FF: The Foreign Self.Part IX A &B - Page 4

Simply amazing Armaan...!!!

Here I'm... and trying to say something but earnestly I dont think I have enough words to describe what you written. It indeed requires a talent and outstading prain to produce a remarkable piece of work like this.""" 👏 👏 👏

I have read more than once as I got little confuse which part was written about the past. But now after reading all of them again I'm very happy to say that I'm immensly convinced and very happy about where the story is heading. 😃

The quotes and the songs were amazing.. please keep it up as they're ... !!!

I might not comment as you post the part. But you can count on it and have my words , that I'll be leaving my comment behind once I read.. like I did now. !!!

Finally I'll be looking forward to read all the next parts and thank you for all your efforts for entertaining us... we really all appreciate that! 😃

I'm sure everyone will agree with me for that...!

Jojo

Armana,

As usual 👏 So this is how he finds out about his father and Barnali adn Nachiket, pretty devasting realy and you described his feelings and emotions so very beautifully.👏

Aww...so he stays at the guest house of the church/college, and next is definitely the meeting between two hurt souls.😃

Cant wait for the next part from you soon dear.😃

Love

Krishna

Originally posted by: mahimn

Finally breaking the silence I must say a good part though action missing 😆 😉 but worth it. Somehow I find the JW of your FF a little difficult to decipher cause he has so many layers to him that makes him a little complicated but yet so predictable character. Beneath that tough facade lies a man who is just as vulnerable as everyone else around him. Interestingly the JW of KS is the one who discovered true love(read not affection or infatuation), something , he never thought existed in him. But your JW knows what he is made of and thus prevents himself from being hurt by making assumptions. He prefers to lethis bains rule over his heart even in matter of love. Correct me if I am wrong in understanding this character.

Originally posted by: btkr

but if he shied away from calling Barnali a "wh***", why didn't he bite his tongue before calling Bani the same?? 😡 😡 😡
one because in ks he did that without any pretext at all and that has always revolted me. I wanted to re-write the accusation but in my own way....where even as JW's habit of jumping to conclusions came through so did at least a slender pretext. Even though clutching at that pretext reveals more about JW's lack of trust tahn anything else.
two, Barnali's character at one level did not make a personal difference to him. In his heart he knows he is attracted to this Bani like he never has been to anyone (except a stranger) but his brains and experinece tell him Bani is too good to be true.....and so he keeps pushing.....
Hope that makes sense!
For the record he did not use the word wh*** for Bani either, just stated it very implicitly!
love
Armana

Love the update, as usual

👏 👏 👏

bt

Where should I start here, A? I think we have dissected the nuances well enough already! 😉 😆

Not posting any particular comments on this part, but some general observations for the FF:

a) The JW in the FS is the most Complex JW created till date! (Complex, not Complicated!)Its impossible to predict what he is upto or what his next reaction will be! Hell, maybe that is why he is so devilishly attractive 😳 (I can see Sangs coming after me with her Belan! 😆 )

b) You seem to add a new layer / dimension to his character in every part...yet, in the most amazing way, managing to keep JW a completely believeable character!

c) The mastery over words, story flow and langauge is flawless. And that mind you, is an understatment!

d) Bani in the FS come across as more complete, more mature and infintely more admirable human being / character than even JW.....and your JW is just perfect!😊 So you can imagine for yourself, how much I like the Bani in this story!

e) The FF stands out with its inherent simplicity in depicting human emotions, yet is one of the most complex stories I have read till date (Not just on the Forum, in general too!)

f) FS is truly a testimony to the age old adage, "Love for a man is a part of his Life ; For a woman, its her whole Life!" 😃 (Haven't phrased it verbatim!)

g) One of those rare FF / Stories which pay detailed attention to emotions and feelings than the superfluous! The shifting timeline has been done to perfection, albeit it requires great deal of concentration to figure things out by the reader!😳 (You know whom I am referring to!)

h) The narrative is so vivid, that you can actually visulalize the characters in flesh as you read them! Be it the description of the Paintings or the Farmhouse, or be it Jai's anguish when he is not able to trust his insticts or be it Bani's pain, you can just feel it!

Am really looking forward to the next part! 😃

Love,

MT