OS: You are my strenght - Page 4

wow..this os is just awsum...

you have brilliantly penned it down ...every emotion was captured perfectly ..this was one of the best OS's i have read...

i really wish to have such scenes in the show...

keep writing and please do pm me about your next work too ..

Originally posted by: lashy

B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L!!!!!!
What else can I say dear..perfectly captured emotions, perfect length - not too long, not too short!

Awww...Thank you so much Lashykka.🤗

I understand if you can't continue with FFs...but please do write OSes...
I don't know if you're able to write an OS when Jodha finally confesses her feelings to a desperate-to-know-Jalal

I really can't continue with FFs.😆

Hmmm...chalo I'll think about it. If something good comes up in my mind, I'll definately pen it down.

I loved reading it...Mashallah!
what command of the language too!!!

Akka ab bas bhi karo...itni tareef sahi nahi jati.😳

just like me, you prefer writing it wholly in English ...I guess that's why I can enjoy reading it more!


Oh! *Same pinch*😆

By the way, a teeny weeny request...next time when you're writing a Ja-Jo scene can you make her call him Shehenshah instead of Jalal cos she couldn't/wouldn't have called him by name...would just make the piece that much more realistic!
beautiful once again!

Hmm...I had doubts whether to use Shahenshah or Jalal.As you can see I ended up with Jalal (😉) as I thought it will showcase their comfort level and all. But yup Shahenshah sounds more realistic and more like Jodha.😳

Thank You again.

Originally posted by: Jaisoif

OMG this was so beautiful, and also emotional, made me cry. You're so talented to write something so profoundly, I really LOVED it, please write more if you get time, thank you so much!!!

Originally posted by: baubles

This is simply amazing Komal...so touching! You've captured every emotion so perfectly, it touched my heart.❤️

Have loved all your previous OSes too..I really wish to read more from you, do keep writing whenever you get time! 😳

I just gotta edit my noms again now, dunno how I missed this!😊

Originally posted by: sashashyam

My dear Komal,

I see that you are now trying your hand at high emotion, and I must say it has come off very well.

There are 2 points in it that appealed to me particularly.

One, Jodha saying " You love me for who I am and I love you for who you are". This is exactly what is missing now, and far more on her side than on his.

Two, that Ruqaiya is shown as what she must have been in real life, Jalal's best friend, and thus caring towards the woman he loves as well.

Shyamala Aunty

Originally posted by: disha15

komaliiieee

Res!

Originally posted by: TheIronLady

Dishtv, are you even going to unres?😡😛

Originally posted by: lashy

Woh madam tho apni hi dhun me rehti hai😆

Originally posted by: ...Renu...

wow..this os is just awsum...

you have brilliantly penned it down ...every emotion was captured perfectly ..this was one of the best OS's i have read...

i really wish to have such scenes in the show...

keep writing and please do pm me about your next work too ..