The Foreign Self: Part XIV to XVI-B

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@joa123

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Posted: 18 years ago

#131

fab part 👏 👏
do cont soon

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Sheena

@Sheena_Row

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Posted: 18 years ago

#132

Originally posted by: armana

dear sheena,
if i were your eighth grade eng teacher, i'd be looking for the nearest well to drown myself in for a job poorly done after seeing those exclamation marks! 😆 😆 😆

thank you for not taking my pedantic streak amiss and getting offended.
and btw, in case you hadn't noticed, my spelling skills are non-existent!

love,
Armana

😆😆😆 Being a product of regional schools and undergoing in regional medium of instruction, I know I need an English teacher to correct my grammar.

Thank God! Being an indiscriminate reader of books and having access to some of the most wonderful books in my house and my uncle's house, I picked up English mostly by myself other than having just the basics of grammar in school.

Just like your pedantic streak, I have a thick skin.

I endured being the butt of some of my friends' jokes about my 'butler English', but didn't give up on learning.

Back to TFS,

The three witches are bothering Bani - I hope she survives their evilness.

I really liked Ran and Nach coming to Bani's rescue, even when you think you are independent and self-sufficient, it always feels good to know some one is there to protect you.

So Jai gave her the family jewels, looks like he is getting serious about her, I like the way you described Bani, she reminds me of Audrey Hepburn, with her long sleek neck and the chignon.

Everything was beautifully described, and the last scene was very erotic.

PS: The ellipses were used more frequently than normal! (Just joking, attribute it to my irreverent humor😆😆😆

Now don't slap me with more grammar lessons...)

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black current

@black current

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Posted: 18 years ago

#133

👏 great part armana
really loved it
hmmmmmmmmmmmmm am i sensing some explosions??????????
really loved the way bani spoke to Roshini
continue soon
love u
satya

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bugs_bunny

@bugs_bunny

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Posted: 18 years ago

#134

Armana, very beautifully written!! 👏

I think in the coming updates pia and bani will meet!

So, Jai is finally getting serious about her? Giveing her his mother's earring and all!

Ranveer and Natchiket coming to Bani's rescue was very cute! 😛

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Abhita

@abhita

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Posted: 18 years ago

#135

Hey Armana,

Just read part XV-A...
Absolutely Awesome!!!!

I loved every bit of it... :-D

I have a very untrusting nature... especially when it concerns somebody who has given me enough reason to be so... so I am somewhat suspicious of Pia... her tearing eyes didn't move me... :-D Especially considering her jealousy on Bani's appearance and the jewellery she wore...

I wonder how long it'd be before Jai connects the sketches to Saraswathi!

I absolutely adore the characterisation of Bani... the way you have portrayed her... somebody who makes her own rules in life... and lives by them... an independent girl of today... that is somebody I want to be like!

and last but def not the least...

👏

- Abhi

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Sangita

@sangitadas

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Posted: 18 years ago

#136

👏

Wonderful part Armana. And the wait was definitely worth it. cant thank you enough.

Very lovely characterisation of Bani. Maybe this is one of those FFs where Bani's character has been beautifully projected and we get to hear her thoughts and understand her feelings. Thanks a lot Armana for giving us this gem of a FF.

I love the way JW automatically realises when Bani is troubled and vice-versa. These are what soul mates are made of.

Well enough of my ramblings. Thanks again for this excelelnt part.
Hope you update soon.

Regards

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GoodGoneWrong

@GoodGoneWrong

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Posted: 18 years ago

#137

armana...another wonderful update...
Bani mami, Bani bhabhi...where did that come from???lol....I am sure Roshni is probably still in a haze and rooted to the same spot...lol...

Is Jigs good????She seems nice but I am concerned that she has got the wrong notion in her head about Bani...I wish this clears up soon...

overall...loved it...amazing descriptions...please continue soon...
Rivs

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divan

@divan

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Posted: 18 years ago

#138

Armana:

What can I say, part 15A was wonderful. One can sense all the emotions felt by Bani as she encounters Jigyasa and Roshni. Love how she responded to Ranveer and Nachiket when she questions them why they interrupted her and Roshni.

Pia doesn't have courage to face her sister after what she did all those years ago and needs reassurance from Rano.

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preet

@preet_2010

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Posted: 18 years ago

#139

Armana

that was just beautiful,really worth the wait.just beautifully written.the emotions bani goes through when jigs and roshni make those remarks was protrayed so well.Ranveer and Nachiket are so sweet,they are already praticising for the future.The understanding between jai and bani is written so well.totally loved it.looking forward to the next part,cant wait. 😊

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khushboo2006

@khushboo2006

Dazzler

Posted: 18 years ago

#140

Armana,
I can only say that wait is worth 😃 😆
Liked Part XV-A very much as it beautifully written 😃 👏
Now Bani has to face three evil women 😡 😡
Liked Ran & Nach coming to Bani's rescue 😊
Eagerly waiting for Part XV-B 😉 😃
Thanks a lot 😃 😆
👏 👏 👏

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