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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

@IshqHaiWoEhsaas

Stunner

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Posted: 9 years ago

#81

Originally posted by: chaudhary_kajal
Awww that was really lovely shagu 😊
i loved akdha's conversation in marwari accent..
Thanku for pm

Thank you so much dii...🤗

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

@IshqHaiWoEhsaas

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#82

Originally posted by: Rajat_loverr
SORRY FOR LATE REPLY DEAR
It id really a lovely os love it 👏
SPECIALY LOVE THE CONVERERSATION BETWEEN AKDHA 😳

Thanks a lot Hemaxi di...😳

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Avika444

@avika444

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#83

Shagun ...🤗 finally i read this one yaar

And wow u choosed one of my fav track .

Badal kajri ...sethji sethani sa ... this journey of agra to ajmer shariff brought Jajo altogether .

And u wrote this track superficially 👏

I loved each and every bit of it re

From moti's remark ..." Uff...kya Jaadu kar diya hai Shehenshah ne humari sakhi par...aajkal kahin aur hi khoi rehti hai..

To Jajo cute confession

Main aur mhaari Gharaali ek duje se Ghana prem karein hain

Hun Bhi Apne Bhartaar se Ghana prem karun chhoon

And their nok jhok's and arguments ❤️

My fav part was ..when jalal suddenly in betwwen changes his previous assent to his original one and says

"Kyunki woh sab humesha Shehenshah ki Begum hi thin aur rahengi Jodha Begum...kabhi apne shauhar ki biwi nahi ban saktin...

This part skipped my heart beat as i realised he was saying this to his begum ...not to sethani .

Enjoyed reading every bit of it shagun

And trust me u really brought a smile on my face .

Love u loads dear

And sorry for commebting late

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RamSiyaRam

@RamSiyaRam

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#84

A sweet and caring story⭐️

Jodha pondering over and trying to decide what Jalal did for her. Their conversation was nice. Jalal trying to break the ice and the moon played cupid❤️☺️ Nahi le jaate toh kya app yeh baat maan jati😆😆😆 Jalal called her tigress?😲😆😆. Jalal took the decision on her behalf also😉😆😆 and he being caring too. Jodha in dreamland Jalal flirting with her❤️☺️ Their sweet bantering together during their journey and the unexpected confession❤️☺️ . Wonderful job by Baby2😳🤗

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.AkDhian.

@.AkDhian.

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#85

Yaay..mine was the 80th like

Shagun darling🤗

God knows how could you write such marvelous pieces of writing!!⭐️⭐️

You said your aim is to bring a smile on reader's face,right?I had that smile throughout,while reading and even after it ended😃

As you know,BK track is the most favorite track of mine and ur OS refreshed all the beautiful memories❤️❤️

Loved everything from start to end..Jo's reverie-their lovely banter-Moti's teasing-Drooling and blushing session-Marwari dialogues-Indirect confession-Concern and then the much awaited confession😳

The lines I loved the most:

But the silence was only limited to the tongue, the eyes never failed to express how delighted they were to feel each other's presence after so long!

>>Beautiful

" Accha... toh agar hum aapko na le jaate, toh kya aap ye baat maan jaanti?"

>>😆😆

At the exit, he turned back again, perhaps to collect the smile which she hadn't returned. And as if involuntarily, she smiled as soon as her eyes met his, making Jalal smile wider!

>>😃😃

It wasn't less than a treat for him to see his very own Jodha Begum drooling over him! A slight blush and a tiny smile...any onlooker would describe his face this way!

>>I can imagine our Jallu's blush😆

For the two of them, often silence had spoken more than words ever will.

>>Well said⭐️

" Kyunki woh sab humesha Shehenshah ki Begum hi thin aur rahengi Jodha Begum...kabhi apne shauhar ki biwi nahi ban saktin..."

>>Aww❤️

" Ji Bilkul Sa...Main aur mhaari Gharaali ek duje se Ghana prem karein hain, kyun Sethani sa?"

>>🥳

" Na Na Seth Ji, Aapne bilkul chokhi baat kahi se..." ( No, Shehenshah...you said it perfectly right...) Now looking him straight in his eyes, she said, " Hun Bhi Apne Bhartaar se Ghana prem karun chhoon..."

>>🥳🥳

Love you so much for this lovely OS🤗.Keep writing more😃

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Swarna

@Swarna_99

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#86

First of all. ...

Congratulations Shagun for turning sizzler. 🥳

I know I'm very late😭...probably I wasn't here when you became purple.

Keep on making beautiful posts dear.

I came here today and this is the first story I read.

It made me once again speechless. Just perfect.

Beautiful. ...magical writing.

I could feel their eternal love in each line. ...In their every smile.

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

@IshqHaiWoEhsaas

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#87

Originally posted by: avika444
Shagun ...🤗 finally i read this one yaar
And wow u choosed one of my fav track .
Badal kajri ...sethji sethani sa ... this journey of agra to ajmer shariff brought Jajo altogether .

And u wrote this track superficially 👏
I loved each and every bit of it re
From moti's remark ..." Uff...kya Jaadu kar diya hai Shehenshah ne humari sakhi par...aajkal kahin aur hi khoi rehti hai..

To Jajo cute confession

Main aur mhaari Gharaali ek duje se Ghana prem karein hain
Hun Bhi Apne Bhartaar se Ghana prem karun chhoon

And their nok jhok's and arguments ❤️

My fav part was ..when jalal suddenly in betwwen changes his previous assent to his original one and says

"Kyunki woh sab humesha Shehenshah ki Begum hi thin aur rahengi Jodha Begum...kabhi apne shauhar ki biwi nahi ban saktin...

This part skipped my heart beat as i realised he was saying this to his begum ...not to sethani .

Enjoyed reading every bit of it shagun
And trust me u really brought a smile on my face .
Love u loads dear
And sorry for commebting late

Avi diii...🤗

Thank you so so so much for this comment di...made my day! 😳❤️

So glad you enjoyed it! 😳

Love you too...❤️

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

@IshqHaiWoEhsaas

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#88

Originally posted by: swetiii
amazing
beautifully penned

Thank you! 😳

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

@IshqHaiWoEhsaas

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#89

Originally posted by: sharmacatty
Lovely os, shagun..❤️
Like the way you wrote about jalal's expression when he caught jo drooling over him..

Thank you Payal...😳

Wasn't expecting you here...it was a pleasant surprise! 😃

And glad you liked that part dear...his expression was so cute...

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

@IshqHaiWoEhsaas

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#90

Originally posted by: ketaki1
Beautiful...
you are an excellent writer...
you really have your hands fixed on historical writing and I love it...
os is really beautiful, you took a scene from the story and gave it a twist...
and end confession was unpredictable...I like surprises ...
loved it dear!!!!!!!!!!
love you🤗❤️

Thank you so much Keta...🤗

Glad you liked it dear...loved reading your post...😳

Love you too...❤️