The Foreign Self: Part XIV to XVI-B - Page 24

wow 😲

i like the Bani Walia part so much
i still have my mouth open 😲

very good part indeed short but the aftereffects are still their..........

Armana another brilliant pieace.
how both of them judging another instead of communicating like they had decided......

well i think i understand both of them point of view.

this is getting so intersting everytime you update looking for more and more.

please continue soon

pooja😲

👏 👏 what a surprise certainly wasn't expecting that and neither was she. did he do it just to shut up the media seeing her life was no longer a private matter or did subconscious feelings denied acknowledgement surface unintentionally. wish you wrote more. great enjoyable read.

hi armana after a long time but worth the wait 😊 ...i love the pace with which u are carrying ur story forward,the uncertainity in jai bani relationship..and the special bond that made them both opt for a relationship the world deems as a liasion but they both know it is something more than that....
jai walia really knows how to pamper his women.....pearls,solitaires....... 😳 😳
bani dixit i guess is going to have some rough time coming ahead....pia,roshni and jigyasa now that is a hurricance 😕
neverthe less it is always a pleasure to read ur work...and hopefully this time the wait for the next part wld be shorter 😊

Somali: by now you should realise that second guessing me does not work very well!

Pooja: am glad you picked on the essential part of their relationship's flaw- they are both bound by their own insecurities and prejudices. Amd really glad that you feel that both their viewpoints are justified.

Oval: i'd say it's a combination.....as for writing more: you have no idea how difficult it wa sto write even this much 😕

Sun:for teh record, the solitaires Bani has been wearing are her own. She is a quite a rich woman in her own right. I did not want Bani to be financially dependant upon JW's wealth. So while she is not super rich like him, she is more than independently wealthy through he rown efforts.
As for the next part: give me breather here! I barely found time to write this! Have no clue when the next part is coming.
But to all of, Thank you, for liking it and even more importantly, writing in.
Armana

Hey armana...the update was awesome...as usual as awesome read...

So..Jai called her Bani Walia with a W in front of the media and some of his family...I wonder how that is going to sit with Bani...especially when only in a few minutes ago she thought she was the flavor of the month...

I feel that the JB you created have a very strong exterior, but somewhere deep within...there is a lot of emotional unrest.. The way the two of them physically responded when the other tried to break the exterior wall... yet not understand the reason for this response...was well shown...loved it..

I wish these two would communicate like JB...and yet even talk more...rather than make assumptions and ruin everything... Rivs

The B decides to lay bare the most private of excerpts of her life,JW misunderstands nuances & choses that very juncture to back off and exude aloofness. What a conjunction! Well composed.

Waiting to read the reactions to the impulsive appellation. Was it the repressed,subliminal feelings coming to the fore or just quick thinking.

Enjoyed this part as ever.Thanks

Armana,

Thanks for updating finally...

It was short and sweet. Jai is so indecisive about his feelings, first wanting to peek in to her inner creativity and curious about her paintings which bare her feelings and lifestyle and then backing out immediately. He wants to badly know all about her, but is scared of getting hurt if she said 'No'.

Once bitten twice shy, looks like our man is hurt, way too much to take the risk again, venturing in to the unknown.

Awesome update,

PS: JW reminded me about a child who got hurt touching a burning flame and averse to ever trying it again!

Loved it! Waiting for your next update!

Although, this was short, it was, by far the most intense part. Absolutely love the way u dress up bani ..very chic. It's amazing how pink (apart from black and white) goes with almost any color.

Just a nano-second pause from her made him conscious how guarded she is (be it family or her work), and that , did hurt his ego – big time. Isn't that enough for him realize that Bani is indeed very different from other women he'd known, and not just any other woman. Hope he sees the inherent paradox of his thoughts.( did I make any sense here armana?. I'm not as good as you to put thoughts on paper)

Bani – what can I say 'bout this poor soul. She very well knew what she was getting into. But she has made a cardinal error of falling in love with a man who probably would never love her in return.
Last, but not least, did he just say 'Bani Walia'


It took me more than half hour to write these lines. I can only imagine the tremendous amount of effort on ur part to give us this ff. I would like to commend you on this original piece of work. Bravo ! 👏 👏 👏
As far the length, dear armana, as someone said, 'less is more'.
Looking forward to ur next update.

take care
aashna

Does Pia have to be there?......Just the thought of her annoys me!!

Anyways....

Your lateness at posting was definitely overshadowed by the amazing part!👏

There was nothing in there that I could pass a negative comment on - Loved how you described Bani's clothes; the pearls; Roshni's stubborness to continue......Jai Walia's last dialogue was just the icing on the cake - he sure knows how to deal with the press!!😉

Rivya: "I feel that the JB you created have a very strong exterior, but somewhere deep within...there is a lot of emotional unrest.. The way the two of them physically responded when the other tried to break the exterior wall... yet not understand the reason for this response"
That's a pretty insightful comment. That is how i saw Jai and Bani, instinctively they recognise each other as soulmates but because of circumastnces (in KS) and personal past and baggage (in tfs) they are rateh rpoor at communicating with each other....and this is the crucial faultline/weakness of JB.

India06: i guess we often over analyse responses in life, but sometimes the gut insticnt is bang on. Ans JW's response is gut instinct.....but will he trust it, and more importantly will Bani? The dice is loaded against both of them because of their own past, their fears, their insecurities.....


Sheena: "JW reminded me about a child who got hurt touching a burning flame and averse to ever trying it again!"
You've pretty much summed it up perfectly!

Thanks you guys.
Today more than ever i really enjoyed reading your comments. The amount of thought you've put in them is pretty awesome!
🤗
Armana