves on to bump into Aditya😆 He is like "Naye nukar rakhe hai mamaji ne" and moves in and Aditya pulls him back and says he is Adtiya. He is like "Fufaji aap kitne patle ho gaye kya buaji aap ko think se khana nahin khate" Aditya is like "Tumhari buaji toh…" he is interupted by scream he goes outside and sees Rano rashi trying to get up. Viki smiles and goes in, Aditya "Yeh ladka kabhi nahin sudhrega". Viki pops up from back and says "Who toh hai".. Aditya gets startled and Viki really moves in and aditya sees around if he is behind him, and he moves out to help Raashi and Rano and asks them how did this happen. Rashi is like "This idioti who went in did this. He kept skates out for rano and then while I was taking juice for rano I slipped on it and in process to help me Rano slipped on me with juice falling on her but I saved her from glass". Rano asks who that's clown was, Well u see he is clown so count it from jigs family only he is only viki. Both are shocked.

He greets Jigyasa and Jigyasa (for first time with tears) says she is soo happy to see him, afterall he is like her son. Seeing this emotion Everyone else rolls their eyes and Viki and jigs hug each other.

Jigs orders rashi and rano for bringing tea for viki, Viki is like I need to rest and please bring tea in my room. Both agree and move I kitchen rashi makes tea, and is ready to take tea to Viki. Rano stops her and adds some salt in the same, She winks at rashi and Rashi smiles.

Viki is unpacking the bag, rano enters the room and comments

Rano:"Wah!!! Aisa lagta hai ki tum ab yahi bas jaoge!!"

Viki: (rolls eyes) "Hmm… rahoon toh bhi tumhe problem toh nahin?"

Rano: (smiles and is bout to say something)

Viki: (Cutting) "Ho toh bhi kya? Mein toh jigyasa maa jaisi bua ke liye hi toh yahan ruka hoon?"

Rano: "Who toh hai afterlall tumhe unke alawa aur rakh bhi kaun sakta hai?"

Viki: "What do you mean?"

Rano: (shocked) "I mean Kya tumne pehle se apne liye koi pagal khana dhundh rakha tha?"

Viki: "Haan toh, bahut achi hotel hai…. Kya????? Kya kaha tumne?"

Rano: (giggles)

Viki: (comes close to her) "Kyun tumhe apna admission karana?"

Rano angrily leaves saying Raashi is bringing you tea.

Rashi comes in with tea and hands it over to him, He with smile takes it and drinks and spits it out.

Rashi: "Kya hua?"

Viki: "Kya chai mein koi namak dalta hai?" and screams at her. Aditya comes in

Aditya: "Kya hua?"

Viki: (Hands him tea cup) "Aap hi taste kijiye"

Aditya takes a sip: "Kya burai hai?"

Viki: "isne chai mein namk dala hai koi dalta hai kya?"

Aditya: "Kahan? Sab thik toh hai"

Viki: "Kya?"

Aditya quickly moves out woith tea cup and comes in hands him tea back.

In bathroom,

Aditya is spitting out all the tea, Rano smiles.

Rano: "Sorry who sab humne usse sabak sikhne"

Aditya: "Janta hai, he deserves it, keep it up, Jigs ke karan hamara toh koi bus chalta nahin." He leaves and rano smiles.

In room,

Rashi is institing Viki to drink the tea, but viki refuses it, Jigs comes in rashi gets scared.

Viki: "Dekhye na buaji yeh chai mujhe thodi salty lagi aur mein yeh nahin piungaa".

Jigs: "Rashi toh bahut achi chai banati hai"

Rashi surprised,: "Sunna, ab pilo na?"

Viki: (Making faces) "Ajib sabko inke haath ki bai chai achi lagti hai?"

Jigs takes tea. Raashi gets scared. Jigs sips the tea and is surprised she looks at rashi who is scared and looks down and then jigs looks at Viki.

Jigs: "Kya baat hai sab thik toh hai!!!"

Raashi surprside she sees rano and Aditya at door behind Jigs and thumbs up she smiles

And leaves. Jigs I will drink the tea and make you other one.

In kitchen,

Jigs is making tea, and she turns around for mins and rashi comes and adds the salt in the tea.

At night at Walia house,

Rashi trying to put all kids in bed but no one is ready to sleep yet, viki is passing by and he stops and asks rashi to leave if they are sleepy he will make them sleep. Rashi is like how can I trust you? Viki says ok then you stay awake to make them go to sleep. Rashi is liem I love them and I will also do that. Viki is like ok, I have secret formula. Rashi is like ok and leaves. Veer, Vidhya, etc, makes face at him and he is picks up pillows and they all have pillow fight, afterwards everyone is so tired they sleep on Viki's leg and have sweet convo.

Veer: "Aap kya yahan sab ko tang karne aaye ho?"

Viki: "Nahin, yeh tumhe kisne kaha?"

Vidhya: "Aditya uncle ne"

Viki: "Ab inki Khair nahin!!"

Varun: "Kya" (Here there is no disability in any kid, everyone is normal)

Viki: "Kuch nain, Mein toh yahan apni photography sikhkar, modelling company mein kaam karta hoon"

Vidhya: "Matlab"

Veer: "Arre budhu, matlab, Bahi bahut hi jald popular hone wale hai"

Viki: "Abhi kahan, mujhse toh abhi aage yeh Karan hai?"

Varun: "Who kaun hai?"

Viki: "Hai ek, usse toh bahut hi ache ache models aate hai"

Vidhya: "Toh aapko kaisi chaiye bataye usse hum dhoondhe ge"

While he is describing one girl is shown playing basket ball and smiles after winning. Karan comes to life and all are sleeping, He sees Rashi at dor and Rashi seems impressed and Viki seems proud.

The girls is Jennifer winget:

All other girls comes and congratulate the the girl saying kya jhalak tere saamne toh hum jit hi nahin sakte, you r too good. Jhalak smiles as proud one.

At night in ganga's house,

Ganga gets up from her bed and is releived to see everyone sleeping. She recollects on her birthday how everyone was awaked. She moves out, and sneakes near telephone booth. She picks up the phone and dials the number. Some young girl picks up the phone and says "Kaun hai be? Itni raat ko phone kar raha hai"

Ganaga: "Krishna, Arre mein hoon!!!"

Girl: "Don't call me Krishna, call me Pari!! Aur kya tum koi bakri ho mein mein karne wali?"

Ganga: (Rolls her eyes) "Mein ganga hoon"

Girl: (Softens abit) "Gangu, Bol" (feels like tears inher voice) and some sad music in back

Ganga: "Mein kya boloon? Tu toh sab janti hai na?"

Girl: (All of sudden) "Nahin, athu kaa phone aaya ki tum log meerut mein nahin ho? Kahan Ho? Jahan ho wahan se mujhe pehle nahin batna chaiye tha?"

Ganga: "Bus Bus ek ke baad, sab ek saath nahin. Hum Mumbai mein hai. Aur yeh athu ka kya chakar hai? usse kaise pata chala?"

Krishna: "Haan w…o. .h umm… w..o..hh.. Chal chodna Kya pharka padta hai jasoosi se, AB mujhe tum pata do?"

Ganga: "Haan likh"

And phone gets cut, Lady outside says ypu only got soo much time woth so kmuch money, Ganga is upset and leaves. She takes out hundred rupees note and says please not to tell anyone else about this phone call, And she is like don't worry.

Jhalak is in room she just came after taking bath and she gets a call. She picks it up

Jhalak: "Hey Pari what a surprise aaj apni di ko kaise yaad kiya?"

She hears something and is shocked and she is like what the heck they are in this city and I didn't know that. But where could they be?


Edited by shahsb_26 - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Still no comments, so should i continue or should i stop here?
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Its great, but cofused, K n A r there n whos Pari? Y is Bani mean 2 Ganga. Cont. soon.

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