Akdha TS: The Stupid Challenge Completed (30/11/2016)

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Senapatichandri

@Senapatichandri

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#31

ahhaa payal...another mature writing is waiting Fe me I guess...Ohhh its been a lot of days...love to read your writings...

and special mention ur bannerwas tremendously SEXY...I can't understand by name that what can b the story bt the moment I saw the banner I can easily know its gonna be undoubtedly HOT N SEXY to read...😛

mmuuaahhh love you...want to read more...please update tomorrow n PM me further ur writings...

and a request please write a one shot fr ur welcome to temptation 😊

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Shraddha

@lashy

Trailblazer

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#32

Payal... It's difficult for me to review without quoting you dear.. but I'll try

Let me start by saying I absolutely LOVED whatever you've written so far.. actually, I think I am going to go so far to say that it's probably something I enjoyed reading most in the forum over the past week... just something different... a different kind of spice, you may call it! Neither too dark not too mushy mushy!

The deal-clincher was the fact that it's been husband and wife.. and it's rare to find this sort of chemistry between husband and wife (please don't make it dark or sad after this) even 5 years after marriage! Loved it.. 😉

Your Jalal is amazing here... a stubborn handsome devil☺️.. but obviously devoted to his wife [killer combo]

And she's insanely in love with him too (please don't change this equation😡!)

Did I see a blue - eyes... is that that FSOG effect?😉

Anyway, there are certain things he does, like hold her hand when she becomes sad (that was possibly the best bit - when she wonders if she doesn't have the effect on him, she had 5 years ago!)

Then, the way he meets eyes with her and then goes back to chatting with his friends - that plastered a grin on my face..

But and a big big but.. the BESTEST part for me was

'Hungry?'

'Very!'

'Let's feed you then!'

Best tease-lines I've read in a long time - is it 100% your imagination or inspired from elsewhere?

If 100% yours, then take this '👏'

And please don't leave this half way yaar... earnest request!

Edited by lashy - 8 years ago

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binduprasad41

@binduprasad41

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#33

payu
first os than bi update and now this
good good carry on
no doubt I love your work
something so different from other stories
which we enjoy reading with out worry
title really suit this ts
interesting concept dear
and I am glad both husband and wife not boyfriend and girlfriend
both jodha and jalal are headstrong
just because of their ego they can't forget their stupid challenge
yes both deeply in love
both know each other too well
even after 5 years of marriage both craving for each other
I really like this in both of them
poor jodha she really trying hard to control her desire
of course how can she control
after all jalal is deliciously handsome na
in my payu language
I love the way you describe jalal
something so unique you said that we can't ignore
both jodha and jalal can't totally ignore each other
both keep an eye in each other movement
I guess jalal also trying very very hard to control himself
he just wanted to teach some lesson to his lady love
he cares for her when he notice sadness in her eye
how affectionately he put his hand on her hand
this single gesture telling us lot
how much she meant to him
this part is all about jodha POV now I am waiting for jalal POV
I don't know who going to won this challenge but in the end both won in their own sweet way
waiting eagerly for next part
thanks for pm

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binduprasad41

@binduprasad41

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: sharmacatty
34 likes🤓

uff
stop counting likes payu
you read na rose post in harshu thread
plz now don't stop writing like before
we all love your work
plz continue this and post next part
than you see how many likes you get

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Cattywrites

@sharmacatty

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: binduprasad41

uff
stop counting likes payu
you read na rose post in harshu thread
plz now don't stop writing like before
we all love your work
plz continue this and post next part
than you see how many likes you get

It's easy to say don't think about likes but after posting an update, every writer wants to know their readers thoughts..

I am not feeling bad but I am a little confused. Whether readers have stopped reading my stories only or they have left IF. From 80+likes to 30+ likes.. It does make a difference. Don't you think so??😉

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binduprasad41

@binduprasad41

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: sharmacatty


It's easy to say don't think about likes but after posting an update, every writer wants to know their readers thoughts..
I am not feeling bad but I am a little confused. Whether readers have stopped reading my stories only or they have left IF. From 80+likes to 30+ likes.. It does make a difference. Don't you think so??😉

yes of course
I understand its easy say something
but you post yesterday only this ts so it take time na for everyone to read and comment
so many writers are posting their stories may be that's why
I thinking about positive side
may be everybody in vocation mood when they come back they definitely loves your work
than likes also increase sometime likes button also don't work on time na
I hope you understand what I am trying to say
I just wanted to cheer up my payu nothing much you know
love you

Edited by binduprasad41 - 8 years ago