manan ff: holds the key to my heart?? part 12 page 70 (19th march 2016

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i have read lots n lots of ffs of manan.. n cant stop myself ...so writing one ff...hpe you all will love it...nd appricitate my work..
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prologue

MANGLORE
an old lady was teaching classical muswic to some girls and boyzz..some are plaing sitar ...some are plaing tabla...some playing flute , harmoniam etc...

old lady(OL): ramuu...tanna uthi ki nahi ab tak...
ramu: amma...ap unhe janti ho na...vo kaha itni jaldi class mein ane walo mein hai...
OL: aiyoo rama..kaun kahega ek classical singing sikhane wali teacher ki poti itni lazy...mein jake dekhti hai
r(think)-aiyo ..agr amma ko pata chl gayi ki tanna room mein nahi hai..to gadbad ho jaegi...
r-amma..mein dekhti hai na...
OL: nahi aj to mein use thk kakrke hi rahungi...meri gurukul k rules ko sabse jyada ye hi todti hai...

r-aiyo ramma.;agta hai aj to ye naukri gayi...
yes the old lady is Ams...
ams open the door of a girl whom she tanna ...
a-ayio..ye ladki yaha hi nahi...ramu...tanna kaha hai

ramu dissapear.. from there n hid in the kitchen-tanna jaldi ajao..verna tumhareane se pehle meri to to naukri gayi...

on the other side
5 members in one jeeb
a girls-yr kya hai yr...kaunseekhta hai aj kal classical music...(girl named mukti)...ye clg ki princi ki to ake mein hi lungi..pta nhi kaha kaha fasa deta hai hme

another girls(aliya): chill mukti..kisne kaha ki jo hme bola jaega hm vo hi krenge...hm bheja hai agye...lets think ki ek fun trip p jare hai...(winks at mukti)

a boiy(dhruv)- chill guyz.. ek new cheej seekhne ko mill ri h...we should take benefit of it...
another boy(cabir)--benefit(winks)..kiska ...music ka kiii...

another by our handsome hunk-shut up...music k bare mi koi mazak nhi...u no guy music k liy hmkuch b kr skte hairyt..to music rokho ya classical...

mukti-comeon yr manik...(yes the guyzname is manikk😳...)...tu kaise handle krta h sab kuch yr...mera to dimag fata jara h

c-mukti dimag fatne ka ilaaz mere pas hai jo waha sabki fad dega...😆😆😆 (sory for the wrong language🥱)

evryone laugh...
and in unison: manglore here we come...


i hope you guyzz liked it..please pass the comment and let me know hows it.. so that i can know whom to pm next time...😉






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Posted: 10 years ago
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Part 1
Manglore

fab5 yes its our fab 5 who r in car travelling to maglore they r just few metres away from their destination

mu-yr manik...
m-ha bol yr muktii(trying to tease her)
mu-tu majak udha rha hai me4ra
m-are meri itni himmat...(controlling his laugh)
while aliya was sleeping on dhruv'ssholder(they both r madly in love..😛😛😛)
cabir was listing music through his ipod

mu-gets angry n look othr side
m-achha na baba bol...
mu-achha ye bta hm sabne relationships...or kahte hai so called love (showing her two fingers) ..experience kr lia hai..tu kab krega...

suddenly manik apply breaks...in shop..aliya and dhruv get up..even cabir remove earphones from his ears...
c-abe kya hai..sahi salamat pahuchaeg ki nahi...
m-are mein to pahucha dunga pehle isse bol chup rahe...pta nhai kya bkwas krti rahti hai...
c-q be kya kaha tune(to mukti)
a-mukti tune aisa kya kah dia..to manik itna gussa ho gaya..pta hai kuch b ho skta hai..hmara murder karwane mi q tule hai vo b manik k hatho...
mu-are yr..maine ek simple ka question pochha or ye bhadak gaya...aisa thodi hota hai

d-mukti aisa kya pochh lia tumne...

m-comeone guyzzz...forget it...

manik again start the car...

mu-(lauh a little at manik)-maine ya pochha ki...(manik was glaring at her through the rare mirror)..she ignore him
c-bolegi suspense ki dukaan??
mu-maine kaha tu kb love k chakkar mi pdega...bhyi hme b to chance milna na ise tease krna hai..jb ye mauka nahi chhodta to hm q(cutely telling with full of innocence)

c-waise bat mi dam to hai...(looking at manik with corner eyes)

m-sallecabit chodunga nahi tjhe(holdhis neck with one hand n gform other driving...he look at cabir..allwere laughing...)

when a small child come in the middle of the road...
mu(eyes become bugger n shoked)-manik break mar...(she souted)
manik suddenly apply brek...evryone's eyes was closed tightly..
they open their eyes..when saw a girl...hugging that child tightly ...so that the child can be saved ..no isses if she is hit...)

alll take sign of relif..
manvi shout on that girl---are madammm...apne bacho ko smbhal k rakho na...(girl's back was facing him)
the girl was wearing jogging suit...her hair was tied in a pony
suddenly a car come...the girl..sit in it..with the child..
manik try to look at the face of the girl..but evrytime..her back was faching him...

mu-thnk god..manik plss mi kuch nhi bolungi tu dhyan se chlala...
evryone again laugh n start their journey...

they finally reached gurukul yes Ams gurukal where she teach students classical music...
ams welcome them all...

a-vadakkam...
fab 5 look each others faces...what is she saying...
ams look confusion on their faces
a-i mean namste...welcom to gurukul...
fab 5-ohhh...thnk you..(n union)

a-ramu apko ap logo k rooms dikha dega...rAMMUUU(she shout to call him..coz he is desapeaerd)
r-aya amma...
a-in logo ko inke rooms dikha do...

fab5 was listing to them...
ramu tak a relief breadth that amma didnt ask about tanna...
he turn towards fab 5 with a smile when suddenly ams ask him
a-ramu..maine tumse kaha tanna ko dhondo vo mili kya...
ramu close his eyes tightly...hit his head with his hand...praying to aiyappa to save him...
fab 5 was looking t his expressions with huge smile..dont undrstand what happen to him suddenly...

suddenly they heard a voice...
girl-ammsss...which is coming from behind ams...
they all started looking to the owner of that voice..for that girl...
ams was covering their view...and ramu too...they all wee trying to look but all in vein..thegirl come..twill ams...they all again cant see her face...n that girls stand showing their back to fab5 ...

g- sory...sory sory sory sory...i no late..pls pls pls last tme..maaf kr doo..

her voice was chirping lika a bird...
fab 4 expect manik..was tired need to crash somewhere..but manik's full concentration was towards the girl...he feells she sound melodious...he really wanna see gir;ls's face...

ramu to took breadth of relif...

a-tum thi kaha...
g-ams..mai...mi jogging k liy gayi ti...bhul gyi kya..
a-nhi bhooli nahi..but tum itni late wapss ai...
g-vo ams..aj na thodi late gyi ti isliy late ai...
a-acha acha..now get ready h..be on time on breakfast table...ramu..tum ne logo in logo ko inka room q nhi dikhaya...

r-amma ja hi rha tha...

evryone turn to goto their room but manik was still standing there...need to see the face of that girl...but that girl run towards her room...without showing him his face...

c-are chl na khada q h...
m-haa chlo...
manik turn..but again turn to see the last glance of that girls running from there,,,,..
he shake his head...n followed others to their room...

boyz r in one room and girls in another...

manik was still lost in the thoughts of that girl...whose voice he just listen..he felt so good listing to her...dosnt matter what is she saying but her voice is driving him crazy...

dhruv n cabir was talking continously about..how much hund=gry they r ...they r tired etc..etc...

they both look at manik..who was lost n was smiling crazily...
they both sit in front of him..shaking their hand...to bring him back from lala land...
but manik was still smiling..he is thiking abt that girl...the way she was shaking her pony...which only noticed by manilk...her beautiful hair n her voice...then mulya to come there..saw dhruv n cabir shaking their hand..
mu-kya hua...
c-lagta hai.iska wicket down hone wala hai...
mu-kya sachi..she to in excitemtn sit with them...
mu-manik
manik was so los fab 5 is not audible to thme...
cabir bring his hand near his mouth n cut his finger
m-ouchhh.,,salle pgl h kya
fab 4 waa laughing at him
c-salle pehle tu bta kiska khyalo mein khoya hai...
m-mei...mei(he too dont hv ans what will he giv to other)..kisi k nhi..
mu-jhoot...bta na..kaun h vo...
m-are kya yr
suddenly rama come n call them for breakfast...
anik take a breadth of relief...n they went to dinning table...

precap:
girl's duppata to left with manik by chance


so here is the part 1...hope you guyz like it...plss hit like button n ur comments whether you liked it or not...do send me buddy request if u want pm for next updatess
Edited by parthnitiholics - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Heyy...
I just read ur story's prologue and chapter1...its really nyc n different...
Specially the way u r creating a mystery for manik about Nandu...
Its too good...
Awesome update...
Thnkz 4 the pm...
Waiting to read ahead
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Posted: 10 years ago
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looking forward the read :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Nice n super cute update
Really loved it
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ArSha_ManNan

Heyy...
I just read ur story's prologue and chapter1...its really nyc n different...
Specially the way u r creating a mystery for manik about Nandu...
Its too good...
Awesome update...
Thnkz 4 the pm...
Waiting to read ahead



thnx for appicitating my work hope you will like it future as well...:)😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Monstuholic4evr

looking forward the read :)


stay tuned😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: dhillon90

Nice n super cute update
Really loved it



thnx for appriciating..:)😉😉😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
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superb nice conversation b/w fab5 but culdnt undrstd clearly
becoz i dont knw hindi
plzzz try to write in english plzzz then all can undrstd easily plzzz
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Posted: 10 years ago
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And s can u change d name of ur ff plzzz becoz its already 2 ff s thr in d same name
so ppl will get confuse
sry if i said anything wrong
but i want to tell u this tatsolve
its ur story u can name anything
sry again

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