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Posted: 10 years ago
#21
Yay i understood everything, Glad that it will be a Slow story where Nandu isnt pining for him or he for her, Not that i don't like those but this is seems different and i like that

One thing was very very weird or did i Miss something, their dads just died but they Are too busy in each other? Shouldnt they be upset?
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Posted: 10 years ago
#22
Thats nice. But plz mantion in your title line whenever u update so it is easy for us to catch up the updates. And plz pm next time sweety.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: CROCKOMICHI

Thats nice. But plz mantion in your title line whenever u update so it is easy for us to catch up the updates. And plz pm next time sweety.



I feel like sh-t for forgetting to pm you again 🤢
But atleast you reminded me to pm the others haha,
and i can't believe that i am such a "bhulakar" person o.o
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Posted: 10 years ago
#24
It was awesome..
Their first meeting was good
looking forward for the next update..
continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Nice update plz continue soon and also pm me
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Posted: 10 years ago
#26
AWESOME UPDATE
LOVE IT

CONTINUE SOON

PLEASE UPDATE ON DAILY BASE

THANKS FOR THE PM
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Posted: 10 years ago
#27
PLEASE REPLY KARNA MAIN NA AUTHOR'S FEEDBACK N ALL DEKH K UCHHALNE LAGTI HU. Okay...read both the chapters at a go.pls dnt ask baar baar k its boring or not.bcoz meko toh tumhari story bohot interesting lag rahi hai..i dnt like hardcore romances and love at first sight wala stories take time settle the characters in first itz just two chapters. I feel like ur story is gonna be grannnddd!!! I must say all d characters are very intriguing. For example Manik &Mukti...r very rude must've been the situations and circumstances that made them like this plus they are d elder ones so they might have influenced each other. Nandini wud b d perfect for Manik cuz she is so calm...good 4 her woh agar ulta jhagda karti toh pata nai banda kya kar baithta.d way she behaved about Mukti shows her calmness.Dhruv is really cute like his honesty and his first date(well something like that)with Nandini was really cute.Aliya seems lovely I think she'll gel well with... well i think u know who.Ek chhotu sa request please write some lovely scenes of Manik with his behnas nt like nandu k saamne baad mein some privacy ke saath.
Love Meghna , ur brand new crazy reader
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Posted: 10 years ago
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U r not the only one who is the fan of dark ff's count me in too cuz i love them and ur story gosh! It's awesome... Cabir as manik's bodyguard a.k.a servant really? Y did u do this to cabiraa? Chlo koi nai cuz its interesting to read things like this and as far as the characters are concerned they r awesome and manik is the best of all
Awesome

Keep writing
Take care
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Posted: 10 years ago
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CHAPTER 3
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Continued...

Alya: Nandini!

Nandini: Alya! What a pleasant surprise!

Alya: Umm can I come in?

Nandini: Haan, tumhari bhen ka ghar hai.


Alya and Nandini sat down on the sofa and started discussing about marriage.

Alya: So wheres the ring?

Nandini checked her right hand and it wasn't there, her facial expression went from happy to shocked Alya noticed this and laughed.

Alya: Arey buddhu its on the left hand not the right.

Alya grabbed Nandini's left hand and saw the ring. She was mesmerized, also a little jealous.

Nandini: Forget about the ring, omG you have to meet Dhruv he is such a sweetheart.

Alya: Is he cute?

Nandini: Haaan.


Alya: Dhulan ban rahi ho, kuch to sharam karo.

Alya teased Nandini. After an hour of talking Alya finally realized she was here for Mukti.


Alya: Wait?

Nandini: Kya hua?

Alya: Main yaha Mukti di se milne aye thi... Where is she?

Nandini: Oh vo toh kissi dost ke ghar milne gayi thi.

Suddenly the door knocked Nandini said it might be Mukti bhabi. Nandini rushed to open it with a smile on her face. Then she realized it was Dhruv and not her bhabi. Dhruv was holding a bouquet of red roses. Nandini started blushing and her big smile went away.
Dhruv started admiring her cute lips and big eyes. They stood there for 2 minutes then suddenly Alya was about to come.


Alya: Arrey kya hua Nandini?

Without realizing who was talking and what to say, DhruNi both said,

DhruNi: Pyaar

Alya rushed to the door,

Alya screamed: Kya

Both DhruNi came out of their trance and started to change the topic.


Nandini: What do you mean by kya? Hum logo ne toh toh...

Dhruv tried to save her by saying,

Dhruv: We meant py (pi) aar (R) squared, (formula to find the area of a circle) you didn't let us finish...

Alya and Nandini both started to laugh.

Alya: Really Nandini, is this your fiancee?

Nandini: ...Haan


Dhruv handed Nandini the roses. Alya felt jealous as she didn't have any love in her life. Suddenly she remembered Dhruv used to go to her high school. Alya remembered that she had a crush on him but ignored that thought as her friend was going to marry him. They all sat down on the sofa.

Dhruv: So Nandini... ye kon hai? Your bhabi?

Nandini: Arrey nooo, she's bhabi's amazing little sister.

Alya nodded.

Alya: Vaise Nandini, you still haven't told me his name...

Alya knew his name but they didn't know that she knew his name.

Dhruv: My name is Dhruv.

Suddenly someone knocked on the door, and it was Mukti. Alya opened it and hugged her. Mukti came inside and saw a guy.

Mukti: Nandini Alya who is he?

Nanidni-Alya: Dhruv.

Mukti: Oh so this is Dhruv, anyways Nandini I have to tell you something...

Nandini: Bhabi what is it?

Mukti: Abhi and I are going to US tomorrow we will be back in 2 weeks, he has to do some project there for Manik's company.

Nandini: But bhabi where am I going to stay?

Alya: Nandini stay with meee!!!

Mukti: Yes Nandini, tum raho gi at Manik's place.

Dhruv felt uncomfortable, about his fiancee staying at some man's house.

Nandini: But bhabi ... how can I stay there?

Mukti: Dont worry Nandu Alya is there too na? And also Pari is going with us she will come with you.

Nandini: ...Is he okay with it bhabi? I mean yesterday he was angry at me for no reason.

Mukti: Ofcourse! And I already asked Abhi too na so it's good.

Nandini wasn't satisfied nor convinced but she knew she had no other option.


Dhruv: Alya Nandini do you guys want to go out for a milkshake?

Alya-Nandini: ...Sure.

They all left and went to the same cafe.

Dhruv: Nandini do you want the Mango milkshake again?

Nandini: Haan...

Alya: Ew... tum dono mango milkshake pitey ho? It's so yucky na.

Dhruv: Haha see Nandini I told you. Alya I like chocolate milkshake.

Alya: Hah me too.

Nandini felt bad that they were excluding her.

Nandini: Toh phir me bhi chocolate milkshake le leti hu?

Dhruv: No Nandini, if mango is your choice I won't pressure you to change it.

Dhruv touched Nandini's cheek. They both started to smile and stare into each other's eyes again. Alya felt uncomfortable being a third wheel.

Alya: GUYS.

DhruNi: Kya?

They both looked at Alya.

Alya: Milkshakes aa gaye.

Everyone drank there milkshakes and had a good conversation.

Nandini: I think mujhe bhabi ke ghar ab jana chahiye, I have to pack some clothes...

Dhruv: I'll drop you.

Alya got happy as if Dhruv dropped Nandini first, then she would be alone with Dhruv.

Nandini: Okay lets go Alya.

Nandini sat on the passenger seat and Alya in the back. Nandini got out of the car as they had reached Abhi's mansion.

Nandini: Bye Dhruv, bye Alya.

Dhruv: Bye baby.

Alya: Bye Nandini.

Nandini thought, Did he just call me baby. Wow such a besharam. But we are engaged na. But still he's such a flirt. Awww he's so cute.

Alya was feeling jealous as he called Nandini, baby. They reached Manik's mansion and Alya asked him to come for dinner. Dhruv denied. Manik saw all this. Dhruv left.

Manik: Alya come here.

Manik called from the big backyard. Manik and Alya both sat on the swinging chair in the backyard.

Manik: Vo kon tha?

Alya: Nandini's fiancee.

Manik: Do you want him?

Alya: Bhai what are you saying? I want love I don't want to steal someone's love.

Manik: Do you want him or not?


Manik smirked with anger. Alya was silent for 2 minutes then she finally said,

Alya: Yes.

Manik: Deal.

They both shook hands, Manik kissed Alya on her forehead.


Meanwhile at Mukti's place. Nandini was packing some stuff for Alya's place. Mukti and Abhi were packing there own stuff for US. Abhi came to Nandini's room.

Abhi: Beta are you still upset?

Nandini: Bhai I am going to miss you.

Abhi: Hug?

They both hugged and Abhi kissed her forehead.

Abhi: We'll be back in two weeks na.

Nandini: I know.

Abhi: Well sleep now, you need rest Nandu.

Nandini: Bhai vaise what are you going to get for me??

Abhi: Nothing.

Nandini: Bhaiii

Abhi: Ok ok whatever you ask for.


Nandini slept thinking about Dhruv. Then she thought about how she had to go to Manik's place for 2 whole weeks. She got scared. Nandini still didn't know Manik was a don. Neither did Dhruv. Only Alya, Mukti, and Abhi knew. Also the rest of the people that were frightened by Manik knew.

Manik was also thinking about Nandini, about how he's going to break her relationship. He planned and plotted the whole night.



To be continued...





So how was it???
And I dedicate this to mirage,
You wanted some brother-sister scenes 😛
And you thought Alya was lovely, well what bout now? 😆
This was kind of shorttt.
Anyways Precap: Nandini faints.



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Posted: 10 years ago
#30

Originally posted by: mirage101

PLEASE REPLY KARNA MAIN NA AUTHOR'S FEEDBACK N ALL DEKH K UCHHALNE LAGTI HU. Okay...read both the chapters at a go.pls dnt ask baar baar k its boring or not.bcoz meko toh tumhari story bohot interesting lag rahi hai..i dnt like hardcore romances and love at first sight wala stories take time settle the characters in first itz just two chapters. I feel like ur story is gonna be grannnddd!!! I must say all d characters are very intriguing. For example Manik &Mukti...r very rude must've been the situations and circumstances that made them like this plus they are d elder ones so they might have influenced each other. Nandini wud b d perfect for Manik cuz she is so calm...good 4 her woh agar ulta jhagda karti toh pata nai banda kya kar baithta.d way she behaved about Mukti shows her calmness.Dhruv is really cute like his honesty and his first date(well something like that)with Nandini was really cute.Aliya seems lovely I think she'll gel well with... well i think u know who.Ek chhotu sa request please write some lovely scenes of Manik with his behnas nt like nandu k saamne baad mein some privacy ke saath.
Love Meghna , ur brand new crazy reader



Thankyou thankyou 😆
Yeah I don't like it when in other FFs MaNan fall for each other in like 2 days.
:3 that was one long comment anywyas loved it
And Nandini is cal with Mukti, cause she understand when Mukti makes rude comments. Nandini thinks her bhabi lovesss her.

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