Let's walk! - NOTE!! (Manan FF); pg 40

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twinkle10

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Posted: 10 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: chair1992
Why, why did you end it here, why?😭
It was beautiful, they cant see each other in pain and those emotional parts are so good, great writing👏

Awww... I'll promise to have the next part up soon.
But thank you so much for the praises and support <3

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Sana

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Posted: 10 years ago

#42

I have been into this song today for hope and you give me pain... so I give you my fav lines fro the song

And when your fears subside
And shadows still remain
I know that you can love me
When there's no one left to blame
So never mind the darkness
We still can find a way
'Cause nothin' lasts forever
Even cold November rain

Love you FF... we are all imperfect... and we want to change for the person we love who is the reason of our existence... destiny tests and breaks us... threatens our bond...but we keep hoping... nothing is forever...

We still can find a way...

Your writing is awesome so no comment is needed for that... I will give you my feeling only🤗

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Sana

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Posted: 10 years ago

#43

The song is November Rain from Guns N' Roses

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twinkle10

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Posted: 10 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: MaNanmatic_Sana
I have been into this song today for hope and you give me pain... so I give you my fav lines fro the song
And when your fears subside
And shadows still remain
I know that you can love me
When there's no one left to blame
So never mind the darkness
We still can find a way
'Cause nothin' lasts forever
Even cold November rain

<font face="Verdana, Arial">Love you FF... we are all imperfect... and we want to change for the person we love who is the reason of our existence... destiny tests and breaks us...threatensour bond...but we keep hoping... nothing is forever...</font>

We still can find a way...

Your writing is awesome so no comment is needed for that... I will give you my feeling only🤗

Awww Sana... Such beautiful lines! You're truly a poetic at heart and I love that in your writing. It's always so deep an meaningful! 😊 haven't had the chance to ever listen to this song but will surely have a hear because it seems so apt for a saddist like myself haha
Thankyou my dear for such a beautiful gift in response to my writing. Truly appreciate all the love-filled emotions <3

Edited by twinkle10 - 10 years ago

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maankigeet4ever

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Posted: 10 years ago

#45

my comment has been updated :)

- Reya aka Your Sunny <3

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twinkle10

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Posted: 10 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: maankigeet4ever
me me me..

the font is too small, sexy chicken..can't read even with my specs on..lol

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Okies..here i am. Starting with this because i figured this was the reply you are awaiting the most.

Ohhh twinkie bear, amazing amazing amazing..seriously A-M-A-Z-I-N-G.👏👏 👏

Beautifully written and high on emotions..absolutely loved it

Damn..such a emotional chapter this one was..this is Manan at their best, where they exist simply for each other. their own pain, it ceases to exist. their better half's pain..that's the one that aches their heart. Lovely job throughout the entire chapter, but especially the part where Nandini wants to be able to move, to able to get to manik so he can't hurt himself..her helplessness, struck a chord and ached my heart 🥺

I sense heavy guilt from Manik's side, wondering if he feels guilty somewhere for being responsible for Nandini's injury..oh the mystery..may it unfold very slowwllyyy...in other words, can you tell me now please ? lol. no, i joke ( well sorta kinda )

You have written this chapter really well..showcasing their relationship and their selflessness when it comes to each other. Manik is in agony of his own, how he wishes he had a magic wand so he could heal his Nandu ( i really hope for a Manik POV chapter..please). Another part of this chapter i loved was the comfort Nandini found in Manik, how his touch seems to heal her in its own..absolutely beautiful it was.You write Manan so well..so true to their character that i feel as thou i am watching an episode..Manik's anger, his tucking her hair behind her ear, his bear hugs. It's was all just utter perfection ( sorry, my vocab is just limited to beautiful and perfection, still waiting on that thesaurus btw..lol)

And we have been left hanging ! and that means more of the mystery shall be unfolded..whys shall be answered.

I hope you come back really soon with new chapter and more of your twinkie awesome-ness.

Loads of love as always,

- Reya aka Your Sunny <3

*sigh* you really have a talent to make me feel all so content and loved don't you... <3

Mate I need the thesauras over here because you come around with a mssive praise-filled paragraph for me and I just sit there reading twice, three times, four times going mannn how does she manage to understand me so well and how ... just how does she go on and on with all this admiration. Like seriously... I need to do a much better job with the writing in the coming chapters... this is just not good enough. You know that feeling when there is just so much passion between two lovers, but it's all a part of their silence. I want to be able to express that one day and with the use of the correct words so I really need to go vocab-hunting I think haha

I'm going to give it to you, that you've picked up on some really good clues here and you may be thinking on the right track but I shall keep my mouth sealed for now :P hahah

Oh oh ... to be honest, I do plan to write a couple of chapters from Manik's pov but I'm not too sure when that will come in. It's too early for it and my plot seems to be changing with every passing day. Like seriously, sometimes I have random dreams but these dreams have excellent storylines and I'm like this can definitely be used somewhere haha

On a more serious note however, thankyou so so so much my sunny for such a beautiful reply and one which was so heartwarming and just made me feel so joyous! But still I would say... so many things I still need to learn and I'm still learning how to bring that fluency and flow in my writing that you possess with words. So hopefully I get there one day haha

Love you loads!

Twinkie <3

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twinkle10

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Posted: 10 years ago

#47

CHAPTER THREE PREVIEW!

Nandini cupped Manik's wet face in her small hands. His head bowed down in defeat A waterfall of tears streaming down his pained face. She gently wiped away the streaming tears with her shaking thumbs and inched his face closer to hers. She leaned in to join their foreheads together in the hope to transfer all his pains, all his agony upon herself.

"Shhh Manik. I'ts okay. I'm okay"

She slid her fingers to the back of his head and continued to caress his hair. She tried to calm down his sniffles by continuously whispering that he had nothing to worry about. That it really all wasn't as bad as he feared it was.

"Shhh...Manik...Manik...Listen to me. It's all going to be okay. We're going to make it through. Together. I trust you."

The minute she finished uttering the last of her words, he pulled her into his jacketed arms and snuggled her in his warm scent. "Promise me Nandini. Promise me that you'll never give up." The desperation in his voice was evident. His sobs had subsided but the pain in his voice remained.

"I promise." He tightened his muscled arms around her one more time and held her for what seemed like hours.

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Stay tuned for Chapter 3 very soon!!

Love

Twinkle <3

Edited by twinkle10 - 10 years ago