NOVEL~*Hiding behind a Stranger*~Thread 8~ Chapter 13 - UPD 20th Aug

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#681

@amitaprasad

Thank you so much Amita😳

Extra-ordinary..ur grip on this story is excellent..khan saheb have stolen the entire credit in one stroke.he is so manly, a keen observer ..i am intriguing with him with each chappy..

Awww am glad you're a fan of KS!😳

Please do not keep us waiting for so long and thanks for pm..

Waiting for so long???😆 Baap re, I'm updating once every 10 days lol! But thanks for the request dear... means a lot...😃

its an honor to read ur stories..sometimes please write an os too...they become sooo tempting when penned down by u...

Awww... HBAS really does sap off a lot of my energy, time and creativity! Only once I finish this will I be able to write on something else.. I'm awed by writers who are able to write 2-3 stories at the same time.. 👏

a big sorry for late reply...connectivity is too poor to open the page it takes me hours and sometimes days to open.

Days? God! Must be frustrating

Thanks for still making it here, then ... 🤗

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#682

@Kalgi22

Chellam such a emotional chapter it is with the little glimpse of Akbar's scaring past.😭 It has earned a huge respect for Chacha jaan. The way he's feeding this boy by hook or crook.👏👏 At least there was one for this fragile boy.😭😭😭 I couldn't get over this. Hmm.. Taking deep breath and calming myself. 😕

Awww Chellam... here a big mega hug for you

I told you so... the fan girl in Bindya is working overtime now.😆

Working overtime.. 😆

Chacha Sahib and his antics😆

He is adorable, ille?

'he was not the kind to let anyone meddle in his affairs'. Awe this speaks a lot. HIS AFFAIRS!!!😳

Ooo Why?

I was so loved your description about Heera's entry "radiant sun rising from the fields"Graceful even in inconvenient adventure!!! Awe.. no wonder Akbar had the change of mind

Hee hee... 😳 Who can resist something like that... not even AMK

'No wonder he suddenly had some urgent business in the market'... OMG!! Chacha jaan🤣

Loool.. he's scared to face Akbar's temper... that's why he ran off😆

'Harka Sahiba?' He called her!!🥳 and even Heera **sigh**😛😛

The power of his 'deep' voice, remember... she noticed it even in the forest😉

The way he's making her comfortable by shooing away his employees!!😛 So adorable!!

Of course... no one else can be busy ogling at this 'sunshine' can they? *Wink wink*

'Akbar didn't mind being the object of her amusement when its outcome was something so marvellous.' Ooo😛😛

Yes... 😉

Everything was so lovely and beautiful until read about Akbar's past. Such a cruel to young boy who's just 12 years. Thank god he had Chacha jaan. Hmm It seems his Abbu's mansion that has taken by his innocence. Who's that?😡😡 Tell us soon. Don't take 10 days.

Don't take 10 days aa? loool then I'll have to write in bullet points!😆

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#683

@Kuki715

Lashy dii.A very emotional update😭.Initially I was so happy reading the teaser and then the chapter but the last part made me go all😭😭.

Big hug to you too darling don't be sad... Heera is there na.. eventually sab theek kar degi!

I really love and respect chacha jaan. He was so loyal to Akbar's father that he risked his life and fed and took care of Akbar⭐️.

This is exactly why Chacha Jaan did what he did... of course for humane reasons too.. but also because he was a devoted servant of Akbar's Abbu... he could not sit back and watch the once bright-life of a child brought down to such ruins..

Now I know why Akbar is so obsessed with chacha jaan ke haath ka khana.

Yes! 😭

And Akbar is no less,he lived up to his promise to chacha jaan.Literally had tears reading the child abuse all the beatings,burns,hunger,blood...goooddd how do you write such stuffs.

Awww no don't cry... sweetie...🤗

But who are these people that made Akbar a servent in his own house?

You'll learn over time... those... 😡

With helping Heera will he also avenge his destroyed childhood?Time will tell..no...no...Lashy di will tell😉.

Hee hee...

Now the best part what can I say except I just loveee Heera

The way she conducts herself before Khan sahib or anyone else for that matter is superb⭐️.True royal blood she is.The way her arrival at the stable,treating Bahadur,her smile...no wonder khan sahib was floored.

Yes... she is... what to say 'remarkable' in the way she behaves...

And Khan sahib floored Bindiya😆.But what happened to Gauri???😲

Well, she doesn't want to praise KS because she really doesn't want to give any 'better impression' of him to Heera than Heera already has..

She must have also seen the sparks flying in the haveli when AMK and Heera had that face-off!

Any such attachment can spell danger, na?

Saturday night well spent..Thankyou😃

Hugs dearie..

🤗

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#684

@Sho123

chapter-11

Was incredible and shocking too

oooh thank you dear.. 🤗

Mahender is a disgusting man i thought he is generous and kind hearted. firstly when he agrees for his and harkas alliance i was not happy thought when akbar harka love will blossom then this alliance will do a lot of drama but mahender this new avtar will not only create drama but many more things but i am sure Akbar will handle everything 😉
Yes... I think most assumed he was like another Suryaban..😉. lol.. but he turned out to be something else! Possibly one of the main antagonists in this story.. actually..

akbar and that slave girl part was good
Akbar is really very smart thats why didn't fell in her trap

Of course, AMK is super-smart! 😉. Payal had once commented... 'Aise kaisa chakmaa degi re Khan Sahib ko' something like that! hee hee

Then harkas journey to give final goodbye to her jiji really emotional what i like most in that part was Akbar's respect to harkas emotions and also his confusion for his own new feelings
thanks for pm

Awww...

Chapter - 12

Quite thrilling chaapi
poor gauri due to her kindness fell in gafoor treachery

Yes... perfectly said!👏

Kotwal and others behavior and action during trail just disgusting

Akbar was fully fair whole time it.was only akbat who helped gauri and saved his modesty by his authority and intelligence

Akbar's friends and chacha jaan were quite decent too.. but the townsmen and kotwal weren't 🤔

harka sarcastic behaviour was demand of moment

When she arrived at the scene, the picture was quite different na.. she must have assumed Khan Sahib was partially responsible for the situation Bindiya Gauri was in.. baad mein she learnt the truth!😳

alas gauri proved innocent
looking forward for ceremony dinner
Sure da

Chapter 13

di chaapi was mind blowing. Loved each and every bit

Thank you darling!

So bindiyas opinion changed about Akbar after morning incident

Of course.. how will it not... he saved their lives/modesty na.. 😳

Heeras instincts was right about Akbar's behavior and decency

Yup!

So on chaha jaans plea jo went to attend bahadur

Yup!

loved ja jo convo cum argument on bahadur treatment

I like how you called it convo cum argument! hee hee😉

Finally Akbar agreed heera on attending bahadur yaay

loved Akbar presence of mind the way he think about heeras comfort and shoo all his attendant love it

then both together healed bahadur great

Of course.. he can't let aire gaire be ogling at Heera na... 😆

yaay akbar admiring heera while healing bahadur

Loool! Impossible not be in love with her smiles na... 😳

heeras joke quite funny for a moment me to take it as truth

no yaar Akbar again controlled his feelings

He has to..

then heera invited akbar personally yaay hope he go but alas he didn't went but all went

Hmmm

that past part was heart wrenching

how can someone let his own child hungry and treat worst than servant

Own child? He was a fatherless boy.. his abbu had passed away..

Loved chacha jaan and akbar bond

Yes... bond between servant and master... then also today also.. but akbar treats him like real chacha

really really eager to read further

🤗 Thank you so much Sherry... so glad you're here

Edited by lashy - 9 years ago

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#685

@divyadaya13

Your writing is par excellence. You are an enchanting writer lashy baisa or should i call you lashy sahiba😳.

So glad to see your comment Divya.. *hugs*🤗

Dus din ki mohalat for next chapter is nainsaafi for us readers. Wait becomes unbearable when the ff is so into your system.😊

How sweet.. in one line, you've conveyed so much...

Don't worry.. will try and not delay it too much!

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#686

@durgeshnandini

I totally loved this splendid chapter 13...

It was dhamakedaar in its own sweet way. And this time too the flight has reached its destination,that is our thoughts, with smashing success. So kudos to the Captain 👏👏👏

THANK YOU SO SO SO much dear...

So this chapter is all about... what I call it..

A Hasee toh Fasee... The Trap of Smiles wala chapter.

Last time it was Sahib, Biwi aur Ghulam... this time it's Hasee toh Phasee lol... are you a Bollywood buff btw?😉

All of them smiled... some because they had fallen in the Trap of inherent decency, sharp wit and power punches, some smiled to lay out a Trap, alluring enough to attract and amuse the cleverest lot... whereas someone else smiled at the memories of a warm, and assuring smile.. that lit up his present and past 😊

Awww and here on other side of laptop... I smile as I read it..

The smiles of the impressed... they smiled and smiled and weaved their joy into songs.. the burden of the grateful, was unburdened in the burden of the song... till She fell into the Trap of their Smiles 😳

There was another, who logical and farsighted, so she saved herself from falling in that Trap... but dear Gauri, the Trap of Smiles, is spread all around, if not now, not here, maybe somewhere else, anywhere!!

So beware!!!

How beautiful... and really, what am I going to even add to this... yes the maids were all in praise of him, except Gauri.. who recognises his worth and is thus more afraid now... of the budding cordiality between AMK and Heera!

She smiled and smiled... and He was Trapped!!

A bleeding soul, and a worried heart. What it takes to heal both in a go... A mirth laden Smile, and a Trap of positivity, and the magic is done.

When He denied, She left a stride...

He reversed His rules, yet She held Her pride...

She walked in, and He bid others aside...

So when He was worried sick, She joked and Smiled!!

Subanallah! Subanallah! (Imagine me doing a Taslim here).. Wah wah!

And the Trap worked of course, He was taken in... again and again and again.. till He was all but sucked in. The Trap. The magical Trap.

Smiles from.. The Paradise Lost and Smiling at... The Paradise Regained,

Who can say what a smile does? It shows jest? Yes.

Poignant agony? Yes again.

But above all else, it assures of the Paradise. Like a mirage, though illusive, promises a thirsty traveller of an oasis closeby...

Like a smile promised, an orphaned twelve year old, that the world, seemingly cruel, still harbours shreds of humanity...

A Smile does not have the bliss of Paradise, but it assures, that Paradise, isn't lost after all, that it's there.. waiting for you, and that it is truly blissful 😳

Paradise isn't Lost.. it's here in Adwi's writing...

Thank you for your reply.. or review... or poetry.. or flattery.. or whatever one might call it.. but its beautiful 🤗 too beautiful!

Edited by lashy - 9 years ago

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#687

@Geetanjali1993

Fantastic update

Thank you Geetanjali... 😳

Bindiya appreciated Khan Sahib😊

Yes... of course, she had to.. 😉

Chacha jaan trying to minimize Akbar's misery by asking Heera to look at bahadur, he believes her😊

Yup!

Gauri is still not acknowledging Akbar but she can't stop the destiny to play its role

👏 Well said..

Heera has her own grace, soberness and simplicity that even catch Akbar's attention and he does what he never think of

Only a Heera could do that!😳

She treated bahadur but the best part was when she took Akbar's case

Hee hee

Akbar is very string and deterministic, he eats food prepared by Chacha jaan because of a pledge he took when he was just 12 👏

continue soon and thanks for pm

Thanks dear... yes he is determined... but there was a lot of emotion fuelling that determination

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Shinning_Stuti

@Shinning_Stuti

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Posted: 9 years ago

#688

This was one of the best chapters of this novel! Loved it!! The trio scene of Akbar Heera and Bahadur was Wow!⭐️

And the snippets of Akbar's childhood. 😭

Will be back tomorrow with longer comment. 😆 Good night for now. 😛

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Priyaadarshini

@Priyaadarshini

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Posted: 9 years ago

#689

Lashy di. One of the best chapter so far. (I'm going to say this again n again, all thanks to u)
The chapter was so beautiful, that I don't know what to say.
Heera ,bindiya and gauri...reacting in different ways to khan sahib's noble deed.

Khan sahib was so disturbed about bahadur's injuries, which only shows his love for his pet.
Heera and akbar...both are capable enough to see what eyes couldn't.
The understanding and chemistry between the leads is bewitching. Heera's charms are working on akbar. Loved the fact that he could not be the same with heera
The last part was so sad...the miserable condition of a forlorn child who overcome all difficulties and went on to become mightiest of the men but who still carries his childhood in his heart by honouring his promise.
The saddest thing was, even after such tiring day, unbearable headache, he got nothing to eat. (It may lead him to his sahiba though) but still couldn't get over this

The girl who is trying to protect her lands with all her being, not bothered that she needs protection herself...
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The man who has everything at his feet, everything but love..
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I would like to dedicate a song for our leads
Tera mujh se pehle ka naata koi, yun hi nahi dil lubhata koi
😳 😊
BTW , what is pm? 😕

Edited by luvuyuvi - 9 years ago