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Posted: 10 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: iamcurious

Finally got time to read. Wasn't keeping quite well so sorry for the delay.

I love the quote at the beginnings, it makes a lot of difference when it beautifully summarizes what you want to say further. 👏

My favorite part was Nachiket looking lost when he broke the vase, a very small thing but the time gap has put in so much of apprehensions. You become uncertain about knowing a person even though you are dead sure he / she is the same.

Ragini's worry till his arrival was palpable.

Looking forward to the next installment.

PS: We should have a thread where we can keep telling the other - WRITE 😆


Thank you so much for reading and commenting. 😃 Hope you are much better now. Am going to request for another story from you at the earliest possible. Pretty please.

Coming back to your comments, you are right. It's the small incidents that ultimately make or break a relation. I am still not very sure of the next segment, but yes there is something playing in my mind.

Meanwhile, agree with the idea of THE thread 😆


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Posted: 10 years ago
#82
Dev, come on.
Once you are done with your assignment, we all want you to write something as well. Pretty please 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
#83

Originally posted by: poetic


Thank you so much for reading and commenting. 😃 Hope you are much better now. Am going to request for another story from you at the earliest possible. Pretty please.

Coming back to your comments, you are right. It's the small incidents that ultimately make or break a relation. I am still not very sure of the next segment, but yes there is something playing in my mind.

Meanwhile, agree with the idea of THE thread 😆



Am ok, the antibiotics have ruined my taste buds though

Whatever is playing in your mind, it soon needs an out. Make Sunday a good day, so let the typing begin already.

Title bhi mil gaya..."THE thread" it is 😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
#84

Originally posted by: poetic

Dev, come on.

Once you are done with your assignment, we all want you to write something as well. Pretty please 😃


R
Come on...don't push me with everyone else😆

I'm already running late and also trying to complete assignment by today so that I can write soon. BTW, I have two days vacation for monday-tuesday so feeling lazy too.😆

Meanwhile, why don't you write something more romantic hmmp! You write poems? if yes, try something na.😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
#85
Romance is not really my forte Dev, I can't handle it well.
Let's see.


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Posted: 10 years ago
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Part 2 - 😊


The Morning Before


Nachiket woke up to the smell of food, and his stomach churned. He was hungry. He had now not eaten properly for quite some time, but then all he had been thinking for the past few days, was reaching Ragini. Food was the least of all things he had in his mind then.

As he sat up, he took in his surroundings. He could hear the slight trickle of water in the sink, and someone singing in Marathi. He felt refreshed after having slept now for a couple of hours, without any disturbances.

Rubbing his eyes gingerly, he extended his hand towards the dresser where he had kept his watch and mobile, before going to sleep.

Looking at his watch, he cursed softly. It was already 1 p.m.

Did I really sleep this long?' he thought. He was somebody who could always make do with lesser sleep than others he knew, though he was aware that it was not a good thing to do, in the long run.

Getting up from the bed, he walked towards the window and partially pulled the curtains aside. The afternoon Sun beat down heavily on the near empty roads - Nachiket drew the curtains back to their original position, plunging the room into a soothing semi darkness.

He came back to the dresser to pick up his mobile, when he glanced upon a folded piece of white paper kept beneath a Rubik's Cube.

He opened the Note to be greeted with Ragini's handwriting - simple and practical.

He read on -

Nachiket,

I have to go to the Hospital today; there is some emergency and I am needed there ... will update you once I come home.

I will be back soon. The Cube will help you beat boredom, if at all ...

:)

Ragini


The Note put a smile on Nachiketa's face. He remembered how when they had been together all those years before, they would often leave small notes for each other to find, at various places they knew the other would frequent. And of course all the Notes led them back to each other.

This was surely a good sign to begin with, he mused.


He picked up the Cube and turned it around. It looked old, the edges seemed to have partially chipped off at a few places.

Could this be the same Cube?', Nachiket thought, his eyes tearing slightly.

He turned it around, his fingers absent mindedly caressing the different coloured tiles. He remembered the Cube, he remembered it all.

He had given this Cube to Ragini in the second year of their marriage, when she had accompanied him to an outstation Conference for Doctors. The Conference had continued for 3 days, and by the end of he 2nd day, Ragini was bored sitting in the hotel room, watching TV, with nothing to do.

She had grumbled a bit and Nachiket in jest, had handed over the cube to her, explaining how it worked. Ragini had not joined him for the Conference the 3rd day, and by the time he had returned to their room, she had become a pro.

He remembered clearly how she had caught him by the lapels of his coat and pulled him closer, and then whispered into his ears how she wanted him to take her out for a long drive, once the Convention Dinner was over, so that they could spend some quality time together.

The Dinner ... yes ... Nachiket thought. She had been the most beautiful and elegant person at the Dinner in the off-white Muga silk saree, that he had gifted her some time back, amongst the sea of black, navy blue, brown and red - all he had in his mind then was to kiss her senseless.

Nachiket smiled as he remembered it all. He had not forgotten a wee bit of their lives together - both the happy parts and the sad parts. And now, they had been given a chance to be together again, and he wanted them to paint only happy memories for themselves.

...


Stifling a yawn, he walked into the Hall to be greeted by Sunny Tai

Good Afternoon Saab. How are you feeling?'

Nachiket shook his head as he looked around for his luggage.

Ragini Tai has kept them in her room', Sunny Tai volunteered. Nachiket felt a stone lighter.

He padded towards Ragini's room,

Sunny Tai, can I get a cup of coffee please? I will just freshen up meanwhile'

He hesitated a bit before entering Ragini's room this time. During his last visit to India during Nishi's wedding, he had had access to all the rooms, sometimes knowingly, sometimes unknowingly. But this time, it was different. It was like stepping into the real world of His Ragini - a world that was waiting for them to make it their own.

He spied his cases stacked towards the dresser - this room was also enveloped in darkness - voluminous curtains tried incessantly to keep the heat out.

His shaving kit and toothbrush in his hand, he pushed open the door to the washroom. Another barrier crossed, he thought. he looked around.

It was spic and span - just like her.

Saab' Sunny Tai called out from the kitchen Your coffee's ready'

He responded Ok Sunny Tai. I will be there in 2 minutes'

Putting the travelling cases back, he looked all around her room. He felt voyeuristic, but his insides felt warm as he took in all the small touches in the room that screamed silently of Ragini's presence. And it had that distinctive smell - mixture of flowers in full bloom; it was intoxicating.

...

Sunny Tai placed the cup of coffee reluctantly in front of him. Nachiket looked up from the newspaper and urged her on.

Saab, if you don't mind, it's already past 1 p.m. Why don't you eat something instead of drinking coffee?'

She hesitated, yet went ahead

Ragini Tai had prepared food for you before she left.'

She looked embarrassed as she withdrew her hand from the cup. Nachiket looked at her contemplatively.

Placing the newspaper back on the table, he pushed the chair back and stood up

Then why don't you warm up the food, Sunny Tai? I will take a bath and join you in say, 15 minutes.'

The smile on Sunny Tai's face widened as she saw him walk into Ragini's room once again, for the bath. It was his territory, after all.

She folded her hands in a prayer and then whipped out her cellphone.

Dialling a number, she walked towards the kitchen. After a second, she whispered into her phone

Naani mubarak ho. Sab theek hai ... aap chinta mat karo. Sunny tai hai na'


...

The End


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Posted: 10 years ago
#87

Originally posted by: poetic

Part 2 - 😊



The Morning Before


Nachiket woke up to the smell of food, and his stomach churned. He was hungry. He had now not eaten properly for quite some time, but then all he had been thinking for the past few days, was reaching Ragini. Food was the least of all things he had in his mind then.

As he sat up, he took in his surroundings. He could hear the slight trickle of water in the sink, and someone singing in Marathi. He felt refreshed after having slept now for a couple of hours, without any disturbances.

Rubbing his eyes gingerly, he extended his hand towards the dresser where he had kept his watch and mobile, before going to sleep.

Looking at his watch, he cursed softly. It was already 1 p.m.

Did I really sleep this long?' he thought. He was somebody who could always make do with lesser sleep than others he knew, though he was aware that it was not a good thing to do, in the long run.

Getting up from the bed, he walked towards the window and partially pulled the curtains aside. The afternoon Sun beat down heavily on the near empty roads - Nachiket drew the curtains back to their original position, plunging the room into a soothing semi darkness.

He came back to the dresser to pick up his mobile, when he glanced upon a folded piece of white paper kept beneath a Rubik's Cube.

He opened the Note to be greeted with Ragini's handwriting - simple and practical.

He read on -

Nachiket,

I have to go to the Hospital today; there is some emergency and I am needed there ... will update you once I come home.

I will be back soon. The Cube will help you beat boredom, if at all ...

:)

Ragini


The Note put a smile on Nachiketa's face. He remembered how when they had been together all those years before, they would often leave small notes for each other to find, at various places they knew the other would frequent. And of course all the Notes led them back to each other.

This was surely a good sign to begin with, he mused.


He picked up the Cube and turned it around. It looked old, the edges seemed to have partially chipped off at a few places.

Could this be the same Cube?', Nachiket thought, his eyes tearing slightly.

He turned it around, his fingers absent mindedly caressing the different coloured tiles. He remembered the Cube, he remembered it all.

He had given this Cube to Ragini in the second year of their marriage, when she had accompanied him to an outstation Conference for Doctors. The Conference had continued for 3 days, and by the end of he 2nd day, Ragini was bored sitting in the hotel room, watching TV, with nothing to do.

She had grumbled a bit and Nachiket in jest, had handed over the cube to her, explaining how it worked. Ragini had not joined him for the Conference the 3rd day, and by the time he had returned to their room, she had become a pro.

He remembered clearly how she had caught him by the lapels of his coat and pulled him closer, and then whispered into his ears how she wanted him to take her out for a long drive, once the Convention Dinner was over, so that they could spend some quality time together.

The Dinner ... yes ... Nachiket thought. She had been the most beautiful and elegant person at the Dinner in the off-white Muga silk saree, that he had gifted her some time back, amongst the sea of black, navy blue, brown and red - all he had in his mind then was to kiss her senseless.

Nachiket smiled as he remembered it all. He had not forgotten a wee bit of their lives together - both the happy parts and the sad parts. And now, they had been given a chance to be together again, and he wanted them to paint only happy memories for themselves.

...


Stifling a yawn, he walked into the Hall to be greeted by Sunny Tai

Good Afternoon Saab. How are you feeling?'

Nachiket shook his head as he looked around for his luggage.

Ragini Tai has kept them in her room', Sunny Tai volunteered. Nachiket felt a stone lighter.

He padded towards Ragini's room,

Sunny Tai, can I get a cup of coffee please? I will just freshen up meanwhile'

He hesitated a bit before entering Ragini's room this time. During his last visit to India during Nishi's wedding, he had had access to all the rooms, sometimes knowingly, sometimes unknowingly. But this time, it was different. It was like stepping into the real world of His Ragini - a world that was waiting for them to make it their own.

He spied his cases stacked towards the dresser - this room was also enveloped in darkness - voluminous curtains tried incessantly to keep the heat out.

His shaving kit and toothbrush in his hand, he pushed open the door to the washroom. Another barrier crossed, he thought. he looked around.

It was spic and span - just like her.

Saab' Sunny Tai called out from the kitchen Your coffee's ready'

He responded Ok Sunny Tai. I will be there in 2 minutes'

Putting the travelling cases back, he looked all around her room. He felt voyeuristic, but his insides felt warm as he took in all the small touches in the room that screamed silently of Ragini's presence. And it had that distinctive smell - mixture of flowers in full bloom; it was intoxicating.

...

Sunny Tai placed the cup of coffee reluctantly in front of him. Nachiket looked up from the newspaper and urged her on.

Saab, if you don't mind, it's already past 1 p.m. Why don't you eat something instead of drinking coffee?'

She hesitated, yet went ahead

Ragini Tai had prepared food for you before she left.'

She looked embarrassed as she withdrew her hand from the cup. Nachiket looked at her contemplatively.

Placing the newspaper back on the table, he pushed the chair back and stood up

Then why don't you warm up the food, Sunny Tai? I will take a bath and join you in say, 15 minutes.'

The smile on Sunny Tai's face widened as she saw him walk into Ragini's room once again, for the bath. It was his territory, after all.

She folded her hands in a prayer and then whipped out her cellphone.

Dialling a number, she walked towards the kitchen. After a second, she whispered into her phone

Naani mubarak ho. Sab theek hai ... aap chinta mat karo. Sunny tai hai na'


...

The End



Hippy.. I m the first one to read...and quote..

Edited by Vidya_Bng - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#88
Rachna...The best part about the Part 2 is...
Now u know them so well that... u can not go wrong... when it comes to expressing NEIRA's emotions...

WOWWW ... I m "speech- LESS" 🤗
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Posted: 10 years ago
#89
Hi R:)
Okay this time I have read your part 2 on time and I must say, that it was in flow with part 1 and that is how it gets beautiful with the memories when Nachiket remembers it. Though Ragini was nowhere but still by your descriptions, you made us feel of her presence. Sunny Tai was reluctant to ask Nachiket ;) anyway, she do play a major role in their life.

It was simple yet very convincing. 👏🤗
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Posted: 10 years ago
#90

Originally posted by: Vidya_Bng

Rachna...The best part about the Part 2 is...

Now u know them so well that... u can not go wrong... when it comes to expressing NEIRA's emotions...

WOWWW ... I m "speech- LESS" 🤗


Hi Vidya,
Thanks a lot Dear 😃.

I am sure the next update would be a bit longer. Though of course here, i did not know what else to write. 😆

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