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zainabawoon

@zainabawoon

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#31

Awesome yaar!! It was so sweet and cute ❤️ the letter, the anguish was so sad 😭 and aagam and suhaani are simply darlings, adorable!!

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shubhi05

@shubhi05

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Posted: 10 years ago

#32

this is really very amazing...

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@metoyou

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#33

Being a fan and lover of such stories, how can I NOT like this?

In fact, how can anybody NOT like this...

It is quite tough and difficult for a writer to create a chemistry between the lead pair, especially when it is a very short story (a thought, an idea) when two people are are not in the same ''frame''. Only by using the right words, a writer can touch the rights strings of emotions and feelings of his/her readers. A writer needs to create an ambiance, an atmosphere, a wind, a breeze so it will look and feel like that the scent, the fragrance of the other person is just right there...

And you did it. You just did that. Ragini was no where to be seen yet it felt as if she was right there. What started off as fun loving brother-and-sister moment, ended with a sweet-bitter pain and smile...

"Aadat hai mujhe." He said simply, after he completed swallowing. "Thikhe mattar paneer ki."

As much as the English language is easy for us to use, be it in writing or speaking but the depth of some emotions and feelings can only be felt in its original language. A good writer knows which dialogues/lines/parts bring that particular feeling and you succeeded in that by writing that last one in Hindi. It is the beauty of the language which brings out the best in such scenes...

👏 Absolutely beautiful 👏

Thank you for this!